New beginnings (SS) Part-1

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sally2651

@sally2651

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Hey nice one dear,
I mean the awkwardness is very well-written. Do update =)

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LoLo

@LoLo

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#12

I really enjoyed it. The apprehensiion is totally expected, in my opinion. Would love to see this going forward. Thanks for the PM.

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Srijanee

@luvflicksgirl

Dazzler

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

heyy loved the way u have portrayed the dilemma do cont soon nd plz pm me

Edited by sweetlove4barun - 13 years ago

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serialfan2012

@serialfan2012

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Love it! Actually, a very refreshing and realistic storyline.

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Tia.0

@Tia.0

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

It's a nice piece of writing... But I really don't identify with that doormat Khushi...

In fact, the reasoning Bauji applied is filled with holes... You hid something from him to save his family's feelings which justifies him dragging you to temple to marry you, threaten you, treat you like crap and then throw a bone to you as a favour that him, ASR, is willing to take you back as his wife, so you can wag your tail and do what every Indian woman has been doing for ages and go back with him being grateful.

So what if he used as a punching bag because he could not do that to the creep, so what if he trusted his creep bro in law more than he trusted you, his so-called love... His expression shows he is in love so what if his actions does not say it... He is the man, so he can do it.

And Khushi being grateful Indian woman goes with Arnav back to his home ready to forgive and forget everything...

I can't identify an independent woman who stood up to ASR and gave as good as she got and said, "Aap shut up" with this submissive Khushi.

However, the style of writing is nice.

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farheen75

@farheen75

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

wonderful concept and a great start...the cvs should include this ss in the show bcz thats exactly arnav and khsuhi's gonna feel after the MU will clear...u have managed to capture the true essence of arnav's character.