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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Autumn09


Great idea Rekha. Malhar leaving Moksh and Kalyani realizing that Moksh needs both his parents together would be such a nice touch because it won't make sense for them to go all lovey dovey after going through that much. They must first come together as parents then their transition back to husband and wife would be more natural


And Malhar arresting the doctor and Sampu would be really cool. Athu ke liye I still can't decide cos jail seems really lenient for him.


I'm glad you liked it..

I felt that it would be a befitting apology by Malhar to give her Moksh and step back from her life... Until they come together for Moksh and finally find each other again.


Are Sampu, Atharv donon ko koi daya mat dikhana... Sampu is such a cruel woman.

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Posted: 3 years ago

Another Awesome update Pragya…smiley32smiley32


Moksh ke treatment k liye Malharji kitne pareshan the but Agni helped him…

And she got to know all the reason behind their illness…


Achha sabak sikhaya doctor ko…


Aur sampada ke liye bahut sahi kiya…

Let her suffer the same what she did with little pillu and Malharji..

Malharji broke down in front of her…

Ek pal k liye mujhe laga ki he know that she is Kalyani but then a twist came…. Compounder told her that he is doing such things as he is not well…

And agni got to know what he is actually going through…


But Agni being Kallu taking care of him…

Loved it…

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Priyapriyu

Another Awesome update Pragya…smiley32smiley32


Moksh ke treatment k liye Malharji kitne pareshan the but Agni helped him…

And she got to know all the reason behind their illness…


Achha sabak sikhaya doctor ko…


Aur sampada ke liye bahut sahi kiya…

Let her suffer the same what she did with little pillu and Malharji..

Malharji broke down in front of her…

Ek pal k liye mujhe laga ki he know that she is Kalyani but then a twist came…. Compounder told her that he is doing such things as he is not well…

And agni got to know what he is actually going through…


But Agni being Kallu taking care of him…

Loved it…


Thanks a lot Priyu 💖💖💖💖

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Posted: 3 years ago

Read it all in one go! Amazing!

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: sas79

Read it all in one go! Amazing!


Thanks a lot.

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Posted: 3 years ago

Chapter-16


Finally after some days, Moksh was discharged from the hospital.

"Malharji, main hamare Pillu ko kucch nahi hone doongi," Agni's voice saying these words was echoing in his mind. Or was it something that Kalyani said five years ago? Malhar couldn't trust his memory. Malhar took deep breaths and closed his eyes. No it was indeed Agni who said these words. Suddenly things start falling into place. All those times when Agni was going to call Moksh Pillu and stopped in mid, her extreme care and worry towards Moksh. The way she was with Moksh all the time he was in hospital, leaving all her work, despite being extremely workaholic, it was something only a mother would do. The way she looked at Moksh. How can Malhar be so stupid? Malhar finally realized why Agni was behaving like that with him. He couldn't recognise his own wife but Moksh recognised his mother even though he was so young five years ago. But why Kalyani became Agni? What happened with her five years ago? Even though it pained him to the core, Malhar recalled all the events of five years ago. He had to find out the truth.

He remembered the place where Kalyani's things were found in a burning car. It was a village and no one wanted to tell anything except one person...

It took Malhar two days to track that man. Unfortunately, he was not fully mentally sound, that's why five years ago, Malhar didn't take his statement. But as Malhar was beginning to realise, it's better to trust such persons than selfish, so called normal humans.

"Bahut gande log the," the man said with a hiccup, "Main to dar ke maare chhup gaya tha."


Malhar handed the man his water bottle but the man started playing with it.


"Bahut maara us bechaari ko unhone," the man told every scene as he had scene. As he was not on the same page as normal humans mentally, he didn't mince his words and he never realised that what he was saying was too shocking and grotesque for a normal person to hear.


Malhar lost his voice for some time, then finally he said, "Ye tumhare haath ki chhoti ungli ko kya hua?"


"Kaat di," the man laughed, "Jo lamba aadmi us aurat ko maar raha tha na usi ne kaat di jab main usko paani dene gaya tha. Bechari bas aasman ki or dekhe Jaa rahi thi. Vaidya ji kehte hain ki jab koi marne wala ho to use pyaasa nahi rehne Dena chahiye. Magar main bahut accha hoon na. To maine use marne nahi diya. Jameen par ghasit kar Vaidya Ji ke paas tak le gaya."

