PreeMan ff/ss

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taarey1

@taarey1

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Posted: 10 years ago

Well to start with i love and m fascinated with stories of the past
So i obviously looove the preeman story❤️

And i m really disappointed that they're not being given that much screen space😭 (which i have noticed some find debatable)

Well in this story Anshuman is being played by the 1st actor playing the characteras he was the face that stuck with me

Now i want to make it very very clear that i have nothing against the current actor playing Anshuman and that this is just my personal preference

Also i sooo loove thier bg tune 😳

well since i love their story soo much i have tried to keep it as original as possible i am not writing a completely new story i am filling up the spaces left blank in the serial like how they met fell in love, or why preets parents are nowhere to be seen etc. AND trying my best to write a beautiful love story. please dont mistake this to be the same as the serial. you can definitely expect NEW SCENES CHARACTERS.etc.

do suggest a title name too n i have not clarified if this is a ss or ff coz honestly i dont know the difference between the two😛

Characters

Preet

18 year old Preet is the daughter of the one and only mansion/haveli in dehradun protected and showered with love. Her parents kept her far from the traditions of the haveli and never let her any close to the expectations her ancestors had for the daughters of "the house of witches" she is pure, innocent and unaware of all the evil of the world

Her beauty is unmatched. But her true beauty, uski sachhi khoobsurati uske muskuraahat mein thi uski hassi mein, jo jekhe vo apne chehre par muskurahat laane se rok naa paye. Log kehte hai ki vo noor hai ek pari jisse sirf pyaar mehsoos hota hai. Uske dil mein sacchai aur pyar bhara hai jo vo sab ke saath baati hai.

Her parents moved to London when she was 16 so they could expand their business there but more importantly to take care of her paternal grandparents who lived there and were not in the health condition to be brought back to dehradun. But that didnt change her at all she was still the same as she had so many people around her to take care of her. she never thought of her servants as below her but thought of them as her family so she never felt the absence of her parents

Anshuman

Looking like a 20 year old but actually 200 years old. Anshuman is a vampire. Cold as ice without a heart. Loyal to his kind he is subordinate to nobady. The most powerful vampire that ever lived. He is determined..a man on a mission. With looks to die for literally! He has lived for so long that he dosent know now what it feels like to be human or to have human emotions. hawaa se bhi tez aur bohot shaatir. uske dimaag mein kya chalta hai koi nahi jaanta aur jo jaan jaaye vo zinda nahi bachta. vo sabse taakatvar banna chahta hai aur iske liye usse kya karna hai vo jaanta hai...

new characters will be added if needed

Index

character sketch pg 1

please tell me what you think of this attempt n comment both good or bad and pleaseee pleasee pleasee comment

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Posted: 10 years ago

Nice concept ...

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taarey1

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Posted: 10 years ago

Chapter 1

Dehradun Haveli

haveli mein hulchul si hai aakhir preet madam ke utthne ka waqt hogaya hai

haveli ke ek kamre mein sooraj ki roshni bhar jaati hai

Bistar pe so rahe ladki ke chehre pe ek meethi muskaan aa jati hai. vo utth ti hai aur taiyyar ho jati hai . she is wearing a white churidaar and looking like an angel in it.. she goes to the terrace which has a garden in it and sits there waiting for her breakfast.

(looks like the picture in the character sketch) (for some reason i cant edit this even after 3 attempts)

Garden

a servant enters with a tray filled with her breakfast and keeps in on the log she is sitting on while greeting her

P- shukriya (smiles)

the servant smiles back and goes about his work

P- kehte hai ki sooraj roz uggta hai aur apne saath roz dher saare sapne khusiyaan aur ummeed laata hai isiliye apne subah ki shurwaat isi sooraj ke saath karni chahiye. (she closes her eyes while facing the sun feeling the warmth and welcoming the new day.

she hears a childs gigling and sees a small cute 5-6 yr old hidind behind the pillar on the entrance of the garden

(please suggest a picture for pari in your comments)

P- aap?

she calls her servant jahni

P-jhanvi didi jahnvi didi

jahnvi comes to the garden

J- ji preet madam aapne mujhe bulaya

P- vo bacchi kaun hai/

J- arrey vo, vo toh nirmala mausi (another servant) ki poti hai vo darasal unki bahu maayke gayi hai aur unke ghar pe koi tha nahi isiliye vo ise yahan le aayi

agar aapko tang kar rahi ho toh usse yahan se le jaau?

P- arrey itni pyari bacchi bhala kissi ko pareshaan kar sakti hai kya? (smiles)

(to the girl) sunoo yahaan aao

the girl comes to her a little nervous

P- aapka naam kya hai? (smiling) aur itna dar kyu rahi ho mein thodi naa aap ko kha jaungi (giggling)

seeing her laugh the girl smiles afterall she has such an infectious smile..

mera naam Pari hai

P- hmm.. bilkul sahi naam hai

Pari- Aap Preet madam ho naa.. aap bohot koobshurath ho aur aapki hassi bhi bohot meethi hai (smiling

P- Shukriya pari lekin aapki hassi toh meri hassi se bhi jyaada pyari hai

aur aap jaisi gudiya ke liye mein preet hoon preet madam nahi (smiling)

(forwarding her hand) dost?

pari- (excitedly forwarding her hand) dost

preet hugs her

P- achha batao ya tumhe chitrakari (painting) pasand hai?

pari- haan mujhe chitkari pasand hai lekin mukje chit banane nahi aati hai (pouting)

P- (laughing) chitkari nahi chitrakari...aao mein tumhe sikhati hoon

preet takes her to a room adjoining to her bedroom

he room is filled with light and canvases with pictures of scenaries, animals, people laughing celebrating...it was a room filled with moments of joy captured on a canvas

the workers of the haveli called it "sapn kaksh" (room of dreams)

pari- haaw ye saare chitra toh bohot khoobsurat se...(wide eyed)

ye sab aapne banaye hai?

kya aap mujhe sikhayengi??

