Sasurji aye sasural.. puchhne Akhira ke haal

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Ira was feeling a little awkward as it has almost never happened after her marriage that she is staying in another room and most importantly without Akhilesh when it seems everything is normal in between them. Moti ba was massaging her head with loads of oil and love, she is liking it too but she is occupied with the thought that what Akhilesh is doing with her Pappa or rather what her papa is doing with Akhilesh. While enjoying the hair massage she was thinking their journey together all the sweet sour up and downs and she paused & shivered at the thought of the night at the roof. Lately so many things are happening that she almost forget about that. Thinking of Akhilesh on his knees and all heart shaped petal decoration she chuckled and looked at the mirror finding that Pushpa is looking straight to her and smiling silently. As if she was caught red handed she was feeling shy and lowered her eyes.

Pushpa then tying her hair and said lovingly

P: Arrey e ma sharmane ki kauno baat nehi hai bitiya ... aisa hota hai ... pati patni ka rishta hi aisa hai ... kachhu din pehle jinko jante bhi nehi the wohi sabse apna ho jata hai. ... yaad aati hai bitiya ...

I: nehi to moti ba.. main pandey ji ko yaad nehi kar rahi thi...

P: achha ...

They both laughed ... Pushpa suddenly announced that she is too tired and wants a deep sleep so if someone is not feeling sleepy he / she can roam around in the garden or in the roof may be. Then she went to sleep. Ira was smiling looking herself in mirror with a totally new hair style and thinking about how lovely a lady Pushpa is. Though she is all eager to get a glimpse of Akhilesh but feeling a little hesitant about what to do. Since last two days pappa is continuously stick to Akhilesh.

P: arrey bitiya aur thori pani la ke rakh dena mujhe thori jyada pani pine ki adat hai na ... thik hai ... subhratri ..

Ira switched off the light and came out of the room. Now she is feeling all shy and wondering about her feelings. How can she go to her room ... oh .. means Akhilesh's room. She was going up slowly with heartbeat increasing and find the light is on, she knocked lightly and entered the room. Akhilesh is massaging his pappa's feet. Both are looking at each other with a content smile in their faces and at that moment they realised that yes they were missing each other terribly and now after seeing each other they are feeling something within themselves.

B: arrey Ira beta tu kea kar rahi idhar.

I: wo pappa... wo ... wo .. main...

A: brush lene ayi hai na ...

I: han .. han .. wohi ...

She moved towards the bathroom thereafter she opened the cupboard and stand there as if looking for something. Then she called Akhilesh and muttered meet me at terrace and then wish good night to her pappa and get out of the room.

Ira is waiting for Akhilesh in the terrace and Akhilesh is like why she called at this moment what if Ballav uncle comes to know and blah blah ... but he can't resist himself so he went for terrace.

Though it's not full moon but plenty of moonlight in the terrace and Ira is unmindful of Akhilesh's arrival and playing a soft romantic song (lag ja gale ke phir ye haseen raat ho na ho ...) in her phone in low volume. Akhilesh was watching Ira from distance mesmerizingly. Ira feel something and find Akhilesh is standing there looking straight at her. She signed him to come near when Akhilesh came close she kept her head on his arm and both of them standing there silently enjoying the atmosphere moon & the music & their togetherness.

Suddenly Akhilesh remembered about Ira's father and she distanced himself from Ira.

I: Kea hua...

A: Kuchh nehi.. aap bolie aise kahe hume bulaye yeha ...

I: kyun tumko achha nehi lag raha hai

A: nehi nehi aisi kauno baat nehi hai... wo to hum babuji ... matlab Ballav chacha ke bare me soch rahe the.

I: wo ha wo baat bhi thi ... suno tum na pappa se darna mat .. aur tumhe wo kuchh ulta sidha bole to chupchap mat rehna ...

A: arrey ye aap kea bol rahe hai ... wo babuji hai aapke ...

I: hya to mere pappa hai to mujhe dante na ... tumhe kyun kuchh bolenge... Aur tumne kia kea hai

A: arrey Ira ji mujhe kauno farak nehi parta hai unke datne se ..

I: par Akhilesh mujhe to farak parta hai na .. mujhe ekdam achha nehi lagta hai jab koi tumko ya pappa tumko itni bante sunate hai to

A: kyun ...

Small eyelock

I: suno tum meri ek baat suno pappa tumko kuchh bhi bolenge to tum unhe mujhse baat karne ke lie kehna ... bhole bhandari banke khare khare sab dant mat kha lena ...

