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Posted: 3 years ago

hi hope you are well.


Chapter 14

Incredible update.... perfectly written

well Geet hasn't yet made up her mind

she is indeed attached to Neil

at least she has commenced looking for a job

not surprised that she refused to take money for looking after Neil

Neil is an amazing and polite child

hate those boys tease Neil

feeling for Neil

sad that he cannot see his mom

Geet is upset is seeing Neil gloomy

of cos she tries to cheer him up

wonder why Neil is not allowed to see him mom?

great that Geet wants to help Neil

Gosh Maan came home drunk

can understand Maan's anger

Adi is shocked seeing Maan's condition

well Geet is asked to take care of Maan

wow Maan called her an Angel

Maan says that he is alone

not surprised that she said that he is not alone

Gosh he called her sweet innocent and beautiful

Geet is stunned

as expected its a loveless marriage for Maan

Geet is speechless

glad that Maan asked Geet to stay with him

looks like Maan has feelings for Geet

so he was keeping himself away from her and cannot do it anymore

Hope Sameera does not come to see Maan

what will Geet say to his revelation?

update soon

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Posted: 3 years ago

What. Maan is so drunk. No wonder he is speaking from his heart and not from his mind


Looks like he has fallen for geet but has kept himself away for her good.

We can see it is a loveless marriage if maan and Sam get married. Anyways the gangs are fighting so what’s the point right


coming to Neil. Poor kid. Who and where is his mom. How can she leave her kid with this man his so called dad


geet should give her piece. Mins to maan


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Posted: 3 years ago

This was so beautiful 😍! While I feel for Neil and all the things that happened in the update in the beginning, I loved the ending !! So Maan has feelings for her and is revealing it now when he is wasted.. and seems like Geet also already has a crush on him. So so eager for the next

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Posted: 3 years ago

Maan attracted towards geet

That's mean

Isliye wo yaha hai

Next part jaldi de na

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Posted: 3 years ago

There you go, he is already in love and i’m so happy about it. It’s another thing that when he is sober he might turn back into his rude arrogant self but at least it is confirmed, he does not love Sameera.

Poor Neil. I hope when Geet and Maan eventually get together, they adopt him. So sad that he has such useless parents.

Thank you for another wonderful update. Looking forward to the next episode.

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Posted: 3 years ago

this is awesome.........

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Posted: 3 years ago

@ kabslocks - Thank you for reading and for the kind comment! Agreed about Neil!


@ anmirza - So glad you are enjoying the equation between the two! And you totally suspected right! Thanks for reading and posting your thoughts. :)


@ Creampuff - Thank you so much for such a sweet comment! So glad you liked the confession, and so true that the disputes are putting a dent in the relationship! <3


@ coderlady - Thank you for reading and commenting on the chapters. :) Agreed that Geet is seeing vulnerable Maan!


@ maangeet,gmmg - Many thanks for such sweet feedback, much appreciated! More about Neil’s family to be revealed!


@ Niharika.Nair - I appreciate you checking out the chapter and commenting, thanks very much. :) Geet really is confused!


@ sanum23 - Thank you very much for reading and sharing your feedback! The bond between Geet and Neil really is getting stronger!


@ ferdouz - I so appreciate you following along with the story and sharing your thoughts, thank you! Love your line about the new feelings!


@ UmaDevi97 - Aww, thank you for such a wonderful comment! So glad you liked the Mr. Tops nickname, and you’re totally spot on about who would own that house lol! He really is yearning for a connection! <3


@ taahir004 - Many thanks for your lovely and insightful comment! Much appreciated. :) Love how you observed Maan’s fairness with his workers, and so glad you liked how he spoke to Geet!


@ MA1970 - So glad you found it interesting, thank you for reading and posting feedback! Agreed about Neil’s father!


@ aparna3011 - Thanks so much for reading and commenting! So true about the strengthening bond between Geet and Neil!


@ khwaishfan - Aww, thank you, and I hope you’re doing great! Many thanks for your comprehensive and lovely comment! :) Totally agree about Geet getting attached to Neil and how she was stunned at Maan’s words!


