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Posted: 7 years ago
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I stood at Death's Doors
and silently cried
when I saw tears of joy
glisten in your eyes.

I stood at Death's Doors
and my heart skipped a beat
when, with joy
you tapped your dainty feet.

I stood at Death's door
and a pain so intense pierced me
when I heard your
happy laughter, filled with glee.

I stood at Death's door
and couldnt handle my bleeding heart
when with every gesture and smile
we moved further apart.

I knocked on Death's door
and I ambled in, steady and slow
as I counted and accounted
for your every blow.

I sank into the soft cushions
behind Death's door
feeling betrayed
feeling sore

I took up Death's game
behind its closed walls
to avenge every hurt
and every dastardly fall

I will brandish Death's sword
expertly and skilled
till my heart is at peace
with its vengence fulfilled.
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Oh Ghost!





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Posted: 7 years ago
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hiya beagleboy.. very moving poem.. wrenches human emotions. it does'nt give me the chill of death.. in so much it fills me with great sadness.. at a love that perhaps once kindled, but now is put out.. mind you the pay back time and talk of avenging one's self is frightening..
keep composing poetic pearls..
love hammie
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Beautiful B,
Ghost seems to be standing at the threshold with only revenge in his mind. But this emotion is not going to be realised ...love will overpower that hate and maybe then the ghost can cross that liminal state
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Hamlet53

hiya beagleboy.. very moving poem.. wrenches human emotions. it does'nt give me the chill of death.. in so much it fills me with great sadness.. at a love that perhaps once kindled, but now is put out.. mind you the pay back time and talk of avenging one's self is frightening..
keep composing poetic pearls..
love hammie


He does seem to have suffered a lot and that's what his poetry implies. Specifically when he talks about 'roz khwab duffan kia hai ...' and likening his heart to a graveyard of dreams is very telling. With every disappointment that pieced his earthly being, a resolve becomes stronger in his ghostly apparition. This line struck me because Disappointment is inevitable and yet there is no greater pain than disappointment, because it brings with it disillusionment and takes away hope.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: indranigupta

Beautiful B,

Ghost seems to be standing at the threshold with only revenge in his mind. But this emotion is not going to be realised ...love will overpower that hate and maybe then the ghost can cross that liminal state


Indrani🤗

Good to see you here and hope to see you more. Yes, it is clear that revenge is his motive but who does he hold a grudge against? Sharanya? Vyom? He does not seem interested in Vyom as much as he is into Sharanya. So is he trying to awaken her sleeping memory? His poetry is very telling though. He pens those verses for Sharanya. Looking forward to the medium who may throw light on his story, but I do believe that he had a deeper relationship with Sharanya than meets the eye.

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