A: (with a smile) arrey itna to haq banta hai unka akhir mere hanikarak biwi ke pappa hai .. to sasur ji ko itni chhut di ja sakti hai.

I: oh ... MHB... hya

A: arrey aap ko mera rog lag gaya kea??

Ira astonished and looking at Akhilesh

I: hya...keya... kaun sa rog...

Akhilesh comes near Ira and said aapko nehi pata ...

Ira lowered her eyes ... Akhilesh comes closer then said arrey prabachan dene ka... kyun aapko kea laga.

They both laughed. Then Akhilesh asked why you called me here at this time.

I: kyun tumhe itna bura lag raha hai kea... to jao

A: nehi nehi hum aise kab bole ...

There after they have chatted for some more time. Akhilesh teases Ira for her today's hair style but also declared that he likes Ira in every attire & getup (slip of tongue).

Then ...

I: what was in the gift that you were giving me that day ... I didn't find it later.

A: (in mind:- main to khud ko hi bhet kar raha tha aapko .. ) tha kuch khas nehi ...

I: wo hai kaha pe ... mujhe mili hi nehi rahi hai

A: chhoriye na ... aap u sab chhoriye ... aap apne aur apne babuji ke sapno pe dhyan dijiye.

I: tumhe pata hai mere sapno ke bare me kuchh bhi..

Akhilesh was about to say something but find that Ballav has come to the terrace and looking at them angrily. Ira also followed Akhilesh's gaze and OMG...

B: yeah sab kea chal raha hai Ira

A: wo chacha ...

B: ek minute main tumse baat nehi kar raha hu ... mujhe apne beti se baat karne do..

A: ji hya jaroor... main to byas..

B: tum chup raho .. tum hote kaun ho hamare bich bolne wale..

I: Pappa byas ... hya.. aap hamesha Akhilesh ke sath aise kyun behave karte hai ke jaise ..

B: Achha to aab tu is gawar ke lie aapne pappa se juban larayegi ... he bhgaban ..

I: please pappa ...

A: arrey Ira ji ye aap kea bol rahe hai...

I: oh god dono chup rahiye please ... hya pappa aaj saaf saaf baat kar lete hain na ... bolie aapko kea problem hai pandey j... Akhilesh se... abhi to mera result bhi itna achha aya... mujhe har baat me support karte hain ye ... aur aapka kitna samman karte hai ... aur

B: tum dono ek hi sath ek hi kamre me kaise reh rahe ho... ek hi thali me khana ... aur jab dekho tab ...

I: pappa hum dono bahat ache dost hai ...

B: Ira ... dosti ka bhi ek dayera hota hai .. aur tumlog to pati patni ka natak kar rahe ho na.. shadi ki kuch maryada hote hai ... aur tumlog to

I: aapko pata nehi pappa ... par usdin hamare sachhi me

A: arrey Ira ji .. aap kea baat leke baith gaye

Ira gestures Akhilesh to shut up then prepared herself and holding her pappa's hand

I: pappa us din hum dono ke pure bidhi bidhan se shadi hui thi... I am lawfully weeded to Akhilesh...

Ballav was shocked and took a seat.

B: dekha main na kehta tha ke kaise main is gawar ki baton pe bharosa karu... dekha tune apni jidegi dao pe laga di..

I: pappa aapko achhi tarah se pata hai ke kisne kiski jindegi ke sath kea kia ... aur aap ye har waqt gawar kise bolte rehte hai ... and then Ira counted few of many good things about Akhilesh that she did several times in past. He is a gem of a person pappa ... the girl who will get a place in his heart and life will be a damn lucky one. If you can't trust him then you should not trust anybody in this world not even your own daughter. Though we are husband wife but we are maintaining a very nice bond of mutual respect, genuine care and a very beautiful friendship which I don't want to lose in any circumstances... you have stayed here to keep an eye on both of us ... right ... aur aur

A: Ira ji byas byas.. aab chup ho jaie ... aap Ballav chacha ka chinta bhi to samajhie na ...

Ballav is feeling angry and stands up suddenly and thinking that this Akhilesh tricked Ira so much that my own daughter is not listening to me and what will happen to my daughter in future... all of them were silent for some time ... then

I: arrey pappa aap itne der khare mat rahiye pair ka dard aur bar jayega ...

