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I am so mad at EK right now after reading your third chapter.

"The God of Small Things" is sitting on my bookshelf. Such a lost opportunity to showcase. How can one not understand the value of good scripting in beyond my comprehension?

In the morning I was talking about your other OS. I didn't read this one. So, I made time to read it. All those five chapters could have been a whole week of episodes showcasing the "tugging" of their relationship.

How? How? How can one not get to understand the need for building a relationship? I am rabid angry!

Originally posted by: Doodle

I am so mad at EK right now after reading your third chapter.

"The God of Small Things" is sitting on my bookshelf. Such a lost opportunity to showcase. How can one not understand the value of good scripting in beyond my comprehension?

In the morning I was talking about your other OS. I didn't read this one. So, I made time to read it. All those five chapters could have been a whole week of episodes showcasing the "tugging" of their relationship.

How? How? How can one not get to understand the need for building a relationship? I am rabid angry!

Ikr!! I just don't understand how come those people are professional and yet amateurs like me understand the importance of the need for detailed and extensive relationship between a couple.

I don't know about an entire week but atleast 2-3 episodes like that every couple of weeks where we can see them building on could have made such a big difference. They have ruined so many good opportunities by trying to create nonsensical drama. Instead they could have created magic on screen in real sense when they had such good cast and crew.

Such bad writing that it literally pains me to watch them perform on it and utter those puke worthy dialogues.

You have read this book? You are the only one who have commented on this title till now. I have only read reviews and summary and wants to read it but just couldn't get enough time on my hands to pick up the book and sit with it in isolation. When I was browsing for a book and this caught my eye i thought this book will resonate with a character like priya so well and decided to add it in the story.

And i appreciate you taking your time out and read my story. Do give me your honest feedback. Constructive criticism is also important ❤️

Originally posted by: RitikaS99

Ikr!! I just don't understand how come those people are professional and yet amateurs like me understand the importance of the need for detailed and extensive relationship between a couple.

I don't know about an entire week but atleast 2-3 episodes like that every couple of weeks where we can see them building on could have made such a big difference. They have ruined so many good opportunities by trying to create nonsensical drama. Instead they could have created magic on screen in real sense when they had such good cast and crew.

Such bad writing that it literally pains me to watch them perform on it and utter those puke worthy dialogues.

You have read this book? You are the only one who have commented on this title till now. I have only read reviews and summary and wants to read it but just couldn't get enough time on my hands to pick up the book and sit with it in isolation. When I was browsing for a book and this caught my eye i thought this book will resonate with a character like priya so well and decided to add it in the story.

And i appreciate you taking your time out and read my story. Do give me your honest feedback. Constructive criticism is also important ❤️

How can a Bengali not read another one, albeit half Bengali? Just joking, yes, many, many years ago.

Constructive criticism, you say. Yes, there are areas where it needs polishing. From a story writing point of view, many descriptions are needed. But for the sake of scripting, not much. Details of the surroundings are needed, though. Rest I think the direction will take care of.

When you write a story, you need to talk about descriptions, monologues, setting of the place where the scene is being played so that when a reader is reading, they will have the perfect "mental picture" of the scene. Once you do that, scripting for like Tirchi or me is easy. Baki toh direction takes care of jo mostly I understand. Tirchi and Doc too.

As I said, I also need to join a creative writing class, and I think you and Dazzle are planning to. Let's start polishing and keep all your stories. No matter how amateurish they are, the ideas are pretty darn good. ❤️

Keep them documented. Great work and idea! I am already playing these scenes in my head. Now your ideas are making me so mad. After reading your five chapters, you know I am getting Nakuul's reply! Main khud hi gusse mein bomb phod dungi feels like. I feel like taking a stick and breaking the things in my room to let go of this anger. 😡

I am tagging Doc, Tirchi, and DL so that they know your ideas. Won't discuss further on this on a public platform.

Originally posted by: Doodle

How can a Bengali not read another one, albeit half Bengali? Just joking, yes, many, many years ago.

Constructive criticism, you say. Yes, there are areas where it needs polishing. From a story writing point of view, many descriptions are needed. But for the sake of scripting, not much. Details of the surroundings are needed, though. Rest I think the direction will take care of.

When you write a story, you need to talk about descriptions, monologues, setting of the place where the scene is being played so that when a reader is reading, they will have the perfect "mental picture" of the scene. Once you do that, scripting for like Tirchi or me is easy. Baki toh direction takes care of jo mostly I understand. Tirchi and Doc too.

As I said, I also need to join a creative writing class, and I think you and Dazzle are planning to. Let's start polishing and keep all your stories. No matter how amateurish they are, the ideas are pretty darn good. ❤️

Keep them documented. Great work and idea! I am already playing these scenes in my head. Now your ideas are making me so mad. After reading your five chapters, you know I am getting Nakuul's reply! Main khud hi gusse mein bomb phod dungi feels like. I feel like taking a stick and breaking the things in my room to let go of this anger. 😡

I am tagging Doc, Tirchi, and DL so that they know your ideas. Won't discuss further on this on a public platform.

I get what your saying about mental picture, i guess I was being lazy and thought as everyone already know the setup of the show so decided to take a easy way out. Big mistake on my part.

Yes, let's polish ourselves ❤️❤️ this has been a dream of mine since I'm a teenage.

Are i don't understand why you would think that we were being kind to you. You have created a pretty good library for yourself and that reflects in your work and nakuul a reader himself who cannot go by a day without reading could see that too. Your writing has a very advance and experienced touch to it. When i said that your nazar and nazariya took multiple reads for getting the full feel and meaning and then it forced me to go back and watch all those initial episodes again from your pov, i mean it.

It was a beautiful and complex read.

I will keep all the stories safe, i have imagined all these scenes so many times in different narrative in my head and not being able to see these scenes on the screen and continued degrading of the show has been very heartbreaking.💔

Doc has been following my work from the very beginning, DL also have been reading up on my work. Tirchi is not into FFs i think.