'my first fanfic'continued by me(part 17) - Page 6

fantastic. 👏 👏 👏 way to go pal fabulous 👏

nice part srishti continue soon👏

PART-10
adi is driving his car he is nearby marine drive he just luks from his car window and sees chandni taking a walk with her bg!he stops his car and goes there but he doesn't meet them he just stands nearby and hear their talks!
bg=chal puttar der ho gayi chalte hai
chandni=kya bg aaj to birthday hai aur aaj bhi aisa kar rahe ho chalo na
adi hears this and gets happy knowing that its chandni's birthday!
he goes back to his and drives back to his home!when he reaches his home he straight away proceeds to his room!
adi=aaj chandni ka birthday hai aur ye birthday uski zindagi ka sabse special birthday hoga1
he decides to give hera a surprise party in ic! he calls kabir!kabir picks up the phone
adi=hello kabir
kabir=haan bol adi
adi=jaldi mere ghar aaja
kabir=par kya huya
adi=aane par bataunga to aaja bas
kabir=thike main aa raha hun
then he calls varun and smita and asks them to come to his home
then he calls amy and amy picks up the phone
adi=hello amy
amy=haan adi
adi=jaldi se ghar aajao
amy=par huya kya adi ek to vaise hi neend aa rahi hai aur........she yawns
adi=main kuch janta aana to padega bye
amy=thike bye
atlast he calls tia who's still sitting in the cafe with ranveer.tia picks up her cell
adi=hello tia adi here
tia=haan adi bolo
tia=actually tia adi ko tumse i mean mujhe tumse ek favour chahiye
tia=haan bolo adi
adi=tum jaldi se mere ghar aa jao!aur baki sab ko bhi inform kar do is baare
tia=par.......kya baat hai adi
adi=baaki sab baad mein pehle tum sab ko lekar aa jao
tia=par tumhara address kya
adi=likho
tia=ya just a minute
she takes out a paper from her purse and writes
adi=address hai bunglow no.18,bandra
tia=ok
adi=ok bye
tia=bye
ranveer=kya huya tia kya bol rahe the adi
tia=adi ne sabko apne ghar bulaya hai
ranveer=kyun
tia=pata nahi par adi bahut jaldi mein tha usne kaha ki tia sab ko is baare mein inform kar de
ranveer=zaroor koi baat hogi unhone apna address kya bataya
tia=ye address hai
ranveer=thike hum sab ko inform kar dete hai
tia=tia bhi tumhare saath chalegi ranveer
ranveer=thike!
everyone reaches adi's house
amy(yawning)=kya huya adi kyun bulaya
adi=guyz aaj chandni ka birthday hai aur main use surprise birthday party dena chahta hun ic mein
smita=chandni ka birthday par usne to mujhe nahi bataya
amy=aur mujhe bhi nahi bataya
adi=to mujhe kaunsa bataya maine to pata lagaya hai
ab without wasting any time tum sab mujhe apne ideas batao kyunki time bahut kam hai
tia=tia thinks ki pehle hume birthday cake ka arrangement karna chahiye1par chandni ka fav. flavour kya hai
varun=pineapple
adi=ye chandni ka fav. flavour hai
varun=nahi ye mera fav. flavour hai
everyone laughs
amy=uska fav. flavour choclate hai
ashi=next hume chandni ko ek accha sa gift dena chahiye
uv=and fir decorations
adi=ok guyz lets get on with it!
they all reach ic and make the arrangements
tia-ranveer r making the arrangemets for the cake and eateries!adi and amy r doing the other arrangements like music system and all!ashi-uv r decorating the hub with balloons and while sticking the balloons their hands collide they both look into each others eyes and remember all the sweet memories like when uv kissed her,proposed her,their first meeting just then ashi is called by someone and their memories r interupted!ashi takes out her hand and goes!uv just smiles and proceeds with the arrangements!its adi who was calling ashi
adi=ashi decorations ho gayi kya
ashi=haan adi bas ho gaya
just then amy comes and informs adi that chandni has come
amy=adi chandni aa gayi bas
adi=ok everyone chandni aane wali hai lights off
chandni enters the hub and everyone wishes her happy birthday and chandni is bit shocked
adi comes to her with a rose and gives it to her and says
adi=happy birthday chandni!tumhe kya laga tum kisi ko kuch nahi bataogi aur hume pata nahi chalega!
chandni=par aaj to mera birthday hai hi nahi
adi=kya!!!!!!
chandni=haan!
ranveer=chandni agar aaj aapka birthday nahi hai to kiska birthday hai
chandni=meri bg ka
adi=bggggggg ka
chandni=haan to tumhe laga ki aaj mera birthday hai
ashi bursts into laughter and everyone out there laughs xcept adi who is bit embarassed!

Originally posted by: leogal

Very Beautiful....
but shristi i feel that you could've put more light on the dance scene... and as we all love to see our "made for each other" couple a slash of romance would do the trick.. remember the hotel wala scene..chandni winked at Adi and Adi was happily shocked... 😆 my that was something... haha
Nevertheless an amazing job... 👏

dhvani in the compensation of this thing u will see more and more romantic scenes of AC!Pucca!😉

👏 damn gud shrishti........ur fic realli rox 👏 👏 👏

ya n im realli waitin 2 c d AC scenes.....cuz in d org ic wich is gettin retelecasted its gonna tak a loooong time 2 c d Ac scenes....now vll b cin d fightin.....

oh ya n seriously kp it up yaar 👏 👏

Originally posted by: srishti bhutani

dhvani in the compensation of this thing u will see more and more romantic scenes of AC!Pucca!😉

👏grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr8.I mean u r fab.keep up the gud work.

