After reading this update I fell in love with your writing more and more Deepu... Specially some lines you wrote just stole my heart they made me speechless. When I started reading the update, I was clean bowled with the opening itself. The first paragraph where you explained the difference between sex between two bodies and sex between two hearts is brilliantly mind blowing. Right at that moment I knew how the update is going to be. I just shoved away my tissue paper box, I threw the Tshirt in laundry basket and I kept my BP monitor in cabinet, and didn't want to disturb my fire extinguisher yet, because she is still settling, and started reading the update with peaceful and open mind to feel the essence of every word and every line you shot sharply and breathtakingly.
Sex Between Hearts...is a consummation of feelings... brilliant... wonderful way of saying the true meaning of the title of the story. This is not about two people who will fall in love out of attraction.. this is the story about two people who are emotionally attracted with their hearts entwined.
Manasu anedi prathi manishi lonoo vunde viluvaina nidhi...
Prema anedi aa manasu daachukune andamaina pennidhi...
Anduke prema ante rendu sareeralaku kaadu.. rendu manasula kalayika...
He knew his heart has already surrendered, in all certainty. He already realized that his heart started beating for her. But how beautiful the expression is here in this sentence.
She is taking his support and she is trusting only him after everyone she believed betrayed her.
Oh man I have to copy and paste entire update to high light the sentences and scenes that like in this update.
Khushi is so naive .. her questions itself saying how innocent she is. "Have you ever been to police stations"
Deepu how extensive research you did ... you explained the whole process very well although its very emotional to read... I should appreciate for the hardwork you did.
Parts of conception... You mean broken parts of my baby...
A mother in Khushi would have died thousand deaths while uttering such words. But she became resist for such feelings after loosing 5 babies for the cruelty her husband and in laws did.
"I will tell you this, No child should look into the face of death in the hands of parents. Thats UNACCEPTABLE" ..
Its very true Deepu.. It kills the parents with the child. I felt a pang in my heart while reading this.
"Do you have any objection if I call you...Khushi?" Finally he is going to call her Khushi.. I literally don't like him calling her Mrs. Mehta. It doesn't feel like Arnav calling Khushi.
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Looks like Lavanya loves Khushi so much. She found out that that jerk called Sashi and told that Khushi eloped with some doctor. Karan Jerk will be shocked if he knows that Khushi is indeed with Arnav.
Who called her to give Khushi whereabouts. I am sure Lavanya is the one who called Sashi to inform she is in RGH.
I really wonder there is such hospital gives new expensive dress for the patients. As I said Deepu.. Dr. R , instead of dresses, would have kept a hug for his patients from him. I am sure his hospital will be full of patients. Who will resist a hug from that handsome doctor. I would have registered myself as a permanent patient in RGH to take a hug from him every day.
And it's only Khushi who could believe such a lie. but she is so soft and naive, and rejecting the dress.
Saala, First my brand new Chudidaar Suit, Non-profit Hospital? Free Service? What izzz happening? Anjali thought and furrowed in a critical attitude.
I couldn't stop myself laughing at this... Deepu... I really loved Anjali's reaction.
Non profit hospital.. are you serious Dr. R. ...
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Going to part B... I was shocked to see a sharp and strong Khushi for a while. I felt like I am seeing TVK Khushi again... when she was talking about the tight of life. But soon her innocent question to Arnav... mad eme realize its not her talking , it's the mother in her who became fierce all of a sudden.
Right at the moment, Khushi's parents came. Already I didn't get good feeling about Khushi's father.
How is he supposed to react when his heart aches with sadness, watching her break down before his eyes, not once but time and again. He hated the way his hands are tied from reaching her. He absolutely hated the way his heart is forbidden from crossing that thick wall of institution called marriage...her marriage yet he knew he would change nothing that would take this sense of belonging away from him.
This is my best paragraph in the whole update. Every word is so perfect to speak about his feelings for her. How his heart is restricting itself to feel the feelings it suppose to feel for her because of the marriage, her marriage. dammitt. I loved every word in this para which spoke his heart.
When I read Sashi saying "So you are that doctor".. I was so mad at him. I didn't like it at all. I didn't like his attitude at all. After reading all the conversation.. I became super mad at him. Di.. I really remembered you while reading what Sashi spoke. I was on fire literally.
When Arnav is being polite to him, what her father said is, bullshit. What crap he spoke.
"I wish I had kidnapped your daughter on the very first day I saw her. At least your granddaughter would be alive now.
But this sentence moved me so much.. How much he is caring for her.
Finally Sashi spoke to his daughter and found out what happened to her daughter, but still he is showing his attitude.. He is trying to take her home when she is not in good condition. While she is trying to file a case on them , he is taking her away form the only support she got.
"You do not decide family matters from a hospital room. You have a family of a mother, a father and a sister, with whom you need to sit, discuss and take their opinions. GO HOME"
How could Sashi force her daughter while she in lot of mental trauma. I am so mad at him.. while Arnav is worried about her health , all that her father worried about is her broken marriage. How could he say that.
It was my first reaction... but after thinking for long... what I felt is... Sashi is an ordinary middle class man, who was scared about the society and the people who will talk on their backs about her daughter from now on.. and he was worried about the news his son in law is spreading that his daughter eloped with a doctor.. If he still allows her to be with him... people may think it is true.. and if she is with them ,... they can atleast prove it is not true. Sashi is just thinking like a typical man.
He cut her off asking, "You sure you wanna go?" That was the question he anxiously expected NO as an answer. From the man who always had an intense dislike for the word NO, at once, he reduced into an earth of desperation to hear nothing but only that word. What an irony of Life?
My another favorite paragraph... Again spoke his heart out ... so beautifully.
Will you call me? Why? Naivete at its best... Wow Simply Wow Deepu.
"I dropped my personal number in the home-care bag."
Wah wah... Dr. R became a romeo R... He dropped his personal number and that too in her home care bag. Super idea Dr. R.. come on keep it up.. This is just beginning.
A permanent grin plastered across his face imagining himself banging his head. "I would prefer personal number but you can reach me at any number..as long as you make that damn call" His mind screamed the last bit that his lips failed to complete. "Keep in touch and Stay safe". He said, reluctantly withdrawing his hands.
My another most favourite paragraph ... His heart is resisting to send her home...
"You too take care. You have been up all night for me. Believe it or not, it means a lot to me at this stage of my life"
Tujh mein rab dikhtha hoon yara mein kya karoon. I remembered this song while reading these lines Deepu.
It would be easy to mend a broken heart with time but it is nearly impossible to heal an aching heart waiting in uncertainty of future - Unable to move on nor hold on...
Deepu.. what is this line... How could you get these marvelous thoughts and amazing lines ... form where Deepu... I really wish to hack your brain one day to see how your brain thinks to get these amazing lines.
Simply brilliant update Deepu.. I loved each and every line you wrote here. It is mix of many emotions in this update. or may be I felt all the emotions in one single update...
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You deserve more than normal praises Deepu.. You are simply wonderful and talented.. period. I am so lucky to know you.. and to read your amazing stories... Love you so much Deepu... so so so much.🤗
Thank you so much Deepu for posting the update Thursday... Saturday I wouldn't have read it on time. Thank you so much ... for changing the update schedule toThursday,... weekends are always tough for me. you are really a darling. Muaaah.🤗
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