Th 2 I FF - Broken I Ch 39 - Pg 149 - Page 112

Originally posted by: Wynn

Excellent update. Finally Vansh sees all the tortures that Rhidfima underwent by all family except Siya & Dadi & Angre...dripping your nails into your plalm to make them bleed is a nice touch but leaves me curiously unmoved...and brilliant reply from Angre to Vansh "You let it happen"...everytime Vansh remained silent he let violence continue, everytime he took Rhiddima at her word that she was "fine"; added to the next attack when all Rhiddima was trying to do was be his shield or get evidence one way or another to correct a wrong or put things right.

Thank you Vansh had been blinded till now more than that he had been ignorant. Slowly his eyes are opening to things around him and regarding his family as well but still a lot to learn.

As I read 1st part suddenly I am taken to the opening scenes of chapter 3 thread one where Rhiddima says to Vansh the following

"Ridhima: It’s nothing like that. I was just busy with some new treatments that I am planning for Sia. You see, I came to this house to treat Sia. Other than treating Sia, I think I have done everything. Married you, saved you from dying, arranged marriage for Ishani and Angre, above all, every week at least 4-5 times I stood at the gates of death. Therefore, after a lot of thinking in the past two months, I realized one should do the work which they specialized. I'm good at treating patients. So that’s what I will do treat everyone"

Thats a lot for a soul to go through so redemption or not Vansh is gone for me...but I love the clever interplay of this chapter 38 thread 2 when I realised all that happened to her in thread 1 that is shown in flashback...that is some amazing writing because in thread 1 we dont see what actually happens

Thank you so much, people are remembering things from chapters before means a lot for us. As for Vansh? I hope and pry as story proceeds you find Vansh that you feel is gone for now.

I do like Angre's character here in your series...he is the voice of reason that other than Dadi and Siya that Vansh would listen to & because he sees firsthand on the pen drive all the atrocities committed he can say what he needs to say to Vansh.

Angre is sensible character with potential if he stops doin ju huzuri of Vansh and show individuality and little independence as an character. God knows when we will see that in the show.

So Mohan thinks he is leaving and Kabir will be jailed for life? Like mother like son..Its going to be a cold day in hell before those AnuBir duo give up..always plotting and planning and up to no good. Vansh will better be on his guard. If Ragini had not gone to Rhiddima in last chapter to tell her what she overheard Kabir plotting what might have happened to Siya and Rhiddima? Good thing Mishra helped Vansh.

AnuBir of course aren't the types to give up at least not so easily. Mohan is leaving for now latter if needed he will come back and for Kabir he is a criminal like any other. Officers don't think about criminals escape plans they do their job and try to keep badder ones long enough as much they can that's what Mohan is doing. Rest he will see and do what is needed to be done when time comes.

At least Aryan and Chacchi are harmless in comparision and from what I am feeling Aryan is beginning to like Sejal a tad more than he should...

Aryan is changing but Chachi is still the same but if Aryan changes Chachi ko handle kar lega banda😆 yes something happening but still long way to go for concreet and strong feelings to form and even Aryan needs to become worthy of Sejal before anything.

Looking forward to next update and seeing what life brings

Sure thank you

Originally posted by: Abhyudaya

Thank you for this analysis dear. Deeply connected with this. Never thought you would be connecting this chapter with chapter 3. I'm as a writer impressed that you remember our lines.

And taking pride that, our reader remember what they read and that says we are succeeding in creating a good story. Congratulations @bhataktiatma and thank for creating this piece with me.

Congratulations to you too and thank you for agreeing to partnering up with me❤️😊

Let's see what more stored for Vansh in the future. Stay tuned dear.

Originally posted by: eishe10

Excellent update!

Thank you :)

Originally posted by: Wynn

You both have written an amazing story in Broken and its very detailed...I was actually struggling to remember when in Immh tv series Rhiddima found out about Kabir being Anu's son was after Vansh went over the cliff but here in your series there is none of that, you open the series with Rhiddima finding out the two secrets simultaneously - the relationship bwt AnuBir and overhearing that Vansh never loved her and was using her for revenge and you are both masterful in your weaving of storyline esp of Uma's return because in your story you bought Uma back before in Immj there was even a hint of her return dead or alive.

Thank you so much once again❤️ this kind of appreciation and encouragement boosts our confidence and makes us motivated to give our best.😊 That very twist with Vansh's betrayal changed everything here and story formation otherwise there wouldn't have been BROKEN if Vansh had not betrayed her.

Plus you have added another family to Rhiddima and most importantly in here your story Ragini is alive and well and is redeeming I hope to become a positive character and when she does do good things I can see why Vansh fell in love with her ..there is hope there for them..

Ragini is a positive character but is more of an tez-tarraar types.

But your interplay in what now almost 80 chapters is to be applauded...well deserved praise..its like for me I am reading each chapter and watching it as an episode. I have built up a picture of what Sejal.and Saski look like visually but not Ridhay...I feel his qualities but the visual I cant picture just yet.

Thank you so much even did not thought it would reach that amount of chapters but we mostly going with the flow. Ridhay is kept secret deliberately he will be revealed in next few chapters.😊

As to wattpadd etc; sorry I cant help you but there are some amazing writers on the forum who will surely know what to do..try Gur (Asminaxx).

Thanks will do :)

I know on the forum I joined previously Swararagini there was a writer there who wrote FF on the characters a little bit like your story in Broken; but different and she turned hers into a book that you could buy online on wattpad and kindle I think.

We will think about it. I was even planning to write it as a separate story rather than FF. Actually I am posting it for my peers and did not wanted to post it as an FF for them so. Let's see might do that in the future if got good response there.

It would be great if your Broken becomes a short novel. Until next chapter take care...

Thank you let's hope for the best. 😊

Originally posted by: anya2005

you just need to post your story under fanfiction genre, because it means you have taken your characters from a show or they are some celebrities

and put a disclaimer in your story description along with some warnings (it's completely your choice to put them)

my username on wattpad is @bhavyaan

if you need any help i'm there❤️

Thank you :)

Brilliant👏

Just loved it

Originally posted by: sosweetsumi

really liking so Kabir is finally behind the bars n anupriya will follow soon Vansh knowing about riddhu torture is the start loved angre here

Yes for now he is soon to be followed by mommy dearest of his. Thank you :)

Originally posted by: -Ayushi-

Amazing update👏, Kabir finally got what he deserves , punishment

Thank you😊

This is never gonna happen in the show as they torture Riddhima and forget about baout it. But thankfully the cctvs worked and Vansh came to know baout the deeds of his so called family.

Let's hope someday they do show this in the show and CCTV's there also works but only when Riddhu ko fasana ho.

Loving Angre here, being a true friend by pointing out his mistakes too.

Angre could be the voice of reason at times.

Fab update, sorry I don't know about Wattpad rights but I'll ask my friends who post FF on wattpad

Originally posted by: KV2711

I read chappy 38 twice today you both. Guys doing great job

Thank you so much for giving so much of precious time of yours for the series dear. Means a lot

thank you once again :)