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Posted: 11 years ago
PART XXV



The dark huge monsters engulfed the clean blue sky completely and often manifested their sparkling chortle and thunder laughter..That day must also be a darken day like this. Bagwan surya Narayan might have turned his face aside not willing to face the world which is going to ditch his dedicated devote .What else he can do?? Who can question Bagwan Indra?? If God turned cunning where could we go??Falling as a prey for his ploy is the only fate!!Bagwan Indra!! What a plan you designed..to gain more power to your son you took away the powers of his enemy.But remember all these cannot shake a mountain.your son cannot beat him in any way and you know that very well.

When am man who is guarded by his brothers guided by Vasudev..supported by Bagwan Indra is considered as supreme then a man who stood alone and framed his own life and destiny..who stood unshakable and faced his fate!! Who was respected by vasudev..who made Bagwan Indra to make use of his generosity to frame a ploy and got no other fair way to win him..who has got guts to peal his own skin and give away as alms and still standing stubborn as a huge menace for you and your son is superior to everyone.you yourself came down ..approached him..targeted him and declared that your son's only threat is Angaraj.

A straight dazzling streak of lightening tore the black sky followed by a heavy thunder..I closed my eyes and ears.It must be fallen somewhere near..sure!! I am worried ..where it came down to fulfill its horrible hunger..may be on some innocent people or huts.but Indra who was very brilliant and made an excellent ploy to destruct my husband is always ignoring my head which I stretched voluntarily for the hunger of his thunders.

But I am a strong headed woman.I chuckled once..yes..my head is very strong..which with stood so many thunders one after the other.each one is more powerful than the previous one.Again a thunder!! God I may go deaf!! I turned inside to move but got hit on the lamp stand and gashed under my toes." Ouch!!! " I screamed in pain.I managed to sit in a couch to examine the wound..it was cut half and the remaining skin is torn almost.I tried to peal my cut skin..unbearable pain and my body gave up..

"arya!!! How much you would have felt while pealing your skin??how obstinate you mush be?? You are so stubborn in your decisions whatever it may..just like me!!" A vexation smile spread o my face.The pain made be to squeal..then I realized oh this is not my palace I cannot behave as I wish here.I shut my mouth with my pallu and shed tears silently.The pain in my foot is nothing compared to the pain in my heart.

But what vrushali jiji wrote? Didn't she write that Indra was pleased by his alms and healed his wounds immediately and granted him the most powerful celestial weapon?

What did he want from my husband?? He wished my husband to be powerless by taking away his immortality ..He took away the armors to save his son but granted a weapon which would surely kill his son.In what guts he granted it..whom he appointed to save his son from that weapon?

But!!! But !! what actually happened to him in virat war?? What I heard is true?? There is not necessary for my son to lie.He wrote about that horrible virat war..the death of shone and his father's injuries by arjun's celestial weapons.Shona's death!! God!! How Radhama bore it??and What happened to him..unbelievable!! how come a mountain fall down?? What kind of war is this using celestial weapons against human beings?? Why didn't he use his celestial weapon??

One thing is very clear!! Arjun's father stamped his presence and support for his son.now,who is my husband's father?? Where are you?? What are you doing ?? why you are hiding your face when your son is in trouble? What kind of father you are??

My awkward moaning echoed everywhere in the small traveler's bungalow.

And what now I hear? Soon a great war is approaching in this aryavrath?? And all the sages..omens..and horoscopes say it would be destruction of the whole kuru clan!! The great peace mission of vasudev is also failed terribly.The whole aryavarth is indulged in war preparations..Pandavas are aggressive for their land and revenge.I am choked again while recollecting bheem's oath for panchali's humiliation.They are gathering armies.Again yuvraj lost his conscience completely.He proved himself to be an insane by humiliating vasudev in the peace mission.Now, this is the clear evidence of destruction..complete destruction.

So many days and nights I felt bad for the way my husband has been cheated ..but that is not for virat war alone..here comes the actual war!! This is slicing my heart!! My heart is pounding..Is this the destruction which i scared??Bagwan parasuram curse!! Bhoomi devi curse!! Bagwan indra dev's ploy..Arjun's gained powers..Matha !!! no body has powers to save him or separate him from kuru putr!! Only God can do this..but all of them made him as a toy and playing with his fate.God himself came down and involved in a straight war with him.what they have planned for my husband??

My moaning should have reached the sharp ears of charumitra..there she comes.

"maharani!! What happened!!" she sat beside me.

"how long will you cry maharani!! Instead of crying alone it would be better you go back to Angaraj.You must be in hastinpur now..what are you doing here in interior eastern countries in the name of pilgrimage!! "

" hmm!! When all the possibilities of survival is lost..when all the paths of your life is shut then whom do you call for help?? To whom to you go?? A great unfathomed fear is squeezing my heart.no body could help me except the almighty.i wish to step each and every temple in the whole aryavarth and I am in search of an answer!!

