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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Madhura..

Thanks Nushy and Nikki. Kal discuss karenge..

Just went on insta and twitter..and saw it, so thought to just say out.

Sure... We can discuss tomorrow 😊

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Madhura..

Thanks Nushy and Nikki. Kal discuss karenge..

Just went on insta and twitter..and saw it, so thought to just say out.


Umm, okay!


You take care of yourself. 😊 We can discuss when you feel like it.


Good night!

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Posted: 5 years ago

Sorry guys for the late update... I was supposed to update it last week but got late...

Chapter: 07

The Locket is Broken


Mo: To mujhe kya karna hoga?

Ant: Batata hoon...


He put his hands forward and rotated them in a circular motion. Soon, a golden light began to emerge from his hands which soon took the shape of a ball.

He beckoned her to join him...

Mohona looked into the ball and saw Pia pacing restlessly inside her room.


Ant: Iske gale main ye locket dekh rahi ho?


Mohona looked carefully and immediately recognised the locket.


Mo: Ye locket...

Ant: Haan... Tujhe ise todna hoga.


Mohona was shocked.


Mo: Main is locket ko chuna to door, iske paas bhi nahi jaa sakti. To main ise todungi kaise?

Ant: Is locket ko na sahi, iski chain ko to tod sakti hai na?

Mo: Lekin agar maine iski chain ko bhi chua to wo meri shaktiyon le legi.

Ant: To teri shaktiyan kaun sa hamesha ke liye chali jayengi? Kuch samay baad tujhe teri shaktiyan wapas mil hi jayengi... Aur waise bhi, is kaam ke badle main tujhe ek badi keemat bhi ada kar raha hoon.

Mo: Theek hai...

Ant: Aur yaad rakhna, tere paas sirf kal subah tak ka hi samay hai.

Mo: Main samajh gayi... Kal subah tak kisi na kisi tarah se main us locket ko tod dungi.

Ant: Theek hai...

Mo: Lekin aapka kaam karne ke baad main aapse milungi kahan?

Ant: Uski chinta tu mat kar... Main khud tujhe dhoondh loonga. Ab ja aur apne kaam par lag ja. Aur haan, yaad rakhna koi chalaki karne ki koshish mat karna. Warna anjaam bahut bura hoga...


Saying this, he left the place leaving Mohona behind to plan her next move.


At the same time, Nishant along with Ansh and Saavi was busy going through all those books which Veer had brought.

He surreptitiously glanced at Ansh and Saavi... Both seemed to be distracted. It seemed as if they wanted to talk to Nishant but were unable to decide how to start the conversation.


Ni: Tum dono ko kya hua hai?

Sa: Wo... Dad...


She was nervous about beginning the conversation. She did not want her dad to think that she had been spying on him...not that he would ever think so but still, she was slightly nervous.


Sa: Dad, actually jab aap wo Rakshas Kosh rakhne gaye the to maine aapko us book main se ek page nikalte hue dekha tha.


Nishant was slightly taken aback.

He had this doubt that Saavi and the others did not believe him when he had said that the book contained no further information but he had not expected that she would have seen him tearing that page.


Sa: Aisa kya tha us page main Dad?


Nishant was at a loss for words... Should he tell them what he had read?


Ni: Kuch bhi to nahi tha usme...


But his words lacked conviction.

Saavi and Ansh instantly knew that Nishant was lying. He had lied to them earlier and he was lying now also. He was definitely hiding something...


Ansh: Papa, hum jante hain aap humse kuch chupa rahe hain. Aisa kya likha tha us page main jo aap hume bhi nahi batana chahte?


Nishant finally decided to reveal the truth...


Ni: Us page main teen hazar saal pehle jo hua tha, uske baare main likha tha...

Sa: You mean us page main ye likha tha ki teen hazar saal pehle kaise Daivik ne Antakasur ko amar hone se roka tha?

Ni: Haan... Aisa hi kuch likha tha.