Ballav & Akhilesh was like ... What is she saying ... then Ira with her eyes gestures towards the door and Devina was trying to hide herself ... Ballav again started acting and this time with the wrong foot. Devina silently excused herself from there ... Ira can guess that definitely she will go to Pushpa and say something like Ballav is also a liar like his daughter, there is no fracture, he is harassing Akhilesh for something ... blah blah ... Pushpa like always will accompany her to prove innocence of her bitiya Irawati...

I: keya pappa aap bhi na kabhi kabhi over acting kar dete hai ... aapko chot to right foot me lagi thi na..

B: kea kare dikra aab hum toh tumlogo ke tarah jhoot bolne me mahir nehi hai ne... tu mujhse itni bari baat chupai ...

I: arrey pappa abhi itna waqt nehi hai ... baad me sunenge... Devina madam aati hi hogi moti ba ko leke ... jaldi niche chalo ... aur ek baat aab se agar aapne hum dono pe shaq kia na to main ... to main ... aapke shaq ko yaqeen me badal dungi ...

While Ira was coming down hurriedly ... met Pushpa & Devina in the stairs ... as expected they enquired about Ballav ... Ira explained that as her father was feeling suffocated so they took him to the roof ... and now pappa want to rest so they are coming down ... Devina showed one video recording (she manage to click only the last portion) to them though sound was not clear but it can be clearly seen that something dramatic emotional thing is happening between Ira & her pappa ... Ira was dumb folded for some time ... as usual Akhilesh came to her rescue carrying Ira's pappa ...

A: amma u ka hai ke ... sasur ji aur Ira ji mil ke humko ek abhinay dikha rahe the ... aur uttejit ho kar wo khare ho gaye aur unka pair

I: thik ho gaya

A: aur fir dusre me moch agayi .. asal me do din baad achanak khare ho gaye na to dusri pair me jor par gaya aur chot lag gayi ... mujhe lagta hai inko abhi kuchh din aur rehna hoga yeha...

Ira looked at Akhilesh with an expression what was the need ...

A: sab thik ho jayega Ira ji aap chinta mat kijiye...

D: wo kaun sa drama tha Irawati bahu ...

I: ramayan se ... jaha pe sablog aa ke ram ji ko kehte hai sita ma ko chhor dene ke lie wo wala tha...

D: to ram ji ne chhor dia kea...

I: (with a confident big smile) mujhe is ghar ke ram ji ka to pata hai ... aur wo to kabhi bhi kuchh galat nehi karenge .. hai na nani ba...

P: arrey beta jao jao kaha ye pakpak ke baton me ulajh rahe ho ... samdhi ji ko kamre me le jao ...

A: ji .. ji amma ...

Ira then said good bye to pappa and told him that they will talk later and made him promise that he will not tell anything to Akhilesh for the night at least, she then called Akhilesh and asked him to accompany her for a glass of milk for pappa. Meantime Ballav is thinking within that he needs to keep more tight watch on them as they are married now and so fond of each other. He needs to talk with AKhilesh.

Ira put a sleeping pill in the milk and asked Akhilesh to give this milk to her father, so that both of them pappa & Akhilesh can rest peacefully.

I: aur tumhe itna ache banne ka bimari kyun hai ha ... lagta hai mujhe abhi is bimari ka ilaj karna parega ...

Akhilesh smiled.

I: mujhe gussa aa raha hai aur tum ...

A:arrey kahe itna tan tanae rehti hai aap ... thik hai na hum baat karenge Ballav chacha se ...

I: nehi tum kuchh baat nehi karoge ... promise karo (she holds his hand) .. jo bhi baat karni hai main karungi ... aur

P: o ri mori ganga maiya ... achha hai achha hai ... Pushpa entered laughingly ... Ira leaves his hand.

A: u amma hum o ... dudh lene aye the chacha ke lie... ja rahe hai abhi .. aap log bhi so jayie ...

P: so to jayenge bitwa ... par na jane nind kaise aayegi ... kyun bitiya ...

Ira shied. Akhilesh leaves.

P: ek kam karo bitiya kal tum Bhavik bitwa ko bula lo yeha ... o bhi to akela hai ghar pe ... aur fir kal se wo dono mehmano wale kamre me so jayenge aur tum apni jaga wapas ... kyun ...

I: su baat chhe moti ba (what an idea to save Akhilesh from pappa) ... smiled and hugged her tightly ...

