New Os Rudhita (Rishton ki pariksha)

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New Os Rudhita ( Rishton ki pariksha)
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After the difficult journey, Rudhita reached choudhary mansion early morning.
Anirudh : Chalo dhiyaan se utaro. Haath do apna.
Bondita: Pati babu pehle meri potli ko utaro phir mujhe warna meri gudiya chooth gayi toh.
Anirudh: smiles..Theek hai Lao. Ab tum dheere se utaro.
Bondita: Got down. Pati babu kya zindagi bar mujhe yahin rehna padega, mujhe apni maa, sampoorna Didi, mama, mami ki bahut yaad aarahi hai. (With little tears in eyes)
Anirudh: Aaise zaroori nahi hota ki hum zindagi bar ek hi jage pe rahe. Jaise jaise hamari zaroorate, Umar, aur kuch kar dikhana ka jazba hota hum apne tikhane badalte rahete hain aur badalna padta hai. (Bends down towards her, wiped her tears) aur hum tumhare maa ke ghar zald chalenge. Theek hai. Ab andar chalo.
Bondita: Sachiii!!! (Jumps with smile). Chalo.
Secretly,saudamini is peeping and sneaking out those rudhita convo. But couldn't recognize what's happening and to whom anirudh is talking
She became restless and decided to go Chaodhary mansion.
when rudhita are about to enter the mansion, there they hears a huge shout.
Trilochan: wahi Rukh jao anirudh. Wahi Rukh jao. (Expressing his anger towards them)
Binoy: Aakhir tumne wohi kiya jo tum karna chatein tei. Le aye iss gawar, bin baap ki ladki ko yahan pe, kyu?? Aacha nahi kiya tumne anirudh, aacha nahi kiya. You have to pay for your useless and foolish deeds. Tumhe apne fitoor ka hisaab zaroor chukana hoga. Dekh Lena.
Trilochan: Binoy 😠... Thodi der chup raho. Mujhe baat karne do. Anirudh tumne socha bhi hai ki tumhare iss faisle se tumhari, saudamini aur iss ladki ki zindagi mein Kaisa badlaav ayega? Socha hai tumne?
Anirudh: kaka, agar badlaav aache ke liye ho to, hamein uss badlaav ko suwikaar kar Lena chahiye. Nahi??
Binoy: Aacha, iss badlaav ke saath, tumne saudamini ko chodh diya, Apne pyar ki jagah iss ladki ko dedi, saudamini ki jagah iss gawar ko Rakh diya tumne, sharam nahi aarahi tumhe??
(Saudamini is hearing all these things while standing outside the mansion in a secretive manner)
Anirudh: Baba, maine saudamini ko nahin chodha, bas mere naseeb ne mere pyaar ka saath nahi diya. Aur rahi baat bondita ki toh, woh yahan saudamini ki jagah nahin balke meri zimmedari ban ke aayi hai, zimmedari ban ke rahegi, zindagi bar.. Aur ek baat aap sab kaan kholke sun lijiye, "Bondita Mera fitoor nahin hai, aur na hoga".
Binoy: Bewakoof ladke, yeh jo bhi baatein tum Josh mein kar rahe hona, sunne mein aachi hai, par isse nibhana utna hi mushkil. Dekhna ek din tumhare yeh Josh, yeh fitoor harega aur saath mein tum bhi. Dekh Lena. 😠😡
Trilochan: Laughs.. Zimmedari laughs again.. Tum jise apni zimmedari keh rahe ho, wo duniya aur samaaj ke hisaab se tumhari patni hai anirudh. Kya de sakte ho use wo aadhikar tum? Batao? Kyu jawaab mushkil hai ya phir jawaab nahi hai tumhare pass?
Anirudh: Nahi yeh meri patni nahi hai, yeh meri zimmedari hai. Aur rahi baat samaaj aur duniya ki mujhe iss ki koi parwa nahi hai, jinko jo samaj na hai samje, iss rishte ko jo Naam Dena hai, de... Par Maine bhi thaanli hai ke iss samaj ka nazarya ko main badlaunga.
Bondita: Btw bondita looks confused as what's happening around? She couldn't figure out. She asked directly,
Aap sab ladrahe ho? Par kyu? Ghar mein ladna manaa hai na? Aur pati babu yeh dono sasurji mujhe gawar ke Naam se kyu Bula rahe hai? . Mere Naam toh bondita hai na? Kyu bulgaye kya? Mujhe bhookh bhi lagi hai? Aap logon ki baatein kab khatam hogi??
(As soon as saudamini heard pati babu from Bondita's mouth, she couldn't stop her frustration and emotions which bursts out with tears)
Somnath: Oye! Chup Karo.. Hukum aur farmaish to aaise kar rahi ho jaise ke..
Anirudh: Interrupts som, with great displeasure. Yeh konsa tarika hai ek bachi se baat karne ka?
Batuk : Kyu, tumhe hamesha khane ke siwa kuch soch tha nahi kya? Hamesha khana, hamesha bhukh?
Bondita : Tumhe kyu bura lag raha hai? Main to sirf khana maang rahi Hoon.. Maa kehti hai khana bhagwan deta hai. Aur bhagwan kisii ko bhukha nahi rakhta. Samaj mein aayi kuch baat..
Batuk : lekin yahan to sirf bhagwan ki moorti rehti hai, bhagwan nahi. Samaji kuch . .. Laughs.
Bondita : Maa kehti hai pati hi bhagwan hai... Toh hai na mere pati babu mere bhagwan? Kyu? Toh khana mujhe woh dhenge jaise lassi peelayi thi subeh Wahan...
Batuk : Anirudh Dada.. Apne iss ladki ko lassi peelayi, kyu? Mere liye kyu nahi laye??
Anirudh : He feels how this child has been feed up with unbelievable , illogical and superstitious beliefs... Ab tum dono ladna ban Karo. Bihari kaka, aap bondita ko kuch khiladi dijiye.Bondita kaka ke saath jao aur kuch khalo.Aur batuk tum bhi jaake khelo.