Now she noticed my foot

"It's bleeding" soon she managed to tie a bandage with some medicines stuffed in it.Rain has decreased its terrible hunt now!!

"alright! The rain has stopped!! Shall we move to the temple"

"but how could you walk with this foot"

" nothing serious!! I can manage"

"you are so adamant maharani!!"

I simply smiled.

While travelling in the sedan chair surrounded by my escorts I felt I am troubling everyone.My life itself a burden for me why should I be burden to others.

What is there !! shinning in the middle of the forest!! A tower of a temple!!

"stop" I ordered.

" I wish to visit that temple which is inside the forest"I just informed to them and started walking towards it.it's very hard to walk in the muddy soil in the forest surrounded by thorny bushes.I must have gone insane..why i am running to that isolated temple now??I believe my answer is hidden here!!

Slipped!!1 I am slipped..what is happening! I feel the chill muddy water on my whole body!!The trees..mountains..sky..everything is rolling.. rolling..darkness everywhere..I have gone blind! I cannot shout..awww!! thousands of needles are pricking me..help...help..h...e...l...p...h..e..""

Chirp!! Chirp!! Birds are singing!! Heavy rain is pouring..no I feel only the drizzling.My heavy eyelids were forced to open by those drizzling.Two deep green eyes are staring at me.I am also staring at him.What kind of eyes are this?? Magical one!! These two eyes occupied my thoughts.Those eyes blinked twice and I got distracted!1 what!! Where I am!! Who is standing beside me!! Ouch !! every part of my body is aching..

Why he is bending down with worried face?? Why i couldn't get up?? He is stretching his arms ..I am again got struck by those eyes and stretched my arms.He helped me to get up.i examined my body..Thorns thorns everywhere..I have fallen on the thorny bushes.He joined his palms.

"pranipat matha! I saw you unconscious here.I would be very happy if you let me to help you" he said politely.

Now I examine him from top to bottom.He is young and tall.His attires are different made of the skin of some rare animals.He was decked by golds and pearls around his neck and head.he is standing with an innocent ..gentle smile with joined hands.

"please come with me!! My mother is living nearby..please come to our place you need some medical treatment now. My mother would take care of you!! Please"

I tried to walk but my legs disobeyed my commands!! And what the hell of pain??

"matha!! Your leg is strained .you cannot walk now! Dusk is approaching and soon there will be a heavy rain fall..If you don't mind i can carry you"I hesitated but cannot refuse..

"please!! Consider me as your son" he grinned.He bent down gave his hand under my knee and lifted me.he started walking deep in the forest.

Soon we reached the banks of a river!! He walked through the banks and reached a cave..he bent down and entered the cave where i saw some two or three ladies ..a vast hall with all basic amenities.

He made me to lay down on a stone bed covered by warm thick animal skins.There came another woman of my age.she looked royal with neat but simple attires and ornaments.He referred her as matha and said something to her,She saw me once and smiled at me..the same deep green eyes.She gave some orders to the other ladies might be her maids..one came with warm water..one with medicines..soon all the thorns in my body were removed and medicated.he examined my leg and cleaned it.i felt extremely shy..I don't want anyone to touch my feet.

"putr!! No!! Leave it"I tried to drew back my feet but he clutched it tight..

"at last you spoke to me!! " he grinned..which made me to smile too.

Soon an old man entered the cave and examined my leg." Nothing to worry ..a muscle strain..rest is mandatory" he imitated the vaidhyaraj..The old man laughed and nodded the head "yes !! yes!! You are right!! These medicines should be applied in time."He handed over the medicines and left the place soon a lightening tore the sky and started pouring heavily.

Now i feel little comfortable here..He looks like a fun filled boy and she is friendly.I feel warm in between them.Now I cannot resist my eager to know about them

"Thank you very much" I said

"oh! It's a small help which we can do..how do you feel now" she asked.

"feeling better..Is he your son and you live here"?

"no matha! He came up with the answer!!

"we have our palace quite far away from here.i used to come here for war practices. My mother used to accompany me.Today I saw you when i was practicing archery while picking up my arrows"

War !!war!! every where war!!! The word archery made me to sit erect.I thought he is a hunter.

"what archery??"

"yes !!don't you know a great war is approaching..so every one is preparing themselves fit to participate in the war"

Are you going to participate?"

"of course!! On behalf of my father.I would definitely join my father's army"

He said it proudly.

"who is your father"?

Mother and son stopped speaking suddenly.

"He is not with us.i haven't even seen him once" he downed his head.i saw his mother.She blinked her tears..and said "yes!! He is a royal prince of a great dynasty.He has so many duties and commitments.I fell in love with him and pleaded him to marry me.He granted me two boons..one he accepted me as his wife and the other is my son..soon he left." She caressed his head.He clutched her arms and signaled not to get emotional.