Ansh: To Papa, aap ye baat hum sab se kyon chupa rahe hain? Agar us tareeke se teen hazar saal pehle Daivik ne Antakasur ko roka tha, to ab bhi to roka ja sakta hai na? Aapne humse ye kyon kaha ki Antakasur ko rokne ka koi tareeka us kitaab main nahi hai?

Ni: Kyonki main nahi chahta ki Gudiya us tareeke ka istemal kare...

Sa: Par kyon Dad? Agar ye ek rasta hai Antakasur ko rokne ka to aap kyon nahi chahte ki Di us tareeke ko use karein?

Ni: Kyonki us tareeke ko istemal karne se Gudiya ki jaan ko khatra tha...

Sa: Matlab kya hai aapka Dad?

Ni: Us kitaab main likha tha ki teen hazar saal pehle Daivik ne Antakasur ko rokne ke liye apni jaan de di thi... Us Daivik ne khud ko khatm kar liya taaki Antakasur Kaal Shukra Grahan par uski bali chadha kar amar na ho sake.


This revelation dropped as a bomb on Ansh and Saavi leaving them stunned... They were dumbfounded.

Seeing their stunned faces, Nishant continued speaking...


Ni: Ab tum log kya chahte ho? Main ye sab jaakar Gudiya ko bata doon taki wo bhi yahi kare? (He paused for a moment) Karne ko to wo ab bhi ye kar sakti hai par shayad abhi tak use ye khayal aaya nahi hai...aur main ummeed karunga ki uske dimag main ye khayal kabhi aaye bhi nahi. Kyonki agar baar use ye khayal aa gaya ki wo apne aap ko khatm kar ke Antakasur ko kamyab hone se rok sakti hai to wo peeche nahi hategi.

Sa: To Dad, aapne information chupayi kyonki aap nahi chahte the ki kisi ko is baare main pata chale... Par aapne us page ko kyon phaada?

Ni: Main usi samay samajh gaya tha ki tum logon ko lagta hai ki maine tumhe sab kuch nahi bataya hai aur tum log us kitaab ko khol kar zarur dekhoge. Mujhe ye bhi pata tha ki agar tum dono main se koi ise padh lega to bhi wo Gudiya ko kuch nahi batayega. Par agar Gudiya ise padh leti to...


He left his sentence incomplete... And it made an instant impact on both Ansh and Saavi...


Ansh: Agar Pia ise padh leti to wo is tareeke ka istemal zarur karti. Aur hum...


He shuddered thinking of the consequences of Pia reading that information...


Sa: To Dad, ab hum kya karenge? In books main to Antakasur ko maarne ka koi tareeka nahi hai... Maarna to door ki baat, inme use rokne tak ka koi tareeka nahi hai.

Ni: Meri thodi der pehle Panditji se baat hui thi. Wo Guruma se milne jaa rahe the. Wahan Bandap ke mandir main bhi kuch purani kitaabein aur pandulipiyan rakhi hui hain. Shayad unme kuch information mil jaye...

Sa: Ye to bahut achhi baat hai Dad... (Thinking about something) Lekin Dad, tab tak hume us Antakasur ko dhundhna hoga...

Ansh: Baat to sahi hai... Hume abhi tak koi idea nahi hai ki Antakasur kis roop main ghoom raha hai. Aur humare paas use dhoondhne ke liye sirf kal tak ka samay hai kyonki parso to Kaal Shukra Grahan hi hai...

Sa: Mujhe to abhi bhi us Rudra par hi shak hai...

Ni: Thoda-thoda shak to mujhe bhi hai us Rudra par... Par abhi hum kuch confirm nahi kar sakte.

Sa: Haan par at least hum us par nazar to rakh sakte hain na?

Ansh: Ye tareeka theek rahega... Kam se kam hume itna to pata chal jayega ki Rudra hi Antakasur hai ya nahi.

Ni: Baat to theek hai par us par nazar kaun rakhega??

