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Posted: 11 years ago
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Dear I dont know how u do it but u always manage to put my fav songs in ur posts😳😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: RiyaDutta

Dear I dont know how u do it but u always manage to put my fav songs in ur posts😳😆

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chalo lets see if teh trend continues😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Loquacious_Aash

😆😆

chalo lets see if teh trend continues😉


Yup lets 😉😆

N u wont believe I was actually listening to "Ishq duaa" on my mobile😳 when I opened ur "Blessings in Disguise" OS...I then replayed it again n again while reading😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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this is truly awesome... so intriguing ..
can't wait to read more...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hellos. I am back with an update. Going by the episodes, I think story will go pretty much on these lines. (HOPE NOT!!!)😡



Anyways here is the first chapter.

Hope you guys like it. I am not really happy with how this turned out, but I have been dithering on this for more than a week. So decided to go ahead and post.🤢

Criticism is always welcome.😃



Chapter 1:Faith

"...us Aaliya ko mujhpe shak ho gaya hai. Lekin uske paas humare khilaf koi saboot nahi hai. Nahi nahi...Aap fikr mat kariye! Is ghar me maine aisa jaal bichaya hai apne pyaar ka, ke mai ek aasoun tapkau isse pehle hi wo log us Aaliya ko ghar se nikal denge. Ye log mujhpe andhadhund vishwas karte hai..." She laughed hideously.

"Agar Aaliya chilla chilla ke kahegi to bhi koi manega nahi ke mai asli Barkat nahi hu...Lekin ..." her words were cut off abruptly when she turned around and saw the object of her conversation standing right in front of her.

It had been nothing concrete, but a lot of incidents, which could be called coincidences, which made her suspect Barkat.

Barkat's disappearances, her going time and again to Mir Khan's house, Mir Khan's bail, him always knowing things about their family...Something dint seem to be right. Barkat's explanations had always been too weird to be believable, but like everyone, Aaliya had been too wrapped up in the happiness flowing within her family to really think over it.

Then suddenly, the happiness started dimming.

It was as if something or someone was sucking the barkat' out of Barkat Villa. As if someone was creating problems and misunderstandings within the family.

It had taken a long time for Aaliya to reach the truth, because she dint want to spoil Zain's new found happiness in his sister by telling him about her doubts, in case she was proved wrong. So she had started avoiding Zain. She knew, she couldn't hide her disquiet from him if she met his eyes; he had an uncanny habit of reading her and the persistent busybody he was, wouldn't rest till he had made her reveal all her secrets!

But finally, after many unsuccessful attempts, she had hit the jackpot.

While passing the corridor staircase, she had chanced on Barkat and had overheard her talking to Mir Khan on the phone, planning another storm in the Abdullah household. She had been gloating about her vile achievements; laughing over those silly emotional fools' as she had put it.

Aaliya's blood had boiled as she heard the so-called-Barkat mocking her family. That had been the last straw. Aaliya could tolerate just about anything, but one word against her family and the lioness in her was ready to pounce.

She now faced the contemptible creature standing before her, her eyes icily staring down at her.

"Itna ghatiya khel? Kyu khela tumne?"

She remembered her mamu-mamu, over the moon at having found their long lost daughter. Zain and Fahad Bhai becoming kids, indulging their sister, making up for the lost years which they had missed. All those memories, all that happiness, it had been nothing but a mirage.

She turned to Barkat, her eyes shining wet with tears, "Mamu...mami...jinhone tumhe itna pyaar diya...Fahad Bhai...Zain...Dono ne tumhe apni palkon pe bithaya...Tumhare past ko apna maanke tumhe unhone pure dil se apnaya...Aur tumne unhi ke saath aisa kiya?"

Barkat glared back at her, realizing that she was in danger of being exposed. Aaliya had been her number one enemy since the day she had come here. She was very obviously the soul of this house and very difficult to manipulate unlike everyone else.

"Tumhe kya lagta hai? Ye sab maine kyu kiya?" She questioned her, trying to buy some time to reevaluate the situation.

"Paiso ke liye?" Disgust rang through Aaliya as she realized the amount of heartbreak her family would have to endure after this truth came out. "Chand rupyo ke liye tumne in sab logon ke jazbaaton ka mazaak bana diya?"

"Chand rupye? Ye crores ki property tumhe chand rupye lagte hai?" Barkat asked in disbelief. Aaliya looked at her with a despicable expression, "Shayad tumhari galti nahi hai. Tumne kabhi parivaar ki importance samjhi hi nahi. Warna in sabke pyaar ke saamne tumhe ye crores bhi kam lagte."

