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Posted: 9 years ago
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This idea was in my head like a bhatakti aatma from quite sometime. Never got how to put it in words. I am not a fab writer. But this is one of the best ideas I got so couldn't help writing. I am super excited to write the next part because that's where the Twist comes in. Hope u guys like it. Positive n Negative reviews r welcome.

Currently this is SS is unnamed . The first Chapter is named after my favourite song called Dark Paradise by Lana del Ray.
Chapter 1- Dark Paradise
Kunj POV

I rushed out of my house. I took the car. She couldn't have gone that far I though to myself .I drive like a mad man through the streets of Amritsar. I couldn't spot her anywhere,it started frightening me. What if she does something to herself. I hated myself for blaming her. It wasn't her fault she was innocent. All she did was protect our family and most importantly me. She did everything alone so that she could save me. But I didn't trust her. I let her down. I let her love down.

I stopped the car and ran towards her.

"Twinkle!" I shout. She turns. She looks at me. She runs towards me and gives me a tight hug. She was crying so badly. I hugged her back.

I could stay in her arms forever, she was my world, . "Sorry Twinkle, I should have trusted you" I tell her cupping her cheeks. "Kunj it's not your fault, it's mine I don't deserve you or anyone" she says taking my hands off her cheeks. "I always end up hurting the people I love, I don't deserve this life" she tells me moving a step back from me.

"No it's not your fault, you did all this to protect our family" I tell her . "No Kunj it is my fault, I am a horrible person" she says crying even more. "I hate myself" she shouts with anger and stomps her foot. "Hey listen to me,control yourself it's not your fault" I come a step closer to her.</font>

"Kunj stay away from me, I am really horrible" she shouts moving back. Her lips were shivering and tears were rolling down her eyes. She steps back.

"Twinkle! Don't move back " I shout running towards her.

She keeps one more step back she skids and falls. I catch her hand right in time. She hangs by my hand. "Help!" I shout holding her as tight as possible.

"Kunj leave me please" she says trying to break off my hold. "Never!" I tell her. I try to pull her up slowly. It becomes harder as she tries to break free. "Kunj I love you" she tells giving a small smile.

A Tinge of pain takes over my hand as she pricks it with her nail."Ouch!" I scream. I let her hand go.

"Twinkle! No! No!" I shout ,tears roll down my eyes. I wanted to jump down myself. But then few men stop me. They came because I called for help. I begged them to leave me, I wanted to be with my Twinkle. I lost her forever. It's all because of me. "I love you Twinkle, please come back" I cry ,but it was useless . I lost her forever.

5 months later

It was a long day. I just finished work and came home.

I had to handle the wedding planning alone now.

I went straight to my room. I almost avoid talking to anyone. After I lost her that day. Bebe and Mom come every now and then they try to cheer me up but nothing worked.

I just wanted her back. I missed her. I closed my eyes thats one thing I loved doing.</font>

I saw her gorgeous face, her beautiful smile and her Twinkling eyes. She tells me to smile with her hand.I smiled as Tears rolled down my eyes. I miss her more than my life. It was a paradise in my head. All I had left was her memories.



Every time I close my eyes
It's like a dark paradise
No one compares to you
I'm scared that you
Won't be waiting on the other side
Every time I close my eyes
It's like a dark paradise
No one compares to you
I'm scared that you
Won't be waiting on the other side


To be continued...
Hope that u liked it
Sorry it was kinda short





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Posted: 9 years ago
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amazing written from kunj's pov...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: _Meena_

amazing written from kunj's pov...

Yup sorry forgot to mention that
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It didn't seem like it was your first attempt dear...was really good
Waiting for the next part.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: AbhiGya_ArHi

It didn't seem like it was your first attempt dear...was really good

Waiting for the next part.

Its not my first its my second
N I find it so hard to write
But I want to write
Ik that makes no sense😆

Glad that u liked it

Edited by harshi2000 - 9 years ago
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Harshi, his is super good dude!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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On m freaking gawd
That was so so good harshi !!
I mean WOW !!!
The concept and the writing !
Haye ! Too good yaar !!
I love the song too yaar
Now.do me. A favour nd update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Harshi girl ur writing is improving. Kunjs pov was wow and amazingly written. Love u loads baby bear. Hope u continue this soon. I mean if possible immediately. Btw ur dp is cute of a sweet bear.
Hope u update ur ff also fast. Thanks for pm harshi and continue fast like asap.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is sooo goood!
God you left us on a cliffie!
Update soon.
Loved it a lot!
Love
Sayli
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Behnaaa!!!!! 🤗
That was awesome!! 👏
Was there only one chapter like bhatakthi aatma in ur head?? 😆🤣
Do update the second part soon! 😃
And thanks for the pm!! 😊

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