Ansh: Main ek kaam karta hoon, Rishi, Neha aur Kajal ko is kaam par laga deta hoon...

Ni: Par Ansh unki jaan ko bhi to khatra ho sakta hai na?

Ansh: Main unse har samay Rudra par nazar rakhne ke liye thode hi kahunga... Bas unse ye bolunga ki agar Rudra kahin jaaye ya kahin se aaye to hume inform kar dein. Aur agar koi aur ajeeb baat lage to bhi hume turant inform karein...


Nishant was still apprehensive of including Rishi, Neha and Kajal in their plan... What if Rudra was really Antakasur in disguise? Their lives could also be in danger... And he did not want to risk their lives.


Ni: Are you sure Ansh ye plan kaam karega? Unhe koi khatra nahi hoga?

Ansh: I am sure Neha itni sensible to hai ki wo khud ko aur dusaron ko safe rakh sake... I know wo aisi koi bewakoofi nahi karegi jisse koi problem create ho...


Nishant was still not fully convinced... But seeing no other option, he decided to agree to Ansh's plan...


Ni: Theek hai Ansh... Par unhe savdhaan rehne ke liye bol dena. Aur saath hi ye bhi bol dena ki agar kuch gadbad lage to turant hum main se kisi ko bhi call karke bula lein.

Ansh: Theek hai papa.


He went outside to call Rishi.

On the other hand, Nishant's phone which was lying in the living room also rang. He also left the office to pick up the call.

Saavi continued going through those books to see whether they contained any information about Antakasur or not.

On the other hand, Pia was pacing around her room restlessly. Nishant had told her to remain in her room as far as possible and not go out anywhere, not even the balcony as they had no idea what Antakasur would do next.

She stopped and was staring outside the glass window when she heard the sound of the door opening. She turned around and saw Saavi entering the room. She walked towards her...


Pia: Saavi, tum yahan? Kya baat hai? Antakasur ke baare main kuch pata chala kya?


But Saavi did not reply to her questions. Without a single word, she stepped towards her.


Pia: Saavi... Kya hua hai tumhe?


Still she did not reply. She did not speak a single word and kept on moving towards her with an outstretched hand.

Something was definitely wrong with her... She seemed to be walking in a dazed state. Was she under someone's control??


Pia: Sa... Saavi ruko!! Kya ho gaya hai tumhe? (Thinking to herself) Kahin ye kisi ke vash main to nahi? Kahin Antakasur ne ise...


Her chain of thoughts was broken when Saavi's outstretched hand almost reached her neck...

Shocked, she started taking steps backwards. With her each step backwards, Saavi moved one step forward...till Pia's back collided with the glass French window and she had nowhere to move. She was trapped...

Saavi outstretched her hand to break the locket while Pia grabbed the locket tightly.


Pia: Kya kar rahi ho tum Saavi??? Hosh main aao... please


Her last word came out almost as a whisper.

With one hand, Saavi grabbed and removed Pia's hand from her locket. Her other hand almost reached the locket.

But as soon as Saavi's hand touched the locket, she felt a shock and was thrown backwards... She collided with a vase causing it to fall down with a crash.

This crash brought Ansh and Nishant to the room. They were shocked to see the scene in front of them... Pia was standing in front of the window with a shocked and a scared expression on her face. While Saavi... She was sitting on the ground with a confused expression on her face, looking first at Pia, then at herself and finally at Nishant and Ansh.


Sa: Main...main yahan kya kar rahi hoon?


Nishant and Ansh rushed towards Saavi.


Ni: Saavi... Kya hua? Tum yahan kya kar rahi ho?

Sa: P...pata nahi Dad!! Main to neeche aapke office main thi. Main yahan kaise aa gayi?


Meanwhile, Ansh turned towards Pia...


Ansh: Pia... Kya hua yahan par?

