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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: priyanvs

nice update dear

loved it 😃😳


Thank u😳😳 see I told you all positive things 😳😳😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: papu24011999

Sorry for being late!!! i have my 12th board exams going on...so only...sorry!! and amazing work!! loved them!! and thanks for the PM!! pls do write more!!


OMG i thought i was the only who would come to IF during board exams .. I want to wish you all the very best for them !! I will update asap😳😳 But you concentrate on yr studies too
thankss!!!


Originally posted by: Duumps

Awesome cute update.

Loved TwiNJ bonding and comfort level increasing their trying to understand each other.
Thanks for the pm,
Please update soon.


aww I am glad I was able to convey that...like u said get comfortable in each others company😳😳

Thankss soo much

Originally posted by: kusharberry

awesome update as always

i just loved it very much
they both wanna get to know each other
so r u planning to bring dhruv in picture in next update
plzzz do continue soon


Hehe you are predicting almost right but anam does not want Dhruv to come hehe
Read to no more (gosh I sound so weird when I say that)😆😆

Thankss soo much for all the appreciation

Originally posted by: Sherni_Jerry

Griffy wow such fantastic updates (last two) absolutely loved them <3
sorry for late comments, not getting much time this week ;(


aww It is okay .. work comes first😳😳 I am glad u liked them!!!
Thanks soo much

Originally posted by: Anam Ali

Amazing Update

Loved the way Kunj wants to know about Twinkle
Loved the bonding they share
Dont bring dhruv bck
cont soon


Hahaha u so dont want Dhruv back hehe... you r too cute anam!! but wont it make things interesting
(We will discuss on whats app😃😉)

Love u always
Thanks

Originally posted by: 3dancelover

loved it once again

what if Kunj finds out about Dhruv
I want Twinj lolol
continue soon


and what you want will happen😃😉😉 I guarantee that😳😳😳
Thankss soo much
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Posted: 9 years ago
comment for chapter 3:

I must say this update was delicate..but still some thorns sticking here and there
the way u potrayed her dilemma...ohhh that was amazing👏..to say u the truth this is the only ff which works sooo beautifully on monologues..there r rare mentionings about the place,the situation in the ff ...the magic here is that u explain it to us through their monologues...awsm writing skills and awsm imagination...their monologues give a wonderful depth to the story...me as a reader is completely able to relate to whatever the leads r experiencing..and that talent of urs to explain a story this beautifully thro monologues is really amazing👏👏
these colour variations r really suiting😳..i guess I have not mentioned before...these colours also seem to say something😳
the last line of twinkles monologue...'I let you do it'...that was a gripping line indeed...even in kunjs monologue 'what were they trying to tell me'...I don't why but that line holds a charm..i have seen it being used before in many other stories...but the way u incorporated the line in that portion...the mentioning of her brown eyes...I loved it😳😳
so as a whole ..I loved the update a lot😳😳😛
my comment is the latest😆😆...sorry ...I had to be busy with my studies otherwise maybe I wud fail just like my twinkle😆😆...cuz I am addicted to reading ffs here on the forum😉😛and I would have ended up spending all my time if I ever came here

will comment for other updates in a short while😛
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: mahadev07

comment for chapter 3:

I must say this update was delicate..but still some thorns sticking here and there
the way u potrayed her dilemma...ohhh that was amazing👏..to say u the truth this is the only ff which works sooo beautifully on monologues..there r rare mentionings about the place,the situation in the ff ...the magic here is that u explain it to us through their monologues...awsm writing skills and awsm imagination...their monologues give a wonderful depth to the story...me as a reader is completely able to relate to whatever the leads r experiencing..and that talent of urs to explain a story this beautifully thro monologues is really amazing👏👏
these colour variations r really suiting😳..i guess I have not mentioned before...these colours also seem to say something😳
the last line of twinkles monologue...'I let you do it'...that was a gripping line indeed...even in kunjs monologue 'what were they trying to tell me'...I don't why but that line holds a charm..i have seen it being used before in many other stories...but the way u incorporated the line in that portion...the mentioning of her brown eyes...I loved it😳😳
so as a whole ..I loved the update a lot😳😳😛
my comment is the latest😆😆...sorry ...I had to be busy with my studies otherwise maybe I wud fail just like my twinkle😆😆...cuz I am addicted to reading ffs here on the forum😉😛and I would have ended up spending all my time if I ever came here

