Tu Jaane Na - Maaneet FF UPDATED PART 1 PG 8 - Page 11

Originally posted by: natashu

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Sorry for the late reply! Have been a little busy, what with winter smstr kick-starting tomorrow =\

Ahh well.

Back to your story LOL

Well, I'm liking what I see here..😳

Although, I do have some questions. So, Geet is 19-20 you said? And Ishan is 5?

How does all of that work?

Geet had Ishaan when she was 14-15?!😲

I also like the fact that you colour-coded diff. characters..but it can be a bit hard on the eye.

You have Maan paralyzed in this, which is really sad. =[

Geet is cute as usual.

Dev-Naintara sure are diff. from the serial. But that is a breath of fresh air for me..

😃

Ishaan is one cheeky kid. LMAO.

One suggestion though - you sometimes add your own comment to the story in brackets. That kind of takes away from the story for the reader. It's sort of distracting.

But, like I said, I'm loving the plot here! =D

P.S. I like both Arjun-Arohi & Mayank-Nupur. Either works for moi. =D

heyy thnx and no i mentioned on the CS that geet is 25 so is maan. haila u thought she had ishaan when she was 15 or something? haww 😲 though it does gimme and idea😆 lolz and i just thought the colors wud make it a little nice mayb i shud just color code ishaan maan and geet? and for everybody else use black? and Dev NT well u see they r eveil almost everywhere and i really like NT's pretend nice self lolz. and about my comment hey it's not fair that u guys get to comment on the part and i don't! is it? lolz just ignore the parts in red if it distracts u lolz. and well there seems to b a lot of ppl wanting Arjuhi so I'll probz use them lolz

Originally posted by: ARMAANKSGFAN

hiiiii

awesome start

loved it

love da concept

different

loved geet with ishaan

sooooo cute

cant wait 4 more

what happened 4 maan

con soon

thanks 4 da pm

thnxx 😊

Originally posted by: Shehnaazz

sorrryy for the late respondd! 😛

i lOVEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD geet's child Ishaan 😆😆😆 cutie pie 😆😆😆

veryyyy GREATTT updattee! seriusly loved ittt! updatee sooonnn 😳

it's ok don't worry about it :D and thnx for the comment😊

Originally posted by: loveangle_4ever

heyy thnx and no i mentioned on the CS that geet is 25 so is maan. haila u thought she had ishaan when she was 15 or something? haww 😲 though it does gimme and idea😆 lolz and i just thought the colors wud make it a little nice mayb i shud just color code ishaan maan and geet? and for everybody else use black? and Dev NT well u see they r eveil almost everywhere and i really like NT's pretend nice self lolz. and about my comment hey it's not fair that u guys get to comment on the part and i don't! is it? lolz just ignore the parts in red if it distracts u lolz. and well there seems to b a lot of ppl wanting Arjuhi so I'll probz use them lolz

I checked w/ your CS.

Originally posted by: natashu

I checked w/ your CS.

..but in part 1, this line threw me off..[it's bolded in black]

A beautiful lady that looked about 19-20 was standing with her hands clasped together in front of the statue of the gods.

And, it's totally cool for you to comment. But it would be better if you do so after finishing the part by rounding it up as an author's note...just a suggestion! (:

haww!! i did that??? for reals? damn it and nobody pointed it out??? i'm soo sorry😭 i'm so dumb. 😭 ima go and edit it right away! i'm so stupid😭😳 and about the comments i'll try to control myself

Originally posted by: loveangle_4ever

haww!! i did that??? for reals? damn it and nobody pointed it out??? i'm soo sorry😭 i'm so dumb. 😭 ima go and edit it right away! i'm so stupid😭😳 and about the comments i'll try to control myself

LOL!

Originally posted by: natashu

LOL!

You sound just like Geet. It's alright. We're allowed to make such teeny tiny mistakes! =]

Rest of it Priya, I'm loving it! =D

aww love u but i wish i was anything liek geet cuz first offs I'm nowhere near as pretty as her and i don't get a guy like her so 😭 lolz jk I'll stop crying. and thnx natz

WE WANT UPDATE.............😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

Originally posted by: lucario

WE WANT UPDATE.............😭

bhai update ki liye thoda wait karo na i'm really busy with studies.

Originally posted by: loveangle_4ever

bhai update ki liye thoda wait karo na i'm really busy with studies.

oh sorry sorry....do update after u get free...😊

Originally posted by: lucario

oh sorry sorry....do update after u get free...😊

yeah bhai will update as soon as i am free right now meri bohot se tests chal rahe hai. and my dad also came so u understand.