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So it seems like Raman has taken the wrong child in his anger...😆 and guessing from the precap Ashok has followed him into his neighbourhood to piss him off again. So using this prompt I came up with a bit of a crack fic...hope you like it

Raman drove in anger, not looking at the little girl sitting beside him. His eyes were glued to the rearview mirror where Ashok's car was all but a foot away from his.

"Yeh isko doosra kaam nahi kya, jab dekho peeche pada rehta hai, ek aur nautanki aur mujhe police ko bulana padega," he blabbered to himself. He could here the little girl say something beside him, but he didn't care about Ruhi, not right now. Ashok needed to be taught a lesson.

He pulled into the driveway and parked his car in anger. He could still see Ashok's car.

"mere society mein aaneki iski himmat, ab dikhata hoon," he said as he stepped out and opened Ruhi's door without giving her a glance. The last thing he wanted was to see that damn mole. "Ruhi tum andar jao,"

The girl ran up the stairs visibly scared. Raman started walking up the stairs as Ashoke got out of the car, and started towards him,"

"Ruhi ko andar bhijvake tum is baat ko nahi chupa sakte ke Ruhi MERI beti hai, Kar le jo karna hai tujhe, lekin woh rahegi sirf aur sirf meri amaanat." Ashok spat out with conviction. Raman curled his fists in anger. No matter what he thought alone, he couldn't let Ashok think his words were bothering him.

"BAS bohut hogayi teri bakwaas, jhoot bolne ki bhi had hoti hai, aur agli baar meri society mein aake nautanki karne ki koshish ki to police bulva ke tujhe andar kardoonga, yeh MERI beti hai," he retorted as he pulled the little girl into him, wrapping one hand around the back of her head. Ashok barely took notice of this act, he was glaring at Raman and the finger he was pointing at him.

"Jhoot? Jhoot to tum bol rahe ho apne aap se. Khud soch, jab Ruhi hui to teri biwi mere saat ayaashi kar rahi thi, tab bhi tu jhoot bol raha tha apne aap se, aur ab bhi bol raha hai." Ashoke said with a smirk. Raman had had enough, he was going to teach this man a lesson now.

Just as he raised his hand, someone grabbed on to it. He looked at the source, and as expected, Ishita.

"Ishita, tum is beech mein mat pado, chodo mera haat," He said irritated. Pata nahi jhaansi ki rani ne kya kya sunliya, andar jaake phirse lecture degi...

"Choddungi haat, lekin pehle to mujhe is ghalat fehmi ko door karne do." She said narrowing her eyes at Raman. She turned to face Ashok.

"To tum kya karlogi, jab yeh beti hi mere hai, to tum kahan se aagayi is kahani mein, do take ki aurat ho samjhi?" said Ashok. Raman raised his hand again and squirmed in Ishita's grasp, anger flooding him.

"Ek minute, main thodi hi keh rahi hoon, ke yeh meri yah Raman ki beti hai. Main to yeh kehne waali thi, ke tum sahi ho, yeh bachi Raman ki nahin hain," said Ishita. Raman's hand went limp as he stared at her in shock. Ashok's face didn't hide the surprise either. "Haan, tum sahi ho, yeh Raman ki bachi nahin hai, naa meri hai. In fact, yeh tumhari bhi nahin hai, aur Shagun ki bhi nahi hain. Tum dono ek second ek doosre se ladna band karoge aur is bachi pe ek nazar daaloge, to sab samajh aayega."

At this both Raman and Ashok turned to look at the girl for the first time. They both stepped back in shock. It was a little girl, but it wasn't Ruhi. Raman looked at Ishita's angry face apologetically. Ab to 100 percent padne wala hai mujhe, yeh kya kardiya maine, yeh bachi kaun hai?

"Ruhi mere saath hai, aur is bachi ke asli maa baap isko dhoond dhoond ke pareshan hai. To agar tumhare aur koi gande affairs hue ho Ashok is bachi ke maa ke saath, baat karna is ke baap se," she said moving to the side. There was a man standing behind her, anger clear in his eyes. If Ashok was lambu, then this one could go into the Guiness book of world records.

"Paaappaaa," the little girl squealed as she ran to this man who looked less like a man and more like a sumo wrestler. He hugged his daughter still staring at Ashok. His face was red by now, and he didn't know what to do. Raman had never seen him like this, he almost wanted to laugh.

" Kya hua Ashok? Karlo na inse baat, yeh to jaan ne ke liye utawle hain ke tumhara affair inke wife se kab hua," Ishita said with a smirk. "Apna yeh bandar waala mooh leke yahan se nikal jaao, abhi isi waqt, or ayinda se tum yah tumhari biwi nazar aayi, to mujhe inko vaapis bulana padega" she said pointing at the man behind her. Ashok swallowed and ran back to his car, and drove out of there at the actual speed of life. Raman burst out laughing, until he caught Ishita's glare. His face dropped and he turned to walk into his house, like a little boy who had failed a subject in school. He knew what was to come, he wondered if he walked fast enough, he could get to Ishita's earplugs in time.


That was it a small crack one shot that came to mind, hope you guys liked it...😆




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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey guys, if you've read it and have any comments, please let me know:) I aspire to be a writer some day so I indulge in a lot of fan fiction writing, if you have any suggestions/critiques feel free to tell me, I don't do a lot of fanfics for Indian shows, but I would love to start
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Awesome dear..
Loved the last two paragraphs more with Ishita including😆. Bechara Raman, he always has to be defeated infront of Ishita😆!
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Awesome ya 😆 bechara Raman kumar
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Hi Dear😊😊..i loved your story.😊😊😊

It was so well written😊😊..I loved how u joined all the pieces together so perfectly👏👏👏
Amazing job..Im sure youll make a fabulous writer in future..⭐️
Please dont stop and continue to write more stories and ffs😃😃
I sent u a PM too..becos I couldnt comment earlier..but my 24 hour limit is done now 😛 So posting it here😃😃
Pls add me to ur PM list in case u think about writing more in future😊😊
Would love to read more from u😊😊

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: TanniSDaya

Awesome dear..
Loved the last two paragraphs more with Ishita including😆. Bechara Raman, he always has to be defeated infront of Ishita😆!



Thank You🤗The part with Ishu was my favourite, I love it when she gives it back (justifiably) to Raman!😆
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Originally posted by: rockstar29

Awesome ya 😆 bechara Raman kumar


Thank you!!🤗 LOL someone needs to knock some sense into him
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Originally posted by: simples28

Hi Dear😊😊..i loved your story.😊😊😊

It was so well written😊😊..I loved how u joined all the pieces together so perfectly👏👏👏
Amazing job..Im sure youll make a fabulous writer in future..⭐️
Please dont stop and continue to write more stories and ffs😃😃
I sent u a PM too..becos I couldnt comment earlier..but my 24 hour limit is done now 😛 So posting it here😃😃
Pls add me to ur PM list in case u think about writing more in future😊😊
Would love to read more from u😊😊


Thanks love🤗 I just got back onto the forum, and read your PM and replied too. Yaar the post limits annoy me so much! But it was really nice of you to take the time and message me with such positive comments, they are really encouraging, and hopefully I will get some good track prompts to write more ffs for this forum!😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Loved it - keep writing more, you're good at it.😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Very nice unlikely to happen and we are going to get another lecture and insults

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