Manan FF - Kaisi yeh Yaariyan season 3 - Chapter 123 & note

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Arunima

@jesse93

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#61

Super awesome dear,
just mindblowing,
and wonder show mai yeh sequence kaise dikhate!?
Pata ni dikhate bhi or not,
but it was super super and super se bhi uper wala awesome.

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thamannamanan1

@thamannamanan1

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#62

GAAALLL

What u mean by if tomorrow never comes ?????????????

don't give me panic attacks yaar

with manan I cant take any risk

u have given a beautiful special precious weekend for manan

it was so romantic so beautiful so peaceful everything was so perfect iam really tensed about whts gonna happen when the sun rises ...

whn she read her poem he was speechless

he grants her that blank wish telling her he got more than his shRE OF HAPPINESS

she wanted this blank wish badly for next week but why my heart s telling me that next week its gonna be roller coaster ride

I said it in 3 languages I knew silence words n music

wow iam impressed roh

how dare u touch my things without my permission miss -not -so -innocent-murthy ??????????

😃

I have the exclusive right ...why shud u only have the privilege to kill ...u don't need any props ...

😃

I wish I could fulfil ur unspoken wish ...

u r not prohibited from ...

they shud know miss murthy got a secret admirer ...

nandini s gonna tell navya about manik n then open the secret to manik himself

is thr any catch ???????????????????????😊

awesome yaar

just awesome

thanks for the vms

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payal94

@payal94

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#63

Awesome update

They are made for each other

Manan ko pata hai ki ek dusre ke dil main kya chal raha hai

Manan weekend was sweet romantic and beautifulmanik wanted to claim her as his Nandini befor the weekend

Nandu ne use vo chance diya

Loved it

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Aashna_chawla

@Aashna_chawla

Voyager

+ 6

Posted: 9 years ago

#64

Wow the love making was something you write something awesome i wanna learn it from you. Seems like Nicholas sparks is your favourite you have same pattern like him , i love his pattern as well as yours i don't have much to say words can't describe your skills i m actually impressed glad i came through your story i so wish if in near future i could write something like this so awesome and flawless i doubt that manan make out ki kami yha puri ho gyi keep it up and update soon i love u for this update

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Keeprak

@Keeprak

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#65

Lovely update with an interesting last sentence. I am curious to know how you will take it forward.

Have a happy break and rest well.

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1_drop_of_rain

@1_drop_of_rain

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: Aashna_chawla
Wow the love making was something you write something awesome i wanna learn it from you. Seems like Nicholas sparks is your favourite you have same pattern like him , i love his pattern as well as yours i don't have much to say words can't describe your skills i m actually impressed glad i came through your story i so wish if in near future i could write something like this so awesome and flawless i doubt that manan make out ki kami yha puri ho gyi keep it up and update soon i love u for this update

No dear, eventhough nicholas sparks is a very readable author and some of his books are good, he is not my favourite and i havent read him in years now. I wrote it more out of instinct.. I call it motion analysis..sounds hifi but well.

To give u an example.. Sometimes d mood can b slow and so are all the actions..mostly wen a girl is taking the lead but at those times when a guy is d one initiating, its a little fast and comparatively rough. So the choice of words should show the nature of feelings and its pace. Another trick is to draw parallel. If u write in explicit terms, it becomes erotica.. So it keep it enchanting and yet prevent it from sounding vulgar, we use comparisons. Like the twisted wire thing. I m just learning dear.. As much as you are.. These scenes r tricky n need extra care. I m glad that u liked it

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ac2000

@ac2000

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Posted: 9 years ago

#67

Awesome update. Manan's intimate scene was hot ☺️. But I am scared 😲, with so much happiness for Manan (and us 😉), are heartbreak and tears around the corner? 😕 Update soon. Take care. ❤️