Pia: Mujhe kuch samajh nahi aaya... Main yahin par thi aur achanak Saavi aakar ye locket todne ki koshish karne lagi. Aur jab usne ise chua to use ek jhatka laga aur wo neeche gir gayi...

Ni: Matlab Saavi kisi ke vash main thi... Aur is locket ko choote hi wo wapas normal ho gayi.

Pia: Par kiske?

Ansh: Antakasur ke alawa kaun ho sakta hai?


While they were contemplating what had happened and what to do next, a pair of eyes was keeping a watch on them.

Mohona was fuming in anger at the failure of her plan. She turned around and left to make another plan.

Back in the house, Nishant, Saavi, Pia and Ansh were grouped together in that room.


Sa: Dad aapko thodi der pehle ek call aaya tha na? Wo call kiska tha? Kya Panditji ka tha?

Ni: Nahi Saavi... Wo Veer ka phone tha. Wo apni kundali ke baare main pooch raha tha.

Sa: To aapne usse kya kaha?

Ni: Maine subah Panditji se baat ki thi... Unhone kaha ki kal tak kundali ready ho jayegi. To maine use bol diya ki wo kal aakar apni kundali le jaye...


He turned towards Ansh...


Ni: Tumne Rishi ko call ki thi na? Kuch pata chala Rudra ke baare main?

Ansh: Haan... Maine Rishi ko call ki thi. Usne bataya ki Rudra thodi der pehle hi ghar wapas aaya hai. Rishi bhi usi samay ghar pahuncha tha. In fact, wo aur Rishi ek saath hi wapas aaye the.

Sa: Haan... Rudra abhi ghar wapas lauta hai kyoki wo yahan aaya tha. Dekha Dad, ek aur proof mil gaya Rudra ke Antakasur hone ka.

Ni: Baat to sahi hai... Saari baatein isi taraf ishara kar rahi hain ki Antakasur is Rudra ka roop lekar reh raha hai.

Pia: To ab hume kya karna chahiye?

Ansh: Maine Rishi ko bol diya hai ki wo, Neha aur Kajal mil kar Rudra par nazar rakhe. Aur agar wo kahin bahar jaate hue dikhe to turant hum main se kisi ko bhi call karke bata dein.

Ni: Chalo, that's good...


Suddenly, they heard a loud crash somewhere outside. All four of them rushed out into the balcony... But they saw no one there.

Little did they know that someone was waiting for them to come out in the balcony...

Mohona was sitting on the parapet, waiting for them especially Pia to come out.

As soon as the four of them came out, Mohona extend one of her fingernails till it reached the chain around Pia's neck.

As soon as her nail touched the chain, she felt as if her energy was slowly decreasing. She lifted the chain slightly with her nail and entangled it to a nail sticking out from a corner of the wall.

With each passing moment, she could feel her energy slowly draining out of her body. Still, she did not stop till she had done what she wanted.

On the other hand, seeing no one around, Nishant turned to leave and asked the others to also do so. As soon as Pia turned around and took one step forward, she felt a tug at her neck.

Before she could realise what had happened, the chain of the locket broke... And with it broke the last protection which she had against any Kaali Shakti.


PS. Flow flow main locket todne par kuch zyada hi likh diya... I hope it is not bakwas.

Edited by Nikki_srk - 5 years ago


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Posted: 5 years ago

Let's just say, this chapter was wort the wait. 👏 👏 👏


I know by now you might have given me the nickname of tape-recorder 😛 that I keep on repeating some things but seriously yaar, the resemblance to the original characters - even their mannerism is amazing!!! 👏 👏 👏


Daivik killing herself to stop Antakasur - it was a nice touch. Was reading a similar sci-fi the other day where the protagonist followed the same path.


Involvement of cousins - nice touch. 👍🏼


At this point, I am rather suspicious about Veer than Rudra. But let's wait for your reveal. 😎


Can't wait for the next chapters.

