SuKor OS- Kissa kiss ka!

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Suraj stood there baffled as he touched one side of his cheek with one hand while the other held a piece of paper. His mind replayed the scene again and again. He could still feel her soft lips on his cheek. Chakor had Kissed him? Hell why? He pondered over the question as his eyes travelled to the mirror and he noticed his face. His Face! His face wore an expression which Suraj Narayan Rajvanshi never wore on his face. A blush! He never knew his dharam patni had got such powers in herself that she could make him blush. Unconsciously, his mind went back to the happenings of the last few minutes.

He had been setting his hairs while humming some song when Chakor rushed in. He stopped his work for a minute and looked at her. She was staring at him already. He noticed her quivering hands while she still stared at him. She looked like she was nervous. Kya chal raha hai isske dimaag mein? He took short steps towards her and reached her.

"Kya hua Chakor?"

She suddenly changed her expressions and smiled at him. Suraj was now sure. Daal mein kuch kaala hai!

Chakor started running around the room setting his things.

"Kya Suraj, tum bhi na, hamesha cheezen galat jagah pe rakh dete ho"

What? His biwi was setting his things. She hadn't ever done that ever since she stepped in the haveli.

"Chakor ye tum kya..."

"Aur ye kya? Humne jo kapde rakhe the woh tumne pehne hi nahi!"

Suraj widened his eyes at her.

"Kya subah subah bhoot chadha hai? Achanak biwi ban ne ki koshish mein kyun ho?"

"Arrey mana tum humse gussa ho...par itna bhi kya...ab jao ye wali shirt pehnke aao"

Chakor said handing him another shirt while Suraj opened his mouth to say something again.

"Jao na please..."

"Arre kya zabardashti hai..."

She forcibly pushed him into the washroom to change. As he went in, she whispered.

"Hum jaisa bolte hain karte jao...hum tumko baad mein batayenge kyun kar rahe hain"

And before Suraj could say anything she slammed the door on his face. She looked sideways and peeked through the window to see if Ranjana was still there and to her horror she was. She stood there with her phone trying to record whatever happening in the room.

Chakor sighed and thought what to do. Ye budhiya toh jaati nahi! Something came into her mind. She took out a paper and scribbled something on it and by the time Suraj came out she was done.

She again smiled at Suraj and went near him, very sure that Ranjana had still her prying eyes over them. Chakor reached out for Suraj's hand while he still had a confused expression all over his face. She quickly slipped in a piece of paper and said

"Humein pata tha tum hamari baat zaroor manogi...humse zyada der tak gussa nahi reh paaoge. Chalo ab jaldi khaana khaane aao, hum neeche intezaar kar rahe hain"

She finally let go of his hand and finally Suraj felt the weird sensation in his stomach stop. She turned to go while Suraj thought to see what was in the paper.

Chakor had just moved away from him when she saw Ranjana still there with a look she hated. Ranjana had been smiling as if knowing she was acting only. Chakor got absolutely irritated that she was not a good actor and gave in a master stroke!

Suraj felt two hands grabbing his shoulders taking him by surprise. Before he could know what was going on her lips landed on his left cheek. He did not know what to do or say. Chakor separated herself as soon as she had grabbed him and without a word left the room.

Ranjana's face drained off colour and her phone fell down.

THUD!

He heard a noise from outside his window and faintly could see Ranjana disappearing. He did not take much notice of it as he was already in a daze.

He felt like a girl suddenly and blinked his eyes to get that scene out of mind. He snapped back and again noticed his reflection. This time he noticed his hand. Oh it had a paper in it. A paper which Chakor slipped in his hands while she was playing with his senses. Chakor...Oh just Shut up you stupid! He screamed at his mind and forcefully turned his attention towards the paper. He opened it and started reading it.

"Achha...natak kar rahi thi...KN aur uske faltu plans..."

He mentally cursed KN and Ranjana for trying to break him and Chakor apart.

"Aur yeh jungle billi...itna overact karne ki kya zarurat thi!!"

He left the room and decided to stay out of the house for the day. Afterall, he needed some time for his dear heart too!

A/N: I know acha nahi hai!...Tamatars, Jootis(size 5😆) are welcome...no andes(eggs) please...I'm a vegetarian 🤣

I know it could have been a lot lot better...I wouldnt have posted it also. I wrote it on Saturday and till today didnt post coz I'm not satisfied with this. Still posted for the sake of Pari di, who inspite of her exams today, looks forwards to read this! 🤗

Iss baar maaf kardo..next time it'll be better...PROMISE!!
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BreakingBlue thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice one Sahas!😆
Suraj shocked, Chakor rocked!🤣
But this Ranjana 😡! God she's annoying! And her make up on the show is...I mean,I have no words for it! (Am I the only one who gets annoyed by her make up?)