"Vaidya Ji kahaan hain ab?" Malhar had no strength left but he had to ask.

"Bahut bura kiya tha us ladki ke saath un haiwano ne," Malhar was sitting inside Vaidya Ji's house, "Uske shareer ka koi hissa shayad hi bacha ho jahaan chaaku ke vaar ya cigarette se jalaane ke nishaan na hon. Magar sabse bura unhone Jo Kiya vo uske bacche ko usi ke saamne maarkar kiya. Jitna use tadpaya tha un dushton ne, vo ladki to kab ki mar jaati. Magar us ladki jitna jinda rehne ke liye sangharsh maine kisi ko karte nahi dekha. Har roz mujhe lagta tha ki vo nahi bachegi magar har roz vo khud ko jaane kaise zindaa rakhti thi. Sabse zyada gussa to mujhe uske pati par aata hai...kaisa pati tha jo apne khud ke bacche ko kisi aur ka samajhta raha? Jisne use aisi haalat me yoon besahara chhor diya? Agar vo aadmi mujhe kahin mil jaaye na..." Vaidya ji lifted his cane.


Malhar kneeled in front of him, "Maar lijiye aap mujhe. Main hi hoon us ladki ka vo badkismat pati jisne apne hi bacche aur biwi ko maut ke muh me dhakel diya."


Malhar was standing on the edge of the hill. "Kalyani," he shouted and collapsed. He broke down in the emptiness. He shouted again in all his helplessness. He lost his child due to his own stubborn stupidity. Kalyani had to tolerate so much just because of him. It was much better if he died...


"Fir mujhe beech raah chhorkar bhaag rahe hain Malharji," Malhar heard a voice. He knew he was hallucinating...


"Itne swaarthi aap kaise ho sakte hain? Hamare ek bacche ko to ham kho hi chuke hain kabhi socha hai aapke jaane ke baad Pillu ka kya hoga? Aap yoon nahi mar sakte Malharji..."


Finally Malhar wiped his tears.


Inside Deshmukh house


AS: "Anupriya daal me namak fir Kam hai. Dhyaan kahaan rehta hai tumhara?"


Anupriya: "Agar itni dikkat hai to aap khud hi khaana bana liya kariye na Aau Saheb."


AS couldn't believe what she heard.


"Kya bola tumne Anupriya?" She stood up and said directly.


"Bahut kar li maine aapki aur aapke parivaar ki naukri. Ab bas."


"Tumhari itni himmat?" Aau Saheb raised a hand to hit Anupriya, but someone stopped her hand.


"Malhar tum?" Aau Saheb's mouth was open in shock.


"Are re re...kya kar rahi hain Aau Saheb?" Malhar said, "Already aap par domestic violence aur abetment to suicide ke charges hain. Ab kya aap apne Marne Tak jail ka hi majaa lena chahti hain?"


"Jail? Y...ye kya keh rahe ho Malhar tum?" AS said, "Kya saboot hai tumhare paas?"


"Saboot hi to nahi tha AAU Saheb tabhi to paanch saal ye jaante huye bhi ki meri behen ki maut ki vajah aap aur aapka beta Bahu hain, main kucch nahi kar paaya. Magar us baar poore saboot ke saath aaya hoon."


Malhar played a video on mobile.


"Are ye kya? Jab hamne Swara ko uske lambe baal kaatne ko bola tha tab to Vivek tha hi nahi kamre me? Ye video nakli h."


Malhar chuckled, "Chaliye theek hai maana ye video nakli h. Magar saabit kaise karengi aap? Aapke bete Bahu ne to sazaa kam hone ke laalach me aapke khilaaf gawahi dene ka man bana liya h."


"Magar tumhe to naukri se nikaal diya tha na?"


"Kal hi court me kisi ne anonymous tip kisi ne bhijwai thi jisme ye proof tha ki maine koi rishwat nahi li. Fir unhone mujhe aaj hi vaapis join karne ko kaha. Mera first day h on job aaj after that incident to socha din ki shuruaat acche kaam se hi karoon."


Aau Saheb started laughing, "Kon khada hoga mere khilaaf court me? Kisi vakeel ki himmat nahi h mere khilaaf case ladne ki. Aurangabad me har koi..."


"Main ladoongi aapke khilaaf case Aau Saheb," Anupriya said, "Kyon? Aapko kya laga ki aapne kaha aur maine apni law ki padhai chhor di?"