P: e badmash ... chhoro chhoro .. ye pyaar kal ke lie bacha ke rakhho ... hum tumhri saas hai saas pati thori na hai ... Waise tumhare sar pe maine tel thori jyada hi dal di hai ... Gullu ke kapre dekh ke pata chale... ha ha ...

They both laughed loud and went to sleep.


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Bonai

Ira was feeling a little awkward as it has almost never happened after her marriage that she is staying in another room and most importantly without Akhilesh when it seems everything is normal in between them. Moti ba was massaging her head with loads of oil and love, she is liking it too but she is occupied with the thought that what Akhilesh is doing with her Pappa or rather what her papa is doing with Akhilesh. While enjoying the hair massage she was thinking their journey together all the sweet sour up and downs and she paused & shivered at the thought of the night at the roof. Lately so many things are happening that she almost forget about that. Thinking of Akhilesh on his knees and all heart shaped petal decoration she chuckled and looked at the mirror finding that Pushpa is looking straight to her and smiling silently. As if she was caught red handed she was feeling shy and lowered her eyes.

Pushpa then tying her hair and said lovingly

P: Arrey e ma sharmane ki kauno baat nehi hai bitiya ... aisa hota hai ... pati patni ka rishta hi aisa hai ... kachhu din pehle jinko jante bhi nehi the wohi sabse apna ho jata hai. ... yaad aati hai bitiya ...

I: nehi to moti ba.. main pandey ji ko yaad nehi kar rahi thi...

P: achha ...

They both laughed ... Pushpa suddenly announced that she is too tired and wants a deep sleep so if someone is not feeling sleepy he / she can roam around in the garden or in the roof may be. Then she went to sleep. Ira was smiling looking herself in mirror with a totally new hair style and thinking about how lovely a lady Pushpa is. Though she is all eager to get a glimpse of Akhilesh but feeling a little hesitant about what to do. Since last two days pappa is continuously stick to Akhilesh.

P: arrey bitiya aur thori pani la ke rakh dena mujhe thori jyada pani pine ki adat hai na ... thik hai ... subhratri ..

Ira switched off the light and came out of the room. Now she is feeling all shy and wondering about her feelings. How can she go to her room ... oh .. means Akhilesh's room. She was going up slowly with heartbeat increasing and find the light is on, she knocked lightly and entered the room. Akhilesh is massaging his pappa's feet. Both are looking at each other with a content smile in their faces and at that moment they realised that yes they were missing each other terribly and now after seeing each other they are feeling something within themselves.

B: arrey Ira beta tu kea kar rahi idhar.

I: wo pappa... wo ... wo .. main...

A: brush lene ayi hai na ...

I: han .. han .. wohi ...

She moved towards the bathroom thereafter she opened the cupboard and stand there as if looking for something. Then she called Akhilesh and muttered meet me at terrace and then wish good night to her pappa and get out of the room.

Ira is waiting for Akhilesh in the terrace and Akhilesh is like why she called at this moment what if Ballav uncle comes to know and blah blah ... but he can't resist himself so he went for terrace.

Though it's not full moon but plenty of moonlight in the terrace and Ira is unmindful of Akhilesh's arrival and playing a soft romantic song (lag ja gale ke phir ye haseen raat ho na ho ...) in her phone in low volume. Akhilesh was watching Ira from distance mesmerizingly. Ira feel something and find Akhilesh is standing there looking straight at her. She signed him to come near when Akhilesh came close she kept her head on his arm and both of them standing there silently enjoying the atmosphere moon & the music & their togetherness.

Suddenly Akhilesh remembered about Ira's father and she distanced himself from Ira.

I: Kea hua...

A: Kuchh nehi.. aap bolie aise kahe hume bulaye yeha ...

I: kyun tumko achha nehi lag raha hai

A: nehi nehi aisi kauno baat nehi hai... wo to hum babuji ... matlab Ballav chacha ke bare me soch rahe the.

I: wo ha wo baat bhi thi ... suno tum na pappa se darna mat .. aur tumhe wo kuchh ulta sidha bole to chupchap mat rehna ...

A: arrey ye aap kea bol rahe hai ... wo babuji hai aapke ...

I: hya to mere pappa hai to mujhe dante na ... tumhe kyun kuchh bolenge... Aur tumne kia kea hai

A: arrey Ira ji mujhe kauno farak nehi parta hai unke datne se ..

