Removed!

Ohh ohh ohh.🥺

Octo you really make sad sometimes! Uffff the pain 😭

This was SO GOOD.

The first incident really didn't get me guessing that he's dead. It's only in the second/third phase that I realised something's fishy. So you see, you've done a great job!

Just a few points:

1. For the suitcase scene, you shouldn't have hinted about Aniruddh coming back to her cause that doesn't make sense and infact is confusing.

2. Memories always in italics, please. Cause as it is it took effort to visualize the phases 😆

3. Typos fix karle, this deserves to be perfect okay?😳

4. I would've loved if in the end, you would have revealed some incidents/feelings of his death from Bondita's perspective. That would've been a perfect end.

What I LOVED:

1. The suitcase thing. What a subtle thing when I thought back about it!❤️

2. Her hearing up as he would've wanted

3. Revelation in third person narration - my favorite style ☺️

4. The opening scene where she said about just staying in a room - relatable to the status of widows back then! Too goood.⭐️😳

This was great. <3

Loved it.

Cheers and MUAAAHHHHH.

Originally posted by: Mannmohanaa

RESWA 🤪

This is not me okay. The worst of everything that I wrote. Don't hate me after it. 😭

Unressed.

LMAO I ended up writing a comment longer than the OS it seems🤣

Sorry if I was too critical but this was really different and worthwhile

Originally posted by: Octothorpe

This is not me okay. The worst of everything that I wrote. Don't hate me after it. 😭

You confirmed pagal is the

Love that pains🥺

Octo you are so so sooooo good at words by emoting it in your writing 🤗

This os is such a emotional one😭

can feel bon's pain 😒 this os reminded me the phrase I read

"There is one pain,I often feel which you will never known. It's caused by the absence of you"

But still she is living in the hallucination of Ani around her !! That part was indeed sad 😢

"No person is truly alone, those we loved lives no more,

Their Echo still within us by thoughts,words and heart ❤️"

Wonderful piece of writing 😉 Do write more, waiting for your future writeup 😳

Originally posted by: Mannmohanaa

Ohh ohh ohh.🥺

Octo you really make sad sometimes! Uffff the pain 😭. Aww🤗

This was SO GOOD. Not actually😳

The first incident really didn't get me guessing that he's dead. It's only in the second/third phase that I realised something's fishy. So you see, you've done a great job! Really?

Just a few points:

1. For the suitcase scene, you shouldn't have hinted about Aniruddh coming back to her cause that doesn't make sense and infact is confusing. Haha! I hate myself for it

2. Memories always in italics, please. Cause as it is it took effort to visualize the phases 😆. I was really lazy to do that. Plus, there was constant ad irritating the hell out of me. Because I typed this directly here😳

3. Typos fix karle, this deserves to be perfect okay?😳 I'm not in a mood to re read it and hate myself more. I know I would have done lots of grammatical errors and typos! 🤓

4. I would've loved if in the end, you would have revealed some incidents/feelings of his death from Bondita's perspective. That would've been a perfect end. I wanted to, but then, it would have become very sad. You know me😆

What I LOVED:

1. The suitcase thing. What a subtle thing when I thought back about it!❤️. Aww🤗

2. Her hearing up as he would've wanted .

3. Revelation in third person narration - my favorite style ☺️. Really? I did not know that😛

4. The opening scene where she said about just staying in a room - relatable to the status of widows back then! Too goood.⭐️😳. I hinted about Anirudh's death in that 😛

This was great. <3

Loved it.

Cheers and MUAAAHHHHH.

Thank you for loving everything that I put out. I still hate myself for this nonsense. I'm not happy about it, at all. I'm not writing for some time now, for sure! 😳

Originally posted by: Mannmohanaa

You confirmed pagal is the

Me is not a pagal is the

Karna chahiye Roz gargle is the🤣

Originally posted by: Octothorpe

Thank you for loving everything that I put out. I still hate myself for this nonsense. I'm not happy about it, at all. I'm not writing for some time now, for sure! 😳

CHUPP KARR!!!

What did you just say? 😳😡

No ways. Please please don't say this. And this wasn't even bad! Nautanki mat kar.🤓

Yeah, you'd hinted in the first section only but lazy me didn't notice 🤣

Even though that was sad it was beautifully written octo

Loved it

U should totally write much more♥️

Hata kyun diya?

Anyways this was subtle and heart wrenching

And not at all bad.

Stop procrastinating ! A bit of grammar correction and the idea already stands out.

I litrally became sad for a good 1 hour after reading this!

Keep writing