MG SS : Dastaan -E- Wafa *|| Part 18 @ Page 74 ||* 21-June-15 - Page 21

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Posted: 12 years ago

THIS ONE FOR MY DEAR NISHA ...ITS HER BIRTHDAY ..
A VERY HAPPY BIRTHDAY DEARO ...MAY ALMIGHTY BLESS U WITH LOTS OF HAPPINESS IN UR LIFE ..STAY BLESSED N THIS ONE IS JUST A SMALL GIFT FROM MY SIDE ..LUV YA GIRL ...😃



sorry 9n9i9s9h9u9 dearo ..last part mien i forgot to post this ..soveeyy ...😃
people this poem is written by her on PART 3 of this story where geet was restless for maan going a miss .. i was tongue tied while reading it she expressed all the feeling n turmoil of geet so well ..
so sharing it ...😳

woh saath tha uske saaye ki tarah
woh paas tha uske hum saans ki tarah
yeh baat aur thi
ki woh anjaan thi uss khushi se
jo aa basi thi usme
ban ke uska sahas
ek humsaaya saath hona hi toh tha uski wajah

ab jab woh aaya nahi
usko khud ke paas paaya nahi
dekhta hai har pal khuda mera mujhe
uske na dekhne se yah ahsaas bhi
ab mujhe mein aaya nahi

kyu hai yeh bechaani
kyu hai yeh betaabi
sab saath hai mere
sab sapne ho rahe hai pure
par kyu ek uske saath na chalne se
mr dil ko inme bhi chain aaya nahi

leave a few words for this as well ...😃

Dastaan -E- Wafa



people this is the result of 30 min ..i ve typed 1500+ words this afternoon so posting here .. now i really need to say i am gone insane ...😆 warning the real twist of this story begins from here where i have started giving hints plss i am saying this again who ever can't handle mysteries can surely stay away ...REST ...
enjoy reading ..😳 n DO LEAVE UR COMMENTS N LIKES ..😃

PART 5

Maan followed geet by walk while she ran in her best speed in that state reaching her house in that drizzling night her eyes pouring tears n heart pounding as if some volcano is making it burst out with pain … the moment she entered her house maan came out from behind the pillar n watched her shaking figure standing thr banging the door forgetting about the bell for a moment his steps went ahead to steady her comfort her but then stopped remembering his own words ..n finally a worried meera opened the door cocooning geet in her embrace ..n went in taking her …
Maan walked back to his car sitting in …he placed his head on the stearing wheel closing his eyes remembering her tearful innocent hazel so much filled with questions n confusion .. when his mbl buzzed with an incoming call ..he received it n after a long moment of listening to the other side ..he sighed n said in his best calm voice ..

Maan : don't worry I'll make it up for my delay dear ..

Placing the mobile back he saw the torned dupatta of get placed on his dashboard she for has forgot it here ..he sighed thinking he defo owe an apology for his harsh words …remembering how he got it ..



FLASHBACK ..

Geet saw the car's head light flashing from the main street it was of maan's car .. due to some technical issue he was thr waiting for the mechanic when geet screamed for help .. already he was soo stressed n now geet's scream set him on panic he marched towards the street but couldn't locate her n then went ahead saw her duppatta torned in a corner worried sick he began to look for her n then her calling out for him finally helped him locating the source n he reached thr followed by his guards … n opened the closing shutters of the shop he entered only to see geet in the clutches of those goons ..

FLASHBACK ENDS..

Anger rush through him remembering the sight of those goons manhandling her … his eyes turned red but remembering her concerned filled eyes n he closed his own eyes briefly n opened them with guilt visible in them ..

Maan : wohh already itni dari huyi thi n I just blasted her in my frustration .. pata nahi kya hu jata hai mujhe bhi geet ke samne 3 din ki saari tension be-waja uss bechari par nikal di .. uss ki koi galti bhi nahi thi aur mene … god what have I done ..damit ..I am never my usual self with her around ..
Hope wohh theek hu … itna darii huyi thi ..

He drove off to KM …while on the other hand in geet's house Jaspal uncle .. pinky n meera were trying to know what exactly happened to cause her delay n such state ..but all she managed to tell them was she was chased by some goons n they tried molesting her but an unknown man rescued her n she came here running back .. her tear stricken face n vulenarable state stopped them all to question her further .. n both jaspal n pinky left asking her to take a leave for tomorrow n rest ..n meera asked her to get fresh n she went to prepare dinner for her .. lost in her own thoughts geet went in washroom ..stood under the shower head drenching herself n then tears cascaded down her hazels filling her with in numerable questions ..first her own feeling then the incident defo for an 18 years girl it was a shock n shaterring event …but her thoughts were all clouded with maan …n they way she reacted seeing him ..

