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Posted: 6 years ago
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Thanks so much Smita for your lovely words

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Part 1:

What an amazing start Sumi👌👌superbly exciting. I just loved SR pointing his index towards her & fisted towards his heart, just visualized Vj on the scene 😍😍💘💘& her saying "Gunda" & "Sabkuch" & clasping the books close to her heart, was fantastic👌👌💓💓. But It seems both were unaware of their actual feelings towards each other.

I liked that you kept the characters similar with the show except the place & the livelihood of the villagers, it's been easy for us to connect👍. The autocratic ruler KN with his insidious character, from whose ruthlessness not only the helpless villagers but his 4yrs old child don't escape 😔 . But I loved the most that Suraj stopped crying while he heard the baby's cry & how coincidentally the baby too stopped crying when he held her hand, the way he was saved by her from stinging of the ant😁😁❤❤, both were happy with each other, his anger for not seeing her, her smile, feels he is nearby, so beautiful❤❤, this is called the soul connection. But in order to get his father's attention, he has made himself arrogant & rude. It's quite interesting update, increased my excitement. The precap is more intriguing, her wishing to study ,solved the problem that no one could solve, his keeping gun at the invigilator's chest at the age of 12, surprising , eagerly waiting for the next update. Thank you😊😊

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Lovely start sumi😍😍😍❤❤❤getting the feel of udaan.....

Waiting for the journey to unfold.... how they realize their feelings for each other, the ups and downs will surely make a good read....

Precap interesting as usual. Waiting waiting

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: 77nikita

Lovely start sumi😍😍😍❤❤❤getting the feel of udaan.....

Waiting for the journey to unfold.... how they realize their feelings for each other, the ups and downs will surely make a good read....

Precap interesting as usual. Waiting waiting

Niki 😍😍🤗🤗🤗

Udaaan hai 🙈🙈🙈

Their journey yess let's see how it goes... Trying to twine some socioeconomic issue too.

Bit scared but all your encouragement will sail me through.

Waiting wait wait till next week..

Weekly update 😜

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Thanks for the lovely words Sritama

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So happy that u decided to continue eye my girl..nd d beginning is so promising nd engrossing👏👏got d quintessential Udaan vibes❤ Chakor proudly smiling n saying Suraj Rajvanshi,Sabkuch😍❤thn calling him gunda❤ both of dem feel their strong soul connection for each other bt it seems both of dem r in denial..dey r just unaware abt their own feelings.. ruthless KN was exactly d same like d way he was in Udaan..KN,small Suraj n d gun scene made me so nostalgic..Sukor's soul connection from d v beginning 😍❤ Suraj stopped crying d moment he heard her cry..Chakor happily smiling holding his hands ❤❤❤d heart to heart connection dey shared💘💘it was so endearing❤❤can't wait to see how d entire saga unfolds..a blockbuster rollercoaster ride is in store for us that's for sure😊bring it on❤

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Thanks sush for the lovely comment.

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Thank you so much for these beautiful sukor stories and updates 😍. I left the forum after Ragkor track started. Though many love Ragkor as its played by Meejay, i couldn't like them as for me its sukor forever ❤️. These stories bringing back those happy memories of sukor. The k jodi story is exactly the track I wanted see in udaan. You have written so well😍. Loved reading it❤️.

And i always love Suraj's obsession over chakor which portrayed so well in Eye my Girl😍.loved chakor's reply 'sabkuch'. Eagerly waiting for the updates and more stories on Sukor❤️. Most importantly i love the titles you give it to the stories. It's so perfect! 💖

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Posted: 6 years ago
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PART II

The vacuum…… the anger………..

She was eight……Years rolled fast…………………………

He was leaving for school……………..

She was dragged to the bungalow to do the household work with the workers.

She was crying as the chains were paining…...

He did not see her… after the day in the basti when she was two years…

He did not feel anything tender after that day.

The vaccuuum created turned into anger, arrogancy…

All were scared of him……… chota maalik…. Got into him.

But…………..