will comment for other updates in a short while😛


Ok now you have left me speechless.. I dont know what to say.. your comment has touched my heart and I almost had happy tears by the end of the comment.. Thank u soo much soo much!!
I cant say it enough
I have not received such appreciation ever!! I am so glad that I am able to make you see through my words.. through the feelings and how beautifully you described what I am trying to convey is just heart warming.. I am so so glad that I posted it as TWINJ version.. I am so glad to be here and to get such a positive response. It is totally amazing!!
Please dont let your studies suffer in anyway and read only when you can
But thanks soo much
A big 🤗 to you .. means a lot
and you pretty much made my day
Thanks soo much
Love u!
Griffy


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Posted: 9 years ago
comment for chapter 4 :

this was sooo lovely😛😳😳...oohhooo twinkle...she makes me smile always😛..shes sooo cute😛😛...I completely imagined the whole scenario...her expressions r the most cutest😳😳...after reading each update...I feel more and more related towards their characters. ...amazing monologues once again👏... these monologues...in the story have managed to evoke a beautiful essence in the story...twinkle seems like tangled in a mess ...poor thing...her instincts...the feelings were very well portrayed
kunj is soo crazy behind her😆😆...admiring scene was sooo good...now he might say rain is the best😉😉...eee the feels were there !!!😳😳...and the last monologue😳😳...after two epis of heartbreaking twinj scenes ..I was quite disturbed..not in serious sense..just the way a fan wud feel if her fav Jodi is suffering and in pain ..but now...I feel so good reading these ..my twinj shipper heart feels sooo much at peace now.😳😳..hey thanx for all the pms...I love u sooo much 😛😳😳


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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: griffy.fz



Ok now you have left me speechless.. I dont know what to say.. your comment has touched my heart and I almost had happy tears by the end of the comment.. Thank u soo much soo much!!
I cant say it enough
I have not received such appreciation ever!! I am so glad that I am able to make you see through my words.. through the feelings and how beautifully you described what I am trying to convey is just heart warming.. I am so so glad that I posted it as TWINJ version.. I am so glad to be here and to get such a positive response. It is totally amazing!!
Please dont let your studies suffer in anyway and read only when you can
But thanks soo much
A big 🤗 to you .. means a lot
and you pretty much made my day
Thanks soo much
Love u!
Griffy


u deserve the appreciation..u r an amazing writer...
ofc u r able to do that ..these monologues does give soo many feels
even I am glad I got to read this story
now I am able to do it in bits...once the exams r over ..I wont make much delay in commenting..
u r welcome😳😳 big hug to u tooo
I am glad I was able to do that😛
love u tooo... 😳😳sis???bro??
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: mahadev07

comment for chapter 4 :

this was sooo lovely😛😳😳...oohhooo twinkle...she makes me smile always😛..shes sooo cute😛😛...I completely imagined the whole scenario...her expressions r the most cutest😳😳...after reading each update...I feel more and more related towards their characters. ...amazing monologues once again👏... these monologues...in the story have managed to evoke a beautiful essence in the story...twinkle seems like tangled in a mess ...poor thing...her instincts...the feelings were very well portrayed
kunj is soo crazy behind her😆😆...admiring scene was sooo good...now he might say rain is the best😉😉...eee the feels were there !!!😳😳...and the last monologue😳😳...after two epis of heartbreaking twinj scenes ..I was quite disturbed..not in serious sense..just the way a fan wud feel if her fav Jodi is suffering and in pain ..but now...I feel so good reading these ..my twinj shipper heart feels sooo much at peace now.😳😳..hey thanx for all the pms...I love u sooo much 😛😳😳



