Submerged! - ArShi FF:New note P.No 132 - Page 17

Wow, this story is getting better and better with each update. You've taken the basic story of the show and given it such a brilliant twist.

Your sketching of the history of the debauched Raizada family especially dadi's character and personality was superb.

Shyam is truly diabolical.


Khushi is wonderful but I want to see her intelligence self come to the fore now.

Looking forward to the next update.

sorry for late response, but just catching on.

just caught up on the last two parts u posted, awesome stuff! loving the way u weave backwards and forwards in time and the narrative is intriguing. loving my sweet sanki khushi as always and can i give my hunch? halfway thru reading part 3, even before khushi entered the room again i got a gut feeling that something else was 'submerged' and u r mighty clever and that it's not dhruv who she's actually been looking after but arnav! i think i can recognise my asr anywhere, it felt like an arhi scene, she only ever reacts like that to HIM and ur description of him gave me the final clue 😳 i think shyam had been stealing from the company and got found out and somehow kidnapped arnav but convinced dadi he's dhruv. oh the tangled webs we weave when we first set out to deceive 😃 cant wait to read the next part and see how my arhi fall for each other and get away from shyams's evil clutches and if that really is dhruv then oops, my bad, i obviously have a fanciful and overactive imagination and i'm still waiting for kkg and asr to meet then 😛

ohhh, just read ur last note!

Wow... arnav's reaction when meeting khushi... god he is smitten... 😉 can't wait for the next update...

Wait how did he come across her

Hayeee!!!😳😳😳eagerly waiting for chapter 4.

Well this is interesting... I'm already hooked... Loving your way of writing... At first in prologue I thought its Arnav, by the end of it thought may be Akash, then realized its actually Dhruv... Thought Dadi & Shyam together are evil, but seems like Shyam misguided her too... It's good in a way, ek hi snake kaafi hai... Loved how u introduced Arnav... Also told the background so thoroughly... Feels like we've watching a drama rather than reading... I so loved it... Nd the teaser, oh my my, how did Arnav landed here... Waiting to know... Thanks for the pm...