He once asked Raam Singh…. Where is that baby?? You said she is mine? Yes Raam singh said all bandhuvas are maaliks belonging…

Aap tho chota maalik so she is yours… Mine…… she is in the basti….??

Whats her name……………………… Cha……. Before he could hear called the Evil.. Suraj… Surajjjj…

Haan papa he ran……………….

What are you doing???? go to school….

Not that the evil wants his son to study well but just that his rival politician’s children are studying for the sake of prestige he wanted him to go…

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She was made to do the cleaning…and help the workers there. Indeed she did and would stay in the shed listening to the teacher who was teaching Suraj private tuition, but he would not bother anything and she could not see him either as she was in her shed or with the workers.

She would walk around the basti and notice that the villagers were doing lot of handicrafts as Rajasthan was famous for its hand embroidery but the villagers were made to buy the silk thread from the Evil and hence had to give their finished goods to them at a menial price and had to be ever debted to the influential family.

She was smart and would help those around her with her wisely actions and she was fast in her pace too.

It was a day of kite flying and the villagers were called together. The media was there as the politician wanted to project to the outside world that he is very kind and takes care of his village…. Fearing him none would raise voice against him and the poor stomach feasts only on such rare occasions.

There was an event management guy and many games were conducted…. Katju the 12 year old was playing along with the boys marble game when Suraj tried to take the same away asking them to get away as he wanted to play there…. Katju was not accepting it and Suraj tried to hit the boy when his hands were held. He turned around to see…… a small girl with a faded frock, loose and unoiled hair, with a spark in her eyes and with firm face was holding his hands with hers. Ruko.. she said firm holding his hand tight….she was looking into his eyes and so was he….

Itni himmat…. You are stopping me?…. Do you know who am I? he asked…. Nahi…. par yeh tho patha hai… thu gundagiri kar rahey ho… you can play at a different place. There is lot of place she said. Chup he shouted… Raam sigh and the other workers came running when the media too turnedits camera. KN quickly said Suraj beta its ok they all are our kids let them play.. He smiled irritated at the little girl and told jao jao kelo….. She left his hand………….

He was all the more angry….. but he felt a bit breezed… that hand was indeed tender but firm… Raam singh shouted at Chakor and said yeh Chakor hatt…. Chote maalik maaf kardijiyeh… yeh bandhuva chori … Raam Singh hn KN shouted trying to cover up before the media…

He did not hear anything but just that word Chakor and he was touching his hands… tender but anger came back and the embarrassment…. How dare you stop me… you are a bandhuva and MINE he said..

She was pulled aside by the workers… she asked kaaka woh kaun hai…. One of them said Chakoriyaa… who hamara Chota maalik.. Suraj Rajvanshi aur Maalik hamaraliye subkuch…,,,,. Hamara SABKUCH??….she smirked and said but woh bura she told to herself but the momentshe saw the food platter she forgot everything and ran to have it along with her Mai and Baap who had come to see her…. She ran to them hugging them…

It was a final gathering before the media for the day… A general question answering was done when the event management guy announced that those who answer right will be given whatever gift they want by the Maalik, though he was against but had to nod his head in front of the media. Many general knowledge questions. Few were answered and those asked for some goodies or clothes which were given but many were left loud. He asked a final question…

He said I will not repeat but only once I will say….Let me see who answer this question.

He said…. imagine you all are going to a fair in a bus whichwill stop and take people and many will get down too. All shouted in rejoice as if they were really going to the fair… he said listen listen …and quickly continued in the first stopping two get down and four get in. The next stopping five get in and three get down. your maalik is in the drivers seat. Third stopping 7 get in and 3 get down. there is a turning and in the turning four get down and eight get in (by this time the crowd was quickly engrossed with how many were getting in and getting out) and many were loosing track. He said there is big dam and and tell me the drivers age while in that stopping 8 get in and 4 get down and up and down the hill it goes and reaches the fair. . All calculated and said various numbers…...

