NiBir TS: Kleptomania Bond *COMPLETE**Part-4 UP**19/12*

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#131

Originally posted by: naucfan
Awesome yaar...

Thanks dear...😉😆

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: janvi0513
Lovely

Thank you Janvi...😊

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picadally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#133

Lilu well written just needed to be a little more crisp i hope its ok if i said that 😊

But the part where kabir reveals rupan's plan of framing nisha was well thought of. It wud hv been extremely interesting if u wud hv lingered with the sudden change in nisha's behaviour a wee bit more

On the whole good story but missed the bond style romance 😉

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: picadally
Lilu well written just needed to be a little more crisp i hope its ok if i said that 😊
But the part where kabir reveals rupan's plan of framing nisha was well thought of. It wud hv been extremely interesting if u wud hv lingered with the sudden change in nisha's behaviour a wee bit more

On the whole good story but missed the bond style romance 😉

See whom I found...Nattzyy...🤗...(this shows u check ur PM's...so u r not lazy...😉)

@Red - Of course, its oky..😊. I will keep your points in mind when I write next time...

@Blue - Thank you Adhyapikaji...😳

@Orange - I agree, there had to be more contrast in two behaviours...I think I was writing in too much hurry... On a free day I'll rewrite the parts...

@Green - Thank you dear...😳...I guess that is becoz somewhere Kabir is just Kabir...😆

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picadally

@picadally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#135

Originally posted by: do0dleR

See whom I found...Nattzyy...🤗...
@Red - Of course, its oky..😊. I will keep your points in mind when I write next time...

@Blue - Thank you Adhyapikaji...😳

@Orange - I agree, there had to be more contrast in two behaviours...I think I was writing in too much hurry... On a free day I'll write the parts...

@Green - Thank you dear...😳...I guess that is becoz somewhere Kabir is just Kabir...😆

Aww lilu 🤗

I felt like suggesting because u write well, ur stories are different u hv a lot of scope and i appreciate u for gracefully accepting my suggestion🤗

Sure u cn come up with more parts on this.

Sweetheart kabir is nt just kabir he is k kabir 😉😆

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: picadally

Aww lilu 🤗

I felt like suggesting because u write well, ur stories are different u hv a lot of scope and i appreciate u for gracefully accepting my suggestion🤗

Sure u cn come up with more parts on this.

Sweetheart kabir is nt just kabir he is k kabir 😉😆

Aww.. thank you Nattzyy...🤗...

I'll try to come up with more ideas...😳

@Bold - Agree absolutely...😆😆