HUM HAI RAHI PYAAR KE_MANAN-CHAP-4[pg-4]

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Holaaa people
MY NAME IS NISHCHITHA
So FINALLYY here to pen down my story. I have been in this forum for almost one year I guess and now its time to start writing my idea.
I dont really if didnt like the story.And you are always welcome to bash me with tomatoes,eggs,chappals,etc., whatever you feel like I am always ready for it. This is my first time, so you guys have to help me in many things i guess. And haa i don't know how to PM. you guys have to help me in that too.
Now about me:
Frankly there is nothing much.I just completed my tenth standard. and i am free,so decided to write a story on our very own MANAN. And yaa i am a south indian. so agar meri hindi mein kuch galati hogayi dont blame me coz I am not used to it. But still i will try and use a better hindi .

Now finally coming to the story it is a sweet love story of MANAN who is in a live in relationship and are deeply in love with each other. About twists and turns I dont have any idea about it right now but may be in future something can happen, so till then enjoy our cute MANAN's cute romance.

INDEX:
PROLOGUE-----DOWN
CHARTER I-----PAGE 1
CHAPTER II----PAGE 2
CHARACTER SKETCH----PAGE 2
CHAPTER III----PAGE 3
CHAPTER IV----PAGE 4



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Posted: 9 years ago
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PROLOGUE:
A girl around her mid 20's was leaning on the floor of her dance class on her stomach.She closed her eyes and was waiting for the love of her life.
She was reminscing all the moments spent with him and a smile was spread across her pretty face.
YES u all guessed it right.
The girl is none other than Nandini Murthy.Suddenly a boy came from behind.He pecked her cheeks and showered her with his SORRY'S while she was just admiring him.Then she told...
NANDINI:U know MANIK,Navya ne kaha ke tum aaj nahi aaoge.
then Manik took a break from his list of reasons and leaned beside her facing the ceiling and said...
MANIK:Acha, aur tumne kya kaha..{removed the tresses which were covering her forehead}
NANDINI:Maine kaha ki MY MANIK never forgets me.
Haa thoda late zaroor hota hain [hits his forehead] but vo mujhe kabhi nahi boolta.
saying this she pecked his lips.
Manik just admired at her trust on him and pecked her forehead holding her by her waist.
NANDINI:[to tease him] but haa Manik late aane ke liye tumhe punishment zaroor milegi.
MANIK:Aur kya punishment milegi mujhe [knowing that it wouldn't be too difficult]
NANDINI:aaa...tumhe...mujhe...hmmm...milgaya idea... so Manik Malhotra tumhe mujhe kal shaam ko PAANI PURI date ke liye le jaana padega...
MANIK:What!!!!Hello Madam...I am not letting you eat that unhygenic street food for god sake.. and haa uske badle main tum jo mangoge i am going to give it to you but not this..
NANDINI:But Manik yeh tumhara punishment hain..and tumhe mujhe le jana padega..chahe kuchbhi ho jaaye[with a cute pout]
Then Manik thought of something and said
MANIK:[pecking her pout]OK meri jaan now dont get angry..acha now give me my energy dose for which i was craving from past 2 hours..
saying this he pulled her closer...and just when their lips were about to meet BOOOMMM!!!!!
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So guys finally here is the prologue
Hope you liked it. and sorry for any blunders
and ha feel free to share ur thoughts about the story.
Suggestions are heartily welcomed