Geet (she slipped down on the floor with water still running down) : yeh kya hugaya mujhe .. kyun ..kyun 3 din se itni pareshaan thi mien ..maan ke liye ..?? wohh bechani ..woh restlessness woh sirf maan ke liye thi …?? Nahi aisa nahi husakta .. wohh THE Maan khurana hai aur mien ..mien sirf ek mamoli larki ..yeh kaise hu sakta hai .. mere dil mein maan ke liye koi feelings nahi hu sakti .. wohh kuch nahi lagte mere .. kyun ..kyun phir bhi mera dil sirf unke khayaloon mien ghira hai .. kyun huraha hai mere saath yeh sab .. (wiping off her tears angrily) nahi meri life mien ..mere dil mien kisi aise jazbaat ke liye koi jaga nahi hai .. I am just 18 ..yeh sheher sirf ek zariya hai meri manzil tak puhanchne ka … aur uske raaste mien mien kisi ko nahi aane de sakti …kisi ko bhi nahi .. apne aap ko bhi nahi ..

Finally clearing all traces of tears n sorrow from her face she stepped out still with a ting of fear n hurt on her face maan's words were still echoing in her ears .. but meera thought it was due to the events of the night n avoided questioning her .. she made every attempt to make her feel light but yet the look on geet's face never replaced for more than a minute ..almost 2 at night both girls closed the lights n went off to bed with geet still wide awake gazing at the sealing of the roof ..still lost in the very moment she met maan for the first time .. his scent ..his hold ..that slight smile ..never seems to leave her mind at peace ..she jerked up to sit ..n vowed herself ..



Geet : stop it ..stop it geet ..kyun kar rahe hu babaji mere saath aisa .. no I can't let this mere teenage crush take over my senses n loose all what I dreamed off ..never ..😕😕

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It was 3 am when maan opened the door to his room ..stressed even more week n pale .. took his clothes from the cupboard n went in washroom stood thr nude cooling his aching soul standing down the flowing water drenching himself ..



the sight of those goons .. geet's scream everything made him raged n his hold on the water tap went tighter turning his knuckles go white .. the moment geet's concerned hazel flashed in front of his eyes .. her innocent worried touch .. he could still feel her hand caressing his face with so much of concern ..he opened his eyes n pushed his hair back ..



even after standing thr his heart couldn't be at peace her last words …KOI HAQ NAHI HAI … those tearful hurt hazels ..taunted him ..



he stood thr in front of the large window looking at the dark pitch black sky …her smile ..her pouting baby face …those baby caught face of hers .. the way she would glare at him with her sweet anger …all the memories flashed in front of him on the dark sky …n



he was again lost remembering these 3 months of his life when he first met her n accused her ..the way was looking at her then with her innocent eyes captivated by his ..her fearful state in which she was clinging to him .. he could still feel that ting of attraction b/w them .. the moment of guilt when he learned she wasn't at fault .. his guilt was eating him up probably that's the reason for the first time ever THE Maan Khurana was yearning to know about a girl ..A GIRL …!!

It took him almost 2 weeks to know she was in delhi when he saw her standing on a bus stand acidently .. all his detectives were failed to locate her in Mumbai n its surrounding but fate made her come to him ..n that was the moment he got to know how she came here .. n then her struggling to get admission in college .. he was guilty utterly shameful to see a girl or say a kid just 18 year of age struggling like this all because of him .. so only he kept a watch on her .. but didn't realize when this feeling of guilt turned to be his habit initially it was just he wanted to make sure the caf was a nyc place to work at with such a job profile but then the way she use to fill his mornings with her sweet angry glares n pouting funny faces ..
He just couldn't stop himself to go towards her.. meet her ..see her …with each of his encounter with her the string connecting them was getting stronger .. even after vowing himself at the end of everyday not to meet her ever again standing here on the same place ..he had always found himself in front of her every morning .. n now when he succeeded to avoid her for good 3 days ..what was the result ..she was trapped in those filthy goons … he poured out all his frustration pilled up in him for this unknown attraction blasting her with his words hurting her so much ..

