Medusa Ishkara SS chap 4 pg 15(17/9/16)

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: grownup
the poem was brilliant...loved it a lot...pls continue...
don't worry I quite like dark thrillers😃😃

Thanks a lot😃

I'm glad you like them.

Hope you'll find the next chapters enjoyable. 😳

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: BookWormV

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

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PRACHI

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

Omg this is diffrent
Awesome concept
Amazing start
Om ,jhanvi's agony was penned so well
Shivkara scene was nice
Bt who is that girl??? Anika???

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-Abhiya-

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

it was so brilliant

I loved it

I could feel Jaanvi and Om's pain

Loved how Om took that promise from Shivaye

And who was that girl u said Ishana will enter in next chapter so maybe its not her but her elder sis that part was amazing how perfectly you described her emotions

excited for next parts

cont soon

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aaditi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Wonderful update dear
You almost cast a spell without your words, which left me tangled in it.
You explained jhanvi's pain so well...
Omkara's feelings were so well written that I can actually feel it like my own...
The turmoil thorough which the girl going was heart wrenching and so well written, it gave me goosebumps
We got glimpse of Shivkara relation, it was so soothing
Overall amazing part...
Thanks for the pm and do continue whenever you get time

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mistofshadows

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

Snow Queen!

This was a real treat. My imagination is burning with the vines of rapture you have woven with your words. It is seriously impactful and intense like I had hoped for.

I loved the fact that you gave us a glimpse of the childhood of Omkara. Jhanvi appeared indifferent to her husband's repeated attempts to break her but the shattering of Omkara's innocence is too big a shock for her to ignore. What she feared had come true!

And then a girl running from some men. Then the prey turns the predator. This scene was so beautifully penned down. I loved the line "the nature betrayed her". Gave me goosebumps!

I wonder who she is!!!!

Shivaay sees Om sitting on the terrace getting drenched in the out-pour and this time there is something different about him. A piece of his innocence is tarnished and blackened forever.

This part was so brilliant.

And the promise to keep a promise👏

I admire you for this.

Standing ovation!

Niki

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shreya tode

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Posted: 9 years ago

#38

Thanks for pm

N part was awsm

Continue soon

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Vianna

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Posted: 9 years ago

#39

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Sakura 😊

What a fantastic start.! The title was just perfect. That quote made complete sense to me. 😈 😛

Goodness, your descriptions are just mind-blowing! I could imagine the thunder and lightening so vividly.That TejVi scene sent chills through me. You definitely know how to capture interest. I have always loved the backgrounds you give to characters. This one is no different. I absolutely loved how you have portrayed the relation between TejVi. Jhanvi's character is intriguing on the show and I really liked how she is portrayed here. She is trying to keep up the illusion of happy family for her kids so desperately and Tej is as desperately trying to get away from that illusion. It was absolutely brilliant.

I so loved how you brought about the reason for Om's 'I hate lies' feelings. His illusion of happy famiky is shattered on a terrible night. It was oh so brilliant! 👏

Mysterious teenager running from goons? ouch.. I love how you write mystery. My curiousity is at its heights already. She killed a person. At such an impressionable age that's got to kill her from within. The whole scene was surreal. The aftermath of killing the goon was so perfectly portrayed, hands shaking, seeing blood, something getting killed within... this was sheer perfection.

So the goons wanted someone's location? If I hazard a guess that someone is obviously Ishaana? Has she witnessed something? This teenager is Anika? Are you planning to include something for ShivIka/AnShi?

I love Shivaay's protectiveness for his brothers. This last part was out of the world. The way you have shown how Om has lost a small tiny part of himself was just WOW! And Shivaay realises it. The kid in him asks desperately - do you promise to keep that promise? This line was heart breaking truly!

You never, ever, ever disappoint. I am absolutely hooked, again. Seriously, can't wait for an update.

Love,
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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: prachi_vrushan
Omg this is diffrent
Awesome concept
Amazing start
Om ,jhanvi's agony was penned so well
Shivkara scene was nice
Bt who is that girl??? Anika???

Thank you so much 😊
I'm glad you liked it 😳 you'll know who the girl was in the future chapters.