I: par Akhilesh mujhe to farak parta hai na .. mujhe ekdam achha nehi lagta hai jab koi tumko ya pappa tumko itni bante sunate hai to

A: kyun ...

Small eyelock

I: suno tum meri ek baat suno pappa tumko kuchh bhi bolenge to tum unhe mujhse baat karne ke lie kehna ... bhole bhandari banke khare khare sab dant mat kha lena ...

A: (with a smile) arrey itna to haq banta hai unka akhir mere hanikarak biwi ke pappa hai .. to sasur ji ko itni chhut di ja sakti hai.

I: oh ... MHB... hya

A: arrey aap ko mera rog lag gaya kea??

Ira astonished and looking at Akhilesh

I: hya...keya... kaun sa rog...

Akhilesh comes near Ira and said aapko nehi pata ...

Ira lowered her eyes ... Akhilesh comes closer then said arrey prabachan dene ka... kyun aapko kea laga.

They both laughed. Then Akhilesh asked why you called me here at this time.

I: kyun tumhe itna bura lag raha hai kea... to jao

A: nehi nehi hum aise kab bole ...

There after they have chatted for some more time. Akhilesh teases Ira for her today's hair style but also declared that he likes Ira in every attire & getup (slip of tongue).

Then ...

I: what was in the gift that you were giving me that day ... I didn't find it later.

A: (in mind:- main to khud ko hi bhet kar raha tha aapko .. ) tha kuch khas nehi ...

I: wo hai kaha pe ... mujhe mili hi nehi rahi hai

A: chhoriye na ... aap u sab chhoriye ... aap apne aur apne babuji ke sapno pe dhyan dijiye.

I: tumhe pata hai mere sapno ke bare me kuchh bhi..

Akhilesh was about to say something but find that Ballav has come to the terrace and looking at them angrily. Ira also followed Akhilesh's gaze and OMG...

B: yeah sab kea chal raha hai Ira

A: wo chacha ...

B: ek minute main tumse baat nehi kar raha hu ... mujhe apne beti se baat karne do..

A: ji hya jaroor... main to byas..

B: tum chup raho .. tum hote kaun ho hamare bich bolne wale..

I: Pappa byas ... hya.. aap hamesha Akhilesh ke sath aise kyun behave karte hai ke jaise ..

B: Achha to aab tu is gawar ke lie aapne pappa se juban larayegi ... he bhgaban ..

I: please pappa ...

A: arrey Ira ji ye aap kea bol rahe hai...

I: oh god dono chup rahiye please ... hya pappa aaj saaf saaf baat kar lete hain na ... bolie aapko kea problem hai pandey j... Akhilesh se... abhi to mera result bhi itna achha aya... mujhe har baat me support karte hain ye ... aur aapka kitna samman karte hai ... aur

B: tum dono ek hi sath ek hi kamre me kaise reh rahe ho... ek hi thali me khana ... aur jab dekho tab ...

I: pappa hum dono bahat ache dost hai ...

B: Ira ... dosti ka bhi ek dayera hota hai .. aur tumlog to pati patni ka natak kar rahe ho na.. shadi ki kuch maryada hote hai ... aur tumlog to

I: aapko pata nehi pappa ... par usdin hamare sachhi me

A: arrey Ira ji .. aap kea baat leke baith gaye

Ira gestures Akhilesh to shut up then prepared herself and holding her pappa's hand

I: pappa us din hum dono ke pure bidhi bidhan se shadi hui thi... I am lawfully weeded to Akhilesh...

Ballav was shocked and took a seat.

B: dekha main na kehta tha ke kaise main is gawar ki baton pe bharosa karu... dekha tune apni jidegi dao pe laga di..

I: pappa aapko achhi tarah se pata hai ke kisne kiski jindegi ke sath kea kia ... aur aap ye har waqt gawar kise bolte rehte hai ... and then Ira counted few of many good things about Akhilesh that she did several times in past. He is a gem of a person pappa ... the girl who will get a place in his heart and life will be a damn lucky one. If you can't trust him then you should not trust anybody in this world not even your own daughter. Though we are husband wife but we are maintaining a very nice bond of mutual respect, genuine care and a very beautiful friendship which I don't want to lose in any circumstances... you have stayed here to keep an eye on both of us ... right ... aur aur

A: Ira ji byas byas.. aab chup ho jaie ... aap Ballav chacha ka chinta bhi to samajhie na ...

