OS - To notice or not... (update on page 4) - Page 3

First things first- PLEASE PM ME SO I CAN ENJOY ANY FUTURE WRITINGS/UPDATES ON YOUR WORK!!!!

Im going to assume it was nervousness, and not tongue in cheek naughtiness on your part when you said you were not sure if your writing was up to the parr! Let me, an E.Litt professor assure you, my NEW FAVORITE WRITER, that the turn or phrase and the emotions used, the artful blending of dialogue and atmosphere- all of this speaks of natural talent that far surpasses a lot of the drivel being proudly posted (and appreciated!) nowadays.

PLEASE assure me you'll be writing up a storm-we all need some well written, cheery OS and Short Stories, (and ideally, if you can be tempted, an ASR-Khushi focused, frequently updated FF with LONG entries!). The next few week will be pure torment and hell, both for ArHi and the audience, consider it your obligation to us fellow passengers on the good ship "Dumb Man Creates a Fiasco"...

That was so well written... lavanya is adorable and i would love it if on the show they'd do half as much for her as ur story did :D

Brilliant and refreshing 👏

Yes. I love Lavanya too.. she is such an innocent girl and very good at heart. 😳

i liked the os so much pls add me 2 ur pm list pls pm me when u update next part

Originally posted by: moonlight99

Awesome you have a gift for writing! Thank you! J the emotions were perfect...I suggest you continue with a story of arnav and khushi! I plan on doing exactly that!

Originally posted by: mahi0809

Wow... This was exceptionally brilliant... Very well written... I loved how you portrayed La as a person rather than some emotionless bimbo!! Thank you! Its too bad that so many forget that she has feelings too.

I loved this La who thinks about others too... and wants to bring Arnav and Khushi together...

Do continue!

Originally posted by: moon_mine

loved the way hw u made lavanya's character exit!!!!! Thank you! Maybe one of the CV's will see it and oblige us with a good exit for her.

Originally posted by: tina_1234

awww d end part was sooo cute

i heart u lavanya (me too me too!)

Originally posted by: mirnalini

That was beautifully written! Thank you!!

La's very sweet and nice. I hope she bows out gracefully, and not be hurt by a sudden revelation of any sort.

And yes, she deserves the happy ending you've given her I agree, she definitely needs a happy ending.

Originally posted by: sarach

wow..v good..i do really want a graceful xit for her too..now i feel for her..how dejected she will b as a glimpse in today's epi when he yelled.. I don't know why Arnav yelled at her because I refuse to watch the scene for fear of being reduced into a mess of tears. Thanks for the update though (and of course, commenting)

Originally posted by: hkhb17

i truly loved it!!! actually i was a bit tearful about how she left Arnav. so well done!!!! trully!!!! respect!!!!!! Coming from a pretty good writer, I accept the compliment with many thanks J I hope I have not been remiss on commenting on your page as well. Thanks for the PM's!

Originally posted by: SiRul

Loved i hope La leave in this way by herself I agree. Thanks for reading!

Originally posted by: -Urvi-

Liked it? I loved it (blush)! Lavanya is such a genuine character (she really is!) that is I feel for her just as much as I do for Khushi, if not more in some way. I've always wanted her to find her happy ending too... And somehow I feel that this OS is as close as we'll get to it. Thanks for this (It is entirely my pleasure). Beautifully written! Thank you :))

Originally posted by: FebruaryFlower

WOW!!

This was simply amazing!

Your writing style is truly captivating. I was totally hooked!! (yaaay! :))

I respect Lavanya even more for the way she left...full of grace and elegance. I really think her she deserves it!

I do hope you'll continue writing (How can I not? I need someplace to vent and make the story go the way I want it). It would be a pleasure to read more of your work.

If so, do PM me!!! PM'ing right now!

Originally posted by: simbel

Wonderfully written, you really made blah into someone with a character! And I loved the note she left him. Please write more Thank you! I really appreciate that you took the time to comment!

Originally posted by: shaz01

it was sooo brilliantly written dear...i absolutely loved reading it!!! Thank you, the pleasure is all mine.

i had visuals running in my head as i read the piece so thank u for this pleasure

(I do that too when I read! It makes the story come to life!)

this particular part though...

Later that day, he sat alone in the quietness of his garden, contemplating the note Lavanya had left addressed only to him. No one else had known it was there. He hadn't shown it to anyone. He couldn't. He pulled the crushed paper out of his pocket to read it again.

ASR-

There is a reason why you gave her back her mothers' anklet.

And there is a reason why you had it in the first place.

Tell her you love her. Don't wait.

-Lavanya.

"What the... how did she know?"