"Anupriya," Aau Saheb was close to tears, "Tumne hame dhokha diya vo bhi is Rane parivaar ke liye. Tum jaogi hamare khilaaf? Tumhe itne saal rehne ke liye chhat di uska ye Silaa diya tumne hame? Hamari Umar ka to lihaj karo."


"Are Aau Saheb," Malhar said, "Ab is duniya me kon kisi ka lihaaj karta hai. Ab kya hi Karen aau Saheb, badi dusht hai ye duniyaa...."

Edited by Autumn09 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago

Ohhh my godddd such an amazing chapter really it gave me goosebumps...really I feel so nice after reading everything thank you pragyu for arranging this FF in such a manner that I always wait for its update ...🤗🤗

Finnally finallllly Malhar ko sab pata chal gaya ....thank god abb ussein kuch chupa nhi hai ..👍🏼

Kalyani nein itne din khoob khayal rakha moksh ka sachmain moksh samajh gaya apni maa ko lekin Malhar nahi jaan paya apni biwi kooo ....😔

How he searched for that man and when he is telling the story I really cried I know it just a story but your words and writing way made me cry 😭😭😭

Malhar ka kya haal ho rhaa tha vaidya ji ki baatein sunkar his breakdown ...and that cliff scene ..he cannot leave this early he has to take revenge from those who tortured his wife and kid so brutually ...kalyani story is always painful to listen..that burn marks and injuries ...😭

Aausaheb ko bhi aaj unki aukat pata chal gayi aausaheb ki bakri nein aaj unkein khilaaf apni awaaz uthayi ...bohot badhiya 👍👍

And that Malhar and her conformation is the best hope Anupriya wins the case and all the culprits get their punishment in their worst mannner ..😈

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Phlo004

Ohhh my godddd such an amazing chapter really it gave me goosebumps...really I feel so nice after reading everything thank you pragyu for arranging this FF in such a manner that I always wait for its update ...🤗🤗

Finnally finallllly Malhar ko sab pata chal gaya ....thank god abb ussein kuch chupa nhi hai ..👍🏼

Kalyani nein itne din khoob khayal rakha moksh ka sachmain moksh samajh gaya apni maa ko lekin Malhar nahi jaan paya apni biwi kooo ....😔

How he searched for that man and when he is telling the story I really cried I know it just a story but your words and writing way made me cry 😭😭😭

Malhar ka kya haal ho rhaa tha vaidya ji ki baatein sunkar his breakdown ...and that cliff scene ..he cannot leave this early he has to take revenge from those who tortured his wife and kid so brutually ...kalyani story is always painful to listen..that burn marks and injuries ...😭

Aausaheb ko bhi aaj unki aukat pata chal gayi aausaheb ki bakri nein aaj unkein khilaaf apni awaaz uthayi ...bohot badhiya 👍👍

And that Malhar and her conformation is the best hope Anupriya wins the case and all the culprits get their punishment in their worst mannner ..😈


Thank you so much Vanshu 💜💖💕💜💖


Is FF ke baare me I was always unsure cos normally I finish story in 7-8 chapters and write stories in a slice of life, romantic manner. So I was always afraid ki pata nahi kisi ko ye pasand ayega bhi ya nahi.

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Posted: 3 years ago

This chapter is based on Rekha's ideas


Chapter-17

It was evening now. Malhar was going to ring doorbell of Agni's house. Then he stopped. He fiddled with his shirt sleeve for some time, then finally taking a deep breath, he rang the doorbell. The househelp opened the door.

"Kalyani hai...I mean Agni madam hain kya Ghar par?"

"Sir aap yahin wait kariye. Main madam ko inform karti hoon."

Malhar sat on the plush sofa and looked around. He couldn't help but feel proud of what Kalyani had built with her sheer hard work and determination. Unlike his father he wasn't the kind of man who got threatened by the success of his own wife. Kalyani had built her empire all alone and though Malhar felt pride, he was also very sad, he couldn't be the support she may have needed.

"Mr. Rane!" He got out of his reverie. The word felt so cold and clipped. He was used to hearing Malharji in her loving voice.

"K...Agni madam," Malhar was hyperventilating, "Vo I'm sorry."

A slight shock and hurt flickered in Agni's eyes, "Sorry? For what Mr. Rane?"

"Sorry for...for everything. aur thank you . Agar aap nahi hoti to Moksh..."