"that is not his fault..It was his situation and I too didn't force him to stay with me"

"though!! I never saw my father..I have grown as a warrior just for him.i believe that my father would definitely come here to meet me and take me to the war field with him.i am going to see him soon..i am going to live with him..my father ! The greatest incomparable archer in the whole aryavarth and i am going to join his army soon"he bit his teeth in enthusiasm.his muscles got rigid.

The rain is pouring heavily outside..I am stunned and speechless..The greatest archer?? Whom he is referring to?? Pandav kumar Arjun?? Then he must be..

"what is your name?"

He saw me strange for my sudden eagerness..

"I am Irvan and this is my mother uloopi"he said
Edited by dhivyakrish31 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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UNRES beautifully penned update😳 loved it very much u described KK daan so well

What a plan you designed..to gain more power to your son you took away the powers of his enemy.But remember all these cannot shake a mountain.your son cannot beat him in any way and you know that very well.


Who was respected by vasudev..who made Bagwan Indra to make use of his generosity to frame a ploy and got no other fair way to win him..who has got guts to peal his own skin and give away as alms and still standing stubborn as a huge menace for you and your son is superior to everyone.you yourself came down

loved these lines too much u captured that complete ploy og Indra so well nd Karnas intentions too! The way u connected heavy rains with thunder, Uruvi getting hurt peeling of skin with her feeling of pain of her husband is very commendable⭐️

U introduced Uloopi nd Iravan too very well, u made their entry very natural! u also covered Virata war nd questions relating why didn't he use celestial weapons then? her inner turmoil about Kurukshetra ws well written nd that were kept at apt places brilliantly... a very well balanced update I felt which had no exaggerations that I find in general POVs with everything... now I want Uruvi to return to her husband😭😭 Karna must be so alone Charu is true I feel like running to him now maybe with the next earthquake it will b my turn😆😆

BTW here:
He bent down gave his hand under my knee and lifted me.he started walking deep in the forest.

I couldnt help how that vision of ⭐️Bheem picking my ⭐️Bio Sasumaa came to my mind😆🤪

Update soon😛 I m waiting forn the Punah Milan😳

Edited by .Sanskruti - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Gawwwddd!😆
Awesome yaar!

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Posted: 11 years ago
Too good Dakka.Felt proud while reading the K K Daan.Our Vaikartana is great.And a special thanks for including Uruvi's POV on KK Daan.It was brilliantly written.And this Uruvi instead of going to HP she is roaming here and there.Go lady go to your husband.He has not much time left😭And Dakka now I dread reading the last parts of his life.You are too good in sketching emotions.You can alter the reader's mood through your words.And bringing Uloopi and Iravan was an unexpected twist.Eager to know how that meeting turns out to be.Update fast
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Posted: 11 years ago
hey!! thank u so much aishu!!!
@ vani!! thank god u remember to comment..😆wait vani she will..I added Irvan here for a purpose..u willgot to know it in the next chappy
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Posted: 11 years ago
sansi!! thank u so much darling!! of course thi kk dhaan shook her badly..very soon they wil lmeet..irvan may be one of the reson for it.
and what u say is right 😆 while writing irvan lifting uruvi..i remembered dolly dolly kunthi ma in the hands of bheem
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Posted: 11 years ago
Finally I m back nd hv read both parts .
Superb as always di . War is near? 😲 pls Uruvi go back to Karn 😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
RES 😛
Will comment tonight
UNRES...Sorry Dhivii dear... for commenting late again... I was dead busy with my cousin's wedding & Travels... could not manage time then. Now coming back to ur update

Wonderful update Dhivii 👏
Firstly I like the way you have expressed Uruvi's musings regarding the heavenly deities and their part in ploying against Karna. Lord Indra no doubt... he had interest to safeguard his son Arjun but he demanded something so ruthlessly from a man to tear his flesh😡... I could not agree with Lord Indra's way of helping his valiant son by snatching away KK from Karna. Even though he rewarded with Shakti astra but that too with conditions 😡

& Lord Surya... he fathered Karna why did not he come to his son's aid instead of coming in his dream in the penultimate moments of Karna's life...I feel Karna's battered soul was already half dead😭😭... by the time his real father came to him...I think you will cover Karn's birth revealation in your next update... waiting for that part to read...I know you will wonderfully express it. 😊 😛

And Uruvi going for a pilgrimage was a surprise for me and then meeting Iravan & Uloopi 😲... then I remembered once u told me thru pm that u will include a folktale of Iravan meeting Uruvi which was unknown to me. Surely, Uruvi ending up in the care of her husband's nemesis long forgotten son in such tensed pre-war situation was a shock for her... and to some extent I got shocked too.

Waiting eagerly for the next update Dhivii darlu 🤗... how will Uruvi react to Uloopi & Iravan

Edited by ...Hemangi - 11 years ago
Posted: 11 years ago
Yes surya indeed is not helping his son
but he warn him

Then I really felt bad for ulupi n iravan
I mean just heart wrenching
for a moment by his description I thought of something else
but ...
never mind

Apologies for late reply
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Shalini09

It was beautiful... :'(

then y do u cry dear

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