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Let's just say, this chapter was wort the wait. 👏 👏 👏

I'm really glad. 🤗 🤗 🤗

I know by now you might have given me the nickname of tape-recorder 😛 that I keep on repeating some things but seriously yaar, the resemblance to the original characters - even their mannerism is amazing!!! 👏 👏 👏

Nope I haven't given you the nickname of tape recorder. 😛

Well, as I always say, I try my level best to maintain the resemblance to the original characters... And I am glad that I am somewhat successful in that...

Daivik killing herself to stop Antakasur - it was a nice touch. Was reading a similar sci-fi the other day where the protagonist followed the same path.

Which book??

Well, I thought that there are only a few reasons why Nishant will hide the information, one of them being if Pia's life being in danger. So, I gave this reason...

Involvement of cousins - nice touch. 👍🏼

As usual, I like the cousins so I involved them too...

At this point, I am rather suspicious about Veer than Rudra. But let's wait for your reveal. 😎

Smart!! 😎

Can't wait for the next chapters.

Will try to update the next part as soon as possible... 😊

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I'm really glad. 🤗 🤗 🤗

🤗 🤗 🤗


Nope I haven't given you the nickname of tape recorder. 😛

I am glad. 😆


Well, as I always say, I try my level best to maintain the resemblance to the original characters... And I am glad that I am somewhat successful in that...

Not somewhat, you are hugely successful here. 👏


Which book??

Fiha Shomikoron (Fiha's Equation) by a native writer. It was about time travelling and how a scientist (Fiha) wanted to go back to the past to stop a particular incident that had endangered human civilization. But then he realizes that the moment he'll crack the equation, he'll be stopped and using his knowledge a robot will be sent to past to ensure that incident occurs. So he commits suicide. 😭 😭 😭


Well, I thought that there are only a few reasons why Nishant will hide the information, one of them being if Pia's life being in danger. So, I gave this reason...

As usual, I like the cousins so I involved them too...

👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼


Smart!! 😎

I'll try to imagine it in Piya's style. 😎 😛


Will try to update the next part as soon as possible... 😊

All the best! 👍🏼

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Not somewhat, you are hugely successful here. 👏

Thanks... 🤗


Fiha Shomikoron (Fiha's Equation) by a native writer. It was about time travelling and how a scientist (Fiha) wanted to go back to the past to stop a particular incident that had endangered human civilization. But then he realizes that the moment he'll crack the equation, he'll be stopped and using his knowledge a robot will be sent to past to ensure that incident occurs. So he commits suicide. 😭 😭 😭

Is it the one written by Humayun Ahmed?

I just saw one English translation 'Equation Fiha' on amazon.in when I was searching for some books to ask as a birthday gift and I had zeroed down on this as well as a few others...

Is that the one??


I'll try to imagine it in Piya's style. 😎 😛

Sure... I was myself saying this in her style while typing. 😎 😛


All the best! 👍🏼

Thanks... 🤗

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Is it the one written by Humayun Ahmed?

I just saw one English translation 'Equation Fiha' on amazon.in when I was searching for some books to ask as a birthday gift and I had zeroed down on this as well as a few others...

Is that the one??

Yes, it's that one. I guess I just spoiled the story unintentionally.



Sure... I was myself saying this in her style while typing. 😎 😛

🤣 🤣 🤣

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Yes, it's that one. I guess I just spoiled the story unintentionally.

Koi baat nahi... After all, you weren't aware that I was thinking about buying that same book. 😊

Waise, which genre of books do you read the most?

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Waise, which genre of books do you read the most?

I used to read sci-fi a lot when I was in school. By the time I went to college, I started reading novels of the same sci-fi writer (Md. Zafar Iqbal) and other famous novelists of my country. Humayun Ahmed is one of them. Some I read randomly when friends suggested me.

At this point, I have lost the habit which I am really ashamed of. But I like novels where they show layers. Some of Humayun Ahmed's novels are great in that sense. But lately I feel even he had a trend. 😛

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