Phir le aaya dil - a swasan os

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Phir le aaya dil
part 1
Sanskar found swara, but he lost her at the same time. He did many crimes in his life and he had made this girl cry. The girl he fell in love with eventually. What an irony? He always wanted her to become the old swara, fun loving and happy and now when she is what he always wanted her to be, he is not happy. She does not remember him, her last memory is of the music concert she won against ragini (first episode). She does not remember him but yeah she has a memory of him with her, and that memory is of his gunshot. She does not remember what happened, but she is sure that whatever happened, happened because of sanskar.
Swara- dur raho mughse khooni ho tum, khooni, tumnai mughe Marne ki koshish ki hai.
Something broke, inside sanskar. He became numb. He was alive yet dead.
All of a sudden sahil came and swara hid behind him, glaring him and her eyes were accusing him of something he could never think of doing.
Sahil- ae mister kain ho tum?
Sanskar just kept looking at Swara.
Swara - yeh khooni hai issinai, mughe Marne ki koshish ki hai, Meri yeh jo Halat hai it's all because of him.
Sahil- swara relax Mai abhi police ko bulata hun
Sahil called the police, but sanskar cared less. He was continuously looking at Swara for some acknowledgement and recognition, but he saw none.
Police arrived
Sahil- see this man is a murderer he tried to kill swara.
Inspector looked at sanskar who was numb and was just looking at Swara. Fortunately this was the same inspector who sanskar attacked for declaring swara dead.
Inspector - Mr sahil there is some misunderstanding. Aap pls Mrs Maheshwari ko Ander le jayiye.
Sahil looked at the inspector confused, Mrs Maheshwari?
Inspector - I mean swara.
Sahil's heart ached and he didn't know why?
He called the nurse and she was taking swara away.
Something snapped in sanskar and he ran towards swara and held her hand for his dear life, he fell in his knees
Swara shouted in panic.
Sanskar - swara swara pls swara Mai hun tumhara sanskar swara pls don't leave me pls I'll die pls, swara I love u swara. Humari shadi hui hai, pls swara dont leave me again. Humnai zindagi bhar saath rehne ka vaada kiya hai. Pls.
Swara - chodo mughe sahil bachao, chodo kaun sanskar leave me. Leave. I don't know u.
The inspector and Sahil pulled sanskar back. And the nurses taking swara away.
Sanskar - swara I love u swara pls don't go pls.
Inspector - Mr Maheshwari control yourself. Pls. Sit down.
Sahil sat along with inspector and sanskar with a confused expression, swara told him she is unmarried. But this inspector is calling this man her husband. Why isn't she recognizing him? Is it because he tried to kill her? Was she a victim of domestic violence subjected by this man? If that's the case he has to protect her, he didn't know why but he had to.
Meanwhile inspector called the Maheshwaris and gadodia's. It's a long story. He saw the man who tried to kill him just because he thought his wife was dead, sitting on the sofa as if half dead, chanting swara swara again and again.

Swara was in her room having a head ache, that murders words were not ready to leave her mind
"I love swara" he heard that before, a tent maybe what's happening to her.
I cant live without u
Humnai zindagi bhar saath rehne ka vaada kiya hai, she said that on the cliff but to whom? What's happening. She was stressed and she lost her conscious, the nurse caught her at the right time and made her lie down on bed. She called the doctor.
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soumi93 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice...tune likh diya...ab maine kaise likhu????accha koi nahi
I'll write one too.
Nice cncept
Sanskar😭
Ye jab sachme hoga main ro dungi...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: soumi93

Nice...tune likh diya...ab maine kaise likhu????accha koi nahi
I'll write one too.
Nice cncept
Sanskar😭
Ye jab sachme hoga main ro dungi...

Oh sorry I didn't know u were going to write, sorry.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: luvakanksha


Oh sorry I didn't know u were going to write, sorry.


Abe yaar
Sorry kyun pagal 😆
accha swasan fans ko srry and thank u bolna mana he yaad nahi kya tujhe...
Ye bada cute small and emotional sa he.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Superb start 👏
Totally loved it
Please update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Akanksha..A very Good & A subtle part..you've perfected Sanskaar's Emotions at that time of Swara's Accusations Against Him...Expecting The Next ... 🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Loved it akanksha.. Nice.. One..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Akanksha 🤗 🤗

A very nice start. Your description of Sanskaar's intense longing for Swara, and his agony when she couldn't remember him, was lovely. His love is truly so intense and pure, he cannot imagine a life without her. It must be breaking him inside, to know that she suspects him of trying to harm her, even though this is due to her amnesia.

As for Sahil, at this stage he seems to just want to shield Swara. He had some doubts about Sanskaar since Swara seemed to accuse him of trying to kill her. He has started developing feelings for her though, so am a bit wary of what his actions are going to be going forward. Will he just try to find the truth and thereby reunite SwaSan? Or will he try to deliberately further Swara's insecurity in order to heighten her dependence on himself?

Waiting eagerly for the next part.

Lots of Love,

---Viji
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow awesome awesome awesome start it was so sad to see sanskaar so broken and also loved sahil's character love all of the it
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome
Sanskaar ki halat is pathetic 😭
And u know we r crying buckets for him..😭
This was an awesome part👏
Perfectly describing his situation.. his pain...
Thanks for this treat ... loved reading it

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