Maaneet OS (One-Shot) Series : Love boundaries crossed

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Hi All,


Presenting my first attempt at a MAANEET OS.


Maaneet OS (One-Shot) Series - 1 of 1 :

Pyaar ki Gehraai


Maan :

I want to know the complete truth, Geet, warna tum mera maraa hua mooh dekhogi. Bolo!


Geet :

Aapki baatein hamesha kadvee kyun? Kya itna hi iss dosti ka haqq banta hai mera aap par? Aur kuch nahi?


Maan :

DOST TOH HUM HAIN ABHI AUR HUA KARTE THE.

Main humare beech ke sacch ki baat kar raha hoon. Anjaan banna aasaan hai, par sacchaai se mooh modnaa galat hoga. Tum hum dono ke beech ki nazdeekiyon ko dosti ka naam hi kyun deti ho hamesha?


Geet :

DOSTI ko dosti naa kahun toh aur isse behtar shabd hai aapke paas?


Maan :

Tum jaanti ho sab kuch. Uss raat kaale ghane jungle mein joh hua. Woh mere liye jaanna aur samajhnaa mushkil nahi. Par tum samajhkar bhi baaton ko andhekha karti ho. Ab time waste mat karo aur bolo. Kyaa iss door ko keenchkar toot dene dein? Iska attoothtaa ko jaane dein hum?


Geet :

Dosti pyaar sab theek hai. Jo dost kabhi the, woh aashiq kab bane waqt ko bhi pataa nahi hota. Disha kyaa hoti hai yeh woh aashiq nahi samajh paate. Par woh aashiq jo apni maashukaa ka haath thaamkar ek din chalaa jaaye usse chodkar? Yeh main kabhi qubool nahi kar sakti. Aap jaante hain ki sacchaai kyaa hai aur iss rishte ki gehraai ki samajh bhi rakte hi honge. Naa nahi kaha. Par kyaa abhi iss jagah se door kaheen mujhe le jaakar meri maang bharna kya samay aur maryaada ka ullanghan karna aisa nahi maana jayega?


Maan :

Main tumse yehi toh keh raha hoon.

Hum aashiq aur maashukaa bhi huye toh bhi yeh rishta prempoorvak tab hoga jab main tumhaari maang bharoonga aur tumhare gale mein mere hi naam ka mangal sutra pehnaaoonga. Sab se waakif ho par apna hi pyaar qubool nahi hota tumse, Geet.

SAB JAANTE HUYE BHI, MAIN AAJ BHAREE BAZAAR YAA EK MANDIR MEIN TUMHE LE JAAKAR TUMSE SHAADI KARNE KE LIYE TAIYYAR KHADA HOON.


Geet :

AAP BAATEIN ACCHI KAR LETE HONGE.

Par apne parivaar aur badon ki marzi ke khilaaf jaayenge toh waapas shaadi shuda jode ki tarah aapke ghar sansaar ko roshan karne main aapke saath a bhi jaaoon, par kya aapke rishtedaar, apne hi bete yaa pote ki karaamat se sehmat honge? Main aapki vivaahitaa patni bhi bann jaaoon, par uss parivaar ne mujhe nahi sweekara toh main aapki bhaavi ardhaangini hi sahi par uss bhaara poora parivaar ka prem mujhe nahi mil payega aur main ek vivaahita stree hi sahi, ek bahu kabhi nahi bann paoongi. Mera swabhimaan aur atmavishwaas dono dagmagaa jayenge. Kyaa aap mere baat ko maan dekar bhi sab apne hisaab se ho jaaye iski prarthana karte hain?


Maan :

Meri prarthana, meri kaamna aur mera vishwaas sab tum hi ho, Geet Handa.

Par hum kab tak sach se khud anjaan rahein yaa chipte chalein. Huamri shaadi bhale hi naa hui ho abhi tak, par uss raat ki nazaakat aur humare beech ki nazdeekiyaan iss baat ka gawaah aur saboot hain, ke dosti se bhale humne shuruvaat ki, par pyaar ne apnaa kaam kar diya aur hum uss ghane sunsaan jungle mein ek raat bitaakar ek ho gaye. Humne tann mann dhann se apne aap ko dono ke beech aane ka mauka diya aur pyaar ki yehi baat main tumse qubool karne ko keh bhi rahaa hoon. Uss raat ke baad mera tumpar adhikaar ho gaya aur sirf yeh shaareerik roop se nahi tha Geet. Tumhe sab pataa hai ke uss raat hum dono ke iccha ke saath hi humne shaadi ke pehle hi suhaag ko apnaa liya tha.

MERA VISWAAS HAI KE WOH MERA PYAAR AUR SNEHA DARSHAANE KA KAARAN BHI HAI. TUMSE MILNAA KITNA ACCHA LAGTA HAI MUJHE.

KYAA HUMAARA MILNA AUR SAATH BAITHKAR BAATCHEET KARNA BHI TUMHE AB MANZOOR NAHI?