@ Alamelu - Thanks very much for reading and posting your insightful feedback! So true about his drunken state making him speak from his heart and not from his mind!


@ babelicious - Thank you sooo much for following along with the story and leaving such a kind comment, I appreciate it so much! So glad you liked the ending of the chapter!


@ priya_21 - Thank you very much for reading and commenting! It definitely looks like it!


@ simranDi - Many thanks for reading and for such sweet feedback, much appreciated! So true about waiting to see what he's like sober lol!


@ maanmeet1 - Yay, so glad you think so! Thank you for reading and giving feedback!

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Posted: 3 years ago

Hi sweethearts! Really appreciate your feedback on this story and I hope you’re all doing great. :) Chapter 15 is posted below!


(Link to chapter index)

Chapter 15


Over the next few hours, Geet paced the den as Maan remained passed out on the sofa. At one point, she untied Maan’s shoelaces and took off his shoes, then covered him with a blanket from a hall closet. She kept looking toward the entryway of the den to see if Sameera had finally arrived, and it was a long time before Geet realized she was hoping that Sameera would *not* show up.


Geet sat down on a loveseat opposite the sofa and nervously jiggled in her knee. Had Maan actually called her an “angel” and let it slip that he had purposely stayed away from her over the past week?


Could it be that Maan was actually *attracted* to her? How could such a wealthy, arrogant, violent man want anything to do with Geet -- Geet, who was homeless if not for Maan, relatively shy, and a rule-follower? Plus, Maan was engaged to Sameera . . . even though he clearly didn’t want to be, especially if the truce between the gangs wasn’t being upheld.


*Whatever Maan said was just drunken ramblings,* Geet thought. Still, she couldn’t deny how her heart had stuttered when he had called her “beautiful.” And what about in the gazebo that one night, when Maan had grabbed her arm and she had felt both sparks and a sense of safety? She thought of how Maan’s gaze had then swept her face, her lips. What would it have been like to kiss --


Geet stood up. “Stop,” she said out loud to herself. This was dangerous thinking, for a number of reasons. She looked at Maan, whose chest was rising and falling as he slept. He hadn’t stirred.


---


Geet must have dozed off at some point, because the next thing she knew, sunlight was filtering through the windows. She rubbed at her neck, which had a crick in it from sleeping on the loveseat, and looked over at the sectional sofa. It was empty, the blanket balled up in a corner.


Before Geet could wonder about where Maan had gone, he came strolling in with two mugs. Maan had changed into new clothes, but his eyes were bloodshot. He handed her a cup of black liquid and sat back down on the sofa. “Coffee. Black,” he said.


“Thank you.” Geet set the mug down on a side table. She preferred juice, but still felt touched by the gesture. “How are you feeling?”


Maan took a long swig of coffee before he replied, “Hungover.”


Geet considered skating around the topic but ultimately couldn’t help but blurt out, “Do you remember last night?”


“You mean aside from getting extremely drunk and passing out here in the den?” Maan said, massaging his temples.


So Maan didn’t remember his revelations from the night before. Of course he didn’t. *But that’s a good thing,* she told herself. *What good could come out of it?* Still, Geet felt her chest tighten with disappointment.


“Hopefully the coffee will help you feel better,” said Geet, rising from her seat. She suddenly couldn’t bear to be around him.


Geet was halfway down the hall out of the den when Maan, who had caught up to her easily with his long strides, held out his arm to block her path. “Wait. I know some things about last night.”


“Hmm?” Very slowly, Geet turned her face up toward him.


“I know that Sameera didn’t even show up last night, and that you were the one who took off my shoes and covered me with a blanket.” Maan’s eyes softened. “Thank you for that.”


Clearly, Maan didn’t remember what he had *said.* Still, Geet felt buoyed by his closeness, his gratitude.


“Geet, I . . . .” Maan trailed off, a look of pain unexpectedly crossing his face.


“You what?” Geet asked in a whisper.


Maan closed his eyes briefly before straightening up. “Since you took such good care of me last night, I owe you one. I have to attend some meetings, and then I need to visit the man who was injured yesterday, but is there anything special you want after that?”