He didn't think she noticed.

i could literally the male humming version of rabba ve playing in my head when i read this part...i tried looking for the exact tune i was after but couldnt find it otherwise wouldve posted...Well if you ever find it, feel free to post it here J I'd like to know which tune you were talking about. In the meanwhile, here's a link to the song I had on loop when I was thinking about Lavanya and what she was feeling. Let me know if you like it! :) Its called "Almost Lover" by A Fine Frenzy.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EDEEzS7OV2k

but for a writer to create such visually (and audibally ) stimulating work is BRILLIANT!!! well done! (Takes a bow. Then promptly stumbles and falls into the crowd due to major lack of co-ordination. *sigh*)

Originally posted by: littlemoi

that was just beautiful!!

awesome job!! Thank you! I hope you like the next parts just as much as this one :)

Originally posted by: tanya_vi

Very well written!! i used to hate La before,but now the changed Lavanya has totally won me over. As you have written..she does deserve better..lovely piece of work..please keep writing..All the very best!!

Aaah you took pink away! I panicked for a minute there because I didn't know which colour to respond to you in. I guess you'll have to make do with green :) Thank you for the compliments! Yes Lavanya has won many of us over now. Hoping for the best for her!

Originally posted by: Arhi-Sarun

OMG, this was written so brilliantly...loved the Lavanya you portrayed...it was truly great...fantastic job Thank you so much! This Lavanya is pretty much a piece of myself so I'm glad you like it :)

Originally posted by: CrazyAbtTV18

lovely OS.. awesome.. Thank you!

i hope this surely happens in the serila. don't want kush's and la's friendship to be messed up (True. Hard to keep a friendship intact without adding these issues as well).. she has enough of foes, she needs a true friend who understands her to stand beside and support.

Originally posted by: MsCeylon

Really nice...Pls continue

I like all aspects of IPKKND

Pls add me to your PM list if you have one Absolutely! Thanks for reading!

Originally posted by: minimuffin86

i love it!!! finally something on Lavanya (I knowww! I got tired of waiting for someone else to do it so I decided to go ahead and write one myself lol) !! i love her!!! me want more (mee tooo)!! pm me the next part (okie dokie)!!

Originally posted by: napstermonster

First things first- PLEASE PM ME SO I CAN ENJOY ANY FUTURE WRITINGS/UPDATES ON YOUR WORK!!!! I WILL I WILL I PROMISE!!

Im going to assume it was nervousness (it was'erm..is), and not tongue in cheek naughtiness on your part (I wish.) when you said you were not sure if your writing was up to the parr! Let me, an E.Litt professor assure you, my NEW FAVORITE WRITER (really? O_O), that the turn or phrase and the emotions used, the artful blending of dialogue and atmosphere- all of this speaks of natural talent that far surpasses a lot of the drivel being proudly posted (and appreciated!) nowadays. (Thank you. That is truly a lovely compliment. Although this means that I will be expecting some constructive criticism from you so I can improve! :))

PLEASE assure me you'll be writing up a storm (maybe not a storm' more like a small tidal wave. That's ok, right?)-we all need some well written, cheery OS( fair warning, this may not get cheery exactly for a few more chapters.) and Short Stories, (and ideally, if you can be tempted, an ASR-Khushi focused, frequently updated FF with LONG entries! haha I will try my best). The next few week will be pure torment and hell, both for ArHi and the audience, consider it your obligation to us fellow passengers (that's a lot of passengers to oblige) on the good ship "Dumb Man Creates a Fiasco" (Aah, you've been there I see. I personally get thrown off that same ship multiple times in a week. Apparently I have anger issues and they need to cut me off so I can retain my sanity. I keep going back though. *sigh*)...

Originally posted by: Priya_128

That was so well written... lavanya is adorable and i would love it if on the show they'd do half as much for her as ur story did :D Thank you so much, I hope so too! She's been treated abominably so far.

its the best one shot ive read...

Originally posted by: NVBGKY

Wow, you have a true talent. One of the best pieces of writing I've read on the forum Thank you so much, that means a lot to me.Love that you have given so much dignity to Lavanya, I think her character deserves it (she certainly does. She'd paid her dues for her earlier actions, don't you agree?).Please PM when you write something new.

Originally posted by: monsi08

Brilliant and refreshing Thank you! Hope you think the same of the next one as well!

Originally posted by: Meenakshi_Dhane

Yes. I love Lavanya too.. she is such an innocent girl and very good at heart.

I was crying while reading your story (I hope that's a good thing')as you actually potrayed how she had always suffered, just because she fall in love with ASR who didn't love her back. Always tough to be in a one-sided relationship.

So nicely written.. awesome.. loved it to the core.. Thank you from my core I want ot know more about Lavanya's story.. you haven't completed it.. It'll be coming soon..ish. I wasn't planning on writing more but I hate leaving something incomplete. please write next part for me.. and for your favorite Lavanya.. Please... And do send me update if you continued... Please..

Originally posted by: meenaluma

i liked the os so much pls add me 2 ur pm list pls pm me when u update next part Will do. Thank you for reading!

WHAT a great send off for La! I am thrilled with the diginity you have given her! It's not HER fault that ASR fell in love with Kushi. She desrves her happy ending too!

Lovely Lavanya! in love with her character! keep up the good work:D