Fate -Shivi TS(last part pg.2)

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heyy guys thought of an OS idea and penned it down , not sure how well it has come but here is the teaser. Do let me know how you liked it


TEASER:

Everybody comes out of shock as prafulla's phone rings

“fui jaldi aye , raavi ki tabiyat bohot bigad rahi hai” said anita

“nahi kuch nahi hoga , main abhi aa rahi hoon” said mami

“maami yeh sab kaise hua?” asked shiva with tears

“kush ho ja shiva , ab raavi tujhe kabhi pareshaan nahi karegi . der se hi lekin woh ladki tumhare saath apna kal dekhe lagi thi , tumhare liye jeene lagi thi , tumhari hona chahti thi par khair” said Prafulla while leaving to rush to the hospital

All the pandya’s go behind her to the hospital

“im sorry hum patient ko bacha nahi paye “ said the doctor

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okay so this is the teaser and ill be updating the OS in a while. <3

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okay so i decided to make this a two shot coz i ended up writing too much and hope you guys like it

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Walking aimlessly in the road stood raavi , questioning her mere existence. She had sure made a blunder, she mistook Dhara’s pregnancy celebration to be one for her departure and to top everything off she burnt the dress which Gaumbi had got her. Her mind travels back to a few minutes ago


Raavi realizes her mistake and goes to hug Dhara but only to be pushed back

“ab kyu hak jatha rahi hai raavi? Kal sabke samne Rishta tod diya tha na tune, fir kyun kar rahi hai tu yeh natak” questioned Dhara


“Dhara di , mujhe nahi pata tha ki aap pregnant ho , apne mujhe batana bhi zaroori nahi samja” said a dejected Raavi


“aayi thi tujhe batane , lekin tune meri ek nahi suni aur toh aur tune Gaumbi ke itne pyaar se laye hue lehenge ko bhi jala diya . ab aur nahi mein nahi chahti ki tumhara sayah bhi pade mere bacche pe”


“aur nahi toh kya ? kaunsi aurath ek characterless ladki ko apne ghar mein jagah degi” said one of the ladies


“ayy chup , bakwaas band kijiye apna , yeh humara niji mamla hai hum sambhal lenge” shouted Shiva

“nahi sahi kaha unhone, kaun ek characterless anath ko apnayega . mein toh woh ladki hoon na jisse tumhare bhai ne reject kiya” murmured Raavi looking at shiva


Dhara and Suman didn’t think too much about it thinking that she is doing this to gain sympathy

Raavi runs away from there , shiva was going to follow her but stopped on seeing Mami and Anita go behind her

Present


“raavi agey dekh” screamed maasi bringing her out of her reverie but before her mind could register anything she felt herself bang her head to the object moving in front of her


“Raaviiii” screamed anita in horror


Mami and anita ran to raavi who was laying lifeless with blood surrounding her, the force of the car scarring the life out of everyone

Everybody gathered around Raavi


“ayy meri bachi utt na” cried mami


“koi ambulance ko bulao jaldi” screamed Anita


“tujhe kuch nahi hoga raavi , hum tujhe kuch hone nahi denge”


meri bachi , kuch hi der mein ambulance ajayega”


“kitna bura hua iss bachi ke saath , lagta hai bhagwaan ne Prafulla ke galtion ka sazaa isse de rahein hai “ said one of the spectators


The only person Prafulla loved unconditionally was Raavi and she would never let raavi pay for her sins

In the hospital


“bohot sare internal bleedings hai , hum pure koshish karenge inhe bachane ke liye lekin koi guarantee nahi hai ki woh bach sake” said the doctor ,sucking the life out of Prafulla and anita


“fui , aap kuch bol kyun nahi rahi hai ?” asked anita worriedly


“agar yeh sab mere paapon ke wajah se hai toh mein apni jaan bhi dene keliye tayaar hoon anita , lekin meri beti ko kuch nahi hona chahiye” sobbed Prafulla


Prafulla runs home and gets the property paper , the one she stole from Gautam's father. She returns the property to their name , she would anything for her Raavi.

