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One Hour of Jannat.

No.

This one is not about Jannat. Because Jannat ...is a mirage.

This is about a place called Jannat...

Far Far Away...That exists even higher above the place where Jack's Bean Stalk grew...

And this is about two people...

Aahil and...S...

U R right! Seher!

This is about Aahil and Seher.

So this is an Aaher OS.

It is also about Asad and Zoya...in bare minimal bits...

And Sanam ...

And Shaad...

And Rehaan...

And Sanam 2.

And who am I kidding?- A lot of Saahil...

But this is not for everyone. This is strictly for people who can appreciate Aaher..

For people who have a sense of humour...and love both Aahil and Seher UNCONDITIONALLY.

If U R a die hard fan of Sehaan, U will not like this. Because this is about Seher moving on...

And if UR a die hard fan of Saahil, it might help you move on...

Here Goes...

Oops! Sorry...I forgot to explain the the bg for the story.

Well! There is this place called Jannat up there...

Asad Ahmed Khan is a noble ...hmmm..celestial being there. Zoya is his wife. They have two daughters...Sanam and Seher. The girls have come of marriageable age and Asad being the over protective father, finds fault with every guy. For a couple in the royal line to be declared married- as per the rule in the whole land of Jannat- they have to descend down on earth and take human form and prove their love is eternal... This is because divorces are not allowed in Jannat. Oh! They are not immortal. Just that their time telling is different from ours. Their hours are our days, so they live much longer by our standards. Whatever time they waste here in years don't add up much in their land. Their childhoods on earth are made up...and the characters fitting into the stories on earth are idea implanted (Like Inception.)...and sometimes tampered with to change the game plan.

Asad takes advantage of this marriage rule in Jannat and puts the prospective suitors of his respective daughters through one tough task after the other...much tougher than what it would be for a normal pair.

Aahil and Sanam are in love. Aahil is an orphan. Asad doesn't trust Aahil one bit (because he used to get in to a lot of street fights before he met Sanam), and is trying his level best to disqualify him...

The only time the contestants (Ah! It is a Game of Love after all!) can come up to Jannat once they have entered the game, is when they are in coma or have died.

Asad and Zoya passed their test long back, and died together to be wedded in Jannat.

Rehaan died and returned...he was disqualified. He will have to wait for the next season of...errr..the Game.

Seher's human form is in suspended action...so she is up there...meaning she is lying in coma somewhere...until...she decides to die...ie. if she decides to die. As of now, she has decided to stick around in coma, until she finds something interesting to do.

Aahil has lost his consciousness recently- so he has gained access to the homeland.

Sanam has amnesia ...so technically she is still very much there on this place called earth'...down down below...hmmm...U know... the place from where the Bean stalk grew.

...Which is why...This is an Aaher OS.

OK. Too many details?

I am a bit dazed as I write this..I hope it is not too childish. It has to be- It is a fairytale.

But I wanted to write it...

And like I have always said- If I have even only one or two readers...

I will make them suffer!😈

Oh! And why Aaher?

Because I always felt Aaher is nothing but Survir...pure fun and friendship.😳

I have made Asad quite a dictator...but he is that only when it comes to his dear daughters...because he wants the very best for both of them...and it does work out for their good in the end.

And any more Qs you have, please feel free to use your imagination to answer it.😳😉

Also, kindly excuse the structure of the sentences. I may have flouted quite a few rules. But it shouldn't be that hard to read.


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He was back home. He didn't have to open his eyes to know that. The sweet breeze...the sound of the water from the lake gurgling up the shores gently... the careless buzz of a stray bee...the warmth of the sun that must bathe the entire valley by now...and the peace he felt within...

He hoped he had died. May be Sanam had too...They had managed to scrape through all the tests so far...He opened his eyes to catch a familiar form against the sun.

Sanam...

No. This was Seher. She must be his messenger for the next task. Which means...Sanam wouldn't be here either. His heart started aching again...No amount of Jannat would soothe this pain of separation...

Hi Handsome!

Aahil gets up to sit, relishing the real cheerfulness in her voice.

Hi Beautiful! : What a welcome sight to wake up to, in Jannat.

Seher sits down next to him. She picks up a stone and throws it far...It falls on the lake not so far away...Aahil is distracted by the ripples. By the time he gets back to her, she is popping open a bottle of orange liquid.

What...are you drinking? Water colour?

This? Mirinda, Dude! You have wasted your whole lifetime on earth' if you have not tasted this.

Like Pizza, I suppose.

Oh Yes! I miss Pizza too. But Ha! Not any more...Mom has perfected the recipe with my contributions and it tastes pretty good. Now we just have to wait for Sanam to get up here, and she'd modify it to make sure it is the best Pizza available on the planet...

How did U get this stuff up here?

Oh! I got khaala khaalu to stuff it in your jacket. I miss this thing...Oooh! She slurps it up...

Aahil rolled his eyes. Trust Seher to use her almost dead brother...well ...'almost' Brother In Law to stuff her gastronomic senses.

Is Sanam here ? (Hope refuses to die.)

