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fareeha

@pinkpearlz

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#131

It definitely has left me more anxious. What a place to stop! Okay coming to yash, am not sure what to think of him, at times he seems so genuine others make me question his motives. Is Maan going to stop her, or let her go? Dont know what to expect or even hope. Love it as always!

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soni4eva

@soni4eva

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#132

awsum update

yash is relii mysterious

relii intrestin

cnt w8 2 read more

plzz cont soon fanx 4 da pm x

Happy new year x 😊

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Zubi

@misssmily

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#133

Lena sweety plz updt soon, me eagerly waiting...

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abinash079

@abinash079

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#134

awesome update
loved it
seriously i donr like this yash remove him from here hate him to the core😡 firstly misbehaving then asking for forgiveness such a disgusting man

plz remove him or dont let geet to go near him 😡😡😡

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Lena

@.Lina.

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#135

Originally posted by: misssmily
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So wonderfull updt 👏 I so loved it, yaar sans to lene do, cliffhanger pe cliffhanger...
In fact, at this moment geet needs more fresh air than me... 😆
what is she doing ? maan k pyar me sab hosh kho bethi ! 😳 ahhh poor girl

You put so much expression in this part, it was so well written, from geets frustation to her crazyness... i felt each of the emotions she felt, very well done 👏

This yash, i thought for a while that he will just push her ... he didn't do it, but there is definatly something fishy about him ! After all maan warned her about him... there must be a reason !
But loved the way you turned the situation, the longing, the wait, the questions... everything...came out in a really unexpected way : it was as if geet was possesed...the whole effect was really mesmerising ! 👏

Ab maan kaise bachega hmmm ??? 😳

My piece of critic : hmmm...let me think...nothing... that's cheating yaar there is nothing to complain about 😆... everything was in it's place ^^ hatt off 👍🏼

Plz updt soon me eagerly waiting ! 😊

With al my love and support !
Zubi 😊

That's the point. She is in the stage of insanity, past infatuation. insanity because she fell too hard. lols., awesome isn't it? shows how despo we girls can sometimes get. 😆 wow, did i just bash my character again? hm, i dont seem to approve of any of my characters. 🤔
oh really, i thought i didnt get her feelings in writing enough. but lols, glad it is not seen that way.
yash, well yea, he's been fishy all the time, but i won't say he's negative or positive just yet.
lols, thats the problem! it felt like she turned 180 degrees. and that fact irritated me. cus there was like no transition in the middle of her altered perception. but i didnt know exactly how to show the transition. (i was very sleepy🥱)
noo yaar, how can this be? thats the most exciting part of ur comments. find one critic... or else... 😈
look at this, i like ur comments so much, i was about to fulfill ur previous request but hmm... 😉

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Lena

@.Lina.

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: serenelove

Hey Lena,
U Updated though it ended on cliffhanger again *long sigh*. U sure love to torture us, don't u?
Thank God, Geet added the two & two but off course Maan is faster than her so disappeared again.
Yash says one thing then next said words spoils the previous ones effect & again he starts on rebuffing after that. Wonder if all of it was witnessed by Maan & Yash is what Maan warned Geet about then what his actual purpose is being all friendly in front of many people.
Geet knew Yash's mindless act(s) can be problematic but still she accompanied him & she knows Maan will be watching.
One side Maan's warning keeping me on toes to see if Yash intends to harm Geet & camouflage the whole thing as accident but what Geet is upto is more considerable situation.
Waiting Waiting Waiting ''..

my bad, to be frank, i dont how to end things WITHOUT a cliffhanger. 🤣
Maan is always a step ahead. poor Geet is always abandoned.
oh yeah, Yash is definitely bipolar. 😛 u'll have to find out his purpose as time passes by.
Maan is always omnipresent. 😆
Geet is just crazy and irrational. I mean very contradicting. one time, she wudnt believe Maan. and now she's completely after him. she's very confused is what i menat.
Lols, keeping u on ur toes is my ultimately occupation. 😉
thank you so much for even waiting for this terrible FF. ur support is a comfort to my mind 🤗

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Lena

@.Lina.

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#137

Is it me or is the LIKE button being a pain? 😕

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Zubi

@misssmily

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#138

Ok no no no wait am sure i'll find something ! ^^
Let me read it again... Actually was at work when read it first time, may b something escaped me ! ^^

Am again at work 😆 but will read it with attention ^^

And yeah guys plzzz hit the like button for Lena, it's a source of motivation for a writer !

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So i re-read the chap, once again i can only do one thing : compliment you ! This part was so well written ! 👍🏼 Dusri bar parne se effect utla hogaya, instead of finding something to criticize i felt each of geet's emotions stronglier than before 😆
Oh and what did you say : it shows how despo we girls can get sometimes... HOW TRUE !!!! 😆

Ok when u mentioned my previous post, i had to go back and check what i wrote...i had forgotten 😆... but now i remember why i said that, and here i'll say that what i asked at that time was surely needed but not indispensable... but now it is ! It's been 2 updts we have only geet's pov... First after "the kiss in the dark" episode i would have loved to have maan thoughts but kher it was not indispensable, then when yash was drunk and the snow globe fall, maan disapeared without a word, here i would say him not saying anything was understandable, ( or rather should i say, u not giving any clue concerning his condition was understandable ) it was a way to prepare to "future blast", instead of giving his pov little by little u've chosen do give us one dhamakedar blast at the end of the whole thing , hope that's what u r planning ! Because me eargerly waitin for maan's monologue, u wonderfully did it once previously ! Me expecting the same ! 😛

Hope that what i wrote make some sense 😆

Edited by misssmily - 13 years ago

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Saba

@Eccentric.Being

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#139

Originally posted by: .Lena.

my bad, to be frank, i dont how to end things WITHOUT a cliffhanger. 🤣 really now? 😉 I thought, I had someone who writes in a way that leaves no space for other to be passive towards story even if it ends without Cliffhanger. 😛
Maan is always a step ahead. poor Geet is always abandoned. yeah, it's real hard to cop with rejection & loneliness
oh yeah, Yash is definitely bipolar. 😛 u'll have to find out his purpose as time passes by. Yeah, chameleon changes color & with careful observation, it can be identified.
Maan is always omnipresent. 😆 I am wondering how many clones he have that do his job 😛
Geet is just crazy and irrational. I mean very contradicting. one time, she wudnt believe Maan. and now she's completely after him. she's very confused is what i menat. Crazy girl...Ye ladki sab ko pagal kardegi 😆
Lols, keeping u on ur toes is my ultimately occupation. 😉 E.V.I.L 😆😉
thank you so much for even waiting for this terrible FF. ur support is a comfort to my mind 🤗 Excuse-me... Don't u dare call it terrible, Just love the mystery in it. I demand more of it & I think, u will like to finish it off soon & give relieve to urself with another awesome story. waiting now 😉😛 Writers like u are great support for keeping me sane now a days with all happenings around. Carry on with good work 😊