Pandya Niwas


“Mubarak ho , apko apka property wapas milgaya hai” said the lawyer on the phone


“kya bol rahe hai aap ? kaunse property ki baath kar rahe hai aap ?”asked Gaumbi


“aap ke papa ke property , ab apke naam” said the lawyer and cut the call leaving Gaumbi confused


“kya hua Gaumbi” asked Suman


“maa abhi lawyer ka phone aya , aur keh rahe the ki papa ke property ab humare naam pe hai” said Gaumbi


Everybody got teary eyed as this was the thing that was left in their fathers name


“lekin yeh toh mami ke naam mein tha na ?” questioned Shiva


“wahi toh mein bhi soch raha hoon shiva, yeh kaise ho sakta hai ?”


“woh uss raavi ne yeh drama kiya hoga taki hum usse maaf karde ,lekin iss baar unke koi bhi chaal hum pe nahi chalne wala , raavi iss ghar mein wapas kabhi nahi ayegi” declared suman


“haan ma , iss baar toh raavi ne hadd par kar di , kitne pyaar se bheja tha humne uss lehenge ko . usse nahi hi rishton ki kadar hai aur nahi humare pyaar ki” cursed dhara


Shiva who was listening to this was going to stop them but before he could speak anything they saw maami entering the house with swollen eyes and hardly any jewelry on her


“maami yeh kya hua , aap aise ?” asked Gaumbi worry evident in his face


Mami reaches her hand and pulls out her kangan and gives it to suman


“iss kangan ke hakdaar mein nahi hoon , apke bete ne itna sab kuch hone ke bawajood mujhe yeh diya iss ke liye mein humesha shukra guzaar rahoongi par yeh ab se mera nahi hai” saying which she turns to leave


Everybody is shocked seeing this side of Prafulla


“ayy kagdi , kya natak kiya re , kal teri beti natak kar ke gayi aur aaj tune. Acha hai akkal toh ayi tujh mein”


everybody expected Mami to retaliate but she continued walking towards the door


“bol dijiye maami aap raavi ko , ki yeh sab kaam nahi karne wala hai ,mein usse apne bache ke ass pass bhi aane nahi doongi” said raavi while breaking the last thread of control Prafulla had


“haan Dhara , mat aane de meri beti ko tere paas , jo ladki sirf Dhara di Dhara di karthi rahi usse apne bache ke paas bhi mat aane dena “ said mami while falling to the ground and crying


“kya chaha tha uss bachi ne huh? Sirf pyaar aur yeh ki koi usse samjhega.Haan manti hoon ki usse samajne mein galati hui , lekin tum logon ne bhi usse sach batane ki koshish nahi ki , usse chod diya chizein assume karne ko”


ae kagdi yeh itna rona dhona kyu kar rahi hai tu ? koi naya natak company join kiya hai kya tune ? aur waise bhi , raavi ne baare bazaar mein shiva pe haat uthaya aur woh bilkul galat hai samjhi” said suman


“toh galti shiva ne bhi kiya hai suman behen , usne bhi baare bazaar mein meri beti ki izzat uchadi. Har roz log usse tane sunathe gaye ki haan shiva ne usse kisse ladke ke saath pakda hoga issiliye usse chod diya ya phir yeh ki woh apne jeth pe doore dal rahi thi “ retorted Mami


Everybody including suman were in tears , now they were sure something big might have happened


“bachpan se leke aaj tak shiva ne mujhpe rahe gusse ko raavi pe nikala hai ,sirf shiva hi nahi har koi mera gussa, mujhe pe aye nafrat ko meri beti pe nikala hai , lekin ab aur nahi . ab meri beti mere wajah se koi bhi na insafi nahi sahegi

Lekin uss bhagwaan ne bhi de hi di mujhe saza , lekin itna bada hoga bas yeh nahi janthi thi mein . mere khud ke ankhon ke saamne woh gaadi raavi ko-“and broke down again shocking everybody


“raavi ko kya ? kya hua hai raavi ko ?” asked Shiva in concern


“haan boliye na mami kya hua raavi ko” added Dhara


“tune kaha tha na dhara ki tu raavi ko apne bache ke aas paas bhi bhatak ne nahi degi , par woh toh tab hoga na jab woh zinda hogi” said Prafulla while containing her tears

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okay so ill be updating the next part soon<3

Do let me know how you liked the part ❤️❤️

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updated i hope you like it <3