Nope. She was here...a few days back...when she was lying unconscious in that river Chenab...Ha Ha! She travelled all the distance to Pakistan with her nose and mouth immersed in the water, you know. She should be officially dead by now! Seher laughed aloud.

Aahil smiled. Sanam...His Sanam...So she was here a few sunrises back...To receive her next task...In Pakistan? He wondered what this was about now. It was lovely to get back home...catching up with Seher...But he had to return to earth' soon...for Sanam. He had almost an hour here...and he was glad his unfriendly Father-In-Law...well..'Would Be'...had sent along his best friend.

So, you died? (He assumes it must be so, since Rehaan already died and Seher would be out of the game too.)

Seher rolls her eyes and replies: Nope. In a coma...In some tribal village...Apparently, I haven't had enough. My dear father thinks I need to go through more of this torture. I...I am not exactly fuming at him...But I think that movie- 'Meet the parents', which I bet you haven't bothered to watch...was inspired by him. I ought to get that and show it to him someday. He is such a stubborn old man at times!

Aahil realises what happened...He takes a few seconds to swallow it: That was a pretty beastly thing to do...

I know.

What the!

I know. I know.

How are you coping?

After you feel like your heart has been torn off your chest? Well...You know you live because you breathe.

Shit!

A deep sigh later...

It is not that bad now, Aahil. I mean...Abbu had a reason for it.

Seriously? You two were just made for each other...like me and Sanam...

Apparently not.

Huh?

Well...He fell for Sanam first. That was a big No No for Abbu...

But that's not fair. I mean...I slept around with so many women...And Rehaan...He was so perfect...a gentleman...

Yeah. But we were both at fault, it seems.

Me- for impersonating Sanam...

Come on, Seher. Tell the old man to give it a break...It was harmless...

But it kept you guys away.

Wow! He is actually on my side?

Hopes! He tries to be fair.

So you guys are out because Rehaan fell for your sister first and you impersonated her?

Yep. That...plus the fact that he decided to run away from that Tanveer female knowing we were all at risk from her..

Can hardly blame the guy...

You were strong, Aahil. After all the pain she put you through...

Oh! So I get Brownie points for that? (Aahil looks away disinterestedly.)And I behaved like a bas***d with Sanam..

Don't call yourself that!: Seher protests.

A few seconds later, he checks on Seher again: Are you Okay, Baby?

Seher smiles, remembering how she loves both Sanam and Aahil calling her that. And nods slightly.

Aahil: So, why are you still there?

Seher: I had a choice...I chose to use that.

For?

Torturing the next guy Abbu throws my way. I swear...I will make life hell for someone.

Aahil laughs...: Yeah...You seem Okay now.

I am quite fine, Aahil. I am not interested in this game. I accept I have made mistakes. But since Abbu gave me the choice...I thought I will wait for the next bakra...

Bakra! (Aahil winks and Seher smiles wholeheartedly.) Perhaps he will make a bakri out of my saali.

What else? I don't think I will find true love like my beloved sis...might as well have some fun and kick some ass. (Aahil listens patiently. Seher takes another pause.) I feel...May be...There is no one out there for me. I will play...till I get out...and then I will tell my beloved father that I am going to be single . There is no guy out there who deserves his precious daughter. I am sorry, Aahil. I am just a little tired...and worried...I mean...You guys are not here...I cannot be with you all there. Life sucks! (Aahil gives her a side hug.)

I know. Life sucks. I have no idea how I am even breathing without her. (Her! Aahil loses himself for a moment, remembering Sanam...her sweet smile...her caring demeanour..her shyness around him off late... )

Seher looks at him sadly. He doesn't have much time here. She is the one who has to break the news of the terrible test he has to go through next. She remembers the silent tears her sister shed, when she received hers.

Aahil senses it must be time too: So then?

Seher sighs: Aah...ah...You guys have it bad down there. (It was going to get worse? Aahil feels the heaviness in his chest beginning to suffocate him. He takes a breath of fresh air to prepare for the worst.) Brace yourself, Bro...

...

What! From where the hell does your father get these ideas? (He is red with anger.)

Seher keeps calm. She knows Aahil is ready for any damn test to claim his love: I think he gets it from this lady named Gul.

Gul? Who the hell is Gul now?

Well. She is this lady who writes some pretty weird tracks into some nice love stories. Abbu feels she is the ultimate love detector!

And she writes this shit? I mean...I bet she wrote that freaking witch too! What does he see in her?

Shh...Abbu thinks she has a point. Err...Ammi is a little sceptical...But even she says he might have a point...

Bloody hell! How can you put a man through this shit? I mean...I have to watch her romancing some other guy...I will live through it...After I split open his head. But to give up my identity...Who am I? I am Aahil Razaa Ibrahim...Who am I without...Me? I mean...I could sue your father for this...this is EXTREME, Seher!

Seher just stares at Aahil, knowing very well that he would come around in a matter of seconds, after fuming and venting out...He always did, when it was about getting Sanam back...

Aahil gets up and starts pacing around...Seher looks at the beautiful sunlight reflecting from the lake below him...She thinks of happier times...when the three of them were together...before they left for the game, and she fell for Rehaan. And then she reassures herself that those times would return soon. She knows she could bank on her dear sis and Bro-In -Law to get her her Jannat'. She looks on amusedly at Aahil ranting...