Came a voice from behind….Maalik aapka umar kya hai….. the whole crowd turned to her… jittering yeh chori why are you asking Maalik’s age…. Chup…. KN could not understand and was perplexed Yeh chori but he could not shout so he smiling at the media said bacchi asking some playful question when she said … nai maalik aap bathayeeyenaa He said very reluctantly 40…

She turned to the event guy and said Bhaiyaaa driver ka umar chaalees.. All were startled…. Kyaaa. Haaan Maalik is in the driver seat so the driver’s age is Maalik’s age naaa. All were surprised at the same time stunned… KN was equally stunned…. Suraj for the first time looked at her.

KN said in front of everyone wah wah hamara basti ka chori bahut samajdaar hai. Bolo kya chahiyee. Meetayee, kilonaaa bol bol..

She stood up and said hamey school jana chaahiyeee! All were stumped…. Kya

She smiled at KN with her innocent smile……haan Maalik hame padna hai….

The media present were asking him .. KNji please tell us will you give education to this girl from your village.

The wicked had no alternative but to nod yes… haan I will take care.. with venom in his eyes.

He did not want any from the village to study to know about the outside world.

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She held her mouth….saw the man shiver while being stabbed…Maa she slowly told with her eyes wide open… she pushed something….

They chased her…. She ran ran………………..

He saw the shed from his window… She was here but I didn’t know…she is gone…. But she is MINE. He broke the things.

She emerged as the winner of the Marathon for under fourteen ………………

She stepped into the new high school ………….. to do her 10th through the school……………….

He kept the gun on the invigilators chest and said If I don’t pass the 12th None will…………………

Kill him for I need the position, power, I can win only through ………………..

He was standing there………………………. She applied the black color on him………………….

He grabbed her……………….. what are you doing? he shouted……who are you ?……………….Chup she said ekdam chup…………..she closed his mouth.

Tender....

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Thanks so much Smita for the quick one. Relieves me a lot that the story is relatable.

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It's a superb, fantastic update Sumi👍👍. So sukor had not seen each other for 6 years & both were unaware of being in the same house. It's sad that in the place of his soft feelings & gentle behavior his anger, stubbornness & arrogance took place 😔 😔 . KN & his selfish love wanted to send Suraj to school but for the sake of his prestige 😡 .

Loved Chakor's benevolent attitude, the defendant entity, set her apart from the others ❤❤. Her protest against Suraj's wrongdoings by holding his hand, her wearing a faded frock but the spark in her eyes couldn't be hidden which didn't unnoticed by suraj 😊😊. Her touch made him feel the tenderness again after years😊 but his ego & embarrassment obscured his feelings 😕. So the villagers taught her that KN & family are their "Sabkuch" & Suraj was taught from an early age that every bonded labour were in their possession, their own & the words lodged in their mind without knowing each other's feeling.

Loved the puzzle (it was so nice dear 👌👌) & her deftly answering, her speaking of her needs fearlessly about giving her a chance to education 😉😉 & KN had no choice but to give his consent in public 😁😁. Thoroughly enjoyed this part. Precap is excitatory & intriguing. My excitement & interest are increasing. Looking forward to seeing how the story develops. Keep it up 👍. Thank you.

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Posted: 6 years ago
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As usual dhamaka again👏👏👏

The brilliant chakor, arrogant suraj, evil KN.... everything made me nostalgic..... and sabkuch is going to acquire another colour that I know ❤❤❤ I am waitinggggggg

....precap is intriguing......DO IT FAST!!

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: 77nikita

As usual dhamaka again👏👏👏

The brilliant chakor, arrogant suraj, evil KN.... everything made me nostalgic..... and sabkuch is going to acquire another colour that I know ❤❤❤ I am waitinggggggg

....precap is intriguing......DO IT FAST!!

Niki😍😍🤗🤗🤗

Yes this story is making a bit rake as its related to the show but want it a different too. And we all love to hate KN so trying to bringing him..

The other meaning 🙈🙈🙈

What fast uggghhhh i have given two.

Tata ta for now

😍😍😍😘

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Amazing update

Loved how Chakor used to listen to Suraj and his tutors.

Fiery reunion meeting and even when he's angry, Suraj felt something ❤️.

Smart Chakor got the question right and embarrassed KN.

Intriguing precap, can't wait to read the next chapter.

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