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I'm literally crying 😭😭😭

It was too emotional 💔💔

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updated i hope you like it <3

soo good and emotional😭❤️
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“hospital mein zindagi aur maut ke beech lad rahi hai meri beti aur shayad yeh sab mere hi wajah se ho raha hai . na mein galti karthi aur nahi shiva raavi se nafrat kartha” she exclaimed

Everybody comes out of shock as prafullas phone rings


“fui jaldi aye , raavi ki tabiyat bohot bigad rahi hai” said anita


nahi kuch nahi hoga , main abhi aa rahi hoon” said mami


“maami yeh sab kaise hua?” asked shiva with tears


“kush ho ja shiva , ab raavi tujhe kabhi pareshaan nahi karegi . der sehi sahe lekin woh ladki tumhare saath apna kal dekhe lagi thi , tumhare liye jeene lagi thi , tumhari hona chahti thi par khair” said Prafulla while leaving to rush to the hospital


Shiva was in shock with all the revelations , she started liking him ?she imagined a future with him? Was he going to lose her forever because of his stupidity ? A life without his chipkali felt meaningless. He would not let anything happen to her , she needed him.

All the Pandya’s ran behind maami to the hospital

“im sorry hum patient ko bacha nahi paye “said the doctor


Everybody stop their tracks , shiva being the first one to recover from the shock ran and held the collar of the doctor


“kya matlab hai apka ki aap patient ko bacha nahi paye, MERI RAAVI KO KUCH NAHI HUA HAI, yeh aap kaise keh sakte hai. Mujhe meri biwi zinda chahiye abhi” screamed shiva like a maniac

“mein apki wife ke baare mein baat nahi kar raha tha , dusre patient ke bare mein baath kar rahe the” explained the doctor


Everybody sighed in relief . Prafulla saw a different shiva today. The rage in which he held the doctors collar held her by surprise. She saw the fear of losing Raavi in his eyes but why she thought.

Anita came running to Prafulla and took her near the OT


“kya kaha doctor ne ?” asked Prafulla


“operation abhi bhi jarahi hai , unhone kaha ki woh abhi kuch bhi bata nahi sakte ,aur yeh ki uski halat bohot bigad rahi hai. Aur operation ke paise bhi bohot hai fui” cried anita


“anita tu yeh le” said Prafulla while handing her all her remaining jewelry


Since she had given the property back there was nothing as “hers” anymore


“isse bech degi toh kuch paise ajayenge , baaki ka mein intizaam karthi hoon”

All the pandya’s were having a hard time controlling their tears . raavi was special to each and everyone of them


“maami aap yeh kya kar rahi hai ? raavi humari bachi hai . operation ke paise ke bare mein aap chinta mat kijiye” said gaumbi


“nahi Gautam , ab humare beech mein koi rishta nahi hai”


Gautam? None of his family members called him that and raavi was his little bean, his sister. He would not let anything happen to her


“ae kagdi raavi humare ghar ki bachi hai tu kya bol rahi hai?” tried suman


“suman behen kuch samay pehle aap ne hi kaha tha ki raavi aur apka koi Rishta nahi hai , meri beti ko kisi ke bhi sympathy is zaroorat nahi hai . mein sambhal loongi” sternly she said


Suman felt really sorrowful of her words . no matter how angry she maybe she has seen raavi grow up in front of her eyes. She is the most kindhearted and forgiving person she has known


“Raavi aaj bhi meri patni hai aur aap mujhe nahi rok Sakti apni patni ke operation ke paise bharne ke liye “ said shiva with determination


Gaumbi , dev and shiva walk towards the reception and fill the forms anddo the required formalities


“Bhabhi ko kuch hoga toh nahi na?” cried krish while looking at suman


“kuch nahi hoga , bohot strong hai humari raavi” said suman while trying to assure herself


“Bhabhi apko toh mere saath aur khelna hai aur padhana bhi toh hai na ,aap jaldi se utt jao na.” said krish while standing next to the ICU with streams of fresh tears in his eyes


“kuch nahi hoga usse krish , tu pareshaan mat ho.” Said rishita


Rishita started liking raavi and started developing a bond with her butI guess destiny and fate had different plans