Get out of my body! I mean...How? What am I without my...

Face?

Aahil stares at her: Yeaaah..and...Name...And...And..

Six Packs?

Aahil frowns at her.

Triceps? Biceps? Abs? Urmmm...Seher bursts out laughing.

Voice, Pervert!: Aahil declares.

Voice? : Seher giggles.And then she gets serious. Yes, Voice...I guess a lot of people are going to miss that, Jeejs.

A lot of people? Who is a lot of people?

Err...I don't know why I said that. I just said that. I guess a lot of people ...like Khaala, Khaalu...aaahhh...

Aahil sits down. He takes a few more minutes to let it sink.: So...Basically..I have to give my self' up...My whole personality...because some freaking woman on earth' thinks it is a good idea and your demented dad thinks he should follow her ? ...And then I have to watch Sanam be in love with a random guy from nowhere? And then I have to make her fall in love with me?

Yeah. (Seher is back to her cool self as she starts munching on a guava.)And don't call my Abbu demented!

Shut UP! What is that? A Guava? Did you get that as well from my jacket?

No. Thish.. (chomping away...).I got Sanam to bring me two as she came up...I mean I had it dropped in her pocket before she conked out in Chenab. Don't ask me how. I am trying to put ideas into heads...I mean, I tried it with a monkey and the guavas into Sanam's pockets...and then I graduated to khaala- khaalu and the Mirinda on to your jacket...Now I have to see if it works on people with brains...

Aahil gives her a blank look and shrugs his shoulder . She reads his expressions: Whaaat? What am I supposed to do? I am BORED here, Okay guys. Just Fast Forward your love story and come up here. Get married and give me golu molu babies I can fight with. Okay?

Aahil smiles. He reads faith in her expressions. He never had a choice with the decision, but the fact that Seher had full faith in him makes it easier to accept. Though it was going to be sheer torture...of the worst grade possible..Hell! He was going to miss being himself! He was going to feel like an alien trapped in another body...BLOODY HELPLESS...But if he had to, he just had to!!! If he had to kill himself to have Sanam, he just had to!

Time has come for him to take the next plunge: So...then...That's it...

Yes, Sweetheart. Time for the Wishing Hell... (Seher has recently renamed the Wishing Well, which is the gateway from Jannat to Earth'.)

Aahil gives her one more hug before he prepares to jump...And he is gone...

Go get my Sis, Bro...: Seher wishes him luck. She was going to explore that new found talent and expand it beyond guavas and Mirindas...so she could help them in every little way possible...at least until it was time for her to go...

...To go...Down that tube...Tube! How funny the earth people called their television sets tube too! May be she'd get really lucky and get to fix the brains of that Gul woman too...Hah!

*****************Zatzallfolk...sss...***********************************

...Until Aahil lands up back on earth as...WHOZZATGUY? WHATSISNAME!😲

And Best Of Luck, Seher! Hope you can move beyond monkeys and khaala khaalus...to the next step in evolution, perhaps?😛

Edited by chicksoup - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Soup my love...this is SO good! LOL. Laughed out loud. Now why cant you make a show? A real comedy with SURVIR as leads! Everyone will die laughing. I always loved AHER!

I even wrote an OS on them when they first announced the entry of "Seher!"


Check it out on my signature. "When Aahil Met Seher!" I bet you will find it funny too!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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res😉
unres..

this is awesome Soup!! 👏

First I was reading Aahil and Seher talking in a neutral interdimensional place, transcending time and place. Super idea !

Seher being benched because she is in a coma post accident.
Sanam visited her when she was unconscious in the Chenab river.
Even managed to bring something back with her, like gifts for the Hungry ghost !!😆
(Are you into Chinese mythology Soup??😆)

And Asad sees it all, deciding to punish those things he was not happy to see...
But blaming Rehan for falling for Sanam first was un fair...😕

BUt still Asad gives Aahil a fighting chance, not making it easy for him, but a chance...

Then it becomes really funny !!

Gul ?? 🤣
That was stroke of genius Soup!

Aahil at the brink of going back, with a new face, voice and all,
lamenting the loss of 6packs, biceps and triceps 😆

What an enjoyable read Soup! Thanks so much !!


Edited by sageflower7 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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How cute! I liked their interactions. They could have had such a zippy energy on the show too, if the writers hadn't dropped the ball.

This os even makes the thought of a new Aahil just a little bit more palatable. 😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
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wow! u r such an awesome writer ..luved ur os.. couldnt stop laughing 😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Res . will be back soon...
Just read the bg .. Seems interesting ..
N btw Asad Aahil interaction with the original actors is one thing i had always wanted to watch .. Sighs i know its too much to wish for
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Posted: 10 years ago
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😳😉 Thank U

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Loved it! Lol. I laughed so much. Love Aaher always- they would always be fun! Totally awesome and amazing one and the Gul one😆-really nice one. Mirindas and Pizzas sent by Khala and Khalu. So much nice yaar.

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