Bihari kaka : Aayiye Malkin. Aaaa....mera matlab hai Bahu Rani chaliye.
Trilochan : Gives an angry and pissed look to bihari... Malkin!!! Waah! Ab yeh dinn dekhna bakhi reh Gaye thei. Kya kya nahi socha tha tumhe lekhe, leikin tumne saari ummedon pe paani pher diya anirudh.
Soon after hearing this entire convo, Saudamini went back to her home.
Binoy : Na sirf ummedon par hamare armaano, izzat, khandan aur hamare parvarish ka sar jukha diya tumne. Tumse yeh umeed nahi thi..
Anirudh : kya kisii ki jaan bachana Galati hai baba? Kya kisii maa ki lachari ko phana Dena Galati hai baba? Kya kisii ki ujadne wali zindagi ko sambhalna Galati hai baba? Kya kisii benaam rishte ko zimmedari ka Naam Dena Galati hai? Bataiye? Bataiye na baba? Kyu Jawaab nahi hai aap ke pass? Boliye..
Binoy : Anirudhhhhh... He Shouted aloud with anger. Tum humse sawaal Karo itni jurrat nahi honi chahiye tumhari. Aur tumhare sawaalon ka Jawaab do yeh zaroori nahi aur na main zaroori samajta Hoon. Ab faisla tumhei karna hai... Parivaar ya wo ladki...Tumhe hum dono mein se kisii ek ko choon na hoga.
Anirudh : Baba... Meri
Binoy : Interrupts him...Anirudh Yeh parivaar yaa phir wo ladki?
Anirudh : Baba kya yeh aap ka aakhiri faisla hai?
Binoy : Parivaar yaa wo ladki anirudh? He asked rudely.
Trilochan : Binoy... Yeh Sab
Binoy : Again interrupts, mein chahata Hoon ke mere iss faisle mein koi dakhal na de. Anirudh hum tumhare faisla ka intezaar kar rahe hain.
Anirudh : Baba aap sab , yeh parivaar mere jeene ki wajah hai, meri thaqat hai, Mera wajood hai..( As Binoy begins smirk a little, )
Leikin.... He starts with firm voice.
Binoy : leikin kya? ? Asks with haste and anger
Anirudh : Main apne wajood ko bachane ke liye, apni zimmedari se mooh nahi pher sakta baba.
Trilochan, Binoy, som left in shock as they heard his decision.
Binoy : Ohh! To tum iss ladki ke liye hum sab ko chodh sakte ho... Kya yeh tumhare aakhiri faisla hai??
Anirudh: Maine kisii ko nahi chodha baba, bas meri kismat ne Mera saath chodh diya. Aap ka beta Hoon, jab aap apne faisle mein atal hai to main kaise chukh sakta Hoon. Haan yeh Mera antim faisla hai.
Binoy : Toh hamare bhi ek antim faisla sunlo. Main Binoy Roy choudhary tumhei apne Naam, khandan, yeh Ghar aur apni virasat se nikaal pekhta Hoon... Aaj se tum na hamare bete ho aur na hum tumhare baap... Aaj se tum Roy choudhary nahi ho. Jao ek Saadaran zindagi jee ke dhikao anirudh. Sabit karke dikhao ke tumhare yeh fitoor, yeh pagalpan, yeh faisla Sahi hai. Jao anirudh, jao.. Hum tumhei azaad karte hai..
(Everyone shocked and shattered to hear binoy's verdict.)
Anirudh : Is actually shattered and disappointed with his father's gestures and verdict.
Kya yeh bhi ek jinaoti hai baba? Agar yeh jinaoti hai to mujhe yeh challenge manzoor hai... Main apke iss faisle ko bhi suwikaarta Hoon. Niraash nahi hone dunga apko. Main apne faisle ko Sacha sabit zaroor Karunga..
Trilochan : Bas Karo tum dono. Yeh kya pagalpan hai. Koi kahin nahi jayega. Abhi main, iss ghar ka Malik zinda Hoon... Samajhe tum log..
Anirudh : jaane dijiye na kaka.. Ab faisla ho chuka hai to, ise pura karne ka bhi ashirvaad de dijiye. ( with a depressed smile, walked towards his room)
Trilochan : Anirudh, Anirudh... He shouted aloud but of no use.
Binoy : Koi faida nahi hai ab. Karne dijiye use jo karna hai. Jab thokar khayega na to aqal thikhana ayegi, aur tab yeh fitoor aur pagalpan sab khatam ho jayega... Main jaanta Hoon wo nahi kar payega..
Somnath : leikin baba, Dada kahan jayegen, kaise rehenge us pagal ladki ke saath. Baba Dada ko rokhlo na.. Please ( He showed his displeasure by sobbing hard)
Anirudh : Quickly packed his bags, left his room with tears and displeasure. He is now marching towards bondita who is pleasantly happy here and having good delicious food for the first ever time in life enjoying every bite of it..
He feels really bad to disrupt the little kid having her food. But he have to do so as no other option left for him.
Bondita.... He interrupts. Apna saaman baand lo jaldi se. Jao...
Bondita : pati babu pehle khana to khatam kar loon mein.. Bahut aacha khana khilate hai kaka.
Bihari : chote Malik khane to dijiye..
Anirudh : Nahin... Hamein abhi chalna hoga.. Apna saaman baand lo.
Bondita : Hum kahin jaa rahe hai kya? Leikin hum abhi to aaye hai, phir kahan jaa rahe hai? Maa ke paas? Kahan jaa rahe hum pati babu???
Anirudh : Ek alag duniya mein, Ek naya safar Thai karne, Ek naya itihaas rachne, Ek nayi dhor banane.. Do Gi mera saath??
Bondita : Zaroor dungi.... (Smiles)
( "Rishta Tera Mera plays........ ")

