Manan FF - Kaisi yeh Yaariyan season 3 - Chapter 123 & note - Page 22

Lovely update with an interesting last sentence. I am curious to know how you will take it forward.

Originally posted by: Aashna_chawla

Wow the love making was something you write something awesome i wanna learn it from you. Seems like Nicholas sparks is your favourite you have same pattern like him , i love his pattern as well as yours i don't have much to say words can't describe your skills i m actually impressed glad i came through your story i so wish if in near future i could write something like this so awesome and flawless i doubt that manan make out ki kami yha puri ho gyi keep it up and update soon i love u for this update

No dear, eventhough nicholas sparks is a very readable author and some of his books are good, he is not my favourite and i havent read him in years now. I wrote it more out of instinct.. I call it motion analysis..sounds hifi but well.

Awesome update. Manan's intimate scene was hot ☺️. But I am scared 😲, with so much happiness for Manan (and us 😉), are heartbreak and tears around the corner? 😕 Update soon. Take care. ❤️

beautiful update dear. .it was simply pure.soo romantic .again a wonderful episode. take care.god bless u.

That was such an amazing update man!!!!!!!!

And that dialogue..

chap 66

awwdorable chap...
nandini wants those shoes back...
coz it was d first gift of manik aftr coming back...

manik grabbed d opportunity to fulfil her third wish with his innovative mind. ..
he brought fireflies stars n his personal shining star together once again unknowingly...
can he get more cuter?...

last part was very sweet...
expressing her feelings thru poem...
loved it

chap 67

this gives me vibes abt impending unpredictable future...
she decided to tell him abt past after sharing it with navya...
blank wish will come handy for it..

"I said it in the three languages I know... silence, words and music. I don't think saying it in a foreign language would have made it any more genuine."
this line stole my heart...
just one word for this...heavenly...

for last part...
u deserve an applause...
u penned it down sooo beautifully without getting vulgar at all...
loved it...
ur play with d words in this is flawless..
loved it...

Amazing update...

Originally posted by: 1_drop_of_rain

No dear, eventhough nicholas sparks is a very readable author and some of his books are good, he is not my favourite and i havent read him in years now. I wrote it more out of instinct.. I call it motion analysis..sounds hifi but well.

To give u an example.. Sometimes d mood can b slow and so are all the actions..mostly wen a girl is taking the lead but at those times when a guy is d one initiating, its a little fast and comparatively rough. So the choice of words should show the nature of feelings and its pace. Another trick is to draw parallel. If u write in explicit terms, it becomes erotica.. So it keep it enchanting and yet prevent it from sounding vulgar, we use comparisons. Like the twisted wire thing. I m just learning dear.. As much as you are.. These scenes r tricky n need extra care. I m glad that u liked it

True that make outs are always tricky i like your tip would keep in my mind

Brilliant update dear.manik was gone and nandu was missing him badly. she could feel him every were.the way she was thinking how much he luvs her even more than her perents .of cause her ayyappa send him to her.she was blushing thinking about their last nit.then bloody dirty villain neel enter. how much I hate that donkey. wow I liked when nandu praised manik in front of that donkey. u r an awesome writer.I can imagine each scene in front of my eyes.so good very nice episode. keep it up and god bless u.