Don't forget to like or comment.
Edited by crazzyyy_doll - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#3
PEOPLE
I ALSO WANTED TO SAY THAT PLEASE HELP ME IN SENDING PM'S
COZ I REALLY DON'T HAVE ANY IDEA ABOUT IT
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Posted: 9 years ago
#4
Hey Nishchitha
This is Niti
The story line is amazing
It will be interesting to see MANAN in live in relationship
Continue soon
And yes I want the character sketch
If u can...
Edited by Nqueen - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#5
Interesting storyline...
Waiting for the update...
Cont soon...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#6
CHAPTER I
Just when he was about to take her lips into a passionate kiss BOOMM!!!
The door got opened and the watchman came inside and said...
WATCHMAN:Didi aap abhi tak yahi par hain maine socha sab chale gaye hain toh saare kamre lock...
and his sentence was cut by Nandini who said
NANDINI: Haa chotu hum bas jaa hi rahe the...[turning to Manik] chalo Manik...
and without waiting for his answer dragged him out from their...
IN CAR:-
After a feww minutes of silent journey Manik decided to break the silence...so he said or rather asked...
MANIK:Soo kaise raha tumhara aaj ka din???
NANDINI:As usual normal hi thi... and haa aaj naa maine akele sab ke saamne ek performance kiya tha...wo jo kal raat tumhe dikayi thi aurr...
and she stopped her sentence in between as she saw a pani puri stallon on one of the streets then she started muttering...
NANDINI:Aww ur looking soo tasty today...lekin aaj main tumhare paas nahin aa paungi... lekin haa kal pura shaam tumhare naam... coz Manik ne mujhe promise kiya tha...
MANIK:Nandini aur kitna baat karoge aapne Pani Puri se... come on...we crossed that street long back...
NANDINI:Haa Manik wo street ko guzre hue bahot samay ho gaya hain but Pani Puri tho meri dil mein basthi hain...and main usse kahin bhi, aur kabhi bhi baat kar sakthi hoon...
MANIK:Acha...agar Pani Puri tumhare dil mein basta hain to main kaha rehtha hoon.[with a cute pout]
NANDINI:[With a love filled voice]Manik mere dil ka malik ho tum...aur Pani Puri tho bas rent pe rehta hain mere dil mein...
MANIK:[to tease her]Kya baat hain Ms.Murthy...aaj bada pyaar aarahahe mujh par...
NANDINI:Pyaar tho roz hota hain Mr. Malhotra...aur din bar din badtha bhi hain...[blushes]
MANIK:Oye hoye...koi tho rok lo...aaj ka iraada kya hain madam...
NANDINI:Hmmm...iraade tho bahot hain...
then Manik parked the car under a tree and said pulling her closer by her arm...
MANIK:Tho dikhaao apne iraade...[in a husky voice]
NANDINI:[Freeing herself from his grip] dikhaoingi...dikhaoingi...jaldi kya hain...[whispered close to his ear...dont forget sabar ka phal meetha hotha hain...
MANIK:Tho main uss phal ka besabri se intezaar kar raha hoon... saying this he started his car and drove towards their home i.e.,their "JANNAT"
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PHEWWW!!!!!!
FINALLY HO GAYA ...
U KNOW I HAD TO TYPE THIS TWO OR THREE TIMES AS IT WAS VANISHED BCOZ OF MY CRAZY LAPTOP
BUT ANYWAY I COMPLETED IT.
HOPE IT IS UP TO THE MARK. AND IF IT IS NOT GOOD NAA THO CHAPPALS ,TAMATAR, EGGS,JO BHI HO, I WILL HAPPILY WELCOME THEM...
ONE MORE THING PLEASE DONT TEASE ME IF MY HINDI IS BAD..I SERIOUSLY CANT HELP IT...COZ I AM NOT A HINDI SPEAKING PERSON...

AND HAA DONT FORGET TO LIKE OR COMMENT

TATA,
SEE YA...

