ArHi FF: An Anatomy of Angst [Complete] Interlude #1 14/Aug

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greenteaholic

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: Vibranthues
As always, my interest has peaked.

Hope I can keep that up :=)

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greenteaholic

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Dysania and Insomnia

She picked up a string of bright orange flowers orphaned in a lonely mantap. Her eyes scanned the area in search of her expensive earring. Lord of chaos had reigned that day when the groom and his wedding party walked out on her sister wedding. Nightmare had become a reality.

The party was mythomane of Shyam's ego and Anjali's potentate on Arnav. The shadows welcomed Arnav deep into its womb and soothed his bubbling irritation in its quiet embrace. He took a lingering sip of whiskey and wondered if this shadow was slowly becoming an anthropomorphization of his dead mother.

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UV_Arshi

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Posted: 11 years ago

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What an aptly named story!

You're really amazing. How can someone pack so much emotion and angst in mere hundred words...!

Another masterpiece in the making, I believe...

you truly have a way with words, gth... :)

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Raila1014

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

So few and yet so many big words. Yeah you sure know how to pack them in. What an interesting contrast of these 2 individuals sifting through the aftermath, trying to make sense or maybe even finding solace from the chaos and irritation. I love your perspectives on situations. You get in the heads of your characters.

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janu

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Posted: 11 years ago

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You have conveyed the feelings of two different individuals in two different situations...chaos and the irritation engulfing them..

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meera30

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Posted: 11 years ago

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And the master of words and imagery is back! This one is on my list now. Powerful little bits these!

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greenteaholic

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: UV_Arshi
What an aptly named story!
You're really amazing. How can someone pack so much emotion and angst in mere hundred words...!
Another masterpiece in the making, I believe...
you truly have a way with words, gth... :)

Thanks :-) Its an experiment and a way to write without writing too much 😆

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greenteaholic

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: Raila1014
So few and yet so many big words. Yeah you sure know how to pack them in. What an interesting contrast of these 2 individuals sifting through the aftermath, trying to make sense or maybe even finding solace from the chaos and irritation. I love your perspectives on situations. You get in the heads of your characters.

The parallels have to run and as they did with the two of them. This is a story I am making it up as I go and I purposefully staying away from over thinking about it. Its fun in its own way :)

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greenteaholic

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: meera30
And the master of words and imagery is back! This one is on my list now. Powerful little bits these!

Look who is here :-)

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greenteaholic

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: viveka698
You seem a vocabulary nut. This chapter's emotions were indecipherable without dictionary help- frankly, a bit distracting! Would all narration be from 3^rd person perspective?
P.S.: Comment in precisely 25 words (minus the P.S., of course!) 😉

When you have a cap on number of words to be used, you use words that sum up few lines. I have a problem with repetition; a person is sad then the person is sad. Writing a paragraph about it isn't going to change the fact that the character is "sad". But we do need to explain "how sad" and thus we have paragraphs and paragraphs of it. I myself am a perpetrator in that regard. In this story however, I don't have luxury for a rant.

I shall provide the meanings in future then :-)

Wait, 25 words? Waaah. This is so awesome.