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Disclaimer: The following lyrics belong to the song titled "Tangerine" on the album Led Zeppelin III and rightfully belongs to it's owners.


One Shot: Tangerine



Measuring a summer's day, I only finds it slips away to grey,
The hours, they bring me pain.


He had heard her voice after three months, blaring through his mother's phone which was left on speaker on the kitchen counter. She was blandly speaking of few ingredients of a recipe that his mother was probably trying out.

His steps refused to budge at hearing her ask his mother about his well-being to which she was asked the question of weather she had talked to him. He heard her ambiguous reply at concealing the differences that had risen between them before abruptly hanging up the phone. He saw his mother stare at the phone for a minute before busying herself back into the cooking.

He looked at the phone in his hand that had been buzzing everyday since he had arrived to the family home in London. Her voice sounded fake and filled with bubblegum excitement. There was a tinge of sadness in it and it made him wonder if he had made a correct decision. He turned on his heels and walked out the door to drive back to the office.

Tangerine, Tangerine, Living reflection from a dream;
I was her love, she was my queen, And now a thousand years between.

Thinking how it used to be, Does she still remember times like these?
To think of us again? And I do.


He pulled the car into drive before screeching the car onto the road. He didn't realize it but he missed her more then before now. For some reason he felt deeply responsible for the hollowness in her voice. The stabbing pain in his chest spread all over his body as he pushed his feet to accelerate.

He missed how her eyes would automatically just light up every time she looked at him and her smile brought so much radiance to which ever room she was in. The clouds outside looked as if they were ready burst once more. The musky scene of earth travelled up his nose and reminded him of the one time he had splattered water all over from the garden hose. Nostalgia filled him in as he remembered her face when she had been forced out of the house by his mother.

The sadness in her eyes haunted him till this day. Her tears, wondering how many times she would've cried into her pillow after him leaving, made him ache unexpectedly. He gripped onto the steering more tightly then before to allow his breathe to regulate and ease off the pain. She was his everything. He saw the moments between them, of love and laughter flicker across the windshield momentarily until the clouds finally let go of the baggage on them and the skies cried along with his heart.

She was his everything even today. He only wished that her heart truly belonged to him just as he had hopelessly given into her.






I am a sucker for anything angsty and the new promo has given me a lot of feels which has resulted in a 3 AM serenade. My other TEI fan fictions are posted "here".

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Posted: 9 years ago
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RES!- dude tf man it's almost 4 am and I'm hungry and now you're teasing me with titles?! MEANIE 🤣
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I didn't say this was okay at 4 am either. How do you write so beautifully in such a short period of time? I love how you take such special notice to subtle things like small notions of behavior & setting! This actually made me really sad tho because it was too short and too painful. Kunj being in London in his family home...without her? How is it the family home when his family isn't fully there? He left her behind thinking she wasn't happy with him but boy oh boy, who knows how tough those three months were?! I loved loved LOOOVED the entire part of you explaining Kunj's POV using the elements, it was so soothing and so expressive of the distance in their relationship. I'm not happy with how Kunj knows Twinkle is feeling hollow because of him but he thinks that leaving her was best.

This was so angsty, it's so definitely your thing dude damn. Amazing job buddy!

WAIT I DONT LIKE YOU FOR THIS:
She was his everything even today. He only wished that her heart truly belonged to him just as he had hopelessly given into her.

My heart just broke sigh. We have a tough road ahead of us 😆
Edited by teddyyy - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice os areeba. Missing twinkle is really what kunj would do after leap in show. This was really short but an amazing one describing kunjs feelings. Thanks for pm.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Areeba i LOVE you. This is so good. Kunj is gonna be in this very spot after the leap. I am a sucker for such stories and this one was so so so good
Keep the stories coming lol

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Updated my spot but also another reason I really liked this is because two types of work really attract me: lengthy ones that explain everything and then short ones that leave me with a lot of questions. You have me thinking about every equation in the three families right now and how much things changed. So again, so we'll done!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: teddyyy

RES!- dude tf man it's almost 4 am and I'm hungry and now you're teasing me with titles?! MEANIE 🤣
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I didn't say this was okay at 4 am either. How do you write so beautifully in such a short period of time? I love how you take such special notice to subtle things like small notions of behavior & setting! This actually made me really sad tho because it was too short and too painful. Kunj being in London in his family home...without her? How is it the family home when his family isn't fully there? He left her behind thinking she wasn't happy with him but boy oh boy, who knows how tough those three months were?! I loved loved LOOOVED the entire part of you explaining Kunj's POV using the elements, it was so soothing and so expressive of the distance in their relationship. I'm not happy with how Kunj knows Twinkle is feeling hollow because of him but he thinks that leaving her was best.

This was so angsty, it's so definitely your thing dude damn. Amazing job buddy!

WAIT I DONT LIKE YOU FOR THIS:
She was his everything even today. He only wished that her heart truly belonged to him just as he had hopelessly given into her.

My heart just broke sigh. We have a tough road ahead of us 😆


I was listening to Zeplin dude! and I had just finished writing the analysis. I had to get the feels out somewhere.

I know, this idiot in his anger is going to give to do the worst while knowing deep down that he hurt her in the worst way possible. I feel as if this is a bit abrupt but considering it's all emotions, I thought we can let this slide by.

I know! My sister calls me the sadist queen.


Originally posted by: teddyyy

Updated my spot but also another reason I really liked this is because two types of work really attract me: lengthy ones that explain everything and then short ones that leave me with a lot of questions. You have me thinking about every equation in the three families right now and how much things changed. So again, so we'll done!



I cannot imagine what the Tanejas would think of Kunj after he pulls this move and how the Luthras will use it to their benefit. Sarnas would probably be miserable too without their light of sunshine!
Edited by areeba_blossom - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Dude I love this. My feels right now 😳
I am so excited for this leap now!


P.S your pm made me crack up, on a roll you are 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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made me sooo emotional...it was sooo touchy...no words it was one of the best os I have read...really amazing...kunjs last line made me sooo emotional...why was he saying so...twinkles heart only belong to him...I cant bear such dialogues...do write more diii..lovin' ur style of writing
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I LOVE THIS!!!
So beautifully illustrated, I can picture and feel everything.
How I wish we could get something like this, I love these emotional separations, because the making up is intense.
Our boy is so blinded by his hurt and anger that he can't see what's really in her heart, if only he knew😒
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: amlavs

Nice areeba..

Luved it...



Thank you Lav

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