The restlessness in the two souls never let them sleep .. the question what is it attracting them towards each other made them feel miserable .. the frustration ..the helplessness .. all the question .. all they wanted was to run away from all this …run away from that person causing all this .. but still the fear was thr ..fear for of an unknown lose .. fear to loose something precious .. .. yet confused WHAT IS IT THEY ARE FEARING FOR ...??

He sat on his bed finally giving up on his thoughts decided to let it be .. n put an end to this silent relation b/w them … let her hate him .. n to get over this frustration least he knew that this frustration was the result of his own decisions .. n there she …she was still turning left to right … sleepless remembering his pale feverish face .. n then his wordsKIS HAQ SE ..? everything taunted her .. questioned her .. made her feel low of herself but still a feeling that he saved her …she could still feel that protective hold around her .. she closed her eyes trying to make up her mind to let go this feeling .. trying to get over his memories .. still the tears filed in her eyes .. with his harsh words .. then thought he was right ..still left question ..if he was right than y it was paining her so much .. y so much hurt in her heart ..Y …???

She jerked up again … : bas .. no more I am gonna let him effect me .. he is nothing but just a stranger … stranger whom I hate the most … n I will never even talk with him .. NEVER ..



Determined she laid down n pulled the duvet on her face closing her eyes to sleep .. but here maan was still restless turning from here n thr on the king side bed .. sitting up he switched on the light .. n finally decided leaving a sigh ..

Maan : enough of this guilt trip …har baar mien usko chot puhancha deta hoon n then I myself will feel guilty .. kal I will apologize to her for the first n last time ..maaf kiya tou theek warna I'll never even cross her path EVER …!! After all she nothing ..nothing but just a mere girl whom I caused all these trouble so ONLY I wanted to be sure she was fine .. nothing more than that n I now life is smooth enough for her ..n I won't cross her path ….

Ironically two souls who wanted to be parted are still joining the thread .. she a thread of hatred n he a thread of care …😳😳 strange it is .. both of them even being confused ... even after deciding are not able to let go …un known to themselves ..they are still being a part of thr life … but will they ever be able to understand this all … will they ever give a chance to all this …??

Ajeeb dastaan hai do diloon ki ..
Rabta torna bhi hai .. rishta jorna bhi hai ..
Nafrat bhi hai par phir bhi kahin chahat ki chingari chupi hai ..
Kehte hain ajnabi ek dosre ko par phir bhi ...
Dil mien koi jaga banali bhi hai ..
Kya huga anjaam iss an kahe jazbaat ke jab ..
Waqt ke mor par …
Imtehaan e takdeer azmaayenge do diloon ki himmat ..!!

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so here it is ..
hope u liked it .. i am not really satisfied with it but i had only 30 mins n all could type was this .. pardon me for my mistakes ..

PRECAP :-

LEAP with ...,...,...,... END OF THE RELATION OR GIVING A NEW DIMENSION TO THE SAME STORY ...??😳😳 one new entry ...😉😉
guess if it is gonna be a positive one or negative ...😉😉 😆 😳😳

n do leave ur replies ..
luv ya all

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Edited by sobia4maaneet - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago


wow lovely cute emotional update.. te way my maaneet losing them selves in each other , they heart can recognize wat they hold in each other life but my buddhu maaneet didt realize it.. te way geet ki restless and te way my maan ki guilty was so lovely..i love et update so much dear
Edited by Desigirls12 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome update

nice poem dear in the start by nishu
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome update
maaneet r falling for each other
but won't accept

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Posted: 12 years ago
jab dono k dil dono k liye dhadakta hai...tab toh ek dossre se dur jaane se faisle se woh behchain toh hoga hi na...

superb n beautiful update...

loved it very much...

thank u very much fr d lovely update...

waiting eagerly fr d nxt prt...

continue soon plz...

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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome update
new entry
dont bring third persone btw maaneet
cont soon dear
thanx for the pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome dearo both r missing each other so much loved the part sweety🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
lovely and emotional one..
both r confused abt their feeings.. and both vowed never to cross each other's path.. but destiny has some other plans, rt?
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Posted: 12 years ago
amazing emotional update

maaneet feeling for each other

waiting for leap

continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
i think leap with positive change maaneet unknown in restlessness n reason is buddhu hai dono lolzzz

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