P- bilkul gudiya

(preet gave her a canvas and started teaching her ...)

In a forest somewhere on the outskirts of dehradun, where even in the day the rays of the sun didnt reach the earth..a place filled with darkness..a pair of black eyes were following a deer..eyes..cold as ice and blacker than the night

The deer stopped at a brook to have a drink of water

but sensed something and started to run

but the owner of those dark eyes was too fast

faster than the wind he reached and with great ease subdued the deer

khatm kar diya usse

(i have put a picture here but for unknown reasons its not showing so feel free to see this link)

http://t3.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcTwLC4q7aq_Vl2-9bRN-dD0XSt51UoUmMZIomApE22Jde7R4CiaCg

a smile formed on his face one filled with pride and victory

A- taiyaar ho jao preet kyunki ab tumari zindagi hamesha ke liye badalne waali hai...mein aaraha hoon..

tumhari zindagi mein toofaan bankar (smirks and wipes the blood off his face)

please comment and tell me how it is!!

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Nidhi54321

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Posted: 10 years ago

Hey!! Nice starting dear!

Continue soon :)

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taarey1

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Posted: 10 years ago

chapter 2

its just another day in the haveli.

Preet is wearing this

throughout the stry as in the serial anshuman is wearing white kurtis and pants

Preet was painting in her room when suddenly a soft breeze hitting her face usse mehsoos karne vo apne aankhe band kar

theres a knock on the doors of the haveli. and somehow she feels like koi usska intezaar karra hai uss darwaze ke peeche koi usse bula raha hai.

vo seediyon se neeche uttarti hai lekin uske vahan pohochne se pehle hi ek naukar darwaza khol deta hai

preet ko utne mein hi mausi ki awaaz aati hai aur vo drawing room mein unke paas jaati hai

darwaaze pe ek aadmi khada hai, kaka usse poochte hain ki woh kaun hai aur vo bina jawaab diye bina sirf unhe ek chitthi deta hai

kaka chithi padhte hai aur usse andar living room mein bulaate hai aur unhe wahan intezaar karne ke liye kehte hai

kaka andar drawing oom mein jaate hai

kaka- preet madam aapse milne koi adamgad mein rehne waale jamshedji ke beta aaye hai aur apne saath aapke pitaji ki likhi hui ye chitthi bhi laaye hai

Preet- laaiye kaka mein padh deti hoon

Letter

Meri pyaari gudiya Preet,

mein ye chitthi tumhe likh raha hoon lekin ye tumhe jo pohoncha raha hai vo mera bohot azeez mitra (friend) Jamshedji ka beta hai.

usska naam Anshuman hai, vo dehradun mein apni nayi kitaab ke liye prerna dhoondne aaya hai

ab vo tumhara mehmaan se aur ye ab tumhaari zimmedaari hai ki usse hamari mehmaan zawazi mein koi kami naa mile.

yaha baaki sab theek hai.

agle 2 ya 3 maheenon ke liye ya shayad usse zyada samay bhi vo vahan rahe. usska khayaal rakhna

aur apna bhi

bohot saare prem ke saath tumhara pita.

Preet- arrey kaka ye toh bohot khushi ki baat hai ki itne waqt ke baad hamare ghar pe koi aaya hai mehmaan bankar

preet mausi n kaka got to the living room to greet anshuman

living room

preet enters and sees a man facing his back to her

Preet- suniye?

Anshuman turns and smirks

they both stand in silence, anshuman uski khoobsurati mein khoya hai aur preet uske aankhon mein

kaka unhe apne is sapne se jagane ke liye khaaste hai

Preet- umm...uh..vo..uh namaste (smiles)

anshuman uske muskuraahat mein kho jaata hai, itni pyaari itni masoom..he also smiles surprised at his own reaction

A- uh..vo mein yaha vo mein kitaab ke liye yahan research karne aaya hoon.

P- haan aap koi fikar mat kijiye aap yahan jisliye aaye hai vo aapko zaroor mil jayega aur agar aapko iss haveli mein kissi bhi cheez ki jaruurat ho toh aap mujhe bejhijak bata dijiyega. theeke hai?

A- ji. aapko jo bhi takleef ho rahi hai uske liye mein maafi maangta hoon.

P- arrey issmein takleef ki kya baat hai aap hamare mehmaan hai aur yaha pe toh kehte hai ki mehmaano ke liye jaan haazir hai (giggles)

A-(smiles) shukriya

P- Aap thak gaye honge aap thoda aaraam kar lijiye

kaka inhe jara guest room dikha dijiye

P- mein aapse shaam ko milti hoon (smiles)

A- ji. (smiles)

Preet goes to the garden to water the plants and Anshuman goes to his room