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Taira Rai

@Taira

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Posted: 17 years ago

#361

Originally posted by: x-Ridzzie-x
heyy...

sorry 4 not commenting on the last 2 parts...

OMG armaan nd vivek are mates....

i cant believe its priya who slept wiv armaan...omg she's ridz best mate aswell....

wow i wonder how u gonna sort this problem out....

**tough ff**

armaans nt gonna leave her...but wat is he gonna do....

i hope he doesnt use her...even though i dont think ridz is gonna falll 4 armaan trick....especially after wat him and his so called mate vivek had dne 2 ridz 2 best mate....

i definetly wudnt leave emm if i was her...

anywez...

thnx 4 da pm

plzzzzzz continu soon

luv ya

ridz,

.x.

U are SO rite......m regretting bringing this wist because now i am actually finding it a little tuff about getting the next part strait and i have no how idea how i am going to shape the rest of the story but hopefully it will work out soon............

Thanks a lot for reading the part and don't worry she is so not gonna spare them.

Keep reading😊

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sweety

@friendly girl

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#362

hey hi

ur part 6 and 6a both were brilliant and shocking

greatt

plzz pm me when u update next part plzz

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Jodubai

@Jodubai

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#363

HI,

As promised, I did take all the parts home & read them in the comfort of my bed...

OMG, the story is so great, its like this roller coaster ride, on the move all the time, yet it doesn't feel that the story is taken forward just for the heck of it...

From the 1st meeitng of Arman & Ridz, till the time, she actually leaves his home, so many emotions were stirred....he actaully talking good about her in Hindi, cos she can't understand, then she talking in HIndi to make him realise that she does understand Hindi...

The temple scene was too good, just shows that ridz has the right blend of east/west cultures

The singing, offending each other & finally realeasing that both are correct..

dinner was pleasant & finally both complementing each other & think they understand each other..

Ridz was great with Muskan, that shouting, crying, actually depicts the depth of their friendship, was great to see a bunch of friends there for each other, in times of needs

Finally , the showdown, Ridz single handed went to Armans place to deal with him, although, she does know, that He is not to be blamed alone, he was drunk & didn't excatly say he loved priya & the fact that Priya kissed him 1st, which started the whole mess, however, as we all know, Ridz is not gonna leave him off so easily & that Vivek,. I think Arman will not leave him

so, therem I hope u aren't tried after reading my long comment.

There is one thing, I wanted to ask, I thought Priya didn't take the chk from Arman, cos he saw it lying in his bed, but then SHe had it & gave to Ridz...can u clear this??

thanks & take care & do pm me, when u update the next part

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Taira Rai

@Taira

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#364

Originally posted by: friendly girl
hey hi
ur part 6 and 6a both were brilliant and shocking

greatt

plzz pm me when u update next part plzz

Thanks a bunch for commenting and am glad u liked it.😃

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Taira Rai

@Taira

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#365

Originally posted by: Jodubai

HI,

As promised, I did take all the parts home & read them in the comfort of my bed...

OMG, the story is so great, its like this roller coaster ride, on the move all the time, yet it doesn't feel that the story is taken forward just for the heck of it...

From the 1st meeitng of Arman & Ridz, till the time, she actually leaves his home, so many emotions were stirred....he actaully talking good about her in Hindi, cos she can't understand, then she talking in HIndi to make him realise that she does understand Hindi...

The temple scene was too good, just shows that ridz has the right blend of east/west cultures

The singing, offending each other & finally realeasing that both are correct..

dinner was pleasant & finally both complementing each other & think they understand each other..

Ridz was great with Muskan, that shouting, crying, actually depicts the depth of their friendship, was great to see a bunch of friends there for each other, in times of needs

Finally , the showdown, Ridz single handed went to Armans place to deal with him, although, she does know, that He is not to be blamed alone, he was drunk & didn't excatly say he loved priya & the fact that Priya kissed him 1st, which started the whole mess, however, as we all know, Ridz is not gonna leave him off so easily & that Vivek,. I think Arman will not leave him

so, therem I hope u aren't tried after reading my long comment.

There is one thing, I wanted to ask, I thought Priya didn't take the chk from Arman, cos he saw it lying in his bed, but then SHe had it & gave to Ridz...can u clear this??

thanks & take care & do pm me, when u update the next part

Thanks a lot for this awesome comment and i loved reading this.......it actually gave me an insight on my writing.

Priya had refused to take the cheque but when Armaan had left her she had taken it along with her to place it with other stuff of his in that black box tha i have mentioned in the previous part..

Am so happy that u liked my FF and took out the time to comment.

and you are right Ridz is the perfect combination of west and east........which impressed Armaan.

The misunderstanding will clear a little in the B part which i am going to update now.

Thanks

Keep reading.

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Jodubai

@Jodubai

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#366

Hi, me 1st to comment on 6b...⭐️

this part was good, alleast Riddima is giving Arman the benefit of doubt. I hope he gives his reasoning soon, I wonder why he is looking for Priya's info.., I hope this Priya isn't some bad girl or something..

Poor Vivek, he is going to get completely bowled over by Ridima's beauty...Ridz's revenge is gonna be sweet...I hope he pays for it

The Part, where Aramn & Vivek talk about true love & all, I thought what a nice guy Arman is, simply we are thinking bad about him, but then when they started laughing, I was like 'MEN'

thanks for the pm

will wait for further parts...

take care

Edited by Jodubai - 17 years ago