OMKAR LOVE STORY **Darmiyaan' PART 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi guys... this is my first FF in this forum... I wanted to pen a love story for Omkar as he doesnt have a girl opp him at the moment.. so i decided to make up my own... Hope u guys like it..
Kindly suggest me a nice name for d girl (keep it punjabi)... the one i like i will use it 😃

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PART 1

He dint know what was happening... he really dint want to be at the place. but he was forced to be there. Thanks to Sumit.. Omkar's childhood friend...

It was a dark room. the guy who pushed him in there locked d room and left.. he couldn't get out of there... he looked around.. the room had one little window with torn curtains.. the floor littered everywhere.. a double cot with messed up bedsheets.. nothing seemed to be cleaned there..it smelled awful.. he tried looking out of the window to see if the cops had left..

as he watched around he could hear someone sobbing in the room.. he looked around amused.. suddenly he saw a hand pulling the bedsheets.. there was someone at the dark corner of the bed.. he couldn't reach out there.. he kept trying to see who was there..

"suniye" he said in concern.. he understood there was a girl there... he slowly tried to come closer to the bed to talk to her..

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his forehead was bleeding... a glass had been thrown on his face.. he held his forehead and saw blood on his palm.. he was in pain but still he lifted his eyes to see...

she was standing there at the far end of the bed.. holding a jug to be thrown next.. she had tear filled eyes , yet so fierce.. her kameez torn around her arm.. open messed up hair.. she was breathing hard.. she seemed scared.. he kept gazing into her painful eyes.. he had forgotten that he shouldn't have been there..

suddenly the room door opened.. and a guy entered and said " chaliye aap abhi yahan se.. police chali gayi"... looking at him she sat down behind d bad again and held her knees in fright..

he saw omkar's bleeding forehead.. "yeh kya hua" he questioned.. "isne kiya?" he said in anger looking towards her.. " iski toh"..he wanted to harm her.. but omkar held him "chaliye yahan se" he stopped that man and went out with him.. he kept looking at her as he walked out of the room.. she kept gazing into his eyes watching him go..

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"yeh kaisi jagah leke aaya hai mujhe" omkar shouted at sumit...

"sorry yaar" sumit apologized

sumit had been addicted to a girl at the brothel.. it was a filthy and huge area with multiple buildings and many luring women.. he insisted omkar to come with him as they were on d way home from a party. Om was stuck and had less or no choice but to join him...

they had reached there and his friend carried on to meet his girl.. Om was disgusted to be there.. but he just had to wait for his friends.. the brothel owner and some guys there kept asking him if he wanted someone too.. but he just refused to heed them...

just then the cops had entered d place and one of the guys asked omkar to get into that room to keep him safe...

" chal Om chalte hain" his friend said... and both walked towards the door..

Om was suddenly stopped by a strange feeling.. he could hear screams.. he turned towards the coridoor to see whats happening...

he could see that same girl being dragged by two men violently.. he just watched the whole ordeal..

"chod de mainu... ghar jaana hai",.. the girl wept and screamed to be left alone..

Om wanted to do something.. but he just stood still.. his eyes met hers again.. it was pleading to help..

his friend held his arm and pulled him to leave from there.. they left into the car..

his friend was driving the car.. Om on the other hand kept looking out of the window and thinking about the whole experience... and more importantly HER.

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Part 2 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4727848&TPN=2&#p137638574


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NamuVyas thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: rinku95

nice

continue soon
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yes sure...😳 thank you
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Posted: 9 years ago
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nicee beginning n nice concept.. feel bad for that girl. good update.. n feels real too ..will you show his drug related past too? continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: chaturchipkali

nicee beginning n nice concept.. feel bad for that girl. good update.. n feels real too ..will you show his drug related past too? continue soon


I will try to add some glimpses.. His past was more related to his family his dad and not love life.. Let's see..
Thanks for liking.. Hope I get more readers too..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Now that's intriguing. Don't keep us waiting'
Thanks for the PM
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: bloggism2001

Now that's intriguing. Don't keep us waiting'
Thanks for the PM


thanks.. will update soon😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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thank u😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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part 2

"arey Omkar, tere sar se khoon kyun aa raha hai" quizzed his friend.

