Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF

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when I think what could have been and what we got my blood boils

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Posted: 7 years ago

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Link to the story on wattpad

https://my.w.tt/UiNb/1KtN48SKLI

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Hello to all my beautiful people 🤗

Okay the next two chapters are up and running, on here tho it would be three chapters on wattpad... as i dont post more than 3-4 thousand words there.

Okay so I wrote this chapter almost six weeks ago, I have made a few additions to the story, hope u guys like it... Just to mention that Advay character is slowly developing and so is Chandini's ...there is a side to Chadnini that is slowly emerging...

I wanted to mention my dear friend @ Annujam23, who made a valid point on her comment on the next page, which i will replying to detail in a lil while. But she said it rightly that given there is so much Shiv Shakti analogies going on, Shiva actually helps his shakti find her sexuality , and actually liberates Parvati from her own limited shackles that she is tied to, as Parvati as we all know was a human who married god himself, so she had to go thru a lot of hardships and penances to find Shiva as her husband, but she eventually comes in touch with her own divine self that dwells within her... but the point is that here tooo Chandini is restricted by the norms of the society, but Advay is liberating her of her own limitations and helping her get in touch with her true self... so from now onwards Chandini's character will be interesting. Who Advay is pretty much established now, but we still dont know who or what Chandini is, and now it is time to find out IMO , hope i do justice to her character... tho i am sure she will earn the sympathy most of the time owing to the kind of a tricky situation that she is in.

She is probably one of the most intriguing and interesting characters IMO, but its a true test for her ...so bless her I truly feel sorry for the life she is made to live.

OH and Mehvish, i hope my Advay's intentions become clearer after this update, as i said he is the most complicated man ever, dont really know what he wants, but he will keep us all guessing and yo yoing till the end 😆😆, but cant help love him inspite of it 😳

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Rimi

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Posted: 7 years ago

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OMG!! Another Update on way!!! When??

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Posted: 7 years ago

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Originally posted by: Arshika_arshi
OMG!! Another Update on way!!! When??

Tomorrow or if u are lucky later tonight 😳, when do u prefer ????😆

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neverlandspirit

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Posted: 7 years ago

#967

After significantly calming myself down from the last update, I think I liked this Advay, of course there were some hints towards his not to lovely motive but I can't be angry on him for that, that is the whole plot of the story.

But he really was lovely in these updates.

"I am impressed with myself...looks like I have done decent damage." ❤️❤️

(Shh, but is that foreshadowing?!)

I semi wanted to punch him in the face but the urge wasn't as bad as the last time! 😆

My absolute ABSOLUTE ABSOLUTE favorite part of this update was Murli actually wanting to warn Chandini of her inevitable doom and all following conversation between them.

A lot of authors have used the saga of the moth and fire with that of love. But you really bought in a fresh perspective to it, for me at least. I think so because when Authors use this analogy usually the moth (lover) knows that the fire (lover) is going to ruin them. They are aware of their end.

You however added a nice freshness to it. Chandni talks about about the way the moth flies towards the fire even after years and eons of evolution, THAT WAS PERFECT! Because she is the perfect MOTH! She will turn and choose Advay even after all his flaws and anger and misdeeds! You wrote that so beautifully!

Coming to the Illusion analogy...Shiz! I have so much to say! And ironically no words to describe them! But let me attempt anyway...

Chandni sobbing in Advay's arm that her life is an illusion, was so sad and heart wrenching...

I fear the day when "My life is a mirage" becomes "I am the mirage" for Chandni.

So far she feels that Happiness, peace and love in life is an illusion, an unattainable destination. But soon, going by the plot of the story, the sentence will be altered to a point where she may feel that it wasn't her life but she herself is the illusion. That, Chandni doesn't exist. She is just a pauper in the hands of Indrani and a means to achieve revenge at Advay's hand.

I never want her to question her own Identity...her own Existence!🥱

But you know what! I do! Because Advay will handle it and make it all alright!❤️ (Also that would be a good opportunity to make him cry tears of blood, as you promised!😆)

Also, I could go on and on about Advay only celebrating death days! That was deep! SO MUCH PAIN!😭 (I think I have to things concise... so I'll save space here and come back to it later)

Coming to the birthday celebrations! It went to from 0 to sixty real fast! I was giggling at the sibling cuteness and then you bought me to tears...i cried! How cruel has Indrani been to Chandni?! How can someone be so ruthless? Chandini is her Step-daughter...daughter!

Note: The way Advay roared "Murli leave the decorations!" That made me shiver. It was HOT! God!That was HOT AND POWERFUL!

I am eagerly looking forward to Advay's and Indrani's face-off! Both hurt Chandini and both will justify why and GOD! ITS GOING TO BE AMAZING!!!

Indrani and PP played such a sick trick on Chandni and really put her in a tough spot.

Okay, I think I can elaborate more on Advay and his celebrating only death days.

I cant even image how much pain he must be in, to only value the day of his death. That is so sad.

But I think he should be celebrating everyday of his life if he is in that much pain, because you die a little everyday.

You celebrate your birthday only once a year but you can celebrate everyday as being one day closer to your death...I think Advay should look at this in this way until Chandni teaches him to celebrate everyday with happiness and not think of the death.

Marvelous update as always!

Loved it!

With much love,

Mehvish!❤️

Edited by neverlandspirit - 7 years ago