Barkat scoffed at her, laughing annoyingly at her beliefs.

"Itna pyaar pane ke baad koi bhi insaan jisme thodi si bhi insaniyat baki ho wo badal jata, lekin tum? Unke jazbaaton ka mazaak bana rahi ho? Unke pyaar par has rahi ho?" Aaliya caught her by her shoulders and shook her hard, unable to help herself, "Are agar tum Barkat nahi bhi thi, to bhi inka pyaar aur apnapan dekhke tumhe ek pal ke liye bhi aisa nahi laga ke mai ye badle ki bhavna ko bhool jao aur un logo ko apna lu jo mujhe is jahan me sabse zyada chahte hai?"

Barkat freed herself angrily, pushing Aaliya away, "Tum apni tankeed apne paas rakho. Mai in logo ki tarah sentimental fool nahi hu jo tumhari bakwaas baton ko importance du..."

Aaliya looked at her contemptuously, "Kisi ko khush karne ke liye jhooth bolti to shayad Allah tumhare gunaho ko thoda kam kar dete. Par tumne to ek aulad ka apne waledain ke saath ke rishte ko hi rond diya, jise duniya me khuda ne sabse paak banaya hai! Allah tumhe kabhi maaf nahi karenge! Aur na hi mai!"

At this, Barkat laughed maniacally, "Tum mera kuch nahi bigaad sakti...Pata hai kyu?"

Without waiting for an answer she continued, "Kyuke agar tumne mere khilaf kuch bhi kaha to mai in sab ko kahungi ke wo tum thi jo mujhe is ghar me lai thi Barkat bana ke..."

Aaliya's eyes widened in shock as Barkat smirked, "Ye sab saazish Mir Khan aur tumhare pyare Abbu ne mil ke ki hai, is property ke liye..."

"Tumhara dimaag to kharab nahi ho gaya hai?" Aaliya spat angrily, "Aur mere Abbu ko in sab se door rakho..."

Ignoring her outburst, Barkat continued, "Pehle Zain se tumhari shaadi karwai...fir mujhe is ghar me laya...Socho to... Kitna convenient hai na??"

Aaliya stood shell shocked as Barkat started going around her, circling her as she pointed out facts, "Wo tum thi jisne Suraiyya ko bawdi ke pass dekha ...haina? Is ghar me 18 salon me kisine ye raaz nahi jana, par tumhare aate hi tumhe Suraiyya waha dikh gayee?" She clapped as if in appreciation of her achievement.

"Phone call tumhe aaya... Barkat ko is ghar me wapas lane ka wada bhi tumne hi kiya na? Aur itne jaldi tumhe Barkat mil bhi gayee..." She laughed sarcastically.

Put like that, it seemed remarkably too logical to assume that it was planned. And Aaliya realized her folly. Maybe it had always been Mir Khan's plan and they had walked into a trap that day at the wedding where they had saved Barkat.

"Tumhe pata hai, mere is ghar me aane ke do karan the! Ye property hasil karna. Lekin usse bhi bada karan, is ghar ki khushiyon ko barbaad karna...Aur saath saath tumhe bhi..."She snarled, hatred emanating out of her eyes

"Mujhe????"

"Haan tumhe! Pehle to tum itna personally involved nahi thi. Tum sirf mere khel ka ek pyada thi. Meri wo chal jisse mai Usman Abdullah aur Ghulam Haider ko aisi chot deti ke wo zindagi bhar usse ubhar nahi pate. In dono ki dukhti rag to tum hi ho na...? Agar mai tumhe dukh du to dard multiply hoke un tak pahoch jayega...???"

"Tum pagal ho gayee ho...Mamu ya Abbu ne tumhara kya bigada hai?" Aaliya whispered, unable to fathom that someone could hate anyone to this extent. But Barkat continued as if Aaliya had not spoken.

"Jo rishta ek Nikah se mazboot hua, usi Nikah ko tod du to kaisa rahega?" She smirked evilly,

"Bahoot hui tumhari bakwaas! Mai abhi sab ko sach bata deti hu. Tumhare khel khatm hua. Jab tak mai hu tab tak is ghar pe mai kisi bure saaye ko nahi padhne dungi." Aaliya snapped, unable to bear her viciousness further. The way Barkat was behaving, Aaliya felt she was mentally imbalanced and the look in her eyes was scaring her.