Ballav is feeling angry and stands up suddenly and thinking that this Akhilesh tricked Ira so much that my own daughter is not listening to me and what will happen to my daughter in future... all of them were silent for some time ... then

I: arrey pappa aap itne der khare mat rahiye pair ka dard aur bar jayega ...

Ballav & Akhilesh was like ... What is she saying ... then Ira with her eyes gestures towards the door and Devina was trying to hide herself ... Ballav again started acting and this time with the wrong foot. Devina silently excused herself from there ... Ira can guess that definitely she will go to Pushpa and say something like Ballav is also a liar like his daughter, there is no fracture, he is harassing Akhilesh for something ... blah blah ... Pushpa like always will accompany her to prove innocence of her bitiya Irawati...

I: keya pappa aap bhi na kabhi kabhi over acting kar dete hai ... aapko chot to right foot me lagi thi na..

B: kea kare dikra aab hum toh tumlogo ke tarah jhoot bolne me mahir nehi hai ne... tu mujhse itni bari baat chupai ...

I: arrey pappa abhi itna waqt nehi hai ... baad me sunenge... Devina madam aati hi hogi moti ba ko leke ... jaldi niche chalo ... aur ek baat aab se agar aapne hum dono pe shaq kia na to main ... to main ... aapke shaq ko yaqeen me badal dungi ...

While Ira was coming down hurriedly ... met Pushpa & Devina in the stairs ... as expected they enquired about Ballav ... Ira explained that as her father was feeling suffocated so they took him to the roof ... and now pappa want to rest so they are coming down ... Devina showed one video recording (she manage to click only the last portion) to them though sound was not clear but it can be clearly seen that something dramatic emotional thing is happening between Ira & her pappa ... Ira was dumb folded for some time ... as usual Akhilesh came to her rescue carrying Ira's pappa ...

A: amma u ka hai ke ... sasur ji aur Ira ji mil ke humko ek abhinay dikha rahe the ... aur uttejit ho kar wo khare ho gaye aur unka pair

I: thik ho gaya

A: aur fir dusre me moch agayi .. asal me do din baad achanak khare ho gaye na to dusri pair me jor par gaya aur chot lag gayi ... mujhe lagta hai inko abhi kuchh din aur rehna hoga yeha...

Ira looked at Akhilesh with an expression what was the need ...

A: sab thik ho jayega Ira ji aap chinta mat kijiye...

D: wo kaun sa drama tha Irawati bahu ...

I: ramayan se ... jaha pe sablog aa ke ram ji ko kehte hai sita ma ko chhor dene ke lie wo wala tha...

D: to ram ji ne chhor dia kea...

I: (with a confident big smile) mujhe is ghar ke ram ji ka to pata hai ... aur wo to kabhi bhi kuchh galat nehi karenge .. hai na nani ba...

P: arrey beta jao jao kaha ye pakpak ke baton me ulajh rahe ho ... samdhi ji ko kamre me le jao ...

A: ji .. ji amma ...

Ira then said good bye to pappa and told him that they will talk later and made him promise that he will not tell anything to Akhilesh for the night at least, she then called Akhilesh and asked him to accompany her for a glass of milk for pappa. Meantime Ballav is thinking within that he needs to keep more tight watch on them as they are married now and so fond of each other. He needs to talk with AKhilesh.

Ira put a sleeping pill in the milk and asked Akhilesh to give this milk to her father, so that both of them pappa & Akhilesh can rest peacefully.

I: aur tumhe itna ache banne ka bimari kyun hai ha ... lagta hai mujhe abhi is bimari ka ilaj karna parega ...

Akhilesh smiled.

I: mujhe gussa aa raha hai aur tum ...

A:arrey kahe itna tan tanae rehti hai aap ... thik hai na hum baat karenge Ballav chacha se ...

I: nehi tum kuchh baat nehi karoge ... promise karo (she holds his hand) .. jo bhi baat karni hai main karungi ... aur

P: o ri mori ganga maiya ... achha hai achha hai ... Pushpa entered laughingly ... Ira leaves his hand.

A: u amma hum o ... dudh lene aye the chacha ke lie... ja rahe hai abhi .. aap log bhi so jayie ...

P: so to jayenge bitwa ... par na jane nind kaise aayegi ... kyun bitiya ...

Ira shied. Akhilesh leaves.

P: ek kam karo bitiya kal tum Bhavik bitwa ko bula lo yeha ... o bhi to akela hai ghar pe ... aur fir kal se wo dono mehmano wale kamre me so jayenge aur tum apni jaga wapas ... kyun ...