Geet :

Toh theek hi hai. Chaliye, mandir mein mujhe le jaakar apnaa bana lijiye. Saare sansaar ke virrudh jaakar. Kya aap iss baat se khush honge. Kyaa aapka parivaar iss baat ki sehmati dega?


Maan :

Main samay ko maan doonga. Parivaar ke prati mera sneha aur pyaar aaj bhi utna hi hai jitnaaki tuhaare taraf hai.

Aaj kyaa tum apne aa baap se kshama maangne aur mujhe apnaa banaane ke liye humare rishte ko aage badhne dogi? Shaadi sab ki sehmati aur manzoori ke saath ho yeh hi main bhi chahtaa hoon. Par agar samajh lo ke tumhare maa aur baap nahi maane aur tumhe mujhse aaj se milne bhi nahi dein, kyaa tum yeh doori sehan kar paaogi?

Main nahi kar paaoonga Geet.

Tumhare liye merasab kuch main de doon, tab bhi shaayad tumhaare pyaar ki taakat se kam hi hoga.

Par aaj main apnaa sa kuch gavaakar tumhaara bann jaoonga Geet. Sirf tum ek baar haan kehkar toh dekho. Humari zindagi khushaali se beete aur main tumhaara saath dekar, tumhaara sahaara aur prernaa bhi banne ko taiyyaar hoon. Kyaa tum mujhe apnaane se darkar, apnaa mann kisi andhere mein kaid karke, yaa mujhse doori hiho gayi, yeh sab baatein tumhein jeevit rakh paayengi?

Markar bhi insaan narak mein hi jaaye agar uske karam mein galatiyaan aur sharmindagi ho.

Par narak hi nahi hota, woh ek yogya insaan bhi hota hai jise parlok main bhi apnaa sthaan mile kyunki uske karam yaa kaarnaame usse sacchaai aur imaandaari ki taraf hi le jaate hain.


Geet :

Parlok aur narlok sab ko jaana hi hota hai. Yeh hi duniyaadaari bhi kahi jaati hai.

Aaj aap mujhe apnaa banaayenge, main sampann sehmati se aapko mera doosra hissa maan loongi Maan, aap bass ishaara karo. Yeh Geet Handa apnaa sab kuch tyaagkar aur gavaakar aapki hi banegi. Aaj aap mujhse shaadi karlo.


Maan :

Chalo Geet.

Yeh hi sahi hoga.

Baad ka baadme dekhenge. Sab log humare hitt mein hi sochte hain. Aur hum dono ka pyaar kitnaa gehraa hai yeh bhi jaan jayenge.

Aaj se main tumhe apnaa saara kuch saunpkar, tumhaare sahaare aur prem ke saath jeene ko taiyyaar hoon.

Toh chalo, iss riste ko ek naya naam dein. Ek aisa mukaam haasil karein jisse koi bhi hum dono ko judaa na kar payein.



THE END

Edited by waterlotus.19 - 4 years ago

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Posted: 4 years ago
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amazing

lovely

maan n geet ready to face any thing in life together

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Posted: 4 years ago
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hi how are you?


Congrats on the OS!

fabulous OS.... well written

they love each other so much and will always be with each other

Liked that Maan was adamant

her concerns were reasonable

Maan wants to give their relationship a name

Edited by khwaishfan - 4 years ago
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Posted: 4 years ago
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An Excellent OS


Loved the fact that Maan was not ready to give up

everything for Geet

but I also somewhat agree with her as she only was thinking about them

and whether his family will truly accept her

but both are firm and want to stand together , support each other and give their

relation a legal name of marriage

Edited by taahir004 - 4 years ago
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Posted: 4 years ago
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An Excellent OS


Loved the fact that Maan was not ready to give up Geet

but I also somewhat agree with her as she only was thinking about them

and whether his family will truly accept her

but both are firm and want to stand together , support each other and give their

relation a legal name of marriage

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Posted: 4 years ago
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It was a different story not to sweet sweet neither too emotional, it had perfect balance.

Maan just wanted Geet to accept her true feeling towards him and their relation but Geet was thinking about their family but in the end their love won.

Akhir Maan ne Geet ki saari baat samjh kar usse bhi apni baat samjhakar mana hi liya.

Lekin story meri liye thodi zyada hi pure hindi thi, sorry about that

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Maaneet OS (One-Shot) Series - 2 of 2 :

Mailaa Pyaar yaa Pavitra Sneha?


Maan :

Geeteshwari Iyer, you know what I am saying!
Still the obstinacy?


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Mr Maanveer Pratap Khurana!

Pyaar shant ho yaa mailaa yeh aap decide nahi kar sakte.

Especially after what you did.


Maan :

Really Ms Iyer?

You think so lowly of me, then I was right about you.


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Really now!

Even Savitri Devi ji would agree with me!

Or Adi, your servant!

Ask them and come back, next time if you wish to meet me!


Maan :

Why?

