Shani-Dhamini OS: U mean the world to me

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Sequel to A new beginning
I hope you guys will enjoy it😊

Shani went to mahadev to know if there was any way to break the curse. Mahadev didn't want to disappoint shani but right now he had no solution for the problem. H softly spoke to him, I am sorry putra, there is nothing I can do to help you. You must live with this curse. Don't let your gaze fall on anyone. They will perish'.

Shani knew this was going to come. But listening these words straight from his mentor, his god made his heart heavy. Controlling the tears that were flooding his eyes, he spoke to mahadev, Hey prabhu, all my life, I was considered inauspicious and malefic. I never felt bad coz I know I was only giving people the fruits of their deeds. Now, due to my wife's curse, I have become inauspicious. I cannot bring justice or balance to this world. I learnt to walk on the path of karma from you. I know one day I will find a way to break this curse. Till then, I don't want to stay here. I want you to create a new lok for me where there are no inhabitants. No one can come to that place.' Mahadev's heart got constricted looking at the amount of pain shani was going through. He didn't want shani to go away but he understood the pain of loneliness is better than the guilt of destruction. Hey shani, if you think this can help you in handling the situation, I will create a new lok for you. You can go there whenever you want', mahadev spoke with a sad smile. Shani bowed his head in gratitude and left from kailash.

Getting separated from his family was not a new thing for shani. He knew his absence wouldn't make much difference to surya lok. Why would it even, he was always the abandoned child. He was feeling sad for his sister and kakol. Yami has always been warm to him. She was genuinely happy when shani returned to surya lok. Now shani is going to break the bubble of her happiness. And kakol, shani couldn't have got a more loyal friend than kakol. But, he has to leave kakol for his own good. Shani was conflicted between his two emotions. He is not ready to leave dhamini in surya lok alone. At the same time, he doesn't want to take away the newfound family she earned. She always craved for a family. If I leave her alone, devraj will leave no stone unturned to humiliate her. She has already been through so much. But if I take her with me, she has to leave her family and live with a person who cannot even look at her once'.

All this while, dhamini was trying to gauge the turmoil that was going on in her husband's mind. She might not be as good as shani in reading people, but she started understanding her husband more now. What happened, shani?' she asked. Shani narrated all that happened at kailash. She was looking at her husband dumbfound. What have I done? How could I unleash such a terrible curse on my husband?', she cursed herself silently. Shani was thinking whether to ask her to come with him and how would she react. Breaking his chain of thoughts, Dhamini asked him, When are we going to leave?' Shani was startled by her question but was very happy that she wanted to accompany him. Shani, I think we should take kakol with us', Dhamini spoke. Before shani could object, she continued, I know you think it would be unfair to take him there. But shani trust me. For kakol, you mean the world to him. He will not be able to survive here without you. He will stay happy with us'. A small smile crept on shani's lips. He felt so proud of her for understanding kakol.

Shani and dhamini took farewell from surya family. Shani wanted to look at his family once before leaving the place. Alas, he cannot even do that. Devraj thought this is the apt moment to humiliate shani. Oh poor shani. Finally you got your right place. You were always bad for this world and finally all of us will get happiness once you leave from here', indra dev spoke venom dripping from his voice. Surya dev wanted to blast indra for his arrogance but before he could react dhamini stood befor shani shielding him and spoke in a tone that could make even the toughest of gods retreat, Mind your words, devraj. I will not allow you to disrespect my husband. You call my husband inauspicious. It is you whose thoughts are inauspicious and your character is maligned. Before you open your filthy mouth, let me remind you. I am still under the wrath of mangal. You dare not push me coz my anger will break hell on you'. Shani's chest swell with pride. His wife has given indra dev, the taste of his own medicine. Shani and dhamini bowed to surya family for one last time. All the surya family were looking sadly at the retreating figures of shani, dhamini and kakol. This was the first time, dhamini was riding on kakol along with shani. How much she loved shani's arm wrapped around her waist in a protective way. This could have been a moment worth cherishing for a lifetime if not for the curse. Shani still has his eyes closed but he could feel his wife's soft gaze on him. Breaking the awkward silence, dhamini spoke, Everything will fall back into the place with time. We will come back one day', she spoke by gently pressing her fingers on his hand. She wanted to give him reassurance. Its hard for her to see him suffer every minute.

In the meanwhile, kakol landed in the new lok. Dhamini was mesmerized would be an understatement. She spoke with awe, Shani this lok is beautiful. I have never seen a more ecstatic landscape than this'. Kakol spoke in agreement, 'Ha shani, I have flown over many places but never came across a place as beautiful as this'. Kakol was giggling all the way. Shani was shocked. Before he could speak, Narayan appeared in front of them. 'Shani, I know you asked mahadev for an empty land where no living thing is there. All the scenery here is created out of my illusion. Your gaze will not destroy them coz they are not real', he spoke with a smile. Shani lifted his eyes and looked at the lok. He could see that dhamini and kakol were speaking truth. Indeed the place was very beautiful. Shani thanked him for doing his. More than for himself, he is happy for kakol and dhamini. Narayan disappeared and kakol wanted to fly over all the place. He asked shani for permission.

Dhamini and shani slowly walked towards a small palace apparently their new home. Shani spoke, I am sorry dhamini. You have to stay here alone with me. I know how much mata and yami meant for you and how happy you were to get them as family'. Dhamini responded, U are right shani. Yami and mata are close to my heart. But they are nowhere close to the place you hold in my heart. For a woman, her husband's family means a lot but her husband means the world to her. Now stop feeling guilty and let me see my new home. She slowly opened the doors of her new house. It was empty but she knew that she is going to stay happy here. Many people tried to hurt shani in the past but now she is going to fill his life with happiness. Shani on the other side is happy that inspite of all the bad stuff going on in his life, he still got someone by his side. When shani entered surya lok for the first time, somewhere he had a small hope that he found his home. But his hope was broken. Surya lok was never his home. But here, it feels so and he knew that credit goes to his wife for trying to be there for him.


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hi, its beautiful
Hope u will write more.

I have written a Shani-Dhamini is too...Named His eyes

Will you have a look too?
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Posted: 7 years ago
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beautiful i hope ppl cum up wid stories since dis forum has hardly ny stories i too will try to wrte...bt i feel u should continue wid dis...waiting fr more from u😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Fantastic OS😃
I loved how Dhamini gave a befitting reply to Indradev👏
The scene between Shani and Dhamini was so amazing.❤️
I am glad that Shani,Dhamini and kakol live in a different Lok
Edited by Nonie12345 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Very Beautiful.
Simply Shani,Dhamini& Kakol Leaving Surya Lok.
And Staying In Their New Home.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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awww...it was beautiful...loved it...I wish cvs instead of dragging the story could have done something like this...
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Would like to say plz u too update the shamini track 😃

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