The Best of Things - FF (RagYa, SwaSan) +16 Part 44 on Pg 145 - Page 4

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Posted: 9 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: Smilelicious

Read all the 3 parts and i must say you are doing a great work 👏
Love the way you are slowly unfolding the story. SwaSan's conversation was very nice and Swara agreed with Sanskar 😊
Eagerly waiting for the next update 😳


Thank you so much -

yeah, Sanskaar has the power to change Swara's mind! She respects his judgement.
I'll try to update Chap 4 today.
Bubble

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Posted: 9 years ago
#32
Very nice ! I like your version of lakshya better than the TV version ,here atleast you feel a twinge of sympathy for him unlike the TV version .Loved the SwaSan convo :) Looking forward to the next update !
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Posted: 9 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: gayu6

Nice part. So he too don't want her to cum back in his life. Bt anyway he want to b free from ragini at least


Yeah, he doesn't like Ragini very much 😛

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Posted: 9 years ago
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The Best of Things

(RagLak, Swasan) Fan Fiction Series
By Bubble

Chapter 4

Something changed for Lakshya after he overheard Sanskaar and Swara discussing him on the terrace. Gratitude and tenderness towards his brother, who had understood him when no one had... Love and regard for Swara for being the generous, fair-minded person she always was.

But also, seeing them together...

Lakshya had heard enough for that evening but having stayed hidden throughout their revealing conversation, he was forced to stay till they left.

After discussing him and Ragini so intensely, suddenly their mood changed like quicksilver.

Sanskaar had cocked his head to one side, and looked at Swara with a glint in his eye: "Waise, Swara Devi, if you really want to do this Ganga trip, we better do it before the divorce papers are filed. No one is going to let us travel together after that! Can you believe my coming to the baadi and saying to Maa, yes, we're divorced but we've been planning this wonderful trip along the sacred river, please let your daughter go with me as friends'. She'd kill me!"

"Haw!" laughed Swara at once, "I never thought of that! Do you think it's wrong to travel alone with you?"

She made a dismal face as she considered that, but brightened up as she dismissed the idea.

"But I couldn't be safer than with you, and plus, this is our special plan... I don't care! We'll never have a chance to do this after our talaq. By the way, I better gather all the evidence I need for the divorce - I'll place a secret camera to film your snores..."

"Hah!" he laughed right back, "I don't need evidence, I need witnesses, who will gladly testify to domestic violence against the poor husband!"

Swara stuck her tongue out and him and dragged him over to the swing again. "Chalo, finish these cookies, so that I can take the plate back downstairs."

"Jaldi kya hai, Swara, let's just sit here for a while!"

"Are you feeling cold?" he asked, after two minutes, turning to look at her.

"No, it's quite pleasant still," she replied.

"Phir apna dupatta do na? I'm feeling cold."

"What a guy!" Swara scoffed at him, unspooling the silk dupatta from her neck, "he sleeps with AC on every month of the year, and can't handle a gentle breeze!"

"That's precisely the point, Swara Devi, I like the air temperature under my control," he retorted, as he wrapped her multi-coloured dupatta tightly around himself.
Listening to them and their camaraderie, the conviction came had slowly come upon Lakshya. They might talk of divorce, but there was NO WAY that Sanskaar would let that happen. He was being very canny, thought Lakshya, so clever! As if he was taming a wild bird, he was sitting utterly still, letting her come up to him, slowly, step by step. By creating a haven of security, he was reeling Swara in with infinite patience! And for the first time, Lakshya was admiring of Sanskaar's sure-footedness when it came to Swara.
And there was another confirmation. He had known for some time now that Swara trusted Sanskaar more than she did anyone in the world, except maybe her mother and Dida. Now, with a sinking of the heart, he believed she loved Sanskaar more than she did anyone in the world, except maybe her mother and Dida.

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Posted: 9 years ago
#35
Wow, awsome update. So Lakshya understood what Sanskaar means to Swara and how comfortable they are with eachother. Maybe he'll try to join the trip with Ragini? Just to mess Sanskaar's plan? Anyways love Sanskaar's attitude.
Pls update soon:)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was such a pleasure to read this update.. So easy going and impactful !

Finally it had bestowed on Lakshya, that Swasan are for each other n Sanskhar aint playing any games with him.. He is jus being loyal to lady he loves without demanding anything back..

I cnt say this about show, bt as per ur story.. I feel, its only Lakshya who can heal Ragini and show her the right part.. Only he can bring the old ragini back, not anyone in the world would b able to that accept for him.. May be he would help her to come out of her obsession n see d world in lighter means n in this process, falls in love with her.. Thr is a growth tht is needed in Ragya, not coz of pressure or guilt, but out of natural urge to mk it fine.. This is jus my way of thinking 😕

Baki, waitin for the next chapter.. Update soon :)

PS- Hv been a silent reader but its written so beautifully that made me leave a comment !
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Posted: 9 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: arohijsp

Wow, awsome update. So Lakshya understood what Sanskaar means to Swara and how comfortable they are with eachother. Maybe he'll try to join the trip with Ragini? Just to mess Sanskaar's plan? Anyways love Sanskaar's attitude.
Pls update soon:)


Thanks!
My Lakshya is understanding a lot of things these days 😆😆😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
Awesome update
I loved calling swara devi more from sanskar
Loved bonding b/w swasan
Cont soon
Waiting
Thanx 4 pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
#39
Hey,
Read all four parts at once and I must say it's a great start! Your concept is very interesting. I've buddy requested you, please accept and please PM me when you update. 😛

- Sapna
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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
From just four tiny parts this story has captured my full attention and also a place in my heart. The shades you've brought in Lakshya are praise worthy, he is all flesh and blood here, human and understood, to a certain length justified as well. But after reading this part, especially the last lines where he analyses Sanskar's course of action...am I allowed to feel a tad of fear?
For Ragini in the first part...well she is what we all know she can be.
Swara..her trust developing slowly towards Sanskar is beautifully put here, I loved reading their scene.
Sanskar...you're still building him up, for some reason he feels a mystery here more than on the show, shrewd...is it just me or is he layered here?
All in all, I really love the progress, can't wait to read more. Please continue soon.
-love
Sakura

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