Why do you want to involve Dadi or Adi?

Adi is NOT MY SERVANT, got it?

He is a respectable employee in my office and takes care of my daily needs and my business.

But why should I give you an explanation?

Aaj tak Maanveer ko kisi ne aisi baat nahi kahi kabhi.

Chee!

You are not the right choice for a girlfriend even! I curse myself for having met you or set my eyes on you! Shame!


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Oh! Toh ab aapko lagta hai that after what you did, I should submit myself to you and fall down at your feet asking for mercy?

Never in this life.


She starts walking away!


Maan :

Tum kahaan dar gayi aur bhaag rahi ho?

You have to hear me out, are you listening?


Geeteshwari Iyer :

I come from a respectable middle class family, Mr Khurana, let me remind you!

Aap chahte toh sab theek bhi ho jaata.

But you felt cheap enough to be with me or introduce me at that business party!

And the way you danced!

The girls were all over you and you got drunk unnecessarily!

That is NOT HOW BUSINESS CLASS behaves.


Maan :

By girls, are you referring to Ms Sasha Nithaani or Ms Nandini Kaur?


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Oh! So now you get the little time to tell me that you are three timing!

I break this relationship and this engagement right now.


She removes the engagement ring and throws it.

It falls in the lake nearby.


Maan searches for it by going into the lake, but he doesn't know swimming.

Geeteshwari knows this.


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Showing your care and compassion doesn't mean you need to do it this way.

Come out!!

Rings are just ornaments, you idiot!


Maan :

I am drowning, Ms Iyer.

If you don't believe me, be ready to face my dead body!

No need to shower your deadly words at me!

I......


And he is drowning.

Ms Iyer jumps and saves him.


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Really, you could have lost your life there!

Can't you see what you're doing to me?

I seem to be losing control Maanveer.


Maan :

That is good no.

Losing control with your beloved is what Adam and Eve did.

So don't need be a spoilsport.


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Maanveer, shut up!

I don't seem to understand anything!


Maan :

Oh you sure don't.

Let me show you how.


And he kisses her neck.

And follows her heartbeat.

She was wet now.

Both of them had managed to slide into the lake once again.


Geeteshwari Iyer :

You don't realise.....

We both shall drown in your mistakes! Plus you don't know to swim.

We are wet, silly!


He cupped her face with his wet hands, making it pleasurable for her.

She reminisced the first time they had come close.

It was a starry evening, and Maanveer had planned it to be a surprise for her.

It was the evening they both confessed their love to each other!

So etheral and beautiful until today, she didn't forget.


But these thoughts halted midway when his piercing glare froze her body as well as senses.

She wanted to re-confess.

But he didn't allow her to take the cake.


He came close, now both of them bare bodied on top.

Maanveer's masculinity was something every girl irrespective of age, wanted to taste.

Her lips found their way upto his navel.

Kissing him with equal moans and shrieks from both of them.

Suddenly the birds flew out of the trees, acknowledging the fact.

No one dare come close to interrupting them when they were having the time of their lives.


Maanveer's neck was adorned with a sacred thread.

Geeteshwari took the sacred thread, keeping it close to her eyes.

This action tormented him further, as he leaned forward to place a peck on her forehead, with care of a fiance.


Maanveer and Geeteshwari were inseparable!

Their union was one of the Gods with the Earth.

Or the winds and the sands.


Both of them giving in forcefully, joyously and completely.

Maanveer caressed her bosom, making her turn and viewing her bare back now.

He traced his manly thumb over her back, reaching for her waist.

She trembled but gave in moanfully.


Geeteshwari Iyer :

MAANVEER!

Stop!


Maan :

NEVER!

I want all of you, now or never!


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Please Maan.


Maan :

What did you say?

Call me by my name, AGAIN!

NOW!


Geeteshwari Iyer :

MAAN.

I LOVE YOU.

You are not my life, but my soul, my peace, my serenity, my reason for being born as a girl on this heaven called Earth.


Maan :

I know it.

I love you too, Ms Iyer.

Just that I wanted you to understand.

Glad you did.

Now I can rest in peace! HA!


Geeteshwari Iyer :

Stop it Maan.

I don't like talking about death!

I scares me, you know that.

Still everytime you.........


Her anger was silenced by a featherlike stroke on her bare back!

Maanveer was kissing her there.

What else could she have asked for?

Other than to sleep nights and spend days with the one man she revered and loved to no end?



THE END

Edited by waterlotus.19 - 4 years ago
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Posted: 4 years ago
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Congrats on another OS!

Incredible OS, wonderfully written

sad seeing them argue like this

gosh she breaks of the engagement

of cos Maan jumps into the lake to save the ring

but he cannot swim

she goes to save him

at least Maan showed her what she means to him

all ends well

Edited by khwaishfan - 4 years ago
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congrats for new os

superb

maan made geet confess her love for him

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Another OS coming your way.. keep track of the post after this!

Edited by waterlotus.19 - 4 years ago

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