Take my breath away: ShiVi FF - Page 22

And again, Liz with her wicked writing skills has left the readers as uncomfortable as Shiva 🤣 Why is this kiss not happening?! This is killing me! Poor Shiva. His member would fall off with this amount of torture 🤭

This was an incredibly endearing piece. You used an innocuous game to build a connection building narrative that was just beautiful Even more than the sexual tension, the highlight of this story was Raavi and Shiva just getting to know each other. It was reminiscent of all the times we shared intimate stories with our friends, cocooned in the darkness of the night. I found it very real, relatable and heart warming ❤️

And of course, the almost kiss had us all swooning. What a build up! 👏 Raavi’s tattoo scene was quite provocative. I loved the detailing there Could totally imagine a besotted Shiva gazing at all that milky skin and that tattoo at such a naughty place.

I was just taken aback to see Mami in the same house as the Pandyas and no mention of Shiva’s previous Dhara bhabhi. But it’s a nice change from the Bhabhi love foisted on us in the show 😆

Again, a lovely piece! I can’t wait for the next part

Originally posted by: Kfof

Oh my my!!! It was fab mahn❤❤❤

Their game, their deets, their jealousy😍

I so not wanted their game to end😂💖

Shiva has damn self control😂😂

It was hot and intense at the same time🔥

I really want to know what happens next

Ahh, thank you! This update was killing, man! The detailing was just hell to write.

Shiva's self-control is coming from his deeply rooted morals that he thinks he totally lacks, but he's clearly wrong about that, because that's what's telling him not to take advantage of a girl who is clearly not in her senses!

About what happens next- do you feel this OS series is going forward in a linear fashion? I did not intend for that to happen, but I guess it has. I thought this would be just a series of disconnected drabbles, but now I think they're inter-connected, so I guess I might have to move forward logically. 😒

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

Lizzie🤗!!! This was the sweetest❤️!!! Raavi's innocent desire was so heart touching, and Shiva's had a wild, wild life already!!! 😆

Thank you! 😳

And about Shiva's wild life- the clue lies in Raavi's last question. Shiva has lied during the game! And he may have lied more than once! Remember his aim was to get Raavi not to drink? Which is why he was coming up with outrageous questions (that totally backfired! 😆) And if he had confessed to have not done any of things Raavi came up with, she would have had to drink. Now the trick is figuring out where and when he lied! 😆

Originally posted by: Miss.M

Riya.. This was definitely worth the wait... I've just finished reading both of them and I loved it!!

The efforts he made to be good about not taking advantage of her was commendable and Raavi pushing his buttons was definitely entertaining.

The best part though is you don't necessarily have to read the previous three to follow along!! Your thread is quickly becoming a favourite!

Eagerly awaiting to see what you serve up next!

Thanks so much, Min! ❤️🤗

I'm glad you said you could make sense of this even without the previous parts which has been my aim all along!

It's kind of you say this thread is a favorite! Thank you!

I know I'm taking many liberties with the characterization of Shiva and Raavi from canon, but I'm not following the show, and much of this is inadvertent. So please correct me if I'm going terribly off!

Also, I like owning my characters when I write about them, and give them quirks that are my own and not from canon. It makes me feel closer to them, I can relate to them more, and that's what Fanfic is all about, right?

Thank you again for your generous comment!

Originally posted by: RainbowChaser

How can a piece be this sweet and innocent and yet so freaking hot at the same time !

You've completely touched Shiva and Raavi's personality at all the right points.

Also a confession, people called me a patthardil cz I never cried at the movies, no matter what. Not when bahubali died, not when ishan was sent to boarding, never. But when Mufasa died, I had tears rolling down my face 🥺. It was really 💔.

Coming back to the piece, this is an exceptionally well continuation of a fabulous series.

Eagerly awaiting more

Ahhh thank you for saying that - because it's exactly what I was aiming for. I wanted this to be sweetly romantic as well as searingly sexy, and I'm glad I could achieve that! And I'm so glad you thought I got their characterization right! It means a lot to me that you think I did!