But this was good! Loved it! ❤️ Write more!😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: BreakingBlue

Nice one Sahas!😆

Suraj shocked, Chakor rocked!🤣
But this Ranjana😡! God she's annoying! And her make up on the show is...I mean,I have no words for it! (Am I the only one who gets annoyed by her make up?)

But this was good! Loved it! ❤️ Write more!😳



I want this to happen in the show 😉
Thank you so much Akhi! It means a lot 🤗
I hate her make up too. So count me in! More than her makeup I hate her hairstyle!
I'll defo write more and better ones.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh my that was so damn cute! Suraj ke dil ki ghantiyan baj gyi🤣
Ps. I agree. Ranjana's make up is eew. Wo make up lagati hai yaa make up usey lagata hai? Koi make up se kaho, "Excuse me you've some Ranjana on you!"🤣
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..chotu..



I want this to happen in the show 😉
Thank you so much Akhi! It means a lot 🤗
I hate her make up too. So count me in! More than her makeup I hate her hairstyle!
I'll defo write more and better ones.


Your welcome!😳
LOL glad to know I'm not the only one. Her hairstyle us like creepers and what not. It's as clear as day to any person who started watching the show recently that she's the bad character.🤣
And Please please please do write more! 🤗 This was so cute! 😳 *eagerly waits for your next piece.*
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: SanyaEterna

Oh my that was so damn cute! Suraj ke dil ki ghantiyan baj gyi🤣

Ps. I agree. Ranjana's make up is eew. Wo make up lagati hai yaa make up usey lagata hai? Koi make up se kaho, "Excuse me you've some Ranjana on you!"🤣



"Tune maari entriyaan re dil mein baji ghantiyaan re...tang tang tang"
🤣
Thank you for you comments dear. I'm so glad you liked it! 😃
HAHAHAHA
Sahi mein. Make up Ranjana ko lagati hai! 🤣
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: BreakingBlue



Your welcome!😳
LOL glad to know I'm not the only one. Her hairstyle us like creepers and what not. It's as clear as day to any person who started watching the show recently that she's the bad character.🤣
And Please please please do write more! 🤗 This was so cute!😳*eagerly waits for your next piece.*


True! There are many Ranjana's make up haters here!
Itna bolte ho aap toh jaldi dusra likhenge 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thanks a lot chotu for keeping my words by posting this... ❤️
And...u were pretty much exaggerating it yesterday lyk "Didi it's not gud ...it's nt at all gud..I won't post it" n all 😆
Coz d Os is AMAZING... 👏
I wish sumthing lyk this will happen in d show some day 😳
I loved d blushing suraj n d bold chakor here 😳
Ranjhana can u pls go 2 hell..??. 😆 bt I must nt complain when she is d source of most of d Sukor scenes 🤣
I could imagine d THUDD n her expression of million dollars(ok that's too much 😆 )
All in all a nice os...write more n more n more... 😳

Pari 🤗
Edited by paridhi9797 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: paridhi9797

Thanks a lot chotu for keeping my words by posting this... ❤️
And...u were pretty much exaggerating it yesterday lyk "Didi it's not gud ...it's nt at all gud..I won't post it" n all 😆
Coz d Os is AMAZING... 👏
I wish sumthing lyk this will happen in d show some day 😳
I loved d blushing suraj n d bold chakor here 😳
Ranjhana can u pls go 2 hell..??. 😆 bt I must nt complain when she is d source of most of d Sukor scenes 🤣
I could imagine d THUDD n her expression of million dollars(ok that's too much 😆 )
All in all a nice os...write more n more n more... 😳

Pari 🤗


Oh balle balle
Didi thank you sooo much. I am so happy...muaahz 🤗
I am glad, u could imagine the scenes. Even I could imagine everything and I so want this to happen in the show!
Ek baar Suraj ka blush dekha hai show pe, when Chakor had called him good looking, ab dusri baar dikha de toh maza ajata! 🥳 ☺️
Again thank you for the review! It means a lot!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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OMG...this is awesome 👍🏼
Suraj shocked out of his wits and Chakor smartass as usual 😆
Just imagine such a scene in the show itself...I think I would surely fall off my chair seeing Suraj's face 🤣
But this Ranjhana...so damn annoying 😡...if it wasn't for her playing cupid btwn SuKor, I would request someone to shoot her first
Edited by eshasrk - 9 years ago

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