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Posted: 17 years ago
oho,netra illama surusurupa pogudhu ingae...........enna giri,appadi dhaane!!!
1 problem mudiyuradhukkula aduthadhaa..........aiyyoda 2 paavapatta ladies'ai kaapatha only 2 hero & 1 thatha(vishwa) dhaane irukaanga.....ippo enna aagum,adhigama nail biting'la vittuteengalae.
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Posted: 17 years ago
They are closing in on Yusof.
Nivi and Nikhil have been kidnapped.
My nails are in bits on the floor.
Giri, bayangara thriller!
Excellent piece of creative writing!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
Kads i am laughing like anything seeing ur comment🤣
Giri worked hard to create tension & now its all gone😆
sorry giri
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: nallu

Kads i am laughing like anything seeing ur comment🤣

idhellam manasukulla vechukka koodadha,idhai paarthuttu giri ennai vezhiyila thookipottuduvaanga indha thread'la irundhu😡
Giri worked hard to create tension & now its all gone😆 ippadi ellam usupethi usepethi udambai ranagalamaa aaki vechirukeengaawwwwwwwww
sorry giri

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Posted: 17 years ago

Chapter 22

Yonus, after leaving the VP's car in the garage, bought some sandwiches, biscuits, water bottles and then took a local bus for the return trip. He then walked the remaining distance; there was hardly anyone in the area to notice him and he didn't have any difficulty reaching the house where he left Valli, tied and gagged. She was still unconscious and lying in the same position he had left her nearly 2 hours back. He untied her and removed the cloth from her mouth. He sat on the ground, leaning on the wall opposite to her and looked at her. The beads of perspiration on her forehead and above her lips glistened in the partial illumination coming from the streetlight. She looked beautiful and he estimated her to be atleast ten to twelve years older than him. He opened the food packets, ate slowly and waited for her to wake up. She slowly regained her senses. She felt a sharp pain on her head and her hand went up to check for the cause. She touched the small bump and winced in pain, wondering how it came there. Yonus stood up with the water bottle and walked towards her slowly. It was only then she noticed him, jumped up from the sofa and backed away instinctively. Then they played 'catch the crook' for the next few minutes; one might have wondered if Valli was the crook as she displayed her full potential in climbing windows, over the sofa and rolling under the cot along with intermittent running. Yonus was highly amused and deliberately allowed her to dodge him. She managed to open the back side door and run out blindly, only to trip on the washing stone and dash her head on the sidewall of the well. She fell backwards on the hard ground and passed out. Yonus hurriedly checked for her pulse and carried her inside and left her on the sofa. He brought some cotton from the bathroom cabinet and attended to her wound, for a dead hostage didn't make a worthy bargaining chip. Nevertheless, he wondered whether he could use this to instill little fear in his enemy's mind. He then hit upon the idea of taking a picture of an injured Valli. He would send it at the appropriate time. He bandaged her head with whatever clean cloth he could find and laid her on the cot. He closed the back door, checked around and went back to his favourite wall.

Yonus jerked out of his restless sleep, when he felt a hand on his shoulder.

'Mano… Manohar…. ennala thaangave mudiyalaida…. romba thalai vallikkudhu… edhaanum marundhu kuden.' Valli's face was twisted in extreme pain. He stood up immediately and eyed her suspiciously.

'Aiyo… ippadi paarthuttu nikkadhe… please edhavadhu seida… seekiram seekiram..ammavai vera kanome..', she dug into his hand with her sharp nails and he looked into her tear filled eyes vacantly. She dropped down on the floor and gripped her head and groaned in pain.

She must be an accomplished actress, he thought appreciatively.

'Naan vena Dr.Sendhilvelan kitte phone senju vara sollatta?' he examined her expression carefully. There was no sign of recognition. She continued to moan.

'Doctor ellam koopitta udane varuvangala…innikku enna kizhamai? aiyo amma amma… enga poitte…. ivana seekiram poi marundhu vangittu vara sollen… dei Mano.. en purse lerndu panam eduthukko…please poda…'

She heard the bicycle bell outside and inspite of her pain she managed a weak, 'Mano paalkaaran poraan paru… extra paal venumnu amma sonnaanga…avana pidi.'