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Posted: 9 years ago
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lovely update
cont soon😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amazing storyline...
Superb update...
Luved it...
Plz continue soon...
Waiting eagerly...
Take care...
Stay blessed...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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CHAPTER II-
After entering "JANNAT" Nandini directly went to the kitchen and started doing something.Manik came after parking the car and saw her doing something fully engrossed in something.He sighed and went near to lift her up in hin manly arms, but before he could do that Nandini turned and said
NANDINI:[Pointing her finger at him] Don't you dare stop me Manik from cooking. [turning to the counter] Navya ne aaj kuch Recipe di hain tho I was just trying it. Haa I know u warned me to do any kind of cooking. But Manik i want to do this. And don't worry you are going to love this. Maine Navya se specially ye recipe li thi coz I want to prepare this for you..so I'm doing this...and that is final.
Manik was just admiring her ,thanking his stars to send her in his life. After she finished he pecked her head and said
MANIK:Acha ok.. but this is the last time you are cooking something next time se you are not doing it...and for now let me also help you...
And he washed his hands and was about to remove his blazer,when Nandini stopped him and said...
NANDINI:Nahi Manik agar tum mujhe help karoge tho mera surprise ka falooda ho jaye ga and i want it to be a surprise till the end.. so please let me execute my surprise in my way ...til then you go and freshen up and complete your presentation...I will call you once it is done...
MANIK:Oh god!!! main tho presentation ke bare main bhool hi gaya...thank you remainding me Nandini you are my saviour[pecked her lips]..so main wo karunga jo tumne mujhe karne ko bola tha and in the meanwhile tum mere liye surprise prepare karna and at the same time Miss Me..
NANDINI:Always...[smiles]
With this Manik went upstairs while Nandini made herself busy in her surprise.Time flew like water and after 1 hour Nandini called Manik to have dinner.
MANIK:[While coming down the stairs] so is my surprise ready[rubbing his hands and licking his lips]
NANDINI:It is ready and also waiting for you...[bringing a covered plate from the kitchen in which her special dish was there]
MANIK:So what are we waiting for let's attack
saying this he sat on the chair and pulled Nandi in is lap
NANDINI:Hmm...so 3...2...1...here you gooo...
And she opened the dish,when Manik saw the dish his happiness crossed all the bounderies as he wanted to eat the same dish which his mother used to make when he was living with them in abroad...
MANIK: MOMOSS...[he looked at her and pulled her into a bone crashing hug]...Nandini u dont know how i am feeling right now...[breaking the hug] how did you get to know that i wanted to eat them from so long...
NANDINI:That doesn't matter...what matters is did you like the surprise ...
MANIK:Like it kyaa I loved it and i love you sooo much [gave her a tight kiss on her cheek]..
NANDINI:Achaa achaa i understand but kya tumne decide kiya hain ki in momos ko sirf admire karne ka socha hain ya phir kaoge bhi...chalo now let's eat fast as tumhara sabar ka phal bhi tho wait kar raha hain tumhare liye...
MANIK:Kya baat hain...aaj kuch special hain kya...ki saare surprises aaj hi organise kar rahe ho...
NANDINI:Special...hmmm...special tho roz hota hain as main tumhare saath hoon...that is why i decided today to make your day special..as tumhe mera thank you bolna acha nahi lagta...
MANIK:Kyaa baat hain Ms.Murthy aaj kal badi smart ho gayi hain...shayad sab credit mujhe dena chahiye as u rubbed off from me...tho iska reward bhi tho do mujhe...
saying this he leaned forward to aproach her lips but before he could do that Nandini fed him momo and said
NANDINI:Sabar Mr.Malhotra sabar...
MANIK:Wohi tho nahi hota hain meri jaan...
and both of them giggled. Then Manik pulled her closer and asked...
MANIK:Acha yeh batao...yeh recipe tumhe mom ne bataya naa...
NANDINI:Tumhe kaise pata chala...
MANIK:Ha..ha..ha.. madam mujhe itna dumb mat samajna..bachpan se kata aaya hoon and we are so attached to them ki agar 100 momos bhi rakh ke puchon ge ki mumma ne kaun sa banaya hain..tho bhi main aur dhruv ankh bandh kar ke bata denge...aur tum batao yeh baat mujhse chupayi kyun..
NANDINI:Wo mumma ne hi bola tha to hide it and to test you...ki whether tum guess kar paoge ya nahi...
MANIK:Hmmm... tho mere sath game kela gaya tha aur mujhe pata bhi nahin chala
NANDINI:[Giggled and said] Haan...acha agar tum thank you kehna chaho tho mumma se kaho unho ne hi mujhe ye idea diya tha jab maine unhe mera plan i.e., how to make you feel special,samjaya tha
MANIK:[While feeding] haa wo main kal bol dunga
NANDINI:Areyy kal kyun aur aaj kyun nahin[feeding him]..
MANIK:Kyun ki aaj raat main bahot busy hoon...u know what i mean...[with a naughty smirk playing on hin lips]
Nandini blushed and changed the topic..Soon they finished their dinner with a lot of teasing,tickling,talking on random thing and most importantly with plenty number of pecks from each other...and headed towards the room for their another blissfull night...
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UPDATE KATAM
NOW U GUYS TELL ME SHOULD I CONTINUE THE NEXT UPDATE WITH THEIR ROMANCE OR SHOULD I DIRECTLY SKIP TO THE MORNING...
AND OTHER IMPORTANT THING--CAN ANYONE TELL ME HOW TO UPDATE THE TITLE WITH NEW CHAPTERS COZ I AM NOT GETTING HOW TO DO IT.TO ANSWER IT PM ME OR POST IT HERE ONLY..AS YOU WISH..BUT PLEASE HELP..
ACHA NOW I WILL STOP MY BAK BAK...I SERIOUSLY TALK A LOT...
AND BEFORE GOING, DON'T FORGET TO LIKE OR COMMENT...
TATA
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Posted: 9 years ago
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CHARACTER SKETCH:
MALHOTRA'S
RAJ MALHOTRA:He is a successful businessman.Loves his children and wife very much.Father of Dhruv and Manik.Lives in london and handles the branch of Malhotra Industries over their.
NYONIKA MALHOTRA:She is a social worker.Owns a NGO. Loves her family very much and can to anything for their safety and happiness.Mother of Manik and Dhruv.Lives in london.
MANIK MALHOTRA:He is the youngest successful businessman in India.Can't bear a word against his family.He loves Nandini and is in a live-in relationship with her.
DHRUV MALHOTRA:He lives in London with his parents and is in a relationship with Aliya.Shy and quite same as in the show.

MURTHY'S:
RAMESH MURTHY:He lives in France.Handles Murthy Industries there,which is in the partnership with Malhotra industries.Best friend of Raj Malhotra.Loves his family very much.
SANDHYA MURTHY:She too lives in france with her husband. She is an interior designer. dear friend of Nyonika Malhotra.Can go to any extent for the sake of her family
NANDINI MURTHY:Sweet, bubbly girl who is a dancer and also handles Murthy Industries in India sometimes.She is madly and deeply in love with Manik.loves her family a lot.
NANDITA MURTHY:Sister of Nandini.lives in France with her family.She is doing her MBA.
CABIR:Same as in the show .loves Navya.lives with her mother.best friend of Manik. works in malhotra industries as Manik's manager.
NAVYA:Loves cabir. best friend of Nandini and goes to the dance class where Nandini goes.

JANNAT is only MANAN'S Residence.
Murthy and Malhotra Mansion is beside each other.
Murthy's and Malhotra's come for vacation to India in every 6 months, then MANAN also shift to their respective mansion til the vacation is finished.
Everyone is aware of the the relation b/w our MANAN.
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