Hey there ! This is gonna be a long comment so the reader is kindly requested to fasten her seat belt.
First of all...
Hey ! I m Nandini, quite active on the forum...
And here is the detailed analysis of what I 'loved' about your OS...
I loved the fact that all this started with a dream and can I take a moment to mention the fact how beautifully the dream was written.
Shivay, as a character has too many layers to unfold and simply showing him do something out of his character would be an insult to him.
But, you my dear perfectly portrayed his emotions that he has started feeling towards Anika. There is confusion in his mind, a kind of restlessness in his heart that he himself is unable to digest.
The feelings he is experiencing right now are the first stages of love that every person goes through no matter how harsh he / she is.
There is attraction that he feels towards Anika which later turns out as another feeling that he has never experienced. A feeling called love.
So, it's natural that he over thinks about the myriad of emotions in his heart for her and dreams about her.
Then came the mixed bag of emotions he feels when he sees her ( in his dream ) and the sudden urge to get near her excites him. He wants to feel the depth of her, know her but at the same time hesitates in doing so.
And finally when he wakes up to the reality of his situation and actually sees her in front of him just the way he saw her in his dream he feels the same emotions again. But there he also feels something else, maybe a kind of fear, maybe confusion, maybe his own trail of thoughts and does what he always does, he questions her.
Anika too here is beautifully portrayed... When she asks him he showed his last card at play and completely swept her off her feet.
This all is what I loved about your OS... Or in short I loved your OS completely for its depth, for its emotions...
Keep writing more such stuff...
And also, please consider in converting this into a TS and show us what happens next...
Loved it...
PM me !!
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