Shiva would be standing next to the Ganpati idol


“kyun kar rahe ho aap mere saath aisa . pehle nahi bata sakte kya ki raavi bhi mujhe chahne lagi thi. Mujhe meri raavi sahi salamat chahiye mein uske bina nahi jee sakta . uss chipkali ko humesha mere paas chahta hoon. Usse aise zindagi aur maut ke beech jhool te hue nahi dekh sakta mein. Please usse bacha lijiye” pleaded shiva

Seeing the doctors come out of the OT he rushes to them


“kaisi hai meri bachi abhi?” asked dhara


“unki jaan khatre se bahar hai lekin abhi kuch bhi kehna mushkil hai .agar agle 24 ghante mein unko hosh nahi aya toh woh coma mein ja sakti hai”said the doctor


Shivas world came shattering down. why was his fate so bad, the only person he desperately wanted is in her death bed

Dhara falls down crying in guilt


“agar maine usse woh sab nahi kaha hota toh woh wahan se bhag thi nahi aur uska accident bhi nahi hota “ she cried


“dhara agar tu aise roti rahi toh bimaar pad jayegi . atleast bache keliye toh apna dhyaan rakh” explained suman


She was equally to be blamed for all this. she never wished for anything bad to ever happen to raavi


“kya mein andar jaake raavi ko dekh sakta hoon?” asked shiva


“ji , lekin sirf ek insaan ek waqt par . aur dhyaan rakhiye ki unhe zyada stress na ho.” Adviced the doctor


Shiva walks in with his heart thumping like a rollercoaster. His heart ached as his eyes saw all the wires attached to her body, her colgate smile replaced with a frown , her hazel eyes covered with dark circles under and her glowing face wrapped in bandages .

What did she do to deserve this? Tears not stopping he sat next to her while gently holding her hand.


“chipkali utt na , tu mujhe aise kyun sata rahi hai huh? Aur uss maasi ne kaha ki tu mujhe pasand karne lagi thi. Bol na . tu-tujhe yeh kirane ki dukaan pasand aane laga tha kya” he chocked with tears


“dekh humesha toh bak bak karti hai, dant ke chup karana padta hai aur ab jab mein bol raha hoon tujhe baath karne ko toh tu kyun kuch nahi bol rahi hai ? chipkali utt na .” he cried his heart out


“tujhe pata hai uss din jab tujhe uss khandar mein marthe hue dekha na tab aisa laga ki mujhse mere zindagi chini ja rahi hai . meri zindagi humesha se tere ird gird ghumthi thi. aur phir jab woh jeera ka kand hua tab mujhe tu Dheere Dheere pasand ane lagi . jaise tune mera saath diya , mere liye khadi rahi sab kuch pasand ane laga tha mujhe aur phir teri woh Saheli ne aake sab kuch bigaad dia . mujhe laga ke mein tere layak nahi hoon issi liye tujhe dur bheja . agar mujhe pata hota ki tu bhi mujhe pasand karne lagi thi toh mein tujhe kabhi nahi chodta , mujhe laga tu mere bina khush rahegi par ab aur nahi. please utt ja na , dekh teri maasi ne kitna kuch kiya hai tere liye , kangan tak wapas de diye unhone ne . utna please raavi” he said desperately


Little did he know that she had gained consciousness and had heard everything he said, she wanted to get up and kill every insecurity he had . she tried to move her hand to let him know that she was awake

Shiva noticed movements in her hand and jumped in joy and went out screaming


“doctor doctor , raavi ko hosh agaya” he said with fresh tears but this time tears of happiness .

Everybody was happy raavi was finally conscious, the past few hours were terrible for both the families

The doctor checks raavi and comes out


“congratulations, Raavi abhi teekh hai , par ab bhi bohot sare complications hai 2-3 fractures hai jo waqt ke saath teekh hojaye ga . unhe koi stress nahi hona chahiye . abhi unki halath bohot nazuk hai” said the doctor


“ji doctor hum pura khayal rakhenge uska” claimed dhara


Prafulla though angry about pandya family hurting her daughter today she could see sheer love in each one of their eyes for Raavi. She never liked shiva but she somehow knew it was because of him that Raavi gained consciousness. She would do anything and everything in her control to make life easy for Raavi.