OMG ... you are gonna give me reviews for each.. I am already grinning at that thought yaar thank u 😃 I am excited to read the comments hehehhe
haha you will read more cute scenes .. read whenever you can .. I promise all positivity and this FF will bring lots of smiles to you and others!!! I am soo glad to have found a reader who is so involved in my story.. I am really glad the monologues are working so well.. that is the kind of writing I like to do
Thanks for all the lovely words dear
and yh love u more
and I am a she 😆 😃😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: mahadev07


u deserve the appreciation..u r an amazing writer...
ofc u r able to do that ..these monologues does give soo many feels
even I am glad I got to read this story
now I am able to do it in bits...once the exams r over ..I wont make much delay in commenting..
u r welcome😳😳 big hug to u tooo
I am glad I was able to do that😛
love u tooo... 😳😳sis???bro??


Aww I am glad to hear all that
I want to wish you the very best for yoyr exams!! I hope you ace them!!😳😳😳 I will be waiting for your comments

Thankss for making my day
means a lot to me

love u
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Posted: 9 years ago
You all have been amazing.. super sweet and awesome to me and I want to thank how much your comments ..likes mean to me..
Thank you soo much

Here goes a long part..please let me know how it is😳

Part 14

Lost souls do find their home..

Tears do find the hands that stop them ...

Cracks in heart do find their healer

And just like this I was whole again...

I had returned...

"And I like your smile the most"

I turned red... he had whispered that near my ear.. and I knew.. no one had ever made me feel this way.. and I could live off this memory forever...

I turned to look at him..

And all I found was love in his eyes.. pure love

For me..

The thought itself warmed my soul...Life could be that simple? I have finally found that person who would just erase my pain...?

"Yes you have" My heart whispered..

As my eyes remained fixed on his... as if something had captured me...

To tell the truth

His love captured me...and I wanted to remain captured till eternity..

My heart knew .. he was the one...

He inched a bit nearer... my heartbeats silenced.. for the first time...as if they knew.. they knew it was not the time to trouble me.. as if the world wanted to stop for me .. so I could savor this moment..

Everything around me was silent.. just him and me ...his eyes and mine...and slowly inching closer...

Was it the right thing to do ? I hardly knew him? What would happen when he knows? Shouldn't I wait ?

The multiple questions were suddenly silenced by my heart...

...

I looked at her.. My words had a definite affect on her..

There was no more fooling me that she did not love me ... or had no feelings for me..

My mind almost laughed at how I can think after all this .. that I didn't affect her in any way..

In camp how she had held on to my hand.. How she let me lead her..

It all came back to me..

I had known and it felt like since an eternity that we were meant to be..

Such force that drove us to each other was unique.. she was unique...

No one ever had that kind of effect on me... but she did..

She turned and I saw her innocent brown eyes.. staring into mine eyes..

And slowly I understood what they were speaking...they were speaking of love

And only love.. pure love

I knew I didn't want to ever let her go..

Her eyes drew me nearer to her..

I inched a bit closer to her love filled eyes.. I didn't know what I was planning to do..

All I wanted was to stay like this forever... I had found my home.. in her eyes.. and I planned to stay there till eternity...

How in little time.. I seemed to have submitted slowly and completely to her..

Words didn't matter... nor anything else.. all I knew was I wanted to make her mine...

My heartbeats said the same.. silencing my mind of all the innumerable questions..

And ...

Her cell buzzed..

The trance was broken..

I didn't know who was more red .. her or me..

I immediately drew back hurriedly took off my belt and got out.

She did the same..

We had landed in front of her house..

I was glad no one was around..

It was a private moment and I wished it remain so...

...

I thanked and cursed my phone at the same time..

It was Chinki obviously..

I looked around as if now only I had realized that we were in a public area..

As if my other senses had just hit me..

My face felt so hot..

What was just about to happen?? Oh My GOD

I freaked out almost and literally wanted to run towards home..but my legs were refusing..

Kunj was following me.. slowly lost in thoughts too..

My heartbeats were back to racing.. My body was behaving weirdly..

My mind was in shock.. I felt weird..

What if something had happened?

"It would have been wonderful" My heart whispered and I swear I could hear my heartbeats giggling..

My mind was not angry either behaving as if it was the obvious thing to happen.

