Unspoken love is a fabulous piece of writing. very nice. you are extremely talented.
best love stories have always two climaxes written by the directors and later they choose one. . Especially if u note sanjay leela bhansali always chooses a painful climax. I would love u to write two different endings for this story for different readers.
One ending can be the happy ending...with arnav realisation and all
the other ending can be Khushi dying due to her breathing issues or any other reason. Because arnav from the starting has given her the most difficult pain, not the pain in shoulders or other physical pain but taunting about using his money. Why is khushi begging for friendship. I know she loves him but she knows he just doesnt want any relation with her cause of her low status and other personal reasons. Infact khushi shud just wait for the 8 months to be over. That scene was very written well when arnav is taunting her in restaurant and she is looking at her plate with guilt.
I dont want khushi to take revenge . She should take sweet revenge. She should start writing novels herself .And it should be so hit in market that the profit earned , she happily gives it to asr for all the expenses he has made to her since marriage. She should now no longer wear new dreeses or buy anything with his money unless very urgent. She should even keep an account of the food and its cost she is eating in raizada house. She should say him jao and lead your life happily.
Only when arnav realises khushi is going to die and she has less time left then only this character in you story will get the proper punishment. No punishment can be bigger than Khushi's death. Her photo with a garland will keep reminding him evrything. So two endings can be cool and innovative for FF india forums . a new style would come up. you should make the start.
and did arnav all these days sllep with lavanya too. U can put it .Look stories have to be realistic. some readers may say oh no why is arnav doing like this after getting married. But fact is the story here has arnav like that who has married unwillingly. So its possible that arnav sleeps with lavanya even after mariage for his needs . I have no problem with this angle but would you clarify..it?
and lastly keep entertaining us. fabulous job. god bless
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