To be continued.......
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Honestly , you are a great playwright. Just keep there actions [,like :BONDITA:(confused) Anirudh Babu (stands up) hum kahan jaa rahe Hain ?? ]in bracket. The Hindi was point on , no spell-mistakes , great dialogues , amazing emotions !!

This whole thing has the capability of making people happy !!! Your work has its own exsistence !!!

Keep up the good work !!!

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Thanks friend. Share your opinions na if possible.
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Originally posted by: nancy56

Honestly , you are a great playwright. Just keep there actions [,like :BONDITA:(confused) Anirudh Babu (stands up) hum kahan jaa rahe Hain ?? ]in bracket. The Hindi was point on , no spell-mistakes , great dialogues , amazing emotions !!

This whole thing has the capability of making people happy !!! Your work has its own exsistence !!!

Keep up the good work !!!

Heh, friend. Your are the one who always encourages me.. Your words are energy booster to my work. And thank you so much for your valuable suggestions. It will help me a lot. Thanks yaar. Next work will be soon. I am glad you liked it. ❤😘 love you.
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Thank you friend. I am glad you like it.
Edited by Home786 - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Wonderful OS

You have penned very nicely each and every character dialogues and expression. Loved it

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Originally posted by: Chit15

Wonderful OS

You have penned very nicely each and every character dialogues and expression. Loved it

Thank you 💕 so much dear. I am happy you liked it. Any suggestions for next part?
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Great one it was

Loved aniruddh's determination

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Originally posted by: Home786

Thank you 💕 so much dear. I am happy you liked it. Any suggestions for next part?

I don't know it will happen in serial but I feel if someone comes as friend or guide for Anirudh for his further journey.

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Originally posted by: Laalchi_Reader

Great one it was

Loved aniruddh's determination

Thank you friend. I am glad you liked my work.

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