"Mujhe laga tha mujhe bahoot papad belne padhenge tumhare aur Zain ke rishte ko todne ke liye. Par yaha tum to khud mera kaam aasaan kar rahi ho! Tumhe kya lagta hai? Tum kahogi ke mai Barkat nahi hu aur ye log maan jayenge?" Barkat started laughing, "Beti ka darjah humesha bahu se ucha hota hai Aaliya. Yehi sansaar ki reet hai. Aur fir mai to wo beti hu jo barson se unke pyaar ke liye taras rahi hu..." She made an innocent face, as she said this, and the next moment again started laughing at her own play acting.

Aaliya just looked at her calmly, "Mere rishte itne kamzor nahi ke itni aasani se toot jaye. Mujhe Zain pe pura vishwas hai. Koi aur meri baton pe yakeen kare ya na kare, Zain zaroor karega. Aur jab tak Zain mere saath hai, mujhe kisi cheez ki fikr nahi."

For a moment Barkat was stunned with Aaliya's confidence and faith in her relationship. Had she misjudged the situation?? She thought back over each knot she had carefully put in this web of deceit she had laid over these emotional fools.

From making Zain believe her to be a victimized abused daughter, to making him her savior. Making Suraiyya and Usman believe her shame at her past, the way she had taken their promise to always be by her. Manipulating Zain against Aaliya, putting seeds of doubt in her two Bhabhis' minds about Aaliya's intentions, it had all been done systematically.

She had played her cards well and got under each Abdullah's skin...there was no way they would doubt her or take Aaliya s word over hers.

The long last daughter would definitely be chosen over this bahu. But did she want to risk it? Wasn't she anyways planning on getting rid of Aaliya?

She turned back to meet Aaliya's gaze with an evil smile, "Itna confidence theek nahi Aaliya, mu ke bal girogi..."

"Mujhe mere Allah pe aur mere rishte par yakeen hai. Jis rishte me yakeen na ho wo rishta hi kaisa?"

"Tumhe challenge karne me mazaa to bada aata, par afsos ke is sab ke liye mere paas waqt nahi hai. Mujhe beintehaan khushi hoti jab tum is ghar se dhakke maar ke nikal di jaati... magar ek choti si problem hai..." She snarled, as she looked at Aaliya.

Aaliya raised her brows at her, "Kya.."

"Jab se mai yaha aayi hu, tumne har kadam pe meri har chaal naqamyaab ki. Mere raaste ka kaata ban gayee ho tum Aaliya. Apni harkaton se tumne mujhe plan change karne pe majboor kar diya hai..."

"Kya matlab hai tumhara..." Aaliya looked into her eyes which were glistening with malevolence, her spine tingling as fear shit through her.

Even as she understood her intention, she felt Barkat's hands on her chest, pushing her behind over the railing with a distorted voice playing in her ears, "Humesha ke liye alvida, Mrs. Aaliya Zain Abdullah..."



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So??How was it??

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Love Aash


My other work on Zaya

Blessings in Disguise

Laal Ishq

Bleeding Blue


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Edited by Loquacious_Aash - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ...Harmony...

this is truly awesome... so intriguing ..
can't wait to read more...

Thanks :) Chapetr is up😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: RiyaDutta


Yup lets 😉😆

N u wont believe I was actually listening to "Ishq duaa" on my mobile😳 when I opened ur "Blessings in Disguise" OS...I then replayed it again n again while reading😆

🤣 lolll
hifi
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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG I loved it...too good👏👏..that chudail Bakbak😡 uski toh main aisi ki taisi🥱
Ab aage kya hoga??? *biting nails*😆

I too feel this is how it will be in the show...but we never know wat the CVs might come up with somthing else...ye toh pakka hain wen nothing works she will try to hurt Aliya or somehow Aliya will be hurt saving Usman or maybe Zain..lets see😛


BTW again one of my fav songs 😳
I even love another song from this movie called "Rasiya" which will sound best wen it is a very passionate scene!!!
Edited by RiyaDutta - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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seriously..I was like ROFL 🤣🤣

HIFI back😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome... totally awesome...⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
every word, dialogue, characterization is done so beautifully...👏
totally got lost while reading it... you simply created such a magic that with every word it seems like i m watching the scene itself...😳
Hating Barkat here... you captured the malice that Bakbak is showing in recent episodes so abundantly.😡
Loved Aaliya's confidence in Zain but i think it will soon break as you have written in prologue... can't wait to read more...
Have send you buddy request... please accept it...😳
and pm me whenever you update...
keep rocking...😉

Edited by ...Harmony... - 11 years ago

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