I: su baat chhe moti ba (what an idea to save Akhilesh from pappa) ... smiled and hugged her tightly ...

P: e badmash ... chhoro chhoro .. ye pyaar kal ke lie bacha ke rakhho ... hum tumhri saas hai saas pati thori na hai ... Waise tumhare sar pe maine tel thori jyada hi dal di hai ... Gullu ke kapre dekh ke pata chale... ha ha ...

They both laughed loud and went to sleep.





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What an awesome screenplay. I was imagining something in this line and so suggested that they meet at the terrace. But you have taken the suggestion to an all new level. 👍🏼

Thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I could visualise the whole episode before my eyes. Exactly how we all want it to be. I think the CVs should definitely check our discussions in IF...they will get loads of ideas. Fantastic writing. I'm going to read it again and again. Keep giving us your writeups from time to time. Most enjoyable experience😛
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thanks Milky ... 👍🏼 .. I am so happy you liked it. Actually I had this idea long back so finally wrote it. I am having few more scenes in my mind, shall try to write those if possible. Actually MHB is such a nice show that I am almost satisfied with the Akhira scenes so most of the time dont feel to write. I always feel the urge to write something when I want it to be shown in another way.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Sasur ji finally lands into Akhira's sukhi sansar 😲
Deewane hue Akhikesh aur Ira sharmsaar😳
Ab toh Kabhi brush Kabhi Tel Ka Sahara hai😎
Milne ek-duje se Kai nuskhe azmaana hai🤗
Par moti-ba humari toh hai sabse pyari❤️
Kare jatan Woh aisa ki ho juda na jodi 😛

Aur Dekha joh yeh episode
Toh my friend Bonai
Har scene mein hame
Tumhri Yaad aai.😊

Bhai waah! Kya OS Likha tha...ekdum hu-ba-hu match. Woh Akhilesh Ka Sasur ji ke paon dabana, Ira ke brush ke bahane Milne Jana. Bulls eye. But must say, your scene is far more romantic.👏


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Milky-Way

Sasur ji finally lands into Akhira's sukhi sansar 😲

Deewane hue Akhikesh aur Ira sharmsaar😳
Ab toh Kabhi brush Kabhi Tel Ka Sahara hai😎
Milne ek-duje se Kai nuskhe azmaana hai🤗
Par moti-ba humari toh hai sabse pyari❤️
Kare jatan Woh aisa ki ho juda na jodi 😛

Aur Dekha joh yeh episode
Toh my friend Bonai
Har scene mein hame
Tumhri Yaad aai.😊

Bhai waah! Kya OS Likha tha...ekdum hu-ba-hu match. Woh Akhilesh Ka Sasur ji ke paon dabana, Ira ke brush ke bahane Milne Jana. Bulls eye. But must say, your scene is far more romantic.👏




achha to aap bhi hai kabita ke shaukeen ... very nice & sweet way to describe the present halat 👏👏 ..
loved Friday's episode & your kut poem, do write more 🤗

Edited by Bonai - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Bonai



achha to aap bhi hai kabita ke shaukeen ... very nice & sweet way to describe the present halat 👏👏 ..
loved Friday's episode & your kut poem, do write more 🤗


Thanks... that's so sweet of you. Even I'm loving these current episodes. Old MHB wala flavour.
But I was amazed to find that the ratings have gone down a lot. I think the channel should do more publicity and more repeat telecasts.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hey finally have time to read this! Was waiting when I could read this in peace. Love love loooveed this OS. Chatt ka romance ❤️ Looks like they got inspired by your OS 😆 Seriously though even the episode had close similarities. Bon-Bon tum kahin MHB ki writer toh nhi ho? 😆

Your writing is amazing. All the dialogues... so in character 👏

Hope to see more from you! 🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: InkandFire

Hey finally have time to read this! Was waiting when I could read this in peace. Love love loooveed this OS. Chatt ka romance ❤️ Looks like they got inspired by your OS 😆 Seriously though even the episode had close similarities. Bon-Bon tum kahin MHB ki writer toh nhi ho? 😆

Your writing is amazing. All the dialogues... so in character 👏

Hope to see more from you! 🤗


O ri mori ganga maiya ... MHB writer .. ha ha... thodi aamdani barh jati agar hoti toh ... 😆
thank you dear ... so happy you liked it 😊

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