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Posted: 9 years ago
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First time i am posting a is hope everyone will like it 😊
Thanks to my sweetie pie i.e meeramiss18 fr the title nd the editing ma love u ma

A busy city with two phases one side full of rich who run off time with money.
Other phase was they run for time to make money two parts didn't match with each other in anyways. In the rich side a black mercedes crossed the streets, the police and every people saluted the car the car entered the hotel and slowly it moved towards the entrance the server opened the door a man in black suit silver plated watch and with black coolers got out of the car he entered the hotel ,the girls in the lobby were awestruck and staring and drooling at him.
A male voice shouted jalal the black suit man turned and smiled seeing his friend abdul calling him.
Jalal a big millinore in the city a young business man who had never fallen fr a girl, a rude faced beautiful guy, his friend abdul was his personal advisor.
Abdul came to jalal he smiled seeing him ...abdul said room 333 they both walked towards room 333 abdul followed jalal when the room opened everyone stood up and welcomed jalal it was the board meeting of his company .He sat in chairmans seat abdul sat opposite to him the meeting went for 3hrs jalal signaled abdul to wind up by raising his eye brow abdul declared the meeting was over then jalal went to the bar he drank his fav drink of 4 pegs hearing to his fav music sitting alone at the roof top bar seeing the open sky nd the vast city
Then he came down abdul was waiting fr him. He waved bye too abdul got the key from his driver nd roared his mercedes on the road
While driving he crossed the poor part of the city while crossing a cycle was going infront of him he pressed his horn the cycle did not move he horned continuosly but the bicyle rider didnt move then he got down the car holded her hand turned her and slapped her after hitting their eyes met with each other her tearful eyes met his eyes he was silent within seconds his eyes where of tear he couldn't understand whats happening the girl wiping her tears with hands nd said sry i couldn't hear ur horn i am deaf jalal left the hold
He gently holded her fingers nd said i am sry still jalal couldn't find whats happening in him he had nt said sry to anyone his attitude his superiority his pride had broken into peaces on seeing her eyes
She smiled nd started riding the cycle jalal got into the car smiled nd played his fav music
Jalal reached his house called abdul and said abt the girl jalal said " abdul I give u an hour I need the full details of the girl with the photograph the one hour went like an year he went to the roof top sat on a chair drinking his boost thinking of tht girl her innocent eyes her voice jalal was loosing himself to her
Abdul called him at the 59th minute he said her name is jodha she lives in the other phase her parents are dead she lives with her grandma and he had mailes her photo
Jalal rushed to his mail checked the photo saw her and smiled in internal joy ...
Nxt day jalal took his car went through the place he searched for her she found her eating an ice cream under a tree . she saw him nd waved her hand nd smiled he was in an ecstasy state he got down the car moved towards her whn he reached her she asked what is ur name he said jalal watching his lip movements she said jalal him nice name i am jodha he smiled she softly bit the ice cream and due to the chillness her face shrunk jalal enjoyed seeing her she said if u want I'll get u dnt stare at it i wil get ache and started bitting her icecream then took her bye cycle waved bye nd moved Jalal smiled nd wnt to his office he called Abdul to his cabin and said wat happened abdul was shocked to know jalal is falling for a gal
Nxt day there was heavy rain jalal nd abdul where on their way to office he ... while crossing the area jalal saw the girl dancing in rain with the kids jalal stopped the car took his umberla njoyed seeing the rain came towards her she smiled at him took his umberla and throwed away jalal was getting wet he started enjoying rain with her abdul was shocked seeing this since he know jalal hates getting wet in rain jalal holded jodha's hand brought her close their eyes met they both started dancing jodha seems to be a kid in the eyea of jalal the rain stopped she smiled nd went ,jalal got into the car nd played mitti di kushbu song abdul was laughing at him jalal stared at him Each and every moment jalal was thinking of her nd her beautiful eyes jalal wanted to express his feelings to her he parked his car in the area and sat in a road side bench tht faced the sea he heared a cycle bell jalal turned back saw his jodha wearing a beautiful pink top nd white leggin she was moving towards his car jalal called jodha since she was deaf she couldn't hear jalal smiled and ran towards her she saw the car nd was gng to c jalal suddenly a car came perpendicular and hit her she fell down nd was bleeding jalal was stunned he ran towards her and placed her in his lap she kept her palm on jalals face and said i love u jalal nd smiled his eyes was full of tears he placed her in his car nd drived to the hospital while gng jodha said from the day i saw ur eyes I felt tht I had found my king the soulmate for my life i wana live with u jalal he cried nd reached hospital he shouted fr doctors everyone came took her into ICU jalal sat on the chair with tears on his eyes
Abdul came to the hospital he was consoling jalal the doctors came out and informed she is safe but she is in coma jalal said tht he wants to c her. jalal saw her eyes and spoke seeing her eyes he said the day i met u i felt ur the path of my life, my queen s my queen u u will come back for me jodha i love u jodha he kissed her forhead her eyelids moved slightly frm thn jalal started taking care of jodha with the believe tht she will come back fr him ...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Lovely os buddy...
Its was completely different from others..
Enjoyed reading it :-)
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Beautiful nd emotional OS
Keep writing more ...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very emotional heart touching update true love not see the weakness of body nice update ur story nest chapter soon pm me thanks for this update
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beautiful n emotional os
write more dear😊
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katamm hoo gya kya...bolo na...
yaar mujhe pata hi nhi chala...actuslly i was enjoying it...lovly os
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: shikha26rockss

katamm hoo gya kya...bolo na...

yaar mujhe pata hi nhi chala...actuslly i was enjoying it...lovly os

vote when r u going to update han
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Congrats for ur first OS dr
Awesome OS
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Originally posted by: Mavaddat

vote when r u going to update han

diii app mujhse badla le rahe ho kya...
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Originally posted by: shikha26rockss

diii app mujhse badla le rahe ho kya...

no no dear 😆

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