The moment of confession was over, but Geet saw another window of opportunity. “Well, I had taken Neil to the museum yesterday to see the new dinosaur exhibit,” said Geet, “but he didn’t get a chance to look around. Maybe we can *both* take him again today when he comes over after school?”


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“Black coffee for me and a chocolate milkshake and fries for the lady,” said Maan, nodding at the restaurant server. “That’s all.”


Geet sat back in the cafe booth and watched through the glass windows as Neil ran to a playground slide. Unfortunately, the entire museum with the dinosaur exhibit had closed unexpectedly for the day due to some construction issue. Maan had given Neil the go-ahead to play in the playground by the museum, then steered Geet into the cafe across the street.


“How are you feeling?” Geet asked as the server brought their orders to the table. “And how is the man in the hospital?”


“I’ve been better,” said Maan. “And he’ll live. That’s about all I can say on that front.” He squeezed a packet of ketchup out onto a small plate, then said to Geet, “The fries are for you. I don’t eat them.”


“Fries aren’t fancy enough cuisine for you?” she teased.


Maan only smirked.


“I, um, want to talk to you about Neil,” said Geet, twirling a french fry between her fingers. She quickly relayed the scene from the museum the day before and how Neil rarely got to see his own mother. Geet shook her head. “My heart just broke for him. Why can’t he see his mom?”


Maan grimaced. “This isn’t the best conversation to have when I’m still not feeling one hundred percent. I don’t know all the details, but my brother, Monty, got primary custody of Neil because he was able to convince the judge that Neil’s mother is an unfit parent.”


“Is she?” Geet glanced at the playground, where Neil was laughing with a boy who looked to be around his age.


“She seemed like a nice, stable lady from what I remember,” Maan began, “but I honestly didn’t know her that well. Monty and I aren’t that close and I don’t particularly like being around him. If you think I scare Neil, well, you should see how Monty is with him.”


Geet was already formulating a plan to track down Neil’s mother herself when Neil bounded into the cafe. He wore a big grin and his glasses were slightly askew from his play time.


“Miss Geet, Uncle Maan, I made a new friend on the playground! His name is Iqbal!” Neil looked positively triumphant.


“That’s wonderful!” Geet exclaimed. “Is he still outside? You can ask him to come eat with us!”


“He had to go home, but he said he’ll be back at the playground next week. Can we come back here then? Please?” Neil pleaded.


“Of course,” Geet and Maan said together.


Geet smiled, grateful for Iqbal’s appearance after Neil’s terrible day yesterday. She watched as Neil settled in beside Maan, who had spread out the menu and was pointing out items for Neil.


Geet wondered what the tableau looked like to passersby. Would they think Maan and Geet were a married couple and that Neil was their son and that --


*Stop,* Geet ordered herself. Dangerous thinking once again.


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After eating at the cafe, Maan and Geet dropped Neil home. Maan was on a work call during the ride back to Maan’s house, something about an upcoming acquisition, but he clicked off as soon as they pulled into his driveway.


Geet’s heart dropped when she saw Sameera, who was dressed in a jeweled gown, talking on the phone. A man holding a large camera was standing by the fountain. Why was there a cameraman here?


When Sameera spotted them, her eyes grew wide and she hurriedly ended the call. Maan let out a low curse as Sameera rushed up to the car and waved frantically at him through the windshield. “Did you forget that our engagement photo shoot was today?” she demanded. Her eyes settled on Geet. “And why are you driving *her* around?”


Maan tapped his fingers against the steering wheel for a moment before turning to Geet. “Go inside,” he said quietly. “I need to talk to her, and it’s best if you’re not here for this.”


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Thank you for reading and have a lovely weekend!

Edited by kumari3 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago

Geet is feeling the attraction too on her side. She doesn't trust it, but does feel something.

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Posted: 3 years ago

neil is happy and that makes me happy

m sure maan remembers what he told her.....

geet has started expecting from him
sameera😡

m sure neil's mom is a good lady

Edited by maanmeet1 - 3 years ago

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