PART-11
everyone is sitting in canteen xcept chandni!they all r laughing on adi's misunderstanding!and adi is quite frustrated on all this!just then chandni comes and everyone stops laughing!
C=adi bg ka birthday hai isliye mujhe halfday chahiye so may i go!
A=ya sure!
the moment chandni goes everyone again strts laughing!
adi=has lo haslo jab mera time aayega to main tum sab par hasunga ha ha ha!
when adi sees that still they r laughing then he frustatingly says.....
adi=bahut ho gaya main ghar jaa raha hun
ashi=adi tumhe chandni ka ghar ka address pata hai na
adi=haan kyun
ashi= haan to on the way jate huye chandni ki bg ko meri taraf se birthday wish kar dena!
and every1 out there again strts laughing.....
adi=haan haan kar dunga
and adi leaves!
He reaches his home and sees a lady sitting with his grandpa and he says.......
adi=parminder bua !!!ab aur kitna din kharab hoga!
lagta hai din itna bhi bura nahi hai bunty jo nahi hai!
grandpa=are adi beta aaj jaldi kaise aa gaya!
parminder=adi kitna bada ho gaya hai!bachpan mein kitni sharartein karta tha!
adi touches her feet and she says.....
parminder=jinda reh1accha uncleji main chalti hun
adi=shuker hai
parminder=kuch kaha adi
adi=ji ji main keh raha tha ki bunty ko mera hello kehna!
parminder=are puttar bunty to yahi hai tere kamre mein khel raha hai!
adi=kya!!!!
parminder=haan!pata hai pure nau(9) saal ka ho gaya hai!IInd class mein padta hai!bahut sayana ho gaya hai!par haan uski vo sharatein to ab bhi thodi hai!accha haan main main gal to karna hi bhul gayi
adi=ab kya main bacha hai
parminder=vo actually puttar main ek mahine ke liye america ja rahi hun par bunty mere saath nahi ja payega exams chal rahe na uske
adi=matlab
parminder=matlab ye tera pyar pyara bhai ab tere saath rahega ek mahine ke liye tere hi kamre mein
adi=oh nooooooo
parminder=kya
adi=mera matlab oh yes oh yes...
parminder=changa main chalti hun bye bye
adi=bye!!!!!
the moment she goes adi xclaims=meraaaaaa kamraaaaaaaa!
and he fatafat goes to his room and is shocked!
there in the call centre ranveer gifts a ring to tia and says...
ranveer=tia ye aapke liye
tia=oh tia's god its so beautiful!par ranveer ye to bahut xpensive hai
ranveer=hume malum hai par iski keemat se zyada hume aapki muskaan pyari hai!
he puts the ring in tia's fingerand kisses her hands!

i m simply in luv vid ur fic shrishti..........keep it up!!!!!!!!! 👏

PART-12
In the call centre students of maurya r working on their project reports in groups and the teacher is guiding them!sid,ashi,uv and meher r in one group whereas ranveer,tia,vrinda and varun r in another group and other students r in their respective groups!
in sid,ashi,uv and meher's group sid and meher r making the outlook of the folder of the project report and uv is writing the matter and ashi is dictating!
uv=ashi main kaise likhunga agar tum itna fast bologi to zara dheere bolo!
ashi=physco hume ye project report year 2010 mein nahi deni!tum jaldi likha karo!
uv=wacko main tumhare saath kaam bilkul bhi nahi kar sakta tum sach mein wacko ho!
ashi=to tumhare saath kaam karna kaun chahta!
meher=ashi-uv tum dono fir ladne lag gaye!team mein aise kaam thodi hota hai!ok ek kaam karte hai ashi tum folder ka outlook design karne ke liyesid ki madat karo aur main uv ko dictate karti hun!
ashi=fine!!!
ashi strts helping sid and meher dictates the matter to uv!
ashi=sid ye kya kar rahe ho ye wala colour lo
sid=par main soch raha tha ki ye colour better
ashi=sochne ka time nahi hai just do it
sid=par
ashi just slaps on his head not very hard and says
ashi=now any question
sid=accha accha kar raha hun
ashi=good
on uv and meher's side uv says
uv=meher lagta hai ki is pen ki ink khatam ho gayi main ismein ink fill kar deta hun
meher= ya sure
uv forwards his hand to take the ink bottle kept beside ashi but in the process ink falls on the folder on which sid and ashi were working!and ashi shouts....
ashi=physco ye tumna kya kiya saare hard work ka kachra kar diya!u stupid!
uv=ashi ye sab galti se huya hai aur tumne mujhe stupid kaha
ashi=btw stupid ko stupid hi kaha jata hai stupid
uv=wacko stupid main nahi tum ho stupid ke saath sarphiri bhi ho
ashi strts pulling uv's hairs and the teacher comes
and says.....ashi-uv tum dono first class ke bacche ho jo is tarah se behave kar rahe ho uv tum ranveer ke group mein jao aur ranveer tum uv ke group mein aao!
now i don't want any disturbance ye maurya nahi ye ek call centre hai kam se kam aap sab yahan discipline mein raho!is that clear!
every1=yes ma'am!
after that every1 gets back to work!
there in adi's room adi recovers from his shocked state and breaks the silence by saying...
adi=ye kya haal bana rakha hai mere kamre ka
and bunty his 9 year old cousin says....
bunty=are adi bhaiyya aa jao aa jao apna hi kamra samjho
adi=are apna kamra kya samjho mera hi kamra hai
just then grandpa comes and says...
gp=adi ab se har tu bunty ko school chodne or lene aayega
adi=what par gp
gp=bahais nahi !tera bhai hi to hai!bunty adi bhaiyya ko pareshan mat karna!
bunty=ok dadu1
gp=bye beta!
adi=bunty ke saath ek mahina ek kamre mein oh noooooo!