"Aisa mat kahiye, Ma...Mr. Rane," Agni said, "Moksh ko koi pareshani choo bhi nahi sakti."

How much Malhar wanted to hug Agni and cry, but he had to control himself. He wanted to touch her face, wipe all those tears she shed in these five years...

Malhar cleared his throat and handed over papers to Kalyani, "Madam ye prove ho gaya hai ki I have not taken bribe to mujhe meri job vaapis mil gayi h. To ye mera resignation...thank you. aapki company ne mujhe bahut support diya. Aur ye hain adoption papers..."

"Adoption papers?"

"Ab tak to aapko bhi pata lag gaya hoga ki main Moksh ke liye accha pita nahi ban paa raha hoon. Na hi main use koi khushi de paaya aur na hi use protect kar paaya. Moksh ko kisi aise ki zaroorat hai jo uske liye maa aur pita dono ho." Then Malhar folded his hands, "Please Moksh ko god le lijiye."

"Magar main Moksh ki life me uske Baba ki jagah nahi le sakti Mr. Rane," Agni said.

"Moksh mere saath safe nahi hai," Malhar said beseechingly.

Agni looked into his eyes and signed the papers.

"Thank you," Malhar whispered, "Kalyani."

"Mr. Rane."

Malhar turned back.

"Apna khayal rakhiyega," Agni said and went back to her work on laptop.


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Atharv was wiping the floor with a poncha when Agni mistakenly stepped on his hand.

Atharv gave a cry of pain.

Agni lifted her heeled shoes up and Atharv sighed in relief then Agni stomped on Atharv's hand without even giving him a glance. Then called someone.

"Mr. Mehra. Mujhe saare monthly profit figures with analysis chahiye. Haan phone par hi. Kyon? Aapko koi problem hai kya?"

Poor Atharv couldn't even say anything in fear that Agni didn't give him any further stricter punishment.

When finally Agni finished her call after two hours, Atharv cradled his hand and said to Sampada, "Us Agni ko...samajhti kya hai vo khud ko? Kal jis paise me Agni ne invest Kiya hai vo apne share prices declare karegi fir ham bhi Ameer ho jayenge Sampu. fir dikhate hain us Agni ko."

"Sampada," Agni ordered, "Mera pedicure karo. Kal ki party me I want to look my best."

After pedicure, Sampada was applying nail polish on Agni's nails in her foot.

"Vaise Sampada," Agni said, "Pata tujh jaisi kamini ko apne kadmo me gira dekhkar mujhe kitna sukoon milta hai."

"Main?" Sampada was shocked, "Aur kamini?"

"Ab jo aurat apne khud ke bete ko brain haemorrhage ki chemical de sakti hai sirf uske pita se Chand rupaye aithne ke liye, usse badi kamini aur kon hoga is duniya me?"

"Tumhe kaise?"

"Main apne yahaan har kaam karne wale ka background check karati hoon. maanna parega bada kaala background hai tum aur tumhare boyfriend ka."

"bas ek din aur," Sampada said in mind, "Fir share price declare hone ke baad main dikhungi Agni ko ki main kitni kamini hoon?"

Agni smirked, thinking, "Pata hai tum aur Atharv kitne kameene ho. Tabhi to kal tum dono ki barbaadi poora Aurangabad dekhega."


So this FF has reached its final stage. So please tell me if you want to see anything in these chapters? Seriously after Kabhi Aana Tu, Yoon Hi Koi Mil Gaya Tha, this was the FF I felt most attached to. This is the first time I've focused on Kalyani more than Malhar varna har FF me mera poora focus to Malharji par hi hota h. So your feedback and suggestions are as always welcome.


P.S. Next chapter will also feature KalMa couple dance.

Edited by Autumn09 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago

Good and emotional update pragyu ..I know somewhere from starting that malhar will handover moksh custody to kalyani after getting the truth but sometime what we thinks gets more hurt by seeing it happening ...he was so vulnerable and emotional at that time ..Agni still has soft feeling for malhar..but under the layer of inhumanity and anger and disgust towards others she hide it badly ...hope malhar able to bring that kalyani back soon ..

Seeing atharv and sampada condition I feel so light and good ..it's good to see them Getting their punishment back ..as really karma is a b**** it hits hard..

They still not redeem themselves but in reality in this ff no one is remendable except malhar who remend himself a lot .

Waiting for the climax of story and their couple dance ..

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