NEW DRABBLE : THE SOULFUL TRUST (Rudhita) - Page 2

Originally posted by: Rashi_garg

Its so much better than what's shown..

It brought so much relief.. And peice to my heart..

I liked the ending you gave to brijwasi.

Was wondering how Bondita got to know about mini..

Love your Version of Ani.. He was hurt.. But still chose Bondita

I wished Ani to be like this with full saneness and maturity.

Thanks dear for your valuable comment.

How Bondita got to know regarding Mini will update in next part if I get good responses.

Originally posted by: mannu_123

U shud b d one replacing d script writers of d show👍🏼 awesome🤗 aur kuch nhi to training hi dedo unko 😆

I am glad you liked it. Thanks for the appreciating compliment Mannu❤️🤗

Thank you..

Originally posted by: Home786

Thanks a lot Priya for your valuable comment. How's nice it would have been if Ani preferred to stand with his wife like this na.

You want me to continue this?😲 Pehle hi ek SS ka fourth part pending hai.. OMG.

Will try my level best to continue... Haven't you read my previous works.??

I had not read anything else from you I think... But just read rishta tera mera n left disappointed. You didn't complete it yaar...

Originally posted by: bubblesort

Shaheen you are such a tease , ended on cliffhanger😲

Please tell me you are going to continue it😳

It's absolutely awesome⭐️ and much much better then the original episode😆

Continue😲??? Kon Kon sa continue karoon?? Will try for sure Sume..

Thanks dear for your lovable comment❤️🤗

Originally posted by: Home786

Sume I like to end every part of my story with cliffhanger. Interesting habit na😆.

Continue😲??? Kon Kon sa continue karoon?? Will try for sure Sume..

Thanks dear for your lovable comment❤️🤗

Nice way to keep readers hooked😆

🤗

Hmmm... I love your Grammar

It's perfect

But....

Originally posted by: blackhole

atleast mini ka part samjha do... I so want to read something on revelation yaar... Bohot hua mini drama🤢

I had not read anything else from you I think... But just read rishta tera mera n left disappointed. You didn't complete it yaar...

Mini ka part will update in next chapter definitely if I get good responses.

Now tell me do you want me to update this part or TS on 10th day sequence which I hinted in EDT today.??

Originally posted by: Octothorpe

Iss dhokhe mein mat aana Prit. She didn't unres on my drabble too😭🥺

I know Octo. Hamari Shaheen ka favourite word hai res jo kabhi unres nhi hota 😆

Originally posted by: Home786

Rishta Tera Mera fourth part will update soon Priya..

Mini ka part will update in next chapter definitely if I get good responses.

Now tell me do you want me to update this part or TS on 10th day sequence which I hinted in EDT today.??

Originally posted by: Home786

But...kya??boldo behen.

I just realized now that you wrote it as Drabble but its always of 100 words lady!

Coming to my point of but...

A story should be fast paced with the right amount of details

I felt your story got too detailed which felt unnecessary

Second the adjectives were too much Shaheen. I understand to give the notions about a character or scene you need adjectives but there is never too much of a good thing

Like I could see an adjective in each sentence

And if you are habitual to using adjectives so much then there is a way to do it

And sometimes an adjective is hard to comprehend at first go so giving out so many just breaks the flow of reading.

So that was a huge turn off

Try playing with words. Don't use much complex ones. It takes away the feel of a soryo

Play with simple words to create magic

Don't be offended it's just my opinion