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P.s. Fair warning! This comment is obviously not short or edited!! But your writing was absolutely phenomenal so I just cant praise this story enough!!!
Oh my God!! I love loved loved this story so so much!! The first three chapters were just pure and plain fun to read!! Shivaay fighting his ever growing attraction to Ani and Ani being practical does realize where she stands and that nothing good will come out of what she thinks is a one sided attraction! And her doubting her seduction skills was fun while she was actually making Shivaay go crazy with all her antics!! And the notebook aka Chandra entry was supercute!! He has a six pack!! Wow, who would have thought ?
The fourth was a curious mix for me. I obviously got pissed of at Shivaay for hurting my sweetheart Ani (you know how partial I am to her!!) And his filter is non existent when it comes to her and he obviously has to behave abominably because he was jealous to see her with Om!! But he threw me off with his advice to Ani and I am glad that he confesses that he is not safe either!!
The 5th chapter made me slightly teary!! (Ofcourse I have to get all senty reading this too...) There was something so inherently domestic about that dinner, sitting like hubby and wife at the end of a long day, but here they were discussing the whole affair of his marriage to Tia and to see Ani console herself at the end brought a lump to my throat. And her diary entry made me want to reach out and give her a tight hug!!
7th chapter- He loves her and he hates her reminding him everytime that he is going to marry Tia. Her 'Mr. Oberoi' hurt didnt it! And Soumya and Om's mind waves was interesting to read about!!
Chap 8 and 9- Shivaay really has a cruel streak doesnt he, both in the story and in the show?? I think its an inherent trait and the fact that he can be so casual about it makes it so hard hitting! But he goes and chooses a ring for Ani and I am left stumped again. Why cant this man just accept that he loves her?? He has all the money in the world for God's sake and yet, he wants a model wife for his reputation to stay intact! I doubt that anyone in the media or the business world would care that much if Shivaay announces with the obvious authority that he has, that he is going to marry someone, even if she is an orphan! Its all in his head!!
Have I told you that I love Om! I adore Ani and Shivika but I really love Om too... And Ani is right. Om has to have an extraordinarily powerful , insightful , strong yet sensitive woman to fall for him and not feel insecure in the face of all his essential goodness. And glad to know that Om saw how much pain Ani was going through!! And what a befitting song for the update! I just love that song!
And ofcourse, there has to be a scene where she looks breathtaking and he cant help himself but be close to her when she does. Its all physical! I just want to smack Shivaay on the head! Like really, how much more can this man be in denial??
Chapters 10 and 11- I was crying. Like full blown crying. Why is this man hurting himself and her so much?? The way she went to his room and put on the ring and his clothes and finally slept on his bed after finally confessing that she loved him had me weeping. Literally! I cant believe that this story started so lightheartedly and came to this!!
I cant believe I cried more for Shivaay's breakdown and confession than for Ani's. I love how you made Om's prediction coming true! How do you manage to write like this?!! Its just tear jerking!!
Chapter 12 - I was wiping my tears and still recovering from the after effects of the previous chapter and Ru managed to bring a smile to my face! Dearly departed!! LOL!! Again, Om is overwhelmingly righteous! I kind of pity his future wife! She has to radiate goodness or something!! I am writing comments as each chapter commences and wondered if he called Mallika but she wouldn't actually do much good either so maybe he called Tia?
Chapter 13- He called Tia! Ofcourse! I really love your Tia. With all her Reiki and Universe and aura cleansing,she should have made a sweet exit out of Shivaay's life and had her happy ending with her guy!! And Kush Nadkarni is such a sweet invention by you!! I totally love him and the fact that Tia is off to find her happily ever after with this guy!! How I wished this happened on the show too...
But alas! The Cvs had to spoil it in the show and now even kill off Robin!! And vampiness doesnt suit Tia and I really like Navina offscreen, she seems really sweet !
I love the way you write and I honestly think that most people adopt the same chaotic way of writing too!
Chapter 14- How I love candy pink happy endings!! I am dancing a jig here and thankfully no one is at home to see!! I wonder what Shivaay will do to those guys who kissed Ani before and he ever came to know of it!! He is going to turn into one hell of a jealous Bhagad Billa!! And glad to know that they finally had a convo about atleast him knowing nothing about her while she probably knows even his dress measurements!!
I am re reading this chapter to melt into mushy goo again!! And a big hug from me to you as I see you plan to continue this with Om and Ishaana!! Do continue soonish and please get back to your other beautiful stories as well!!
P.S.I really think you should seriously publish something! I will surely buy the stuff and read!!
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