AshNi + OC FF: Love is all you need - Page 6

Originally posted by: LizzieBennett

Hello,

I know its just the two of you - Anjani and Vidi (did I get you name right?) that are reading my fic right now, so let me tell you that I'm the type of writer who enjoys and thrives on feedback. I would appreciate your thoughts, and/or criticism on my work. It helps me.

And I reply to every comment that is made on my work.

Thanks again!

Am back now.....busy with some work, could not come here.....

I just read.....how do I praise it?

It is great....between LIL and this one, have you written anything???

Originally posted by: Anjani9

I just read.....how do I praise it?

It is great....between LIL and this one, have you written anything???

Thank you! I wrote some drabbles on AO3 on another TV show I was following for a short while, but this one is my first multi-chapter since LIL.

Originally posted by: LizzieBennett

Thank you! I wrote some drabbles on AO3 on another TV show I was following for a short while, but this one is my first multi-chapter since LIL.

This one is an improvement over LIL, more complicate to write and you have done a good job....👏🤗

Originally posted by: Anjani9

This one is an improvement over LIL, more complicate to write and you have done a good job....👏🤗

Thank you so much for saying that! I’m glad you feel it’s an improvement because as a writer, I’m always looking for ways to improve my writing.

I agree that this fic is more complicated. My characters are more layered here I guess and also I’m going the way I want to with the story. With LIL I guess there was a little bit of crowd-pleasing involved, if I have to be completely honest. That said, I’m always open to feedback so if there’s anything in the story you didn’t like let me know. Not that I will change things, because I want to be driven by my own vision of the story, but it still helps a writer to see a different perspective on their story.

Originally posted by: LizzieBennett

Thank you so much for saying that! I’m glad you feel it’s an improvement because as a writer, I’m always looking for ways to improve my writing.

I agree that this fic is more complicated. My characters are more layered here I guess and also I’m going the way I want to with the story. With LIL I guess there was a little bit of crowd-pleasing involved, if I have to be completely honest. That said, I’m always open to feedback so if there’s anything in the story you didn’t like let me know. Not that I will change things, because I want to be driven by my own vision of the story, but it still helps a writer to see a different perspective on their story.

Just to take out a boy out for a walk (others do not know the whole issue happened) and back to the home.......does that require explanation to Board?

Originally posted by: Anjani9

Just to take out a boy out for a walk (others do not know the whole issue happened) and back to the home.......does that require explanation to Board?

I see the validity of your query. But you have to remember this is a correctional facility. Samir would probably be serving a sentence in jail had he not been a juvenile. And Sharmanya’s management is answerable to the law and the justice system. Since his sentencing involved that Samir spend time there. Ryan broke 2 rules here: one, he went into solitary confinement where Samir was. He’s prohibited from seeing anyone. That’s the purpose of solitary confinement. Two, he took him out at midnight wherein rules state that no one can be taken out without special permission beyond 8 pm. Imagine it’s a prison of sorts and a member of staff takes a prisoner out without asking a superior. It’s kind of an offense like that. Therefore, it becomes a serious matter and Anne has to bring it up to the Board.

Hope that makes sense!

Originally posted by: LizzieBennett

Thank you so much for saying that! I’m glad you feel it’s an improvement because as a writer, I’m always looking for ways to improve my writing.

I agree that this fic is more complicated. My characters are more layered here I guess and also I’m going the way I want to with the story. With LIL I guess there was a little bit of crowd-pleasing involved, if I have to be completely honest. That said, I’m always open to feedback so if there’s anything in the story you didn’t like let me know. Not that I will change things, because I want to be driven by my own vision of the story, but it still helps a writer to see a different perspective on their story.

👍🏼

Chapter 6 is up! It's a short one so the update is sooner that I expected.

As always, look forward to your comments!

Originally posted by: Anjani9

Back to Forum.....😊

Did you get a chance to read Chapter 6? 😳