Yonus was still looking at her confused when she threw up what ever little she had in her stomach and passed out again. All was not going according to his plan and an unhinged captive was the last thing he wanted. He was not sure if Sendhil was already on his trail. He needed some more time to plan his next move. He decided this was the time to SMS Valli's picture to Sendhil from her mobile.

'Oh my God… Oh my God' Aravind kept repeating looking at the chalk.

'Enga kedachudu Aravind idhu unakku?' Vishwa calmly enquired.

'I vaguely remember my maid servant telling me it was in one of my shirt pockets, but adhu ange eppadi vandhadhunne gnyabagathula vara maatengudhu.'

'Vedikai paarunga Vishwa. Nethu than Commissioner meetingla drug trafficking pathi discussion nadanduchu. Naanum help kettu unga officekke vandhen. The very next day... we have hit upon this... idhu ethanai periya breakthrough! But I am least excited about the find. Valli's disappearance has clouded all other issues.'

'Adhudhan irony Sendhil. I guess Aravind can find more answers at the college. But right now, we will concentrate only on Valli's safe release.'

Sendhil browsed through his PC and took a print out of Yonus Latheef. He hazily remembered about the juvenile home.

They then decided to pay another visit to VP Jeeva rathinam.

This time Jeeva was more cordial in welcoming them. When Sendhil showed him the picture, he immediately exclaimed, 'Idhu Karuppan photo aache!'

Sendhil and Aravind exchanged meaningful looks.

Sendhil clarified, 'Ivan Karuppan illai, Yonus Latheef. Enga departmentoda virundhaali. If you receive any information from him or about him, please call me immediately.'

'Ada paavi.. paarkka saadhuva irukkaan, niraya velai seiyaraan nu nenachen.. avan criminala? Romba adhirchiya irukku.'

When they came out of the staff quarters, Sendhil received another message

'Un manaiviyai uyiroda urupadiya paarkanumna udane Maduraikku kilambi vaa. Thaniyaa vaa.. Un police velaiyai kaatinalo.. unga department aalungala parthalo ava uyirukku guarantee kidaiyadhu. Unnakku irukkara avakaasam 10 hours.'

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Posted: 17 years ago
haiyyaa..........me 1st...............giri,i'm sure netra will 😡😡😈 after finding 3 episodes in her absence
aiyyo,mandai kolambiduchaa vallikku illai nadikiraala😕madurai,dhisai thiruppura velaiyo.........aravind'ku yousuf'ai identify panna muddiyalaiyaa..........aduthu enna........suthi suthi vidreengalae ippadi...nikhil & nivi vera kaanomnu innum viswakum arvindkum theriyalaiyae........valliyai theduvaangala niviyai theduvaangala😉 su abba........idhukellam vidai eppo theriyumne theriyalaiyae........mela mela valaiyai pinni kalkkuraangalae giri😲
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Posted: 17 years ago
giri u build up tension nicely
Hope valli is ok & just acting
or has she lost her memory???
this aravind can't remember anything, perfect lover boy😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Naan ennatha solradu.I'm totally left speechless.Wonder how i missed such a brilliant writing so far.Thanks for the pm.You write like a veteran writer.The character sketches,their language,dialogues,description,the suspense element......everything is BRILLIANT.And i mean it honestly.The story kept me hooked.Your style of writing has the traces of a good screen play writer.The story has all the qualities to be televised.Any idea of becoming a director?Try giri sis.I would love to see this on Vijay tv.
Looking forward to unravelling of knots.
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Posted: 17 years ago
Ditto Ditto Ditto GGG3!!!
Intha kathai mudikira varaikum.enakku lesa thalai pain panna poguthu.
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Posted: 17 years ago
Very impressive story and writing so far!
I only wanted to say this later, after it's all done... but I may not be around for a while when the story is finished up..
Depending on how the story ends and the mysteries are solved, this can be a profitable piece of writing for the author, G.
My ideas - publishing it in Tamil, or for Television or Cinema.
Adhukulla yaaraavadhu namma oor pasanga idha sudaama irukkanum.

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