I posted that brilliant earlier not to get out of commenting but that was the first word that came to my mind...
At the risk of sounding repetitive...you are fabulous and are wasting your talent by not writing professionally ...
This was by far one of your best writings.
The ease with which you have have developed their characters and their conversations...they seem so real, candid, spontaneous and witty. These two are such a brilliant match despite the contrasts in them...
He breathes and lives in opulence and his presence is larger than life, she happy to be obscure. I wonder if she will learn to enjoy these luxuries now ...she does deserve them...
I love that apart from the fact that they are so attracted to each other, yes their chemistry is sizzling and this is the impact you are creating with just your words...that they are also listening and observing each other...surely this is going to be significant going ahead. Her obvious discomfort at being complimented, her being completely oblivious to her own beauty and looks. These never mattered to her before but now I like how more often than not she makes an mental note about her appearance in context to him ...
I loved that she felt at home and was surprised and happy at his choice of the villa. I like the fact that it matters to him what she feels about it and I can see her being given the respect she deserves in her role as his wife ...and I love that he is more than happy to perform the more pleasurable husbandly ones too..with the attraction between them I am really wondering how long will they resist each other...
I love La, the body guard, Aman her friend who is the cause of their first sort of real marriage like moment ...Manorama the house keeper...ha ha .
N.K his right hand man. Sheetal an ex ? Dhruv the driver...
Does Lavanya have the hots for ASR ? What are the vibes Khushi gets from her that make her feel uncomfortable ?
Loved the gazebo and the poolside and the horses...loved her realising her dream was not so much a dream as her husband ...him on a horse trying to impress her...just being a normal and regular man...
I wonder if this is all his plan...maybe he thinks she would not be interested in a man as flamboyant at him, someone who has had such a vibrant and colourful past or made to seem the way and he sees her and like her almost immediately and so decided to go ahead with his family's insistence to get married...and he is really interested In her ...and not just for a year...I wish...
I love that he does not want her to sacrifice her plans anymore...
I love how just with words he can so skill fully make her feel the way she does, saying things she normal would never admit...he makes the lose the power to stay calm, composed and controlled. But I also like that she is not in awe of his wealth and not in the least intimidated ...but respects his determination, drive and hard work ...one that made him what he is today..
Loved her reaction to his fault and loved that she forgets the contract and the lack of rituals and remembers the vows, the ones they never took nevertheless making her momentarily making it real...
I love the banners...as much as I love the one who made it...
Edited by vandana.sagar - 11 years ago
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