I could not even turn and look at Kunj.. too embarrassed and yet My heart wished to know his thoughts..

...

What the hell was I doing?? What if I scared her off?

She looks terrified...

What is bloody wrong with me..??

I cursed my heart which was laughing loudly...

My mind didn't help matters...

I cant lose her...what if she thinks I am some creep and goes away

And my mind almost said a logical answer

"Her eyes? Didn't they speak enough.. stop muttering crap ok?"

I just don't want to lose her..I muttered desperately

And as if she had heard me

She turned.. and smiled.. and the world was alright again

...

I turned wanting to know what he was going through.. he looked scared..

Scared of what? ...

And a thought ran across my heart

Scared to lose me?

Not a chance..I thought to myself

And my face broke into a smile..and as if it was all he was waiting for ...

His face broke into a smile too...

I opened the door of my house..

It was dark and my heart knew

The lights were switched on with people screaming "Happy Birthday"

I looked around.. many of my friends stood there smiling their heart out wishing me sincerely

Wasn't I already having the best birthday ever?

I can't complain.. this felt good...

Chinki stood in the middle with a cake..

"Happy birthday Twinkle!!!!"

The next twenty minutes or so were all about singing birthday wishes .. I offering cake to everyone..

My eyes searched for him and he stood leaning at corner of the room looking at me almost admiringly

I heard whispers

"Kunj is here!"

"Look Kunj made it to Twinkle's party! Weird!"

Well my group of friends were the nerds and not so involved in the college's so called cool group..

No wonder Kunj had found his way to the end of the room..

I made my way to him... he had made my birthday special enough.. I didnt want to leave him alone

"good excuse Twinkle"

My heart whispered giggling

I was sure he knew about Chinki's plan

"So you knew?"

He gave his killer smile and ran his hands at the back of his head..

"Well..aren't you gonna offer me cake"

I turned red and gestured the cake for him to take ..

But he had already opened his mouth.. I went even more red..but I knew I had to..in fact I wanted to

And fed him a little of it with my hands almost shaking

I was going to let go off it.. when he caught my hand and fed me the rest..

His touch created havoc and yet gave me peace every time..and just felt right..

I was again captured by his eyes.. the world and party forgotten..

The music volume was suddenly increased to loud and I was dragged back to the party...

I turned Chinki was looking at me and almost winked..

My friends though studious were crazy about music and dancing..and the room almost transformed to dance floor..

Some came to drag me towards the center I politely refused

And each friend of mine would come and look at me..and then at Kunj..

Give a devilish grin and walk off..

How could they all behave like Chinki..I almost giggled at their attitude.. these people were my good friends who didn't judge me.. and I was glad I had them

I sat on the floor leaning on the wall and Kunj also quickly slid down..

"So you don't dance?" Kunj whispered in my ear

He was too close to me.. more than usual generally there would be distance between us.. but not anymore... our shoulders were almost touching..

And to tell the truth I did not mind..My heart giggled even harder

I shook my head saying no..

" Then I don't either"

He whispered.. and I looked at him smiling..

...

I looked at her happy satisfied face.. for the first time ever she looked relaxed... and even when so close to me...

She didn't seem to mind my closeness to her.. just like back in the car.. she didn't run away...

Silently she had accepted me.. and I couldn't stop thinking of imagining my future with her...

I might be getting ahead of time.. but her presence didn't feel temporary..

It felt like pieces of my puzzled life had finally started to make sense..

How I never had found real love...how in-spite of so many proposals... I could not say yes to any girl

How none ever made me feel what she did...

I might not know everything about her... but it hardly mattered..

When someone silently sits by you in their own birthday party knowing I didn't know anyone else in the party itself spoke volumes...

I wanted to tell her what I felt about her..

Say it all out and hear the three beautiful words from her too ...

But for the moment I just wanted to sit beside her attempting to carry casual conversations and stealing glances at her ...that was enough for me

...for the moment...

...


Hope you all like this part!

Do tell me!


Thankss

Griffy




Edited by griffy.fz - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
I LOVED IT!!! Di...WONDERFUL AS ALWAYS!!!😳
Thanks for PM!!!😳

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