I'm a total bawler! I cry at everything in the movies! And get endlessly teased about it! And Shiva was definitely being a pig! Mufasa dying can melt even the most stone-hearted, I still skip over that scene when I watch Lion King because I cannot bear to see it! 😭

Thanks again for reading!

Originally posted by: gurl-enchanted

And again, Liz with her wicked writing skills has left the readers as uncomfortable as Shiva 🤣 Why is this kiss not happening?! This is killing me! Poor Shiva. His member would fall off with this amount of torture 🤭

This was an incredibly endearing piece. You used an innocuous game to build a connection building narrative that was just beautiful Even more than the sexual tension, the highlight of this story was Raavi and Shiva just getting to know each other. It was reminiscent of all the times we shared intimate stories with our friends, cocooned in the darkness of the night. I found it very real, relatable and heart warming ❤️

And of course, the almost kiss had us all swooning. What a build up! 👏 Raavi’s tattoo scene was quite provocative. I loved the detailing there Could totally imagine a besotted Shiva gazing at all that milky skin and that tattoo at such a naughty place.

I was just taken aback to see Mami in the same house as the Pandyas and no mention of Shiva’s previous Dhara bhabhi. But it’s a nice change from the Bhabhi love foisted on us in the show 😆

Again, a lovely piece! I can’t wait for the next part

Ahh see, there's only so much you can get away with while writing on a show you've never seen! I got caught out for the fraud that I am! 😆 I had no idea Mami wouldn't visit the Pandyas, I just needed an excuse for Raavi to be at Shiva's without them being married, of course! 😆 And the only way I could do that is by having the whole family visit. I guessed Dhara Bhabhi is important to Shiva and she's gonna have a role to play in my later updates, I think! 🤔

I know what you mean about connections being built while swapping intimate stories late into the night. I wanted Shiva and Raavi to get to know each other (besides them having the hots for each other 😆), and I'm glad I was able to get that in through this update. I do not want them to just be in lust with each other.

But, but, Shiva is definitely in agony! 😆 The tattoo totally slayed him and his erm, hard parts! 🤓😆

But about the next part - you might have to wait longer because I intend to get caught up on my other writing and take a break from the ShiVi universe for a bit!

Glad you liked this one though, and thanks so much for reading and the detailed comment. 🤗

I LOVE THIS SERIES! I LOVE THIS SHIVA AND RAAVI! I LOVE LOVE LOVE THEIR GAME AND I LOOOOOOOVVVVVVEEEEEEEEE YOU!!!

Haaye! You’ve turned me into a puddle of mush with this update. I don’t know if it’s even possible to fall more in love with your Shiva but I think with each word in this update, heck, every alphabet in this update I did fall more in love with him.

Dobi Raavi fell asleep and God bless Shiva’s sense of control!

Can’t wait to read more!!

I just loved it and dumbfounded to even appreciate it. I could imagine everything in my mind as I was reading it.

I loved the entire Have I ever concept, I laughed the most for Krish being a cougar chaser😆 and Raavi drinking for the first time, obviously she is going to pass out. Shiva being the gentleman, though he uses lot of double entendres still the dance Loved the song selection also, these are close to my heart especially Pehla Nasha as JJWS was my first movie out with my friends as a teenager, stepping into HS in the theater when it was released in 1992 😆

There is love blossoming between the 2, but something is stopping them. I hope it gets better in the next OS.

Looking forward to the next update❤️

This Shiva is ❤️ He danced with her...aww

getting all protective and possessive in his thoughts

This was so well written... each sentence was worth the read

Waiting for more

Woah.. this was another fabulous update!! Their game was so so hot even though they didn't do much other than dance and almost kiss 😆

But the build up was sizzling ☺️

Dobi Raavi falling asleep and shiva's iron self control 😆❤️

Ioved it a lot!! 💖💖