Omkar is still thinking of the whole ordeal. He remembers her intense tear filled eyes...

his friend pats his shoulder and suddenly he is out of his thoughts.. and says " kuch nahi hua"..

They reach home and Om bids bye to Sumit and goes home..

he walks into his room and looks into the mirror and his wound on the forehead.. he looks around for a medical box and cleans it up and bandages it.. Just then rudra and shivaay enter the room..

"kahan tha om..".. they see his wound " yeh kaise hua"..

Om sits down in thoughts and speaks up " Shivaay aaj mere saath kuch ajeeb hua"

they sit with him... he tells them about the whole incident.. they listen to him with interest.. in the end of it Shivaay speaks up " god anyways accha you are back and fine"..

Om speaks in disbelief " Shivaay par uss ladki ka kya"

shivaay - "uss ladki ka kya.. she belongs there.. are tum kya kar sakte ho" he says in arrogance

Omkar doesn't agree with shivaay and tries to explain him " shivaay tumne socha hai.. uss ladki ki marzi ke bina usko wahan zabardasti rakha gaya hai.. its not right"

"right om.. par hum kya kar sakte hain" shivaay argues..

"Pata nahi Om..kuch sahi nahi lag raha" Om says and goes to change his clothes..

Shivaay goes back to his room and work..

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Its late night and Omkar hasn't been able to sleep. He puts on the light and thinks of painting...

he sits down d whole night making a painting.. Its morning and his painting is complete.. He made a canvas of her tear filled eyes... all that he could remember again and again the whole night..

He looks at it and decides to do something..

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Its late morning and Omkar reaches the same brothel.. As he enters he sees the same man he met yest ... The man is surprised " aap yahan phir se..woh bhi iss waqt"..

"akele nahi aaya hoon" Omkar says with anger and Police arrives with him..

The brothel man is shocked. the cops catch hold of him... "kahan hai wok ladki" they question him..

"kaunsi ladki mujhe nahi pata" the guy says in tension..

Omkar aggressively walks inside into the same room and pushes the door open.. he sees her on the floor fainted.. he slowly sits down and tries to wake her up.. but he realizes she is not conscious.. he sees her face looks frail and messed up clothes and hair.. One of the Cop comes in there and questions " kya yahin ladki hai woh"..

Omkar nods in agreement.

The Cop says okay and goes out to warn the brothel guy...

Om doesn't know what to do... He Slowly lifts her up in his arms and carries her out of the place.. he looks at the brother guy in anger and walks out of the door.. He takes her into the police car and places her on the back seat...

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She wakes up.. Everything seems different.. the place and feel.. She is sleeping on a soft bed.. she opens her eyes completely and suddenly feels a needle in her right hand.. it's a hospital..

She is shocked thinking how did she reach there.. suddenly she feels that someone is standing in the room.. she slowly turns to see .. its Omkar there... she is stunned seeing him there.. She doesn't know what is happening.. She has many questions and wants to ask him..

Suddenly two cops enter.. She is startled to see them.. One of them says " Inhone tumko uss jagah se nikala hai..ab tum aazad ho..lekin apne bayan dena hoga"

tears flow down her cheek in mixed emotions .. she shakes her head in agreement..

The Cop asks her .. Tumhara naam kya hai .. she says looking at Om "Harleen"..

She knods her head in thanking Om.. Om gives a nod of acceptance and smiles at her

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Posted: 9 years ago
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nice update shivin. our om is a sweetheart n concerned individual so kisi ko prblm me dekhkar he wont just let go. that part was very beautiful him remembering her eyes n tears... nice story writing.. continue soon .
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Posted: 9 years ago
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nice concept n thanks for pm😊

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