“kya main ab andar ja Sakthi hoon” asked Prafulla


“ji , ache se khayal rakhiye uska” smiled the doctor


Prafulla ran inside and saw Raavi . she looked tired

She ran and hugged her


“kaisi hai tu? Aise koi karta hai kya?? Ankhe band karke kaun chalta hai raavi? Agar tujhe kuch hojata toh socha mera kya hota?” cried Prafulla


“maasi mein teekh hoon” assured raavi


“mujhe please maaf karde Raavi, maine gusse mein bohot kuch boldiya”said Dhara with guilt


“Dhara di aap toh meri badi behen jaisi hai, aur iss baar galti meri hai.I am sorry gaumbi , mujhe woh lehenga nahi jalana chahiye tha” she cried


“shhhh aise rote nahi hai samjhi , tu toh meri choti si pyaari si behen hai na” said gaumbi


Krish comes running and hugs her


“itna pareshaan kar tha hai kya koi ? apko pata hai mein kitna roya .mujhe toh laga mujhe bukhar hojayega” exclaimed krish


Everybody laughed at his antics


“aww mera krishu, dekh main toh tikh hoon , sirf 2-3 hadi toot gaye mere”said raavi to lighten everyones mood


She gaze shifted to shiva’s who was staring at her intently , everybody knew they had to give them some space to talk their problems out , all of them took their leave, leaving only shiva with raavi

He came and sat beside her and started crying , she expected him to hide his emotions and put his chattan face on but here he let her see how vulnerablehe is without her , his sobs grew louder by each second


“shiva” said raavi not being able to see him cry


“kyu karti hai aise harkathein haan ? kyu mujhe itna pareshaan kiya . jaan nikal gayi thi meri”sobbed shiva like a little kid


Raavis heart pierced seeing him like this


oi chattan pandya tu kabse rotlu pandya ban gya” she said in an attempt to make him smile


“haan hoon mein rotlu pandya , tere bina koi chattan pandya nahi hai” he said while looking at her in the eye


“shiva” was all she managed to say


“mein tujhe kahin jaane nahi doonga , tu meri hai. Humesha se tu meri hi thi. Mere naseeb mein tu hi thi aur mein ab tujhe khona nahi chahta, kuch ghanta pehle jo stunt tune kiya na uske baad toh kabhi nahi chodunga tujhe”


“mujhe tujhe chodke jana bhi nahi hai shiva”


“agar tu chahe tab bhi mein jane nahi dunga.”


Saying which he hugs her tightly catching raavi off guard . they never hugged each other like this

She put her arm around him and assured her presence and safety


“maine apne insecurities ke wajah se tujhe khud se alag kiya tha lekin tere liye mera pyaar uss insecurity ko peeche chod dala, agar tujhe main pasand ane laga tha toh bataya kyu nahi?”


“kaise batata tujhe , mujhe toh laga tu mujhse nafrat karta hai. Kya kya nahi kaha tune mujhe , uss Rahul ke paas jane ko kaha , mujhe characterless bola” she complained


He felt terrible , he spoke way too much bullshit


“I am sorry i know i fukced up , mujhe woh sab nahi bolna chahiye tha”


“haan nahi bolna chahiye tha , mein manthi hoon ki mujhe tu pasand hai par main tujhe maaf nahi karoongi itni jaldi “


Shiva froze after the pasand karthi hoon . he knew she liked him but hearing it gave him so much confidence . he pulled her in a bone crashing hug causing raavi to flinch in pain


“aah bhoothnaat , dard ho raha hai” she winced in pain


“sorry woh galti se, par manna padega meri phoolkumari bohot strong nikli” he said


She was in tears . everything was falling in place

Her fate was beautiful and knowing that shiva was written in it gave her immense pleasure and satisfaction ,not all relationships are made by choice some are just meant to be and fate was something raavi always believed in and her fate didnt let her down this time.

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I am finally done, if you lasted till the end then congratulations.

I hope you liked the TS just how i would have wanted things to go with the show <3

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OMG tani dii

So glad to find you here after THR forum

I missed your stories so bloody much ❤️❤️

This one had me in tears

Please write more

And make this an SS ❤️❤️❤️

Lots of love

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It was so emotional

Loved it❤️❤️

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It was awesome 😍😍😍

Loved it ❤️

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